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Script Genres > English Children > Commercial > Character

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    48 people have played this

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    Jane: Oh , oh my goodness... Daddy I was walking! With little baby, little baby monkey, and I drew a picture. Suddenly monkey starts crying. But I turned around and there's a whole fleet of them. There's an army of monkeys a huge tree full of them, Screaming at me: ooh ooh eee eee, ahh ahh Terrified, I was, terrified. Suddenly I was swinging in the vines up in the air. Swinging, flying, I was in the air. And I'm all surrounded... And Daddy they took my boot! And I was saved, I was saved by a flying wildman in a loincloth!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think your performance doesn't have the right amount of zaniness and enthusiasm that I'd expect Jane to have. It was not enough energy. Therefore, the story that you told us wasn't convincing enough. She just experienced a misadventure that was quite scary, but exciting. And then there she goes, explaining what has happened to her in a bizarre manner. So try to convey that into your performance. Maybe this video will help. This is what the original actress did to make her story sound convincing. https://youtu.be/uDALTaqBRic

    As for your pronunciation, I think you need to work on that too. "Picture" should be pronounced "pik-SHur', not "piCHer", as in baseball pitcher. "Turned" is not pronounced "turnt". The "U" in full should be a short oo sound, not a long oo sound, as in "fool". And you're missing the "N" sound in "surrounded". Also, you tend to turn your "TH's" into "D sounds". And a lot of your "ING" words sound like "IN" words.

    As for the recording quality, it was pretty good. I can hear a few pops here and there. Maybe a pop filter should do the trick. Or just don't record too close to the mic.

    I hope you don't take this the wrong way. I'm not trying to offend you. I just want to help you improve your performance. So I hope you take this into consideration.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice adjustments! I like this read with the more moderate pitch level, I think it was right on the money for the age of this character. I do think you could go even faster, as if your mouth can't keep up with your brain. While you're playing with it at home, you might try to read it from some totally different points of view (they don't have to make a lot of sense), such as reading it as if you were telling a scary story to a good friend, or making a confession after being busted for missing curfew, etc. and then once you're nice and loose, do it again with your "normal" read. It's an exercise my coach gave me and it's been so beneficial. Keep playing! Keep up the good work!

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    Alice in Wonderland

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    “But I don’t want to go among mad people," Alice remarked.
    "Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
    "How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
    "You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”

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    Beauty and the Beast

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    Once upon a time, in a faraway land, a young prince lived in a shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish, and unkind. But then, one winter's night, an old beggar woman came to the castle and offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift and turned the old woman away, but she warned him not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within. And when he dismissed her again, the old woman's ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince tried to apologize, but it was too late, for she had seen that there was no love in his heart, and as punishment, she transformed him into a hideous beast, and placed a powerful spell on the castle, and all who lived there. Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle, with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose, which would bloom until his twenty-first year. If he could learn to love another, and earn her love in return by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would be broken. If not, he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair, and lost all hope, for who could ever learn to love a beast?

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    El Americano - Surf Rat Carl

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    Sorry for the surprise move back there, brah, but
    when you see a wave ya gotta take it, you know what I
    mean? Ha!

    Pretty cool stuff, huh?

    Crazy chickens-- must be an inside joke.

    Almost there, amigos, follow me!

    Dude, they were tight! Lucille is the hostess with
    the mostest. We’ll party with her tonight!

    Good afternoon, officer.

    Duh, do I look stupid?

    How about a statement?

    Today is your lucky day, officer--
    You can be part of making a heroic dream come true!

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    Fluffy

    Script:

    My name is Fluffy, except in the rain, which makes me scruffy to my disdain.(HOWL) Help me get my fluffiness back. Click right here to get me on track.

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    Pinky and the Brain - The Plan

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    Now Pinky.
    Here is the plan:
    Remember:
    Every step must be performed with precision.

    You must slit the sick sixth sheet slitter's son's sheet,

    secure it next to the toy boat from the hack and sack socko Kicky Sack sack kicker's picnic in Secaucus.

    stretch it past the sack pickers station and the sock plucker's chute,
    and pick a sack,
    pluck a sock,
    and flick the plug,
    so I can put the pea in the plucked sock with the picked sack for ballast,
    and bounce it off the rubber baby buggy bumpers, into the Parker Packard purple pewter pressure pump.

    Is that understood?

    Contributed by Richurd

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    25 people have played this

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    I had lost fo fun doing it, let me know what ya think

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    Peer Feedback:

    Wow -- I've never tried anything like this. I bet it was fun!

    Overall, I think that your pacing was too slow. Particularly in Hades' voice... reading the script, he sounds like he's impatient, a bit sarcastic, manipulative. I didn't really pick that up in your recording. He just sounded Dark and Evil, but no real personality. Beautiful gravelly sound, though. I particularly liked the fact that Pain did a partial repeat of Hades' question while trying to come up with his answer -- that was a fun choice.

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    32 people have played this

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    Noelle, Still on the road, so another recording from a untreated hotel room. Look forwasd to your thoughs on this one. Its a bit slowish,, and I did it before I got you last coaching,, about volume,, I understand what your saying,, I actually thouhgt about it while taping the Joker script,, but held back, due to the enviroment I'm taping in.

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    Peer Feedback:

    In a motel room no less! I was hooked from go. I identified a Disney sound or The Disney Sound right away. I thought the pacing of Hades was perfect, in fact, I can't comment on that but to say it was completely believable and 100% spot on. Now, the witches, I really couldn't distinguish between the 2. With the video mixed in, it could be easily aparent, but, just listining, the voices sound quite alike. A nice witch voice and appropriate to the charactor, With regard to witch 2, She is telling the beginning of the tale... It sounds a little hurried in her 2 orations, not much, just the "the witch" got a little in the way of the rhythm of her little rhyme.

    I really liked it! You can do great Disney!

    Professional Feedback:

    Ha! Very nice work with a very challenging script. I think all the emotional beats were there, and really fantastic job with transitions between different characters.

    Yes, I could hear that it was held back a little bit, but for the most part the overall performance was there.

    Here's two little tweaks: Toward the end when the witch says if Hercules fights he will fail, I thought there could have been a bit more shock, losing his cool and a failed attempt to cover this up and pretend to go right back into being ok. You did it a bit, and I would just say to explore that moment more. Also, when you repeat "They're immortal" you put the emphasis on "They're" but I think he is reiterating the idea so it should be on "immortal".

    However, excellent work for recording in hotel rooms!

    Best,
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 28, 2012 at 6:31PM
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    18 people have played this

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    My first shot at multiple channels and edits

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    Peer Feedback:

    Oh Good God! Is this what you folks have been hearing this whole time, all that traffic in the background??? My apologies! I never knew!

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    Sailboat Horizon

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    I liked the sail boats. I woke up one day and there they were. Lot's of 'em. Dozens and dozens.

    They come from somewhere far, far away. Somewhere over the horizon. They make me smile.

    Every morning I see them. I get up and there they are.
    Coming from far away.

    When the sun goes down, I see them again. They head back to the horizon.

    I don't know where they go, or where they come from, but they always make me smile.

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    The Princess and the Frog

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    The princess went to her room and laid down on her bed. The slimy frog jumped on the bed and said, "Now you must kiss me good night! "Yuck!", thought the princes, she didn;t want to kiss an ugly old frog.

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    Thomas script

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    (shy) My parents always told me not to talk to strangers...
    (excited) A real train! How fast was it? Did you get to go on the caboose?
    yelling for help) Help! somebody were stuck! anybody ?!

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