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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Health & Beauty Aids

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    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear leahchristopherson's recording

    First demo recorded in my new 'home studio' using a Rode NT1A mic, pro tools, m audio, and a mac. I have no formal training thus far. I recorded the scripts for a commercial demo reel, which of course needs to edited and mixed down. I'd really appreciate your feedback! Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, but let me ask, would you consider yourself naturally passive and easy going? Calm demeanor that doesn't really get excited nor upset in heightened situations?

    If you are and you've approached the scripts by being conversational you were completely true to yourself, and did as you've heard to do.

    If my assumption is right, what you need to do is find a character, that is excited for that product, and lift the words like telling a story.

    Bring the script to life, but conversational. That combo is hard for some, was hard for me, and still working on it, but what I've told you is what I had to tell myself to begin to get on the right track.

    You did begin to lift a bit with each take from the 3rd, so I'd encourage more of that, with the cute cat lady that loves to talk about cat food ect...

    Apply that, and you'll go from sound great to professional with one choice and in time to move someone by this weekend.

    Look forward to more.

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    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear leahchristopherson's recording

    First demo recorded in my new 'home studio' using a Rode NT1A mic, pro tools, m audio, and a mac. I have no formal training thus far. I recorded the scripts for a commercial demo reel, which of course needs to edited and mixed down. I'd really appreciate your feedback! Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you have a very friendly voice, maybe try to let the words roll off with a little more ease. Sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    I really enjoy the friendliness and clarity in your tone, but I feel like your reads could use just a touch more energy in them. Over all great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the quality. Your sound is great and you have a very unique voice. Congrats on your new home sutdio!

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! You made me want to just hang up my mic. I am also new at VO but your voice is amazing and I appreciated the tone and quality of your voice. I am still trying to master mic settings. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    your perfect for bounce...you sound like you should be selling perfume...seriously i'd buy gallons off of you with that voice haha...keep on truckin you have a beautiful sound and voice... delivery was a bit choppy on amstel where you paused between dogs would walk ....themselves but other than that I loved it.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I'll run this around once more, This is my last shot! I let loose on this one with passion!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Henry,

    I like the presentation, from an artistic viewpoint. But you sound kind of sad. I don't think that would really help to sell perfume.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry, you have a wonderful voice, but I see some problems in the delivery. Your delivery seems a bit overly dramatic. There is also a vibrato quality, a quivering in your voice, a bit distracting from the script. A recomendation would be to get some voice coaching, and listen carefully to other sucsessful voice overs, and also remember..practice, practice, practice..
    You have some real talent that needs to be nurtured along. Good luck and keep on trying.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well said. This my last recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry,
    Please don't give up! You have a very unique voice and maybe this script is not for your particular type of voice. I have read scripts that weren't for me and ocassionally I may have someone comment on one of my performances with different types of criticism, which may not be so positive. However, I do not let it effect me whereas I will never want to record another script again. Because eventhough I am new to the Voice Over field; I feel with the practice and the proper training and setting my goals; there will be someone, some day that may want to hire me for a job, regardless of how big or how small. Look through the Script Library and find something that is suitable for your voice, such as Audiobooks or Narration. I hope this will not be your last recording. Just practice and never give up. Best of luck. LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Icw115, please don't give up..it takes practice..I'm still very much learning and improving as time goes on..it a continuing process..stay with it and good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your both so right. It's practice-practice-practice. I have to realize that I am new
    at this! I have some favorite tricks that I Have be rid of. Thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Henry, the delicate seasoned structure in your voice is endearing. I think if you just give it more peaks and valleys in the delivery (think O'Toole, Ian McKellen) you'll have a very nice read on your hands.

    Hope it helps my friend.

    Peer Feedback:

    Depthpersuasion, You and I may have very similar approaches to voice-over.
    I fight an uphill battle for being "too dramatic." My coach didn't agree with my approach
    on "Allure," to be foggy, ethereal, whispery, sexy. I could easily give it more drama,
    but I'm skittish about using the full pipes on a woman's product, when I think the
    soft approach is more endearing. I chose this script with a purpose in mind.
    I think you have a good point. It could stand just a little more drama. But I had a
    peer feedback from a female on another piece that I had a "God" voice.

    I am a retired character actor, nearly 80, in a wheelchair. I appreciate a good reading of "Annabel Lee."

    Many Thanks!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I can completely agree, Henry; and they would know best. It's great to hear you're still at it. If you ever care to share any of your works personally, I'd be glad to give you the support of viewing. Thank you for the kind compliment, will stay with me..

    See'ya out there,

    Daniel

    Peer Feedback:

    I have female contacts who are knocked over by the piece. But, as you say,
    "they would know best." So, I'll stick around long enough to figure out "the market."
    It's what I should expect from Edge, to clue me in. My training and instincts are
    not easily adapted to an androgynous, neutral presentation. You, obviously are
    devoted to producing pieces that highlight your bass range. Don't let it hang you up.

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    Practice Recording:

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    This script was given to me to do as an on-camera spot in a commercial class that I am taking. The first sentence was a b@llbuster to spit out, and I failed miserably! It was the same for "...first full perscription..." in the last sentence. My lips and tongue just refused to cooperate! It was just mortifying! And it's all caught on tape (well, recorded) for all to see. Yech! So, I just had to lay it down and provide the script for other, braver souls to give it a go. Here's a link to the actual commercial it was taken from. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2KupFAJF2b8 If you want to watch it, you might have to cut-n-paste the link into your browser.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I read through that first line...don't get it. Skype. discuss.

    Peer Feedback:

    Odd thing is - this script is the VO in the middle of the on-camera spot of a woman having a family picnic. I think that the exercise was - when you get this in an audition, what the hell do you do with it? All I know is - I didn't succeed in doing much but trip all over myself.

    I did, however, have an actual VO audition yesterday that was really fun and went pretty well.

    Call me stupid, but I'm still figuring out Skype. Do we need to coordinate a time?

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, it's best to agree on a time. I sent you a message through Skype. Great head shot, BTW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey James,
    I liked your relaxed, conversational tone a lot. And it was well paced, but the bass seemed a bit heavy. Good music track and production. Great job overall. It was a pleasure to meet you on Skype as well.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear wmcline5's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think this is a good script for your voice, it works very well for you. A few things I noticed, the pause feels a bit long after the first sentence, try to shorten the pause. When you hit the word "anti-inflammatory" there is a slight pause after, I have the same problem, then you continue the read, try and keep the read flowing smooth. I also heard at the 27 second mark the line " should not be used " sounds like should not be mused, I also have the same problem for time to time with my articulation, these are not hard things to fix. I do have to say that your voice is spot on for this read and your voice sounds smooth and works perfect for this. Medical reads are very hard to do and you did a great job I think you will do very well.

    Peer Feedback:

    I took an on-camera commercial audition technique class, and this is one of the scripts I was asked to read. I failed miserably because I couldn't get "help significantly improve lung function" out cleanly without my tongue falling out of my mouth, which caused the rest of the class of 12 people to crack up so much that I don't remember getting through the rest of the copy.

    You didn't seem to have that problem. Hats off to you.

    Like Michael mentioned, those pauses at the end of every sentence interrupt the flow and give the impression that you are just reading rather than lumping ideas or concepts into a (say it with me) "conversational" whole. Even though you strike a good tone vocally, it becomes a bit unrelatable to the listener - we feel talked at or read to rather than talked to. Yes, if you watch these commercials on TV, many of those lines are interrupted by the visuals, but there is an "arc" or "through line" that is present nonetheless. My guess (and it's only a guess) is that, as an audition anyway, you should tell the story with that arc (without the gaps), and in the actual session, you would either have the video playback to work with or the VO would be edited to fit the video in post in a way that retains that casual conversational tone.

    However, it is a good first post on a difficult script.

    I'm also hearing a slight regional accent with the A's on "anti-inflammatory" and "and". Missed the T on "fast" - it sounded like "fassacting". A little bauble on "should not be used" and "People with...". Watch "git" for "get" and the beginning of that sentence sounded like "Gitchurefirssfull..."

    You might also consider marking your scripts for places to breathe. You chopped up a few sentences (thoughts) by taking a breath in the middle. Yes, we do sometimes talk that way in normal conversation. But think about it - this commercial is about COPD. Do you want to appear as if you're in need of a breath after only a few words? Not going to reflect well on the product and might cause the auditioner to hit "delete" and move on to the next guy.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree you have a nice, professional voice for this script. The other commenter was spot on about the pausing. There's a few spots where you pause too long after the sentence. I have trouble hitting the 'T' sometimes too. My advice is to practice the script a couple more times before recording it and to tighten up the timing from sentence to sentence just a bit. Good job though.

    Peer Feedback:

    A lot of mouth sounds in the recording. The pausing and the overall pace creates a distractingly slow vibe. A slight speed up of the read...slight...and the KILLING of the pauses can make this work. You will need to address the mouth noises. Are they from mic placement? Proximity? Dry mouth? Too much caffeine? Lots of internet references to address the last.

    Vocal is potentially marketable, but a lot of things need to be addressed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks everyone for all the feedback it was very helpful. I do still struggle a bit with some words so I'm always working on enunciation , pronunciation and the accursed mouth noise....

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    Advil 2

    Script:

    Arthritis pain? It’s a part of my life. So I keep Advil close by. Just ONE works as well as TWO regular Tylenol. Advil works at the site of minor arthritis pain -- stopping it where it starts. Nothing’s proven to work better or last longer than Advil. And now introducing new ADVIL GEL CAPLETS. One more advance for Advil. Advanced medicine for pain

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    Practice Recording:

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    Just trying to poke around with different genres. Any and all comments appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    The pace needed to be slower. There needed to be more reflective pauses between the different thoughts.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice clear recording, as erapp said above try to relax a bit, don't rush it. Try to fit it into 30seconds.
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Thanks to you both. I will keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    This is probably a 30 second spot. It it was for TV, there might be some visuals to break up the sentences. If it was for radio, there might be music and FX to eat up a few seconds. You can afford to slow it down a touch. Have you ever worked with a stop watch? There are apps for smartphones. Try it, it might be somewhat liberating to know that you don't have to spit the words out quite so fast.

    Peer Feedback:

    great voice and delivery for this type of spot didn't sound rushed to me at all but I am a fast talker haha keep on truckin you'l be booking jobs in no time...I would hire you

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    Advil

    Script:

    For fast, effective relief, Advil goes to work right at the site of minor arthritis pain. It keeps pain away hour after hour. And it’s gentler on your stomach than aspirin. In fact, nothing is proven more effective or longer-lasting than Advil. Advil. Advanced medicine for pain.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Another practice clip. Thank you for the feedback.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey denyonta,

    First off, I like your warm, rich tone a lot. I would say that your articulation suffers a bit here. It may be simply technical; having a bit of a lazy tongue and not really finishing words. It may be a lack of breath support throughout the sentence. But perhaps it's mostly due to pace. You might slow down a bit. Personally, I think when we go too fast it's because we haven't quite made specific and solid choices of what we're trying to communicate. Or maybe we make choices but are afraid of overstating them and not sounding natural. I've heard it said that a way to think about words we want to emphasize is to simply "notice" them a bit more rather than "hit" them. All IMHO.

    On the quality side, I hear a bit of reflection in your recording space. I can hear your room. Maybe you can too and as a result, you may have your gate set too high and it's cutting off the ends of some of your words.

    What a crazy journey we go through. I hope this helps.

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    Air Optix Contact Lenses

    Script:

    What you wear to bed is your business.
    So if you're sleeping in your contact lenses, ask your eye doctor about Air Optix Night & Day Aqua contact lenses. They're FDA approved for up to 30 days and nights of continuous wear and are the most breathable soft contact lenses available. Because bedtime is your time.
    Air Optix Night & Day Aqua contact lenses.
    Visit airoptix.com for a 1-month free trial.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Hi! Just got my mic and did some soundproofing and am wondering how it sounds. Also, I'm just trying out my voice on commercials. So any feedback is welcome and really appreciated! Thanks so much in advance, Aili :)

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    Peer Feedback:

    I hear a tiny bit of echo. I love your voice though, it's bubbly and flirty. Great for this type of "ineundo" ad. Go back and listen to the "30 days and nights" It might need a change in inflection. But you sound crisp and if you are brand new, I see much promise..
    thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this a good spot for you I like your voice on the read. I don't know if is me but I could only hear you on the left side of my headphones so I can not really tell you about the sound quality...sorry. I did like your read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi. I like the performance. The sound is a tad muffled and has some echo in it. You can hear the echo most when you say "SO" and "They're FDA approved". Good performance though. I can hear the smile as you talk :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for your feedback, everyone! I'm having some issues with the mono vs. stereo output, so I'll have to see how I can fix that. Thanks, again! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Only getting the left channel. What DAW are you using? There should be a setting in the preferences for recording in mono. There are also some strange audio artifacts in the recording (sounds like electronic bubbles). It also sounds like you're recording in a pretty live room, lots of echo. What kind of sound proofing did you use, how much and where was it placed?

    Just a suggestion. If you do this again, get a little more intimate and less full-voiced - like you're standing right next to me talking into my ear. After all, you're talking about sleeping and bedtime, with that little innuendo thrown in.

    Peer Feedback:

    Most issues addressed in previous critiques. You have a really friendly and personable sound. You should work on getting the sound to both sides of the sound and we can address other recording space issues where they exist. Really nice first couple of posts.

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    Thank you very much, James and Tom, for the constructive criticism; that really helps a lot!!

    My pre-amp is a Focusrite Forte, and I'm using Sony Sound Forge Pro, which I thought was set to record in mono. The manual doesn't appear to have any specifics in how to confirm/change this, so I'm kind of lost here. I've been trying to re-record again today, but it's the same--only left channel during playback. :(

    With regard to "soundproofing", I'm using the Vicoustic Flexi Screen. For this recording, I placed some thick towels on top; in removing them tonight, I discovered that the towels contributed to much of the echo. Also, I think the weird "electronic bubbles" came from my increasing the volume via Sound Forge because my gain was way too low. In my recording attempts tonight, I set the gain much higher and didn't have to artificially increase the volume...so no more "electronic bubbles".

    If anyone can please tell me how to fix what is wrong with my recording setting, I'd really appreciate it. Thank you very much!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Aili,

    Simple Google search came up with how to set mono settings in Sound Forge Pro.

    http://soundforge.helpmax.net/en/batchengine-chmbatchengine-hhc/processe...

    The internet is a wonderful thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    you have a nice energy and quality in your voice, the read had too many words stressed and felt presented. Could you focus on delivering phrases and ideas with more intimacy?

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    Airwick Airwaves

    Script:

    This is Nick. This is Nora. This is Nick’s nose. This is Nora’s nose. Nick’s nose likes a little air freshener. Nora’s nose likes a lot. Their noses didn’t know what to do. Until their nosy neighbor Ned told them about new improved Airwick Airwaves. Airwaves have a low setting for Nick’s nose and a refreshing, room filling scent for Nora’s Nose. Now Nick and Nora’s noses can live in harmony.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I now the recording quality isn't great. I'm more interested in performance feedback. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    A tough selection! Good pacing and inflection.

    The "SSS" sounds were too strong, I thought - This is Nick's nose.
    The word 'this' could be lighter.

    Lukky Salas

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, you took 8 seconds longer than you should have so it's obviously slow. But further, it doesn't sound like you're talking to a person. You're reading a script and trying to act it out...and over-doing it at that rate. Liven up the delivery without sounding like you're speaking so loud ...bring the projection down to a personal level.

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    TxTom:
    Where does your comment "Well, you took 8 seconds longer" come from? There's no maximum time indicated anywhere.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ummm...try the fact that this is a commercial. It's certainly not a 60s spot...so that leaves 30. So that's where I get 8 seconds too long...leaving a little time at the beginning and end...

    You can't just put out a read without consideration of it's intended use. This would be a 30s commercial. You need to pace it for that.

    Peer Feedback:

    OK. Thanks, Tom.

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    Hope it helps.

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    Allegra-D

    Script:

    Unbearable commute, or unbearable congestion? The stuffy nose and sneezing from seasonal allergies can make any drive hard to take. Only Allegra–D has fexofenadine plus pseudo-ephedrine. So it provides real relief from allergies and congestion, without the drowsiness that can be caused by many other antihistamines. Talk to your doctor about Allegra–D, and get on the road to relief today.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I imagine this is for 30 second spot and that the audio would be matched up with the video.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality was excellent; however, I noticed a little click at the very end. Perhaps that was just the sound of the recording button being turned off. Performance was very good as well, but I thought the very end seemed a tiny bit rushed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, MH!:
    Your VOICE is perfect for this spot. Speed/pacing and clarity/enunciation were right-on, though I didn't quite "believe" it... Your inflection didn't make it sound like you believed what you were reading.

    I'll bet if you simply read the spot out loud several times more then re-record it, whatever inflection issues I was hearing will take care of themselves.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marianne,
    I found this oddly both good and bad. Here's what I mean. As a commercial with video I thought that it didn't work well. But if you were to present this as a radio jockey promoting a sponsor between songs it was superb.

    Peer Feedback:

    I always enjoy listening to your reads. They are pleasant, appropriate, and real.
    There is one trend I've noticed, however, that is a little distracting, and it's the smallest nitpick. I don't know if it's a Midwest-Chicago thing, but you sometimes hit the final word in a sentence or phrase especially strong, almost like you're hanging on a little longer to the syllable while giving it volume. As an example, listen to the word "today" above. Below, in the "NASA Space Science" read, I heard it slightly on "violence," "explode" for sure (the "plo" is loud and extended), "sky" in "night sky," "time," and slightly on "book."
    Practice alternating the phrase-final inflections and you're on your way!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey all - thanks for all the comments. Nick - good point. You are right. I do need to mix up my inflections and emphasis. Will work on that!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is always nice, pleasant, and articulate, and your recording quality is great too. It's solid and I agree with Richurd, too, but I think it could pop more if the tone traveled more with the beats of the copy.

    Problem: Allergies
    beat 1: Is it really the commute or is my head going to explode from the toxic pollen that's poisoning my world?
    beat 2: Good news! Allegra and all it's drug goodness.
    beat 3: Call to action.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia - thanks much for your very thorough critique. I like how you think! I will try to pay more attention to that!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good vocalization and clarity....god job!!!!!!!!

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    Practice Recording:

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    I'm experimenting with beds of music as I added a music track to this script. I was also trying to create a certain essence for this particular script by the way I read it and the performance alone. Please comment. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    It's me again, Henry. Very intriguing. A very good effort. You're doing good.
    Homme is hard to pronounce. You have be full open on the entrance, and overpronounce the double m sound. That's why the e is there at the end.
    I know I'm being picky, but it's the product name. To be smooth, don't allow any
    glottal impact on first letter vowels. Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Henry. The "H" is silent and I was trying to pronounce it the way it sounds. Will concentrate on my vowels, pronunciation and more. Once again, thank you so much for your comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad, but you should lower the music volume. It overpowers your voice when it kicks in at "A little mystery...".

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Dean. I'm just getting familiar with Audacity which is what I'm using for my editing. Therefore, I have to find out how you decrease volume on one track, once you add them together. I will be doing a lot of scripts over, once I upgrade recording equipment.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the read but the tone of your voice sounds very AM radio. Not sure if it's your mic or what. It makes your voice sound very thin. There's a hump around 1k-2k.

    Peer Feedback:

    It's the microphone Chris. As I mentioned, I am recording my scripts with a mini-laptop with a built-in microphone and using Audacity software. I'm just getting familiar with the software, therefore sound levels and more may appear too loud or too soft and there may be certain breaks in between. Will be upgrading recording equipment, as well as re-recording several scripts in the future.

    Peer Feedback:

    Getting better there kid !! Loved the read but the one part that I need to mention is that I felt you should have elongated the pronunciation of the word " to ". Your's came across as ta. Not a big deal. I love the voice L !!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Jerry! How are you!

    I've been practicing a lot with the scripts and have become very familiar with Audacity, as I was working on a read that I will be uploading shortly where I will be adding music tracks starting from the middle...break...then continuing. Once I get the new microphones, I'm sure the reads will sound better too.

    Thank you so much for your comment and looking forward to hearing your next script.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good read, although the music was a good choice for this piece, I think it was mixed a bit to hot. All in all very good. Good luck with your new equipment when you get it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much! I'm become familiar with my editing software which is Audacity, so the sound quality will be somewhat better and I'm also working on my pacing within reads. Basically, just doing a lot of practicing to improve within many areas. Really appreciate your feedback! Thanks!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    It's last recording!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Henry, this is your second go at this if I recall correctly, and I still have to say that I don't think your voice is suited for this peace. I certainly am not saying you have a bad voice, it just sounds like you're Gandalf speaking of an ancient Dwarven skin remedy than selling a beauty product.

    Pieces like this are meant to be read by sexy, alluring female voices. Your voice is epic, deep, and powerful; not what this calls for.

    Peer Feedback:

    Quite right. My original recording was ethereal, poetic, whispery, nothing like my last.
    It was an attempt to be unreal, like Merlin. Female friends thought it was sexy. Entirely rejected by Michael Ingram as amateurish. Looking to find some areas
    to work, in absence of any help from Edge, who wanted me to do voice 101.
    My voice was developed in the classical stage tradition 50 years ago.
    Sorry about that. No more submissions unless I get a call to do a war..

    Peer Feedback:

    I have a question for Jmm. Does a woman prefer to hear another woman being sexy,
    or to hear a man whisper it in her ear? I don't know.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    New venture, to divert from narration.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Henry,
    I like the tone and pace on this read..Perhaps you should work a little on enunciation as some of the words sounded slurred. I think you have a GREAT voice but just need to go back to the "basics" and you'll find your reads will greatly improve

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry,
    You've got some strong infective qualities to your voice. Inflection is one of the hardest tightropes to walk. One misstep and it's over. There a few spots where you go overboard with the inflection. Something akin to a stage performer doing voice over. On stage they play well. Take them off stage and every thing is over done. With voice over even subtle nuances are already made bigger than life by the power of the microphone. So learn to control your delivery and let the mic do the work. You could also have brought the volume up a little. You've got good reading skills. You just need to adapt to a new environment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, guys. I just made a choice to go under for mood. Doesn't quite work.

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    22 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    Once again, this is a whisper in a woman's ear, with breaths left in.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice narration voice, deep and full of tone. Some of the words were hard to understand in this recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think should put this one away as a miss. I intended it to be whispery, not straight,
    not as narrative. A private appeal to a woman But it doesn't. Okay. Blast off!

    Peer Feedback:

    Henry, I've had a few reads I've tried and re-tried only to realize they weren't for me. While I heard them in my head as something I could do, it just never fit my delivery and capabilities. I've had to basically move on to something new and let it go. Nothing wrong with that.

    Peer Feedback:

    TxTom, If it aint sexy, it don't work. This was not marketable anyway.

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    38 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Did the men's version of this ad awhile ago and really wanted to try the women's version. Used same bed of music for this version. Please comment and would appreciate constructive and positive feedback.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Didn't understand your first words. Very sultry. Seemed more directed to a man.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, lcw, nice read! And music bed is perfect. I would watch the articulation on the first phrase, and perhaps vary the intonation a bit more on "that turns heads...", etc. Also I would suggest opening up your vowels on two words, "hearts" and "room". It sounds like "hawrts" and "rum". Otherwise, very alluring, indeed!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry,

    I know you've done this ad several times, and it's somewhat of a difficult read. In performing this, I used a lot of visualization relating to the CHANEL ads, as they are sultry, however tasteful at the same time. Therefore, I didn't want to go over the top in regards to how I read it, so I tried to perform as neutral yet soft as possible, but also had to use a specific tone and the music sort of enhanced it.

    In regards to it being directed to a man, the ad can appear to both men and women. Because the keyword is Allure and in appealing to the female population, they will want to try the product and with the male population, they would be intrigued by how the VO Talent performs it.

    I commend you for doing this, as I said it's not such an easy ad because of how it has to be performed.

    Thank you for your comment and best of luck. LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi CC,

    Thank you so much for your comment. I will do this one over again, and in regards to the opening delivery....my throat was going dry! Also, I have to definitely get a better microphone. Because it is audible, but I think it will be better with the right equipment; the clarity and more will improve.

    Will concentrate on the vowels and as I stated to my fellow Peer, this ad requires a certain tone to be used, however I wanted to keep it neutral without going over the top; therefore I tried to perform at the best of my ability.

    I will do this one over and use your suggestions. Once again, thank you for your comment as I really appreciate it! Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    The big problem you have to deal with, this script is poetic! Why is a woman using these words to other women?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry,

    Yes, I agree it may be poetic. However, as I stated, if you're familiar with the CHANEL ads they are very sultry yet tasteful and some are very dramatic as well. If you go on Youtube and view any CHANEL ad that was done; you'll see what I mean.

    As far as another woman being a VO Talent for this commercial; it's appropriate because it's a women's product, as she is expressing certain elements of being feminine that are alluring; which will make any female audience member want to be the same way and intrigue male audience members.

    I'm not saying that a man cannot perform this ad, as it was done by a male VO Talent, but it basically has to be performed in an inviting way for the product to sell and make the ad interesting. Therefore, I think both a Female and Male VO Talent can perform this, but it has to be certain elements involved in it, to be effective.

    Thank you for your comment, best of luck. LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    You ought to know. I wouldn't. I no longer have any interest in it.

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    Almay Bright Eyes

    Script:

    New Almay Bright Eyes. Open wide. Take your eyes from tired to tremendous with the Almay Bright Eyes Collection. Color cream shadows, dual-ended eyeliners and lash-lifting mascara designed to give you wider, brighter, beautiful eyes.

    69 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuBose's recording

    Was this too slow? It felt genuine and exciting, but it might be too slow for a radio ad. Also, was it genuine and exciting?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't think it's too slow, in fact i think you could slow down a little bit.

    (you have some clicks in your voice, sorry had to point it out)

    You sound very genuine and warm.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this style of read is good for your voice, but pretty 'laid-back' for this copy. But 'faster read' isn't the only way to look at this. You might think about other ways to inject more enthusiasm and energy into your narration and 'color' the copy.

    Could be fun to try this one different ways, maybe try talking to different "people" in your read. It's nice tight copy, you could probably rattle of 3-6 different "takes" on this in a matter of minutes and listen back and see what you can really do with this.

    Note: the first syllable in "Almay" is as in 'Albert' or 'Alpine'. Whenever possible with brands, do the prep work to say their name right.

    Your mouth clicks didn't bother me, though they were audible. Minimize where you can...

    Liked your increasing smile and warmth in the lead up to "...beautiful eyes" at the end.

    Peer Feedback:

    This isn't likely a radio ad. I can't remember EVER hearing a makeup ad on radio. This will be for TV/cable and take 30 seconds to flesh out. Go with that thinking. There's a little lead-in time and some out time...but pretty much 28-29 seconds to play with most of the time.

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    Almay Bright Eyes

    Script:

    New Almay Bright Eyes. Open wide. Take your eyes from tired to tremendous with the Almay Bright Eyes Collection. Color cream shadows, dual-ended eyeliners and lash-lifting mascara designed to give you wider, brighter, beautiful eyes.

    40 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Caraleetalks's recording

    Have always been interested in voicing and have to start somewhere. First time voicing. Go easy on me! :) --Cara Lee

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-25125/script-recording-48136.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Cara Lee! Welcome to the forum! You have a great, clear, fresh voice and I thought you did a fantastic job! You had variation for each item in the list and you had a warm, friendly tone to your voice through which I could hear your smile. I loved your natural delivery, just a couple things I picked up on, when you said "Eyes" the first time you had a glottal stop or perhaps it was hit a little too hard, whereas the second time it flowed and when you said "tired to tremendous" I liked the differentiation between the two words but I lost the clarity of "tired" slightly, I didn't hear the "d" at the end. These are really minor things, (and just my opinion to take or leave as you please!) but as the overall read was so good (can't believe you're just starting out!) then all I could do was nit-pick! All the best, Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks a bunch for the welcome and detailed feedback Niki!
    Noted the different flow of "eyes". I knew someone would catch my soft "d" in tired! haha You caught me! Appreciate your listen, compliments, and critiques. --Cara Lee

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    Almay Bright Eyes

    Script:

    New Almay Bright Eyes. Open wide. Take your eyes from tired to tremendous with the Almay Bright Eyes Collection. Color cream shadows, dual-ended eyeliners and lash-lifting mascara designed to give you wider, brighter, beautiful eyes.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kendra Frost's recording

    I have a new mic, and this is my first time recording a commercial.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-74213/script-recording-67483.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like this recording! The music suits the copy and your tone is great for this read. My only suggestion is to add a bit more "oomph" in the line "Take your eyes from tired to tremendous..."
    The quality of your recording is quite good (something that I am struggling with in my own recordings). Well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I'm impressed. First time, really? I got nothing for you... (some of the vets on the forum should comment!) Keep posting.
    Best,
    Peter

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    Almay Bright Eyes

    Script:

    New Almay Bright Eyes. Open Wide, Take your eyes from tired to tremendous with the Almay Bright Eyes Collection. Color cream shadows, dual-ended eyeliners and lash-lifting mascara designed to give you wider, brighter, beautiful eyes.

    70 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear reilly_regina's recording

    Practice makes perfect. All feedback welcomed!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-102079/script-recording-93995.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pow! Sounds great! Crisp and clear. Sweet delivery. Plenty of S's in the script that could stand a little processing. At the very end, when you say "Beautiful Eyes", I get just a touch of distortion at the beginning of "eyes". Nice work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Same "pumping" effect as in the last recording. The vent noise is even more present here.

    Here are a couple of links to videos that might help:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HUqBoY7QOmY

    This guy uses NR with a sample of noise from the recording rather than the "adaptive noise reduction" feature.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rY1cj--cXDo

    This guy uses the "noise removal" feature rather than NR.

    BTW - Always use headphones to edit and master your recordings. Using speakers (as opposed to monitors) isn't the best choice.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have an awesome voice, and the high point was the "beautiful" at the end. My main criticism would be that it was a bit too much on the soothing side. I'd like a touch more enthusiasm/excitement.

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed listening to your voiceover. I thought the pace was great and your voice grabbed my attention.

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    Always Multipax

    Script:

    Always
    Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

    69 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jillian Gee's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129914/script-recording-97108.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice.I thought maybe the enunciation with the word period I could not hear the "D" at the end. Also the word "what" came off as "Waa".Performance was good, The recording quality I thought had what sounded like static in it. Otherwise it was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it could be a little slower and a little more emphasis on certain words. I like your voice but you have to bring that script to life.

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    Always Overnight

    Script:

    No matter how much you move around at night, there's a pad that can give you great protection. Introducing a new Always Overnight without wings. It's longer and wider to absorb what regular pads don't. Always Overnight now with or without wings.

    36 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear cheesywoo's recording

    This is my first recording. Any feedback is appreciated - thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Performance in my opinion you should have hit Always Overnight either with a pause before and after or an inflection. The read was too fast for me...thank you

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you - I appreciate it!

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    26 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jodina's recording

    I'm a newbie looking for feedback on performance, not recording quality at this time. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1274/script-recording-26269.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Jodina I like your voice, it shows a lot of promise, but I think this commercial you over emphasized some words such as " with" and "without". I also do the same too. However it was good read and the script was perfect for your voice. Best of luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Icw115. I do so much appreciate your feedback :) All the best to you.

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    Always

    Script:

    Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

    48 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Caraleetalks's recording

    New to the voicing game. Looking forward to any feedback. Cheers! --Cara Lee

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-25125/script-recording-48139.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Cara Lee, another great performance! You are very engaging, you have the smile in your voice and a great conversational tone. I love your work! If I was to be nit-picky again, I would say watch out for the glottal stops before the vowels and also there was a slight pause before "the right protection", this may have been a choice for emphasis but I wonder if it needed it or perhaps it would have been smoother to only pause at the comma? As always, just an opinion! Great stuff, keep it up! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Cara Lee (Caralee?) -

    Terrific voice and great instincts; however, something you might want to bear in mind, when reading this type of commercial copy, is that the first part of it is positing the problem (which needs a solution), while the second part is the resolution (the product to the rescue!). We should be able to hear a difference in your delivery when that happens.

    In this piece the transition takes place right after " But it changes every day," going into "That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX." Listen to commercials similar to this on TV, and you'll hear the change.

    Keep up the good work!

    Jim

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,
    I agree, very nice recording indeed. Clear, engaging, fun.

    Peer Feedback:

    Niki -- Thanks for the encouragement! Will pay closer attention to glottal stops on vowels. :)

    Jimbobway -- I think I'll have to put up sticky notes in my studio "Problem & Solution!" I can already hear the way it would change my read. Great suggestion and thanks for the encouragement!

    JavierSvoice -- Thanks, thanks, and thanks! :)

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    20 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Would like comments regarding performance, as still working out sound recording issues. Would appreciate constructive, courteous, and positive feedback. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good. Only things that seem to need attention are the words "period" which is not enunciated too clearly, and the first "Always," which should probably be empasized a little more, like you did withit at the end. Overall, a very nice performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Javier. I also think that some of the words may not sound so clear due to sound quality issues too.

    What I'm going to do is see if one of the Coaches could help me with some of my editing issues and I live in NYC, so I can go down to their Studio.

    Once again, thank you for your feedback, I appreciate it!

    LCW

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lcw,
    Nice voice as always. This performance is well done. Good read, very conversational. Copy interpretation and vocal performance, on point! Good choice for a music bed. I like this very much. I am impressed! Enough said—Great Job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good job,, great tone, and paceing. Very nice. The last phrase,, with it following "you've got the right protection" ,, and it being the product,, you might want to bump just a half a notch on the cheery scale maybe? I dont know,, I like how it is, just not sure the client would.. What does everybody else think?

    Peer Feedback:

    You're absolutely right and this is a big flaw of mine when it comes to the end of a script; I have tendency of ending it on a down note. It's something that I've got to work on.

    Thanks so much for your comment, I appreciate it! Also, looking forward to your next read.

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Michael,

    Always good to hear from you and loved your latest read!

    Continuing the practicing, but will be doing some Private Feedbacks soon and hopefully starting some work with the Coaches.

    Glad you enjoyed the read, and I appreciate your feedback!

    LCW

    Peer Feedback:

    What did you do with the Jewish accent? This was a nice read. Your voice was very comfortable to the ear. I like the soft tone but overall it may be too soft to reflect enthusiasm for the product. We're talking subtle criticism here. The read was very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Have you tried, turning down your gain, and getting closer to the mic?

    Peer Feedback:

    No, but I'll try that during next recording.

    Thanks, appreciate it!

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    This was the perfect voice for this ad. Usually when I hear something I like, I feel like I need to go out and buy the product. This time, probably not. It was a pleasant read with a nice voice. I liked it. As you resolve technical issues, it will only get better. Sometimes the right voice makes an ad really work. Can you imagine Dennis Leary doing this ad?

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    ALWAYS

    Script:

    Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

    27 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear monica777's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/MonicaSalazar_Always.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your solid, no-nonsense way about this script. The pace is nice, and it flows well. There's nice clarity. It's pretty solid, but I think you can up the oomph by hitting the contrasts and beats of the story harder by changing your tone more with each beat. (the beats in this being: the set-up, the problem, how Always saves the day, the moral of the story is Always Multipax)

    If I remember correctly, this read was posted by someone else recently and it was critiqued in detail. If you go to the top level of the feedback forum and then search specifically for this script, you can find previous performances of it and the feedback given.

    Hope this helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this read. It sounded like a sane and sensible woman, maybe a school nurse, explaining this product to one of the girls. I would have liked to hear the word "what" spoken with a little more T sound at the end? "What sounded like Wha. Otherwise, nice pace; everything else sounded good and clear and I loved the tone of voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, Tonia and Chris! Very helpful!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice, clear, trustworthy. Add that "t" at the end of what and you have a winner.

    Peer Feedback:

    A lot of potential, Monica. You lend credibility to the read. The echo is distracting, though. You may want to consider some sound-absorbing material in your room.

    Nice delivery...keep at it.

    Mike

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    Ambien

    Script:

    There is a rhythm to life. We sleep at night - and wake in the morning. It's the sleep cycle that helps keep us in a healthy balance. But, for millions of Americans, sleep doesn't always come easily. For them, there's AMBIEN.

    92 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vickydovoice's recording

    This is a very short commercial for a sleeping medicine. I am supposed to deliver it with a soft, relaxed voice. I hope to receive your feedback on my performance and recording quality. Also, can you tell what my accent is? Actually, I'm not American. So I wonder what listeners think what my accent is. I'm a newbie, so your feedback will help me a lot. Thank you very much.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-122872/script-recording-94299.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you have to deaden your recording space more. It sounds like you have a "gate" on which is very noticeable, so try it without the Gate, they can be noticeable and robotic.

    Like me your non US natural voice, so keep chipping' away at it. I think some more warmth / smile and intonation at the end.."for them.. theres Ambien" Thats the main sell point right at the end.:)

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    Ambien2

    Script:

    Ambien 2
    AMBIEN, the prescription sleep aid that helps you fall asleep fast and stay asleep longer - and wake rested and refreshed without grogginess in the morning. No wonder AMBIEN is the number one prescribed sleep aid in America. Talk to your doctor about AMBIEN. AMBIEN --- works like a dream.

    32 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Loren Phillips's recording

    My first upload for feedback (did enter the contest last night). I have been busy reading a lot and recording recently and have a long way to go. My first class starts in Jan but I'm trying to get a jump on it. Any input is welcome - performance and recording quality. I'll be posting more. Happy T-Day! thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-82403/script-recording-64292.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read. You could afford to take just a teeny, tiny bit more time with it in the body of the copy. It wasn't rushed. Just lull me to sleep.

    What did you do with your processing? I'm listening with headphones and your S's are really crisp and a little jarring. Keeps me awake.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks. Agreed on the highs. I tried de-essing and thought that would translate ok but you're right - too glassy. I may have been too close to the mike, not sure. I also worked with the tempo but thought I was getting dangerously close to dragging. thx again

    LP

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read. It seems like there is a gate that is cutting a bit of the "a" off in "a prescription sleep aid." Other than that jamesromick hit the nail on the head.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    The interpretation was appropriate and pleasant for the subject matter. I heard what I believe was mouth noises in the recording..
    My suggestion would be to add more interest through tonality, infection, pacing etc.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,
    Were some of these longer sentences more of a challenge for you? I know they are for me-- they tend to make decisions trickier, not just about where to breathe but where to inflect. To me your interpretation sounded, as usual, warm, friendly, and suitable to the content, but I think it may not be one of your smoother reads delivery-wise, possibly for this reason. My favorite part was the last sentence, which sounded more natural to me-- maybe because it was shorter and more effortless? I've been meaning to try to upload some attempts at reading things that have uncomfortably long sentences-- maybe I'll try it this week.
    Cheers,
    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Peter, I think you're spot on. I tend to speak in short bursts or phrases with lots of pauses in between. I think it's because I weigh my words very carefully. That means it is highly unnatural for me to read at a faster pace in long sentences. I also am working with the challenge of reading from a script I have put into braille, which has made it necessary for me to read further ahead of what I'm saying than I am used to doing. It's a skill I am learning and there has been some improvement but, yes, it takes some effort to read long sentences at a relatively fast pace.

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    As I Am Moisture Milk

    Script:

    As I Am Moisture Milk

    Ah, Moisture! It's essential for transforming dry coils and curls into lush, bouncing beauties! When your hair craves added hydration, nourish it with a serving of As I Am Moisture Milk Daily Hair Revitalizer. It's loaded with some of nature's best emollients to make your hair softer, shinier and healthier from the inside out. As I Am. Beautiful Coils & Curls...Naturally.

    119 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kellbell87's recording

    My voice sounds oddly muffled in some parts. I was not sure what to do to remedy it, but my main overall concern is nailing the commercial sound. I was considering putting this script and music into my commercial demo.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-22512/script-recording-79327.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone for this piece. I do think more emphasis can be placed on the product name. It seems to blend into the third sentence and doesn't really stand out.Also, perhaps the phrases "dry coils" and "hair craves added hydration" could sound undesirable to convey more contrast.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback CherylLinn! "As I Am" could and should pop more. I'll be sure to incorporate those notes into my next take.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with CherylLinn. Very nice voice. Just a bit more punch on the positives and more drop on the negatives. I think with those changes it would make a good spot for the commercial demo. Try to find out why you a muffled a bit and get that fixed as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree that "As I Am" can be punched more. Your MB will have to come up too... honestly I didn't read your comments until after I listened, and I thought it was just background noise... I kept wondering what was knocking around while you were recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    The performance was great and the recording quality wasn't bad except for the muffled parts. I think once you figure out what caused that, you've got it all.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi. Good Job. Thanks for submitting your work. I like this piece for your demo. Pieces on a commercial demo are shorter than the copy here and usually more pithy. Try this copy edit as a jumping off place.
    Transform dry coils and curls into lush, bouncing beauties! Give your hair what it craves. Nourish it! with As I Am Moisture- Milk, Daily- Hair- Revitalizer. Softer, shinier, healthier hair ....naturally.

    If you really like the Ah Moisture line...you might have some fun with it by layering it in with your music as part of the soundscape. Putting it into the mix rather than just starting with it in character ...maybe use it like her inner voice...and maybe use it a few times...using a few different acting intentions.....I would suggest listening to the mix on pro commercials that have been fully produced. There is a lot more going on in a pro mixed spot than just a music bed as a general rule. I like the music choice you made. It Sounds like you already know this...but ...I have to say it...you want to make sure the music is royalty free or you bought the license for its use. Your record levels are too low in general. You can bump it up! And if you are planning to self produce your demo. I highly suggest a home studio evaluation and some audio production training. If you are bringing these ideas to a pro producer you are way ahead of the game ...they will love you for your research and creativity. I like your delivery style as well. If you go with your original copy, check the preferred neutral American pronunciation for the word emollient. Keep up the good work. You rock! DQ

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach April 7, 2015 at 12:29PM

    Peer Feedback:

    Kell,

    You have a relaxing tone in your read. Believable, where you actually use the product. Technically the mic doesn't bring out the fullness, or the acoustics aren't favorable in the recording. But as far as voice... very good!

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    At Home Comfort of King George

    Script:

    There comes a time when you just can't do some things for yourself anymore. You need a helping hand. He took care of you all your life, and now it's your turn to give back, but with a family of your own, there just aren't enough hours in the day. "At Home Comfort" in King George provides in-home care for the elderly. From bathing and dressing to housekeeping and shopping, we're there to help. Call us today at 540-625-2015. "At Home Comfort" of King George...committed to dignity, compassion and quality care.

    83 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear monhow's recording

    Here's my second attempt at this one. Compared to the last, I worked on evoking the right emotion and used music to help with my pace. Let me know what you think.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117354/script-recording-91448.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the sound of you voice is great, but I think you spoke a little
    too slow, as if you were trying to hard to sound compassionate. It
    sounded like it was fake or "acting" compassionate. But, the sound
    of your voice is great, smooth and relaxing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Solid performance. The only thing i personally noticed was some mouth noise at some points. This doesn't seem like a big deal just some water should do the trick. It sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of agree with Drake, it's a little self-indulgent and ponderous.

    IMHO, it's also a 30 second spot. It's a lot of copy to cram into that little amount of time, but very do-able and still get the message across.

    - Treat the first three sentences as one "thought clump" - that's the premise/setup/problem of the ad.
    - Then there's a transition - "Here's the solution you're looking for." - up and bright and comforting.
    - Contact information.
    - And slogan/tag.

    This delivery was somewhat one dimensional - same whispery tone through out.

    Imagine that you're giving this advice to a friend over coffee in a crowded diner, but you don't want everyone else to hear - but not in a whisper but a normal tone of voice. You sympathize and empathize with your friend's plight. But you have the answer, whip out a brochure and give them the pitch. It's a nice place with great, committed caregivers who will see to Pop's every need. Here's the number, and here's the testimonial.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback...I will use them to work at this again.

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    At Home Comfort of King George

    Script:

    There comes a time when you just can't do some things for yourself anymore. You need a helping hand. He took care of you all your life, and now it's your turn to give back, but with a family of your own, there just aren't enough hours in the day. "At Home Comfort" in King George provides in-home care for the elderly. From bathing and dressing to housekeeping and shopping, we're there to help. Call us today at 540-625-2015. "At Home Comfort" of King George...committed to dignity, compassion and quality care.

    104 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear monhow's recording

    I am new to voice recordings and am looking for some honest opinions from a more experience audience. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    One thing is that this felt really rushed in the choppy phrasing...start, stop at the punctuation and then rush to the next period. But overall, it's too whispery. Too understated.

    Peer Feedback:

    Warning: "War and Peace" length post. You have been warned :-)

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    OK, first the technical. It's not much; but it could be seen as major.

    1. There is background noise above acceptable levels in the recording. Also, it sounds like you're using a downward expander or even a gate. I hear the noise when you speak but not when you don't. It'll be distracting for potential clients... and a reason for them to choose someone else, I afraid :-/.

    2. During "compassion" in the tag, I heard a loud knock of some type.
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    Now the delivery.
    Raves:
    1. When you use your full voice - like in "dignity" - it fits this type of copy wonderfully. Don't be afraid to use it!

    2. Some of your pitch choices were spot on, especially the phrases involving "help."
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    Possible Areas of Improvement

    1. +1TxTom. But I also heard what sounded like you running out of breath in a few places; for example, "yourself anymore."

    2. Watch the vocal fry. It'll tear up your vocal folds before you know it. Example, "elderly. From bathing and dressing to housekeeping and shopping".

    3. Watch the billboarding of "At Home Comfort". Make it different from "of King George". Also make each of the mentions of "At Home Comfort" different. Remember, the first one is an introduction of the firm; the last is a tag line.

    4. One word: RELAX!! :-) You sound nervous throughout the delivery. You actually may not be; but you sound like it... and _that's_ what matters to the listener, yea?

    5. What are you actually selling? Comfort? Dignity? Yes, but there may be something that's not really mentioned that encompasses everything and _that_ is what your firm provides. Think for a moment before continuing to read.

    You're probably selling stability. That requires comfort, dignity, and charity... all of which your firm provides. The client's father doesn't need a full-blown caring facility; he just needs a little help to make his life a bit more stable so that he can feel like he's still his own man.

    6. Most importantly, who are you and with whom are you speaking? I would say you're in the daughter's home discussing options for her father. She and her husband have their hands full with their three-year-old son. But she's also ready to get back into the work force after caring for her infant, now a toddler. Annnd, her mother just passed away about six months ago after battling a long illness. Since then and from the daughter's point of view, she has watched her father deteriorate into a shadow of the strong man he used to be. The options are to place her father in an elderly care facility and so leave his home of uncounted decades... or to hire your firm and he stays home without further major upheaval in his life. She has expressed all this to you and she really wants to go the route to you. You simply have to give her reasons to do so. Maybe the last sentence in the conversation before the copy picks it up could be the daughter saying, "I just don't know anymore. He just can't do the things he used to have fun doing." This is what it means to connect with the copy.

    Which brings us to who _you_ are. In this copy, I would say that you are Monhow the _Caring_ Home-Assistance _Service_ Provider (emphasis on Caring Service). You've seen countless cases just like this before and know _exactly_ how to be of service for the father so that he maintains his dignity. Your firm has years of experience and, with it, confidence and caring expertise. You need to convey that to the daughter. Now...how would Monhow deliver the copy?
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    Now with all that said, especially #'s 5 and 6, re-record the copy. If this is a 30-second spot, it _will_ be a challenge to fit all those words into 28.4 secs. However, if you tighten up the chopiness pauses (TxTom) and make the delivery more fluid, I think you can do it!

    Success!
    -- Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong (I often am), but I have the feeling that someone (or several someones) hve told you, "You have such a nice, deep voice. You should be doing voice-overs."

    Yep. You have a nice deep voice. And you're very articulate. But there's much more to VO than just that, as Steven has mentioned. It's digging into the copy, finding the relationships (who you are, who you're talking to, what the situation is, what's the message) and connecting to the listener in a (say it with me) "conversational" way.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice, but, as TxTom said, "too whispery". Also, thought I could hear your breaths between pauses.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks everyone for your feedback. They were very helpful, with so much detail. I will use it to improve my recording and re-post.

    Peer Feedback:

    As far as technical considerations, there seems to be a low hum in the background that goes away with the noise-gating at the end of each phrase.

    Get the noise down as low as possible first (turn off AC's , get away from your computer fan etc.) .

    I would try and use some mild noise reduction. That's often employed too harshly and beats up the natural sound.

    Lastly, perhaps some mild noise gating.

    - touzet -

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    "At Home Comfort" of King George (:30 commercial)

    Script:

    (PICTURE) There comes a time when you just can't do some things for yourself anymore. You need a helping hand. (PICTURE) He took care of you all your life, and now it's your turn to give back, but with a family of your own, there just aren't enough hours in the day. (PICTURE) "At Home Comfort" in King George provides in-home care for the elderly. (PICTURE) From bathing and dressing to housekeeping and shopping, we're there to help. (PICTURE) Call us today at 540-625-2015. "At Home Comfort" of King George...committed to dignity, compassion and quality care.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 2 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

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    25 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear deidreannjohnson's recording

    Feedback on diction, interpretation and recording quality welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-40244/script-recording-74788.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the energy you have for the reading. It comes across a little to presented, as if you were emphasizing too many words in the copy. I think you have nice clarity in most of your sounds and I am hearing all of the words.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Deidre Ann,
    What a soothing voice you have! There are a couple of comments I would make about your read. Overall, the pace and energy seemed too low and slow. You're excited about this product, but you don't have to go over the top. The second thing, notice the product name and treat it as one arching phrase rather than five separate words, especially at the end where it ran into the word conditioner.

    Your numbers were very articulate and there the pace was better because as a listener I would have had time to write down the phone number!
    ~Laura

    Peer Feedback:

    Dear ConMichelle and Boxermom,

    Thanks so much for your comments. I had such a hard time with that phrase, "New Scalp Benefits Balancing Shampoo and Conditioner." Perhaps thinking of it as one phrase made me nervous so I purposely took it super slow.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would experiment with emphasized words. Example...the first sentence...try placing emphasis on "your" and "daily level." There are many ways to read a sentence....try making in sound more casual. Talent seekers are all about "conversational" these days.. Don't read...tell a story.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dear Mary Ann,

    Thanks for the feedback. Yup, the 'conversational' read definitely takes some work. I'll keep practicing.

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    Aveeno - Lotion

    Script:

    Rediscover the skin nature intended you to have with Aveeno daily moisturizing lotion. Made with oatmeal, which holds moisture naturally, Aveeno lasts for 24 hours. Aveeno. Discover nature's secret for healthy skin.

    84 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lindalutz's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-96709/script-recording-80117.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The word "nature" or a variant occurs 3 times in this short bit of text, so it's probably an important quality that the makers of Aveeno want stressed - not necessarily to club the listener over the head with, but given a certain level of importance.

    So, from the top:

    Rediscover the skin NATURE (as opposed to some unnaturally synthetically created lab formula) intended you to have with "Aveeno Daily Moisturizing Lotion." (Treat this as one thing - the entire product. It's probably the way the bottle reads.) Made with oatmeal, which holds moisture NATURALLY (there's that word again), Aveeno (you've already mentioned the product name, so no need to overly stress it here) lasts for 24 HOURS. (And that's kind of important, isn't it?) Aveeno. Discover NATURE"S (not Dow Chemical's) SECRET for healthy skin.

    The stresses are subtle, but offer salient points to the quality and effectiveness of the product.

    The timing is about right - this is probably a 15 second spot, so you have a little more than a second to play with. The trick is pacing the important stuff with the rest of the copy - slightly slowing the stresses and speeding up the rest. Breaths would probably be edited out and the sentences tightened up against each other just a touch, so you have more time than you may think to slightly elongate those important words.

    Another thing to think about is who you are addressing. How does a woman talk to another woman about a product like this? How much "voice" (volume) do you actually need if you were talking to a girlfriend across the table over a cup of coffee? Are you physicalizing as you read - would it change your read if you actually pretended to (or imagined to) rub some of this stuff on your own skin?

    Lots of stuff to consider for such a short amount of words.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Recorded this commercial awhile ago, however added a bed of music. Please comment and would appreciate constructive and positive feedback. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7256/script-recording-26835.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your technique has improved a great deal since you recorded that one. With regard to the music, IMHO it comes in to late and gets too loud 3/4 through. Sounds like you started it low with a gradual increase to the end? I usually start it, lower music to just under the dialogue and then raise it at the end. I'd have liked to hear the music start off this piece.

    Peer Feedback:

    You right. The music was very soft and what I did was faded it in, then reduced the amplification using Audacity. What I should have done, was reduced the amplication and eliminated the fade in. Also better sound recording equipment will help with the performances. I'm practicing a lot to improve with my technique, but will be re-recording a lot of scripts over. Thank you so much for your comment, I appreciate it. Best of luck, LCW.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Avon.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris.

    Love your variations on the adjectives - my favorite is "intriguing and charming" and you have a sweet voice. If I were a kid I would want you reading to me.

    On the recording, give yourself 2 or 3 seconds of silence at the beginning before speaking and same at the end. Your arm movement / clothing noise comes across - as you reach to turn off the recording...? Around :08 seconds sounded like a chair squeak or click of some sort.

    Those little noises are easy to remove with your software. What are you using? I'm using Audacity right now.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your comments. I don't have a home studio or editing software and am doing the best I can with what I have at this time. I spent too many years delaying the start of my VO career so I'm taking some risks just to get going. You're right about the beginning and ending noises and, yes, I'm embarrassed about the clicks. Thanks for the compliment on my read and for noticing my recording difficulties. I'm working on them.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice voice for this piece. I agree and like the different variations you used for the adjectives. Good clarity. Do you think the pace might be a few seconds faster if this was a TV commercial?

    And what about more emphasis on Avon in the first two sentences? With just listening, more emphasis would help it stand out more as the product, I think. And maybe emphasis on "whatever" to tie into the different things that an Avon fragrance can be?

    And also, I think another choice could be to make the first sentence more definitive, like "this is exactly what Avon is." Then the next sentence to add the exception like, "but, well, and Avon fragrance can be..." Not sure my idea is coming across, but those are just my thoughts and ideas.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for listening to my PSA. I liked your different inflections for the different adjectives. Did you bump the mic at the end of the recording?

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I bumped the mic at the end. I have been working on being less awkward in my movements in the three weeks, give or take, since I made that recording. Setting my level a little lower has also helped with unwanted noise. Thanks for all of the comments, including yours, Andy.

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    75 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear saraha616's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-128073/script-recording-96180.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Such a pleasure to listen to! I could hear your smile in the piece and your point of views were clear and strong.

    Your "s" sounds splatter a lot which is extremely notable in the beginning with the five "s" words in a row. Also, the "gl" sound in the word "glowing" and the release of the "t" at the end of the word "treat" were also a bit muddy. To me it sounds like you are using the blade of your tongue a little too much. If you clear up your diction the piece would be great!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like it! Really natural and friendly. Recording sound is nice and close, intimate, like you're talking in my ear. I hear some mouth noise. May be able to improve by emphasising / lingering on some words to make them pop out a bit more. So what I mean is, a little more variety in the pace every so often might make it more interesting to listen to.

    But yeah, very nice.

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    Balance Bar

    Script:

    You know that tired feeling you get at 5 pm? Neither do we. BALANCE BAR. For energy that lasts.

    20 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Michael King's recording

    any feedback appreciated. Thx!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6112/script-recording-34824.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You don't sound that tired
    "Neither do we" doesn't sound convincing enough

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    Barely There Bra

    Script:

    A sensual revolution. A bra that's there, but barely. Smooth, soft, unencumbered comfort. Discover it. Nothing feels better. Barely There.

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear monica777's recording

    I dont have a home studio yet, please, looking for feedback on performance at this time. Many thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Monica VO Practice 8.2.12.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Monica!
    To my ear...I hear the sensuousness wanting to get out, so let it! Especially because you have all these lovely words to play with -I was going to list them, but it's really the whole thing. :) Try either speaking to the woman wanting something more comfortable and convince her to buy it, or try speaking to her partner and convince *them* to buy it.

    I could be wrong and this is *totally not* what you were going for, but that's what got my attention in the read. I think you could either stretch some words *juuuust* a bit and come in at about :20 or shorten the pauses a little and hit it in :15.

    Just my .02. GOOD LUCK! :)
    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Monica!
    I´ll be brief, there is an annoying noise on the recording, I can hear it with my headphones. I´d like to hear you with your raw voice!
    Remember "Elegance through simplicity".
    It sounds robotic to me. Imagine you being the business-woman creator of this revolutionary bra! You know what a bra means to us women -no need to explain that! - You want women all over the world to discover its "magic" and buy TONS of them!! LOL.... sorry to spyce it this way. The idea is...believe what you say and we will all believe it and buy bras even guys will do !!!!
    Hope this helps! All the best,Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Being new myself I rather like this one. Just closing my eyes I imagine hearing this as a sponsor for something on daytime television which is a really good thing. I rather like the performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Monica, to me it felt as tho you slightly overacted the part which sounds a "salesy" rather than talking to women about a product they need and use everyday. The read was nice and the tone was fine, the jumping up and down in pitch is what was distracting. Level that out and I think you'll have a great read. Try just reading it to yourself that way a few times and see if that makes a difference to you. If it does it will to everyone else too.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    Second upload, first time adding music. Give me some feedback! :-)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8010/script-recording-28329.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Lovely read. The timing of the music was perfect. Nice voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording Quality - The opening sound on the music was odd.
    Vocal performance - was very good and the rest of the music made is sound great.

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    Bernadus Lodge

    Script:

    Imagine relaxing in the Warming Room. Soothing your senses. Anticipating the essential oils soon to nourish your body. Rich botanical wraps and healing waters. Is this a dream, or an awakening? It's both. The Spa at Bernardus Lodge.

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vickydovoice's recording

    This is an ad for a spa. How do you feel after listening to this ad? Hope I can deliver well. Love to hear your thought on this. I'm open to all honest and frank feedback. Thank you for your comments.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi ,
    I usually tend to comment more on the technical aspects. There's some serious issues here. This has a very tinny over sibilant sound to it with a bit of distortion. I think your accent works well for a spa spot. I think maybe a bit slower and drawn out to emphasize the relaxation aspect. It's fine to use a cell phone or whatever to record I suppose but if you request feedback on recording quality...then you will likely get some. If you have a regular computer interface set up with a separate mic etc. , you may want to let folks know what your using and maybe a bit about your settings..

    cheers

    Touzet

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with touzet. There was some distortion in the voice and to me, the background music was too loud. I had trouble hearing your voice through it.

    I do think that your voice is a good fit for this kind of ad, just work on the technical stuff.

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    20 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I find that this script, like many others I've recorded is written with a great deal of formality. I'm looking for feedback on whether I was able to make this rather formal script sound conversational. It's a challenge.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/bio-identical.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Chris
    A challenge yes, this script needed a little more warmth and energy, you had a little slur with the word fine. Warmth and energy are a challenge of mine also.

    Craig

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,
    Your read has all the elements of the sing songy type of read. You are wavering from an average pitch to a higher pitch periodically. I'm certain you don't talk that way when in normal conversation. It's an easy fix just talk as you do normally and the script will right itself.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for your comments, both Richard and Craig. The strange thing is that I do tend to have a somewhat dramatic voice in normal conversation, especially when I'm really enthusiastic. I hear large pitch variation in the voices of my family members as well. I'm working on scaling it back.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, on the sing-song quality, but I hear the improvement, Chris, absolutely. I especially heard the more conversational parts in the middle. And this had a nice warmth to your tone.

    An interesting thing to try might be finding a voice you like, say some celebrity who's known to be more flat like Sigourney Weaver, and then getting to know her voice so well you can mimic her. Sometimes a "character cloak", a la Scott Burns, can really help break us out of an old groove or into a new one.

    Peer Feedback:

    I hear the sing song voice here, too, but I also hear a warmth and a smile...a big smile! Instead of scaling it back, try embracing and running with it! Try some different scripts...childrens story books or PSA's, or even a character in animation or video games. Maybe even telephony, too. If you're natural tendency is to vary your pitch when you get excited about something, then all you need it some practice and technique/acting training and I think you're on to something...

    I think if you try to hold back it will sound forced. Explore a little...

    Hope that helps...

    David Michaelson

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    Bounty Heavy Duty

    Script:

    From tires to gas grills, oil changes to clogged sinks, Bounty Heavy Duty soaks up, cleans out, and finishes your tough task. Then you throw it away. No more cutting up your favorite ripped t-shirt. No petrified old sponges. Bounty Heavy Duty, you'll have no problem with that.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Hello all, I'm working on techniques to get away from the announcer style and being more conversational. This is the first time I'm using this forum, I appreciate any feedback and tips you may have...thanks so much for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-59897.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you have a very engaging style in this way of speaking that you indicate you are trying out. I am too new to know what you used to do, but these readings are fun and believable to me. Again, though, you changed the script and added "more" before petrified.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    I tried to have a little more energy for this script and since my endings seem to always end on a down note, paced and pitch the ending different too. Apologize for any sound quality issues and would like comments on performance only. Would appreciate constructive, courteous, and positive feedback. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7256/script-recording-28521.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good job changeing up your delivery. You sounded very at ease with it, and more upbeat than I think I've ever heard.

    Peer Feedback:

    I remember what you and Javier said about me ending on a down note, so I took that into consideration and ended the script differently. Also needed to sound more upbeat.

    Thank you for your comment, I appreciate it!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved it L !! You were a lot more upbeat on this one. Very noticeable. Great job !!

    Peer Feedback:

    It's nice that you got out of the comfort zone on that one. I liked it too. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jerry and Nodo,

    I took my fellow Peer and friend KNM's advice as he said with my reads; to bring them out and with the slight regionalism/accent I have, not to change anything because that makes my voice unique.

    Therefore, I'm trying to be more upbeat and change my deliveries around a little.

    Glad you both enjoyed it and I appreciate your feedback!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi LCW, your performance here was good. But check this out: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y0zDZkIzUHo and see if you can mimic the delivery. I want you to notice how natural her speech is. I think if you delivered this script in that style, it would sound even better than it already does.

    Peer Feedback:

    Turn on skype

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    Cancer Awareness

    Script:

    Cancer doesn’t need more awareness. The death of cancer needs awareness. At Long Beach Memorial Medical Center, we revolutionize the treatment of chronic myeloid leukemia. For hundreds of thousands of people, this once lethal disease is no longer a death sentence. We’ve learned how to target cancer cells without harming healthy cells, which means we can disable the cancer without disabling the patient. Now, we’re going after other cancers as aggressively as they go after us. Help us make cancer the victim.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TomJVoiceover's recording

    Thanks for the feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love the warmth in your voice as well as its depth -- it's very well-suited for this type of work.

    I don't have fab speakers, but not hearing anything off-putting recording wise.

    Nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    The delivery is even - a little too even.

    Case in point, these sentences:

    "For hundreds of thousands of people, this once lethal disease is no longer a death sentence. We’ve learned how to target cancer cells without harming healthy cells, which means we can disable the cancer without disabling the patient."

    Each of the phrases have two parts - the bad vs the good. So, instead of "even", I'd prefer the second part of those sentences with a little more of an "uplifting" message, a little lighter at the end and not so serious. It could be as simple as changing facial expressions. Knit your brow on the first part, and raise your eyebrows on the second - and it'll translate to your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    James - Your professional singing and acting career yield fantastic direction. Thank you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the tone of your voice and your reading. Sounds like you are well suited to this type script. Only mention is the word "revolutionize" sounded like you added a "d" at the end.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    OK, I've tried to sound more Conversational in this version. Did I succeed? Thanks for your feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8309/script-recording-27687.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Really great, soothing vocal quality. Perfect for healing products. The first time through, I thought the recording started mid-copy; upon review I realized I was mistaken. Can't help but think if one person made that mistake, others might as well. A 1/4 second of silence before the copy begins might help prepare the listener, although I could be wrong. Also, the word 'lasts' is heard as 'lass' (~3/4's of the way through the script). Thank you. I thought the pace was excellent!

    Peer Feedback:

    Really fine delivery! Your voice is solid, but sounds a little processed to me.
    My hearing is not all that great.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought that was nicely done Scott and I'd echo that the only thing I'd look at is the "Last+s" pronunciation. My Students have a heck of a time with it coming out "Latssss" when it pops up. Nicely done though, good timing and vocal quality I thought

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello!

    Thanks to everyone for the comments. I will have a listen to the word, "lasts" and work on that.

    There is some hard-limiting on the voice-over and I had my speakers on in the background, so there could be something heard from that. I thought to make it a 15 second recording, so I removed any silence before and after the recording.

    Thanks for the encouragement!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, you've got a really good read here. I would just suggest that you use a little more emotion in the read; it really felt like you were reading off a script instead of telling someone about Advil. Other than that, your voice was very clear, and your recording quality is great!

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    Claritin 2

    Script:

    My old allergy medicine left me in a fog. Now – I’m Claritin Clear. Claritin relieves my worst allergy symptoms – without making me drowsy. I stay alert and focused. Who wants to spend their day in a fog? Discover Claritin and live Claritin Clear.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JasonArnold's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-118023/script-recording-94237.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, a good read but the first couple of sentences seemed a little rushed.

    Peer Feedback:

    My only suggestion would be to make a little more of a difference between the first sentence (talking about your old medicine) and the rest (talking about how much better Claritin is). A bigger change in tone between the two. Otherwise, nice read. I liked the way you read the question in it - who wants to be in a fog.

    Peer Feedback:

    There is a piece of copy that on-camera commercial instructors use to show 3 different phases of a commercial's structure.

    I had a headache. (wrinkled brow - obviously in pain)
    I took two (PRODUCT NAME HERE). (neutral, resting facial expression)
    My headache's gone. (big smile of relief)

    That's what's missing here, the different stages of the commercial copy.
    Problem - I got this stuff and here's what it does - Now I feel better ("Don't you want to too?") - Call to Action/TAG.

    It's a lot to pack into a short piece of copy. But you can take time with it. It's probably a 30 second spot with a lot of added visual stuff.

    Punching "and" seems odd. The operative words are what it does for you - ALERT & FOCUSED.

    Overall sound quality is somewhat thin. It doesn't capture the "body" of your natural voice.

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    Claritin

    Script:

    It’s another beautiful day, don’t lose it to seasonal allergies Take control! Talk to your doctor about Claritin Just one Claritin tablet daily brings you 24 hours of non-drowsy relief from seasonal allergy symptoms Claritin has a low occurrence of side effects such as headache, drowsiness, fatigue and dry mouth, similar to sugar pills Take clear control, take Claritin.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear nuvobreeze's recording

    Hi all. Here is my latest. . .what do you think? All feedback is appreciated and welcomed. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113053/script-recording-95898.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked your read. On the "Take control!" I would really hit the word "control" there. The copy has an exclamation point. Exclaim it.

    Speaking of dry mouth, it sounds like you're mouth is a little dry while reading. Especially in the beginning. I'm hearing lots of mouth sounds (like lips parting). Maybe take a big gulp of water beforehand.

    Overall, great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You know, I think I was getting tired and dry. It's amazing what others hear that we might not always hear ourselves.Thank you for your feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    What a nice voice. I enjoyed listening to this. If anything, maybe more emotion.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks ldelre! I'll keep at it!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Comtrex-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This is an actual spot that ran in 1999. I hit the return key brefore I had a chance to put in the text . Here it is.

    Miserable flu? Dont take that flu lying down.
    Take new Comtrex Flu Therapy.
    Specially made to relieve congestion, aching, caughing - and especially that fever.
    New Comtrex Flu Therapy. You don't have to take it anymore.

    This copy was offered in a class I took, and I took it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it would be fun if you sounded more "rebellious," and not so matter-of-fact. You're "fighting" the flu. It's the enemy! The speaker is trying to "motivate" the listening audience to fight the flu with him, etc.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good point Elisa. Overall the mix was pretty loud too. bring the bed down a bit.

    Peer Feedback:

    I completely agree with Elisa and Dan. I praise you on the creative aspect of this piece. The lead in was too long. Elisa makes a good point in that, while its possible to meld the lively music bed with your matter-of-fact delivery, melding the two is problematic at best. You can open the read with loud music at first but you'll need to drop the db's of the sound bed to accommodate the vocal. Then you could talk in a confidential way with the listener and the music fading to a background position to the vocal.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rsykesnichols's recording

    New mic so I'd like feedback on recording quality and also performance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126164/script-recording-96028.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording is very clear and easy to understand! However, your pace needs to be a bit faster. You take large pauses in between sentences and accented words. It's great to stress the words that you did, so you clearly did your homework, but a faster pace might make it sound more natural and fit in the short timeframe most commercials have. Hope this helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice tone. I have also been told to decrease the pauses or spaces and speed it up. Not hard to do with practice and editing software :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Energy! Just a little more conversational. The quality is great. You can definitely play with the words more. good job stressing certain words.

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    Crest Whitening Toothpaste

    Script:

    When I get up in the morning, I always start my day off with toast and coffee. Then it’s on to the little room, to brush my teeth with Crest Whitening toothpaste, it always leaves my mouth feeling clean, fresh and no crumbs. It will really give the day the right start, make it your routine.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Martin's recording

    I enjoy both writting and reading a script. That way if it doesn't sound right or says the right thing, changing it is easy. Kind of a personal taylored read and this way I get satisfaction two ways, author and reader. Anybody else feel this way? Second is there any noticable distortion or backround noise? Reconfigured the voicebox setup. Thanks for the advice, Mike

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7863/script-recording-27784.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Mike,

    You have a very friendly, energetic voice, however the pacing was an issue. I felt that you read it too fast and if you would have added a music bed, it would have sounded better.

    Pacing has been an issue with me too. As I just performed a script, and read it too slow whereas I thought I was at a good pace; but as two of Peers pointed out, the read should have been performed at a faster pace.

    Try this over, as you have a good tone to your voice and would like hear more from you.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree you have a good voice there Mike, a nice rounded mid tone that is pleasing. Unfortunately, I didn't like the script very much, it's a toothpaste ad, but I thought it was an ad for toast and coffee or the benefits of eating a good breakfast. However I can't write scripts, I'm lucky to get through emails, so far be it from me to judge. I didn't think the product being sold stood out at all, I think that's due to the script.

    As for your read, be careful of the pitch tone. Personally, I go there only to emphasize something critical. I try to read from the middle of my range, My emphasis comes from projecting certain words. Not raising or lowering my tone. Here's something that might help illustrate. You're on a plane with your wife, 3am, she's sleeping so you gently wake her by saying "Hey" so Hey is your only line in this script. Use these situations
    (a) wife asleep, wake her up tenderly
    (b) Loud Jackass bumps you at the bar bumps you unnecessairly. Live band playing
    (c) You are trying to attract the attention of the police

    The word doesn't change, but the amount of projection does. So does the resonance in your voice, First example, almost none, 2nd I'd tap the drunk on the shoulder with my voice not with volume and pitch, but with resonance and tone. 3rd a lot of volume, higher tone and a lot of resonance. Use your projection to emphasize key points, keep the volume even (talk forcefully not loudly), and vary the pitch to keep it interesting. Then, perform it like you were telling your best friend whose breath stinks! :) I'm sold, That's my 2 cents about projection! Keep at it! Nodo420

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rcooper1944's recording

    No edits in this one, just room for breaths and swallows.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2308/script-recording-22168.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good.

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    Estee Lauder

    Script:

    Here’s the fast track to thick lashes. New Magna Scopic Maximum Volume Mascara. It's formula one for incredible lashes. Estee Lauder. Defining Beauty.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jordynaa's recording

    Practicing with my home studio equipment and getting a hang of editing with Audacity. How does this recording sound? Used Amplify to make some breaths softer which may have worked but is it choppy? Any help is appreciated. Also, I exported as an .mp3 stereo (but recorded in mono) and Audacity gives options for 'Joint Stereo, 'Stereo' or for 'Force Export to Mono'. Is there a difference?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-119236/script-recording-95523.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, there is no need to record or render your recording in stereo - unless the client asks for it, as in the case of KDavies's last post. Or if you're fooling around with music beds - they sound a little thin in mono. Still, you only need to record the VO in mono, then render in stereo.

    A little "puffing" into the mic - not really plosive popping, just air rushing into the mic. Example: "inCREdible" Big tongue click on the second "lashes" - very easy to do on words with an L in them. If you zoom in on the wave form, you can actually see the little anomaly in the wave form, which you could probably surgically snip out without much difference in the sound of the word..

    Don't worry too much about the breaths in comercials. They would probably be edited out in the final cut. But for an audition, one trick that I do is take a breath "in the clear" and then snip it out and adjust the pace and flow. It's a little awkward. But for something this short, I can do this with one breath at the beginning, that I would edit off. Or two breaths at the most, one at the beginning and one after the second sentence. In that case, I would come to a full stop, take a breath, hold it for a split second for some silence before I started in again. Then I'd snip them out and adjust the flow.

    Oop. Just realized that there is another line in there that is not in this copy. But the technique would still hold.

    The recording quality is good. You might be working just a little too close to the mic. Back off 1/2 inch to 1 inch and see of you can find that "sweet spot".

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your comments! I will practice the breath suggestions you gave. My ear needs to be more attuned to plosives and clicking. I'm not hearing them as much until someone mentions it. I will also try 1/2-1" from the mic.

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    Fitness Club Body Copy

    Script:

    So, have you broken all those resolutions you made to get back in shape? That’s okay. We all do it. But there
    is that one resolution you may want to rethink breaking. You know, the one about getting in shape. Just like most of us,
    you’ve been indulging more than ever and getting exercise, well, less than ever. Hey, change is tough, but it’s important. At
    Spectrum a change in your fitness is something we take seriously. That’s why all three Spectrum Athletic Clubs in the Santa
    Barbara area have been beautifully renovated. You really have to see it to believe it. Impressive new interiors, exciting new
    classes, first-in-class equipment. It’s all new, it’s all good and it’s all for you. So gently step away from the chimichanga and
    come check us out. Real change begins on the inside and we’ve made some real changes for the better. Are you ready to
    make a few when it comes to you? Spectrum is so excited they’re even inviting you to experience the changes by offering
    three days of

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear antigone's recording

    I would like to know how it sounds technically and how my performance is. I have been submitting auditions onto Voice123.com and have gotten no bites. Thank you for your feedback, Tanya

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-28428/script-recording-47350.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You might want to look into upgrading your mic or recording environment. The tinny sound from this recording is a bit distracting, and it sounds more like someone ha snuck a little recorder into a room and was listening to you.

    Be careful about breaking your tempo too much... I know this is how we all talk in real life... but with a read, a sort of measured rhythm that you could tap your toe to a little tend to help keep the audience connected to what's being said. Save to tempo breaks for particular statements (like irony, etc)

    Your voice has a nice "lady next door" quality, and if/when you can improve your recording environment, I think it'll get heard more clearly

    Peer Feedback:

    I kind of get that you were working on making the copy seem like real conversation, but some of the stretching of certain words seemed a bit studied and artificial "But there is that ONE ---- resolution..." The sentence following that was more effective.

    The product (Spectrum) needs some sort of emphasis the first time you say it. Maybe a lift on the second syllabol and/or a slight pause after, like a comma, before finishing the sentence.

    There is music in this text. Pitch inflection and rythm. This was a little herky jerky.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello tanya
    You defenetly have to improve your recording quality, I'm not a working Vo but, i'm pretty sure it has something to do with you not landing gigs on those sites.
    This recording sound like your in a huge empty room, are you using a USB mike?

    Peer Feedback:

    If this is the recording quality you're delivering on V123, you're cutting yourself out of the running with the sound. You most definitely need to address your recording space issues.

    If this is something you would have submitted as an audition, I can tell you that you didn't get this one because you sound bored. You also sound like you're reading a script. Keep in mind you're selling something here. You need to sound like it's the best thing since sliced bread. Sliced bread is GREAT. You don't have to sound giddy, but smile some. Tell your BFF and their chunky husband how you know about this great gym they can go to to change their life. Soft sell, but that still means you have to sound like the product is something you totally believe in.

    If you haven't had any coaching, you should consider it. You have a very pleasant voice and articulate nicely. It's the technique that needs some polish here.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice tone, however, I've been told to:

    1. Smile
    2. Slow it down.

    And, I'm thinking that I understand now to some extent.

    Your room/walls could use some absorption.

    Hope this helps.
    8-)

    Peer Feedback:

    ramjamz, here, i agree with what was shared with you, but you'll get there.

    ramjamz

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    I liked Daniel's (TotalMixAndMaster) exercise so much I decided to give it a go. Took it a little further, removing mouth noise as well, and I like a more vintage sound myself. And let's say the client supplied the music :) Two takes: original voice track extracted from Daniel's post, and "finished" production (oh, if I had more time to play I could polish it a bit more)...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-53623/script-recording-87786.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    And I agree, focus on performance before getting too involved in the technical stuff, especially if you're at the stage where you're working toward a demo. If you're going to be producing your own stuff (like say audiobooks on ACX), then you'll have to get into this stuff more. And for things like mouth noise, background noise, etc, it's always best to address those at the source as much as possible. But it's something you can work on and learn about over time, and the technology is there to correct it in the recording if need be. Ultimately, your goal is to be the engineer's best friend, which means providing a clean recording. But you also (first) need to be the producer's best friend, and that means nailing the delivery...

    Peer Feedback:

    Great, thanks Sundance Kid. It's good to know that I at least have space that will work enough for what I need to do. I am very, very new and yes at the stage working towards demo. I would however like to audition for what I can without having a demo completed yet. I want to send out some auditions for audiobooks on ACX so I would like to learn what I can right now editing wise in order to make a decent enough audition to send out for those types of opportunities. The vocals that you cleaned up sounded so much better than what I originally posted.

    Audra

    Peer Feedback:

    I certainly had no intention to cause any offense. Copyright is not an
    issue, as it constitutes Fair Use (for educational purposes) under copyright
    law. Just as use of the copyrighted scripts in the script library
    constitute Fair Use. Also, I should point out that the only part of your
    production I used was the beep - I worked from the initial segment, about
    which you stated: "The first recording is the raw sent." So I could just as
    easily have used acooklubo's original post (had I known at the time that it
    was posted) which is presumably the same thing (minus the beep).

    Yes, I stole your beep. However, going forward, as a professional courtesy
    (and since you asked), I will refrain from using any recording you post
    without first asking permission.

    But this post wasn't supposed to be about me. It was intended as a learning
    exercise and encouragement for Audra, who I think we all agree has great
    talent and potential.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow. Just...Wow.

    I can see this is a big deal to you, but honestly, I think you're overreacting. Which is not constructive.

    FWIW, I didn't see your original post, so did not work from your settings, even as a starting point. It's rather ironic that in other posts you have discouraged people from posting EQ settings and such so as not to confuse people who are not technically savvy.

    I don't know if anyone else is still following this thread, but anyway here's what I did: from the file containing the three versions, I trimmed off everything after the first beep, keeping what I believed to be the original raw audio supplied by Audra. I then normalized the resulting file to -3dB peak and converted to mono. At this point I brought it into Izotope RX, rolled off the low end (I didn't save the settings, but it was somewhere around 100Hz and 18dB/octave, I think). I then used the declick tool to remove much of the mouth noise, and spectral repair to clean up the stuff that declick didn't get. I also used spectral repair to manually reduce some especially nasty sibilant sounds. Exported as a .wav file, and into the DAW... The result was still a bit hot, so in the DAW I reduced it another 0.9dB.

    There was some apparent room honkiness around 300Hz (found by boosting and sweeping a peaking filter to find where it sounded nasty). I ended up cutting 2.0db at 297Hz with a bandwidth of 1.0 octave (the default bandwidth for this filter - I didn't try adjusting this). There was way too much high end, so I added a high shelf cut: -3.3dB @ 7544Hz, 12dB/octave. I also added a presence boost: +2.9dB @ 4134Hz, 1.0 octave bandwidth (again, the default). There was still too much high end, so I added a notch filter: -5.6dB @ 11,097Hz, 0.7 octave bandwidth. Even with this, there was still some sibilance so I ran it through a free de-esser plugin called Spitfish. Settings were done by ear, and it doesn't show the exact settings so I can't give them. Now, of course the final settings here were arrived at with the music bed in place. The music bed was a track from a production library I own, described as "medium tempo, tranquil, smooth." Anyway, it seemed reasonably appropriate. I did look at an actual Flonase spot on YouTube (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1-4M0qvmmo8) but didn't have anything closer to what they used. The bed level is set at -9.1dB, and as you noted I didn't do any EQ or volume automation on the track (I was trying to save time - I may have spent more time at this point responding to the vitriol than I spent putting the track together, and I wanted the vocal to be forward in the mix). Finally, on the master bus, I added a bit of compression to glue it together, using a free plugin called DensitymkIII and a preset called "pinning down," adjusting the drive to get a couple of dB of gain reduction (and again, going by ear as to what sounded "right.")

    The result, yeah, maybe 80% of the way to being truly finished, but still I think a good example of how good Audra can sound. And finishing that last 20% probably would have taken just as much time as getting to 80%.

    Peace.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gRpTjr4L4T4

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    Flonase

    Script:

    Flonase Allergy Relief Nasal Spray outperforms the #1 non drowsy allergy pill. Most allergy pills only control one inflammatory substance. Flonase controls six and six is greater than one. So go ahead, inhale life, excite your senses. Seize the day and the night. Flonase, six is greater than one. This changes everything.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear acooklubo's recording

    Would love any feedback. Was said that I may have some sibilance, any input on that would be helpful. Any assistance is appreciated Thank-you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106914/script-recording-87725.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I'm hearing the sizzle that's present on a lot of the "s" sounds. But what's bugging me a little more than that is a processing artifact that's audible in a few places. It sounds like a noise reducer that might be affecting your vocal. If you listen to the word "life" at 17 seconds, you'll hear it if you listen through cans. I hear it in a couple other spots, but that's an easy one to find.

    BTW: my gear includes Sony MDR-7506 headphones playing back through a Steinberg UR12. The cans are pretty much industry standards...you'll find them in use in practically any studio worth it's salt. The Steinberg comes highly recommended by Edge's George Whittam. I'd say they're "pro quality". Just thought I'd qualify my critique for you. And I'm only commenting on your audio quality because you asked for such commentary.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi TxTom, Yeah, I am hearing that artifact in a few places on a recording I did earlier today also. I am using a noise reducer so maybe I should just leave it be and see how that flies. I did indeed ask for input on audio quality so thanks. I will definitely send over for "professional" input at some point but figured I would start here and get any possible small kinks out before doing that. Sounds like we're using similar gear as I use Sony MDR-V55s and the Steniberg UR22. Thanks again for your input.

    Peer Feedback:

    The overall performance is good. What made me sound are the phonemes / s / and dull note in general.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a great voice and would be really easy to work with for a client project. There is some sibilance, but a de-esser would take care of that. Dropping the eq at 10 or 12K would take away from the presence in your vocal. The deesser (used conservatively) would clip the harsh "s" without adjusting the entire frequency range. My concern would be more on the plosives that are harder to handle and take more time for me to eliminate.

    With respect to the "artifacts" noise reduction plugins can make that happen, saving to a lower bitrate also, there are many instances that can occur in the process. Having the release set too long on a compressor can make that happen.

    Tom, i'm not going to criticize George too much here. He's done a ton with Dan on his East-West podcasts for the VO enthusiast/hobbiest. But the gear you are calling "pro level" ... well .... just isn't. The Sony headphones you use (the MDR-7506) are swell for enjoying music, especially from iPods and iPads, however they don't have the sound quality of more expensive headphones. Specifically, they do have a moderate midrange peak, but have unusually clean, deep and extended bass response without any booming. I have used them for tracking and that is what they are used for in "any studio worth it's salt!". Not mixing, especially not mastering. Any studio uses high end monitors to mix and master, never headphones. They aren't true reference headphones. Look nup the AKG K712 ( I use on late night sessions at home), or the Senn HD 800's or even 650's.

    The D->A conversion or pres on the Steinberg isn't as clean as say a Neve, API, SSL, Apogee, RME, UAD etc. You can't put that in the "actual" PRO CLASS. Sorry, your claim to that isn't true. $80 headphones and a $100 interface just don't cut it. The sound is good (both yours .. but still a bit too much bass presence) and acooklubo's are fine to work with for post production purposes. Too many ppl get into the weeds about their sound and get lost in the endless GAS (Gear Acquisition Syndrome).

    If your gonna be a VO actor, work on technique and get a nice clean sound. If you want a recommendation for pro gear, buy an RME Babyface (PC or MAC) or Apogee Duet (MAC), or UAD Apollo Twin and go to your local music shop to try different mics. The standards are TLM 103 and the Senn MKH416. Lower end mics would be Rode NT1A or Heil pr30 for VO.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank-you TotalMixandMaster, I researched de-esser and seems like I may need to add that plug-in and spend some time trying to figure out how to work all of that. Are you hearing plosives? I am using a Neumann TLM103 with a pop filter, maybe I'm too close to the mic. I think I may need to spend a bit more time trying to figure out all of the settings I need to be using with my equipment.

    You mentioned people getting in the weeds about their sound and I was kind of wondering the same thing. How much do I REALLY need to manipulate a recording or is what I am doing presently good enough for auditions and such until I learn more. Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you want to send me the raw track w/o processing, I can have a look at it and give you better feedback. I can also post the track to the forum after someone like me gets it and processes it. There were hard "puh" sounds on the words "outperform","pills" and the final Flonase clipped as well. Send the track to danny@totalmixandmaster.com

    Peer Feedback:

    One does not have to spend ridiculous amounts of money to attain professional results. accoklubo (I'm just going to call you "acco" unless you say what your name is), we use the same mic, same pre's (your's has one more input than mine) and similar headphones. Our mics are staples in many studios and the main mics of the edge studio booths. Our preamp circuits are found in the finest Yamaha studio boards. The MDR-7506 are workhorses in most North American studios. AKG's also represent as do Sennheisers. All that being said...and I'm not going to get into a discussion beyond making this afore-made point...I think you might need to address your mic differently.

    I had an AKG-414 XLS mic which I didn't properly audition and bought on reputation. With my reading technique, it was WAY sibilant. I tried different mic positions and solutions to try and make that mic work for me...I loved it for recording my acoustic guitar for example...but it just didn't work for my vocals. I traded it in (losing some money on the trade, but it just wasn't the right mic) on the TLM-103 after trying it out and giving a good bit of time at a local vendor. It's MUCH smoother on the upper frequencies with my reads though...it took some trial and error to find the best position because even though it was less sibilant, *I* presented some problems to the mic with my S sounds and an occasional F sound.

    For ME...your mileage may vary...the best placement is 45º off to the side and about eyebrow level in front of me...so eyebrow high, 45º to the side, aiming downward toward my mouth. For me, that's reduced any sibilance to near elimination.

    Give that a try before selling off your gear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom! (I assume that is your name) I'm Audra. Definitely will try playing around with placement, hopefully that can help clear it up a bit for me as that obviously will be a quicker fix at the moment until I can learn more about editing. Thanks for all of your help, everyone's comments have been helpful in some form or another and I appreciate them all.

    On a side note, do you live in TX? I live in Texas and maybe we are close? Where do you live? If you don't mind me asking.

    Thanks again.
    Audra

    Peer Feedback:

    What? Get out of here! I live in Kingsville. Nice to meet you also. Nice to know there are others around close by! From what I have seen doing searches and things there are not many of us in this area. Would love to connect and share contacts around the area and local info! ayg.cook@gmail.com Cool!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TotalMixandMaster.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4014/script-recording-87777.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    FYI:

    The first recording is the raw sent.
    The second is the treated vocal.
    The third is the treated vocal and music bed

    Peer Feedback:

    TMM -

    a few things:
    -the voice talent has a really nice studio setup. she sent a very clean voice stem. a little sibilant...but that's the for engineer to clean up... :-)
    - I wasn't thrilled with the music bed. it seemed a little too "synth-y". to me, it interfered a little with the VO lines. I'm willing to concede that I haven't kept up with recent Flonase campaigns -- so that might be what they want.

    the voice seemed to be a little under the music, so I assume this is a TV ad.

    is this a real ad that you produced, or a demo?

    regards
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    TotalMixandMaster great, thanks for doing that! I can totally hear the difference now that you used the DeEsser. Sounds so much better. What happened to the text you had up earlier explaining what you did? That was helpful but I didn't get a chance to sit down and really study it. Didn't even notice the hum before you mentioned it, thanks for mentioning that. You were a big help, thanks for showing me what it could sound like when treated properly. Got some work cut out for me trying to learn to do that. Anyone have any input on where I should start to kind of figure that stuff out? Or I could always just hire you lol.

    Hi Dave Saunders, TotalMix took a track that I had posted earlier and cleaned it up for me because I had some sibilance throughout as well as some artifact from noise reduction that I did. He mentioned in a note earlier that he wouldn't normally choose the music he put it to but simply did that so I could hear what it might sound like put to music and because that particular music was free as it didn't really matter because this is simply for practice on my part. Not a real ad or a demo ;-). Thanks a bunch for your comments about the studio set up and what the raw track sounds like. Trying to work on the sibilant issue.

    Peer Feedback:

    ahhh. context. I get it.
    well, the "raw, sent" read sounded really clean.
    The sibilance I hear seems like a natural part of a female read. That said, a de-esser is pretty straight forward for you to use, yeah?

    that said, it was a really nice read.

    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Acooklubo,

    Edge took it down and "reposted" it as a practice recording. I should have done that, because the comments would have been in the script library which I totally agree would clutter it up with nonsense if everyone did that.

    I'd need to bring up the session again to get the settings and I'll send them directly to you Acooklubo since this would be more geared to your setup and noone else commented (besides Dave! HI DAVE! lol).

    I wanted to do this exercise to show ppl on the forum not to worry too much about your sound unless it needs a lot of work. It's the delivery the casting D is after!!! Noone else gives a crap except guys like me who work with good and bad files everyday and that is what we do. We expect talent to be able to deliver a good read so that we can get it together quickly, build a scratch track and send it off to the client for review and feedback.

    As I have stressed, don't worry about being a gear slut unless you want to get into mixing, and if that's the case, you need deeper pockets than just an interface and mic. Focus on the read. Nothing should really be posted here with music and effects. It should be dry reads only - realistically.

    The raw file was cleaned up from breathes and pops, nothing else was done. I then went and added a touch of eq, a deesser, and some more noise removal to tighten up the delivery as you can hear in the 2nd segment.

    As you can hear, Audra provided a great read and believable! Made this exercise easy.

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    Garnier Whole Blends

    Script:

    We love the idea of whipping up a fresh, homemade mask for your hair, but who has time for that? Luckily, GARNIER WHOLE BLENDS has done the work for you with its indulgent blends and rich ingredients. Now with Whole Blends mask, you can relax and pamper yourself in only three minutes, and treat your tresses to indulgent textures and aromas every day.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear noellehensler's recording

    Trying to find scripts for my demo. I was told to try for more beauty scripts.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120906/script-recording-98662.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Noelle - you seemed to be really close to the mic at the beginning, and maybe moved back a bit. Is that so?

    Peer Feedback:

    Watch the lack of emphasis on the BRAND. You did not acknowledge the comma to give a bit of pause before the GARNIER WHOLE BLENDS. My opinion is to deliver this a tiny bit faster perhaps.

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    Geritol

    Script:

    Last night, my wife said to me, “Honey, you are irresistible.” Naturally, I didn’t disagree. We’ve got a lot going for us. Like for one thing -- good health. I mean, we eat right, exercise, and we take Geritol every day. With GERITOL, we’re sure of getting enough iron ... iron that’s basic to good health, and some very important vitamins. My wife and I, we don’t make a lot of money, but we’ve got our health, and when you’ve got your health, you’ve got just about everything.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I don't think they even make this stuff anymore. But I do remember the commercials. I'm afraid I'm dating myself.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-50074.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved the pacing inflection and just about everything on this read James.Your personable delivery made for a very marketable voice. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    I second Arlen's take on this. Nice, natural and warm delivery. A couple of minor things that could have made it even better; if you delivered the line "Naturally I didn't disagree" a little more playfully, and an upward inflection on "everything". Otherwise, spot on. Good job!

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Ya know, Elton, I did a couple of takes with a slight laugh on that line, but I couldn't shake it off fast enough to get this under :30 and get to the seriousness of the next line without it sounding like too abrupt a shift. Just a judgement call. (I also just had a class where the instructor gently admonished someone for laughing on a line, so maybe that seeped into my thought process as well.) I probably could have done some fancy editing, but I'm striving to get these down in one take to eliminate extra work for the engineer. Same goes for the upward inflection on the last line. Did one of those takes too, but the rest of it blew chunks. Thanks.

    And thanks to you too, Arlen.

    Peer Feedback:

    Right there with you on remembering the ads!

    disclaimer: I'm completely new to VO.

    But here goes:
    - loved the recording quality and your warm voice
    - I thought the transition between the phrases "said to me" and "honey, you are irresistible" seemed rushed.
    - I agree to be just a titch more playful on "naturally I didn't disagree"
    - Thought the way you hit "we take Geritol every day" was terrific. Spot on.

    Very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh, yeah...they still make this foul tasting stuff.

    http://www.geritol.com/

    Peer Feedback:

    No James, haven't had the pleasure of meeting you! By the way you haven't commented on any of my posts yet? Are they that awful?!

    Peer Feedback:

    Now, Arlen? Don't put me on the spot. And don't belittle yourself.

    Peer Feedback:

    No pressure James. I get it! Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, this is the first time anyone has questioned me on my background but for whatever it's worth, I was exposed to the English language at an early age and although I now live in Australia, my accent retains a bit of the British influence in the Indian subcontinent of Sri Lanka where I was born. I have dabbled in a bit of musical theatre on the amateur stage with Pirates of Penzance and Oklahoma. My love for singing has also found me in many traditional church choirs and choral groups. I have also worked part-time as a Radio announcer in Sri Lanka and on Radio and TV as a news reader and DJ in the Middle East where I lived for 10 years in the 80's. I have hung my hat on most of this stuff and now do a bit of reading as a lector at Mass in church but mostly concentrate on this business. Hope this gives you an insight into my past. Best.

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    Ginkoba

    Script:

    Imagine a natural supplement that can actually help you think better. Ginkoba is a unique daily supplement that’s clinically shown to offset the momentary forgetfulness, loss of concentration, or mental “fog” we can all experience from time to time. Ginkoba is an easy-to-take, easily digestible supplement that contains no caffeine or sugar. And it’s safe and natural. So remember Ginkoba. The Thinking Person’s Supplement.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear cxanthos's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-125902/script-recording-95634.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi cxantho,

    I like your accent, pleasing to listen to. The obvious glitch of course is the technical quality. Cell -phone recordings sound distorted , so you can't really critique thoroughly. If you are going into voice over work seriously, there will be a sacrifice in spending some money to get quality equipment. Edge Studio classes will direct you the easiest and proficient way to do this.

    Peer Feedback:

    The biggest thing that needs addressing is the room acoustics: they're much too live. I am assuming this is being performed in a small room with bare walls, possibly a closet. I highly recommend lining the walls with sound-resistant materials (even if we're just talking thick blankets) to reduce reverberation, and ensure that the only voice the microphone picks up is the one coming out of your mouth.

    Second, the microphone's pickup is much too hot. This is likely a side effect of the room acoustics, but there is the tell-tale distortion of a microphone picking up sound that is too loud for it to handle properly. If you can, lower the gain on the microphone, so that your strongest voice will not cause the sound to distort like that.

    While it's somewhat difficult to tell through the distortion and room acoustics, I'm inclined to believe that your voice itself has a good strength and good diction; even with the distortions, it is clear what you're saying. It's likely that once the problems have been sorted out, you should be golden.

    Peer Feedback:

    You are going to have to address your sound quality issue.

    This was very difficult to listen to.

    Peer Feedback:

    THERE'S A NICE VOICE IN THERE. I HEARD IT...SOMEWHERE...UNDER THE RAINBOW. KEEP IT UP :-)

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    Haircut - Happy Looks Good On You

    Script:

    Haircut - Happy Looks Good On You
    Director Notes:

    Male or Female

    Please read the appropriate gender script noting the descriptions on the script and taking note
    of the timing. No need to read the announcer VO at the end, just the Guy/Girl lines.

    RADIO
    MIRROR (MALE) :20
    Guy: (Talking quietly, sounds very genuine, but as the spot progresses, his voice gets more upbeat and giddy)

    Hey...you look...you look good. Really good! I mean, I'm always impressed when I see you so I shouldn't be so surprised, but l just can't believe how good you look!
    But I have to admit, it all makes perfect sense. After all, l did just go to First Choice Haircutters.
    And you know what? Happy looks good on me.

    VO: Find a First Choice Haircutters salon today at FirstChoice.com.

    MIRROR (FEMALE) :20
    Girl: (Starts off with a woman talking softly to herself, but as the spot progresses, her voice gets more upbeat and giddy)
    Hey, it's cool, you can check it out. lt's okay to take a look. And don't worry about staring, I totally get it. How could anybdy be expected not to? lt looks great. But I shouldn't be so surprised.
    After all, l did just visit First Choice Haircutters, and you know what? Happy does look good on me.

    VO: Find a First Choice Haircutters salon today at FirstChoice.com.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jkkuehne's recording

    First run with a new Sennheiser MKH416 mic. The spot is a little quirky for my taste but tried to add a little personality. Any and all feedback appreciated. thanks John

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-103107/script-recording-82325.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good work JKK! Your voice sounds smooth while your character comes across as real and approachable. Very nicely done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Way too many mouth sounds. Clickity click. The shotgun mic will best be used by taking advantage of the proximity effect, but the downside of said advantage is that every mouth sound will be accentuated. Technique has to be far better than a condenser at 6-8 from your mouth. The Sennheiser has a distinct sound that's far more favored in the promo genre and is too exposing and forward for most others.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jkkuehne,
    I would say you executed this read precisely as you envisioned it. I would say you did that well. The problem is that you did not read it the way the directives advised you to read it. What should have been evident in your voice was honest surprise at what you were seeing in the mirror, then progress to the feeling of pleasant elation at the transformation.

    Guy: (Talking quietly, sounds very genuine, but as the spot progresses, his voice gets more upbeat and giddy)

    I'm not being harsh here. You just have to listen to the recording to know that you didn't pay any attention to the directive. As for the mouth clicks yes they are there and you'll need to be conscious of that going forward.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the helpful comments. I was already warned about mic technique regarding shotguns. I also noticed the mouth clicks and did a little cleanup but obviously not enough. Looks like coffee and yogurt are out for me in the mornings if I plan to do any recordings.

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    Invisalign

    Script:

    Your smile says you’re happy, confident. But, if you’re uncomfortable with your teeth, your smile could be saying just the opposite. Fortunately, there’s Invisalign. The clear alternative to braces that’s comfortable and removable for eating and brushing. Straighten your teeth little by little until a new smile emerges. Join the millions at Invisalign.com and arrange a free, no obligation consultation with an experienced Invisalign provider and let the world see the real you. Invisalign. Learn how to smile again.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear nuvobreeze's recording

    What do you think? Looking forward to any feedback to help me improve. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like it. Recording sounds good. There were some words that felt like they needed a little spacing. Specifically in "alternative to braces that's comfortable and removable..." and "...no obligation consultation with an experienced invisalign provider..."

    I'm not sure if it was edited to remove a breath or if you're just reading fast, but it felt like it needed a little more spacing between words there. If you are deleting breaths, I wouldn't move the clips closer together. Leave the space. It will sound a little unnatural otherwise.

    Overall, really good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your voice fits this commercial perfectly! Great choice! I like the pacing and enunciation of your words, however it sounds like you're struggling with your breathing a bit. Either you edited out too many breaths, making it sound less natural, or you're not speaking from the diaphragm. It sounds like the air is getting a little caught in your throat. Otherwise great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You are both right! I edited quite a bit in an attempt to get to 30 seconds which resulted in the rushed, unnatural sound you called out. I wasn't sure if this should be 30 seconds but I thought I would take a stab at it.

    It would have been better to keep the pacing, spaces and breaths (some) and then perhaps speed up a bit to still make 30. Or maybe it wasn't meant to be 30 at all?

    In either event, there is a good lesson to take away here. Thanks so much for your feedback!

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    Laser Treatment

    Script:

    Lately, it seems that every time you walk into a dermatologist’s office, the doctor wants to whip out his latest toy--the laser. Broken blood vessels? No problem at all. let’s laser them. Scars? One single zap and they’re gone. Ditto for moles, wrinkles, excess hair, tattoos, stretch marks--you name it. But according to Dr. Roy Geronemus, director of the Laser and Skin Surgery Center of New York, “There’s a huge list of things that can be done with lasers, but they’re also being overused and abused, and some salons and even doctors are making claims that can’t be backed up yet.” In this video, we tell you the hype-free truth about the various top laser treatments--including when you might be better off with a low-tech alternative.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MusicJunkieK1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-131/script-recording-57985.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording quality is clear, if a little bright and reverby. I'm guessing a little more sound absorbtion is necessary.

    Performance was good. Very natural, I thought. But I did notice a bit of a regional dialect coming through, and the use of "'em" instead of "them" and "we teach you" instead of "we tell you." I can definitely hear your voice selling something, but maybe something more casual than a laser treatment video.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the performance was good on this. Good inflections used. It does sound as some of the endings, or consonants on some words are lost though. Maybe a focus on clarity for each word would be worth looking into.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your voice. It's very resonant and smooth. I also heard the regional dialect, though, and I heard a slight lisp on many of your S sounds. The recording had a bit of an echo in it but no other problems that I could hear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bright "up" tone. Good for the material. There is a regionalism present along with the lispy "s" sounds. You'll need to determine if that's a speech pattern or something introduced by something like a de-ess filter. It can actually cause a lispy sound with some mics and delivery.

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    Milk

    Script:

    Serious about healthy weight loss? Recent studies suggest that including low-fat, or fat-free milk as part of a reduced calorie diet, is a healthy, effective way to loose weight. And hey…you’ve already got it your fridge. 24 ounces in 24 hours…milk your diet…lose weight.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lwilko's recording

    What I did: -Added bottom layer of foam to box and made it so I now stand to talk into mic. -Same script as before, recorded in current room I have always used. -Removed noise from sound recording. -Moved box to another room -Same script, recorded, removed noise. -Added both files together and uploaded for comparison - which do you like best?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100838/script-recording-78830.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the first one best, barring the "And, hey...fridge" on the second take, which felt very personal and natural.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comment. So can you or anyone else hear the difference in the actual recording quality though? I need to know if the first or second is better as I think there's a drastic difference. Tom or James, you both seem to have excellent equipment - can you hear the difference?

    Peer Feedback:

    without headphones I couldn't but with , yeah, the second one. Clearly.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for that, im glad you said it :)

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    Milk

    Script:

    Serious about healthy weight loss? Recent studies suggest that including low-fat, or fat-free milk as part of a reduced calorie diet, is a healthy, effective way to loose weight. And hey…you’ve already got it your fridge. 24 ounces in 24 hours…milk your diet…lose weight.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lwilko's recording

    Short and sweet. Want to check accent, and also the recording quality which I believe is much better this time. I have made a big padded box with acoustic foam, which I placed the microphone inside of to help eliminate echo. Changed gain to make microphone more sensitive so that my voice was recorded louder this time, so I did not use normalize. I always have background hum, so I have again used Noise Removal afterwards, but that's all.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100838/script-recording-78813.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality on this one is much improved than the last post. However, it still has a "talking into a mailing tube" quality to it. That may be the effect of enclosing the mic in the box. Did you use treatment above and below as well as from side to side and the back? How thick is the foam? If you go this route, you might consider making the box with something other than 90 degree angles and corners.

    The hum, which doesn't seem present here, is probably an electronic issue. It may be due to the proximity of the mic to another electronic source or florescent lighting or a bad cable. Could also be the mic itself.

    IMHO, your Neutral American accent is pretty dead on, not a problem there.

    The whole thing might be a little more upbeat. This is one of those "one-sided conversation" types of copy. Can you imagine the other person's half of the dialog?

    Right from the top, really ask the question.

    YOU: "(Are you) Serious about healthy weight loss?"
    FRIEND: "Yeah, I am."
    YOU: "(Well, let me tell you,) Recent studies suggest that including low-fat, or fat-free milk as part of a reduced calorie diet, is a healthy, effective way to loose weight."
    FRIEND: "Wow, I didn't know that."
    YOU: "And hey…you’ve already got it your fridge." (point to it)
    FRIEND: "Well, lookie there. So I do."
    etc.

    I would also suggest treating "reduced calorie diet" as a single entity rather than the first two words simply being modifiers of the third. Same thing with the types of milk ("low-fat, or fat-free milk"), which you pretty much did.

    The last line, "24 ounces in 24 hours…milk your diet…lose weight." is basically a double tag (possibly the slogan, "24 in 24") with a play on words. "Milking" something (in comedy, anyway) means to stretch it out as long as you can (as in "milking the laugh" or "milking the applause"). So, you might give the line a "knowing wink" and a smile.

    Peer Feedback:

    Basically I stuck 2 inch pyramid acoustic foam on the inside of a box. Only 4 sides though, top, back & sides. The bottom isn't covered (no cardboard so the mic sits on a glass table) and of course where my head sits is not covered so I can talk into the microphone.

    I'm glad you could not hear any humming or artefacts. Now I'll just focus on this mailtube sound - I guess im trying to make the sound more dead, right? I could try putting some foam on the bottom to cover the glass table - see how that sounds? Thanks for the accent check and script comments.

    Peer Feedback:

    The glass table is acting like a drum head, it is a huge sound reflector and also adds its own harmonic frequencies. Get the mic off the table! Or, at the very least, put some sound absorbing padding in between the table and the mic.

    The other thing that I might infer, is that you are sitting down when you read the copy. To be more expressive, and to have that expressiveness translate into your reads, you record while standing.

    Peer Feedback:

    As James mentions, it's better to read standing...or at the very least, sitting on a stool to allow yourself the chance to use your body effectively to affect your vocals. It makes a difference.

    I don't know if I'm hearing your tabletop or just some ambient noise that a "padded box" can't really solve because ambient sounds will still come to the mic. That padded box will help some with reflections from the sides and behind the mic, but anything that you can hear in front of the box...that mic will most definitely pick up too. But there is some present low level noise that should be addressed IMO. I can't describe the sound, but it's present after the first sentence on.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom, that's my project for today then. I'll be re-creating my little recording box and making it high enough for me to stand from now on and talk into instead of sitting. This will get the mic off the glass table and also i'll put another layer of padding on the bottom of the box to add some extra padding. I may change the box from a square to a triangle as well.

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    Nu-Vile

    Script:

    We all worry. Funny how the more secure we get, the more we seem to have at stake. Getting older used to be about getting closer. Closer to freedom. Closer to goals. Closer to life. Now … it's different. Now, we want it back. That's where Nu-vile comes in. Nu-vile provides tailor-made transfusions of rich, rejuvenating blood, drawn from only the healthiest babies on the market. Nu-Vile. Get closer to life again.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Waltonia's recording

    The original, intended delivery. I was trying for an intimate, slightly vulnerable, mature voice.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I wanna give this one a go.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Maybe a little more low key...? Did it work? Thanks - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-28674.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Really liked the sound of the spot. Much nicer than the "run of the mill" 30 second spot. Very believable!

    Keep up the good work!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim,

    I agree with Scott, the way you read this is very believable. Also, I liked the pauses you used at the beginning of the script and you just let it flow naturally and gave the right emotion.

    Well done!

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim,

    Yeah, it worked! At first I thought the pauses were too much, but after listening again they really give the script a chance to sink in and take hold. Music was good choice too - right volume and feel.

    Nice work!

    - John

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent! You are a gifted storyteller. And can someone tell me why my listens are not being counted? I'm using an android phone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Javier, it's because Androids don't listen - they record. You are not human 7 of 9.

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    Rerecording of Always Multipax

    Script:

    Always
    Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jillian Gee's recording

    Hey everyone, thanks for the feedback on the previous version of the Always Multipax recording. I took your advice and did it again, let me know what you think!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129914/script-recording-97120.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear BobPond's recording

    Script is from you October 19, 2012 weekly contest

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8750/script-recording-49377.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    What's missing is a sympathetic sound. Given the subject, the first two sentences should reach out the the patient and the rest should give assurance. This is rather unattached to the script...not committed to the emotive delivery called for.

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    Script submitted by diamondr67

    Script:

    Any feedback on performance or quality of recording is welcome! Thanks so much.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear diamondr67's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3374/script-recording-24543.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi diamondr,

    You have a friendly pleasing voice and this suits the audience for this read.

    Couple of areas need attention in my view to improve the read.

    1. The word proceeding the ? mark that I put in parenthesis in the ensuing extract is not clear, "..ran out of my band roll on. They had shower(?) aerosol.."

    2. 'Band roll on' should be emphasized in, "...Band roll on. If you are using any other leading spray..." because Band roll on is the product this read aims to sell.

    3. I hear a background hum when I listen to it in my system. Don't know whether it is something to do with my system.

    4. It would have been nice if you had posted the script as well. It helps while listening.

    All the best.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear PaqVoice1's recording

    Well thought I'd send this recording out for a critique, let me know what you think, thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/film.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    very nicely done. the recording quality sounded a bit low on my end. you pronounced all the words in the text really well! good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    thank you! It was the first read, just messing around late at nite in the studio. It probably was low, I was just lucky the squeeky dryer in the background decided to take a break while I recorded it, lol, thanks for the fun! Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good reading- could use more energy.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ramjamz's recording

    ramjamz: I Recut this spot and added some effect and tried to slow it down some, and thank's as always. ramjamz

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-41184/script-recording-55696.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ramjamz,

    Overall, the spot sounds great. Your voice has a beautiful, convincing tone for this commercial. I have 2 thoughts for you: the beginning sounds a bit contrived & loud. Maybe try this part again & be aware of the levels for your overall spot. Also, I heard you say, "In A recent study . . . " Perhaps you might reconsider saying, "in ah recent study . . . " to allow for a more natural sound.

    Keep on rockin' on!
    ~Rose

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    Sucrets

    Script:

    When you’ve got a real cough. Get real relief. Anywhere. Anytime. Introducing the strongest, most effective 8-hour cough medicine you can buy. Sucrets. Made stronger to last longer…guaranteed.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear soniameneses's recording

    My first time uploading a practice script. I don't have a good recording space set up yet so there may be some issues with the sound.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-115199/script-recording-96177.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice: good timbre, very clear pronunciations, no sounds stick out (which is good)

    However, your delivery is stiff. It sounds like you are just reading from the copy and not actually talking to someone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Barring the poor sound quality, I missed the contraction on "you've". Easy to speed through.

    The whole thing is rather choppy - more like you're concentrating on every individual word than clumps of thought. Which makes it sound like you are reading rather than connecting to message.

    Use less voice. Make it a little more intimate and personal. Imagine that you are standing in the drugstore isle with a friend who asks you, "Why did you choose that one?" Then they cough and you break open the bag and hand them one.

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    Acqua Di Parma

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    The classic and natural Italian fragrance that combines verbena, lavender and sparkling citrus…

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    Adidas Anti-perspirant

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    Total Control. Total Performance. Introducing Adidas Antiperspirant and Deodorants. Adidas...When life is rough.

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    I hear background humming that probably should be removed. Maybe more excitement about the product. The spaces between the words in the phrase 'Adidas Antiperspirant and Deodorants' should be shortened. These are my humble opinions and not to be construed as something to live or die by.

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    "Total performance" sounds like a question in your read, and I agree with 19nnow60 -- you should sound excited to tell me about this new product.

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    Thanks 19nnow60 and CWarner. I really appreciate your honest critiques. Back to the lab and work on getting this right! Thanks again!

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    Adidas Anti-perspirant

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    Total control. Total performance. Introducing Adidas Anti-Perspirants and Deodorants. Adidas…when life is rough.

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    ADVAIR

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    ADVAIR
    Advair is clinically proven to help significantly improve lung function. Unlike most COPD medications, Advair contains both an anti-inflammatory and a long acting bronchodilator working together to help improve lung function all day. 
Advair won’t replace fast acting inhalers for sudden symptoms and should not be used more than twice a day.
People with COPD taking Advair may have a higher chance of pneumonia. Advair may increase your risk of osteoporosis and some eye problems. Tell your doctor if you have a heart condition or high blood pressure before taking Advair.
Get your first full prescription free and save on refills at Advaircopd.com.

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    Advil

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    Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL -- Advanced medicine for pain.

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    Advil 2

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    Arthritis pain? It’s a part of my life. So I keep Advil close by. Just ONE works as well as TWO regular Tylenol. Advil works at the site of minor arthritis pain -- stopping it where it starts. Nothing’s proven to work better or last longer than Advil. And now introducing new ADVIL GEL CAPLETS. One more advance for Advil. Advanced medicine for pain.

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    Advil 3

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    For fast, effective relief, Advil goes to work right at the site of minor arthritis pain. It keeps pain away hour after hour. And it’s gentler on your stomach than aspirin. In fact, nothing is proven more effective or longer-lasting than Advil. Advil. Advanced medicine for pain.

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    Advil 4

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    As a nursing home aid from 9 to 5, I’ve made a lot of close friends. But the one I rely one the most is Advil. Advil works at the site of minor arthritis pain – stopping it where it starts. And now introducing new ADVIL GEL CAPLETS.

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    Advil—Children’s

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    She has a high fever. You know what it’s like to wait it out. When time counts, Children’s Advil relieves her fever fast. Faster than Children’s Tylenol, and lasts up to eight hours. Children’s Advil Fights Fevers Faster.

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    Age Management Medical System - Cenegenics

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    Aging is inevitable, but how you age is not. You have the power to take control and actually manage your aging process. A unique Cenegenics protocol is your gateway to next generation medical science . . . a comprehensive, evidence-based approach to age management that takes you well beyond the conventional approach of quick, routine exams and generalized guesstimates, based on body type, gender and age. In-depth diagnostics reveal your big picture, uncovering your strengths and weakest health links. With that medical data in hand, Cenegenics Affiliate NYC partners with you to create a personalized, multi-faceted program, which meets your health goals and successfully manages your aging process.
    Think of it as "squaring the curve," staying healthy and staving off decline, typically associated with getting older. The result? Youthful aging with a more vigorous, healthier lifestyle. Take charge & revitalize your aging process today ...

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    Air Optix Contact Lenses

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    What you wear to bed is your business.
    So if you're sleeping in your contact lenses, ask your eye doctor about Air Optix Night & Day Aqua contact lenses. They're FDA approved for up to 30 days and nights of continuous wear and are the most breathable soft contact lenses available. Because bedtime is your time.
    Air Optix Night & Day Aqua contact lenses.
    Visit airoptix.com for a 1-month free trial.

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    Airwick Airwaves

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    This is Nick. This is Nora. This is Nick’s nose. This is Nora’s nose. Nick’s nose likes a little air freshener. Nora’s nose likes a lot. Their noses didn’t know what to do. Until their nosy neighbor Ned told them about new improved Airwick Airwaves. Airwaves have a low setting for Nick’s nose and a refreshing, room filling scent for Nora’s Nose. Now Nick and Nora’s noses can live in harmony.

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    Allegra 2

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    Seasonal allergies can make you feel miserable. Only once-daily Allegra has fexofenadene, for long lasting non-drowsy allergy relief. So you can feel more like yourself again. For people 12 and older. Side effects include headache, upper respiratory tract infection and back pain. Call you doctor now for more information about Allegra, and enjoy your world.

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    Allegra-D

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    Unbearable commute, or unbearable congestion? The stuffy nose and sneezing from seasonal allergies can make any drive hard to take. Only Allegra–D has fexofenadine plus pseudo-ephedrine. So it provides real relief from allergies and congestion, without the drowsiness that can be caused by many other antihistamines. Talk to your doctor about Allegra–D, and get on the road to relief today.

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    Allure

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    What is that intangible quality that turns heads and touches hearts, catches your eye, and holds you with its power? Every woman has her own special allure. It can be found in a glance, a voice, a face across a crowded room. ALLURE is unmistakable and irresistible. And, like a perfect memory ... it lasts forever.

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    Allure For Men

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    Real men. Real allure. A little mystery adds to the attraction. Allure Homme. The new men’s fragrance from CHANEL. At Macy’s and Bloomingdale’s.

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    Almay Bright Eyes

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    New Almay Bright Eyes. Open wide. Take your eyes from tired to tremendous with the Almay Bright Eyes Collection. Color cream shadows, dual-ended eyeliners and lash-lifting mascara designed to give you wider, brighter, beautiful eyes.

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    Always

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    Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

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    Always Overnight

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    No matter how much you move around at night, there's a pad that can give you great protection. Introducing a new Always Overnight without wings. It's longer and wider to absorb what regular pads don't. Always Overnight now with or without wings.

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    Ambien

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    There is a rhythm to life. We sleep at night - and wake in the morning. It's the sleep cycle that helps keep us in a healthy balance. But, for millions of Americans, sleep doesn't always come easily. For them, there's AMBIEN.

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    Ambusol

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    Here you are at the playoffs, with your best buddy. Seats right on the floor, hot dogs, peanuts, an ice cold drink, and you get a toothache. You need maximum strength Ambusol to relieve pain on contact. No leading toothache product you can buy is more effective at relieving pain. Maximum Strength Ambusol. Put it on, the pain is gone. Good thing you’re back in the game. That was your team. For temporary relief of open cavity pain. Use only as directed.

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    American Laser Centers

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    Why do more people trust American Laser Centers for smoother, more beautiful skin than anyone else in the country? It's our state-of-the-art laser hair removal system that's both safe and effective. Call today for a free, no-obligation, private consultation. Looking gorgeous is easy when you choose with confidence.

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    Arden Courts

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    Arden Courts specializes in caring for people in the early to middle stages of Alzheimer’s. Every detail is designed to make life simpler and more fulfilling for residents -- from the secure layout, to the meaningful activities, to the staff trained in the latest caregiving techniques. Arden Courts is part of ManorCare Health Services, the company that pioneered Alzheimer’s care, with a 35-year reputation of helping seniors and their families. We have the expertise and experience to simplify and enhance your loved one’s life. And to help you find the peace of mind you deserve.

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    Aussie 3 Minute Miracle

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    What this country needs is a miracle. Aussie's 3 Minute Miracle Deep Conditioning Treatment promises to deliver healthier, more beautiful hair. Enriched with Australian balm mint, sunflower seed oil and aloe, our unique formula reconstructs damaged hair inside and out. While penetrating deeply, it repairs split ends and smoothes rough cuticles, so every head of hair in America will now be in perfect condition in just 3 minutes. And that's nothing less than a miracle.

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    Aussie Sun-Touched Shine

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    You’re definitely not one to be outshined. Aussie’s Sun-Touched Shine collection hydrates lackluster hair for dazzling radiance. So its always your day to shine. Aussie – Add some Roo to Your Do.

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    Aveda 2

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    Now at Aveda, the present is the future. This holiday season; embrace the millennium with optimism and hope. With special gift ideas for hair, skin, body and lifestyle. Expressing wishes and affirmations for the people you love, through the experience of pure flowers and plants. Awake. Aware. Aveda.

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    Aveeno

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    Now blemish free skin doesn't have to be dry skin. Introducing a breakthrough new cleanser for adults that lets you prevent blemishes without drying out your skin. New Aveeno Clear Complexion Foaming Cleanser. It's the only cleanser with a blemish-fighter recommended by dermatologists plus moisture-rich soy to even out skin tone. Clear, smooth, blemish-free skin. It's a beautiful thing. Aveeno - Discover nature's secret for clearly beautiful skin.

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    Baby Magic Baby Bath

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    Bath time, It's the feel of the water. The sound of a splash. The smell of a clean baby. It's only a moment. And it's pure magic. Make the most of it with Baby Magic Baby Bath

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    Bali Bra

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    When I wear Bali, I feel beautiful, and when I feel beautiful, I am. Experience the new Bali “Passion-For-Comfort” bra, with it’s silky-smooth lining and simple elegance. You’ll find beauty in everyday comfort. Live beautifully, in Bali bras and panties.

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    Band-aid Liquid Bandage

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    Discover the revolutionary Liquid Bandage from Band-Aid Brand. It's an invisible waterproof seal that stays on better and longer than conventional bandages, even on hard-to-cover places like finger cracks. For more information go to www.bandaid.com

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    Barely There

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    A sensual revolution. A bra that’s there, but barely. Smooth, soft, unencumbered comfort. Discover it. Nothing feels better. Barely there.

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    Bausch & Lomb Zyoptix System

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    My wife's glasses drove her crazy. She was ready for laser surgery but she didn't know who she could trust. Introducing the Bausch & Lomb Zyoptix System. Because no two eyes are alike, it maps and analyzes thousands of individual data points for excellent results. As with any surgery there are risks. Go to Bausch.com to find the Zyoptix certified surgeon near you. She's thrilled. Zyoptix from Bausch and Lomb. Perfecting Vision. Enhancing Life.

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    Bausch and Lomb

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    If you’re facing age related vision loss for the first time ever, there’s hope. New Bausch and Lomb Ocuvite PreserVision. The only eye vitamin proven effective by the National Eye Institute. Bausch and Lomb, see the wonder.

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    Bayer

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    Try to explain to your best buddy that he can’t come inside because you can’t seem to get rid of his fleas. Well? Bayer’s Advantage flea treatment is one of the most effective ways to control fleas ever developed. Both of you will feel better. Bayer’s Advantage flea treatment. Available at most pet stores.

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    Bayer 1

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    You know how it goes ... the phones that don’t stop ringing. The project that was due yesterday. The irate client. When this is how it’s going, you know it’s time for Bayer. Bayer Aspirin’s strong formula brings quick relief to your headache and relaxes those tense muscles, so you can concentrate on the bigger things. And, with its new micro coating, Bayer is easy on your stomach. So reach for BAYER ... when you know how it’s going.

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    Bayer Aspirin 2

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    Bayer is the only leading pain reliever that can help save your life. Studies have proven aspirin can reduce the risk of another heart attack by up to 50%, when taken regularly under a doctor’s care and accompanied by a proper diet and exercise. So why choose anything but Bayer? It’s more than a pain reliever. It’s a wonder drug.

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    Beauti-mist Steam Inhaler

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    Whether it’s allergies or dry indoor air, your nose, throat, and sinuses can become red, irritated, and painful. Doctors have long recommended gentle steam therapy for relief of congestion. Home or away, Beauti-Mist is an indispensable companion that produces a gentle steam that unclogs blocked sinuses and soothes painful tissue. To order call 800-666-6432.

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    Benadryl 2

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    Better allergy relief is right under your nose. Clinical studies proved what allergy sufferers have known all along. Benadryl is 54% more effective than the leading allergy prescription. More effective at relieving even you’re worst allergy symptoms like runny noses. If you’re looking for better allergy relief, it's as easy as a walk in the park. Benadryl. The Histamine Blocker. Learn more at www.benadrylusa.com

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    Bengay S-p-a

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    Every day you push yourself to new levels. You stretch, you bend, you move, and then sometimes, you hurt. Now for every new muscle you discover, there’s new Bengay S-P-A. Introducing S-P-A with Site Penetrating Action. S-P-A contains a powerful pain reliever that works on contact, penetrating right at the site of your muscle aches and pains, for soothing relief. S-P-A. Pain relief for your active life--with a surprisingly light scent. From Bengay.

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    Biolage

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    Hydrate your hair, the salon way. The salon way to hydrate and revive normal to dry hair with a healthy dose of moisture. An innovative botanical complex helps instantly condition and nourish hair while leaving it shiny and silky smooth. Rejuvenates body and bounce, hair is softer, healthier and more manageable. Inspired by nature. Intensified by Biolage. Hydrating Shampoo and Conditioning Balm. Only in salons.

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    Body & Earth Collection

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    Revitalize. Refresh. Rejuvenate. Introducing the Body & Earth Collection. Bath and skin care products created to help you look and feel your best. Holiday gift sets now available.

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    Bragado 5-Ply

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    There's a treasure that lies between these cheeks. And there's only one roll of paper that can take care of it. Bragado Five-ply. We make our pulp exclusively from old-growth redwood. No recycling for us. That's because once you've dropped a first-rate payload, you need a wipe that's redwood-tough. Bragado five-ply. This ain't no "kitten soft."

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    Brighton Gardens Assisted Living

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    At Marriott we know how to take good care of people, and at the new Brighton Gardens of West Orange, it shows in every detail--from the nutritious restaurant-style meals and enriching social and cultural activities, to the regular wellness checkups. Brighton Gardens offers levels of care, so residents can get just the amount of assistance they need--from medical administration to assistance with dressing and bathing. There’s even a separate Alzheimer’s Center on site for those with memory disorders. Brighton Gardens of West Orange is more than a lovely place to live, it’s a warm, caring, vibrant community. Brighton Gardens by Marriott. Your life, just a little easier.

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    Brilliant Brunette

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    Reveal yourself. Your rich, sultry, gorgeous brunette self. Introducing Brilliant Brunette. The first shampoo, conditioner, and styling line just for brunettes.

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    Calming Essence Cream

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    When you feel unsettled or the need for a rescue, Calming Essence® can help your body initiate the restorative process. The traditional blend of Rock Rose, Impatiens, Clematis, Cherry Plum, and Star of Bethlehem combine to form an amazing flower remedy that can help you get back on the road to inner-peace and emotional balance. Calming Essence Cream from ELLON BOTANICALS. To order: 1-800-4BE-CALM or visit www.ellonbotanicals.com

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    Caress Soap

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    Seduce your senses and soften your skin with Caress Berry Indulgence Moisturizing Bar. Enjoy the alluring scent of fresh berries and the unique blend of moisturizers with vitamin E. Caress. Feel the difference.

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    Chapstick

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    Glide on chap stick overnight lip treatment specially formulated lip care with 8 moisturizers like aloe and vitamin E that replenish, smooth, and soften. It works for hours as you sleep. So you wake up to lips that truly look smoother and softer. Chap stick overnight lip treatment for smoother, softer lips overnight.

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    ProRadiance

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    Do you have a dark spot on your face? Freckles on your shoulders? If you want to fade dark spots on your face, hands, neck, or anywhere else - call us right now. Because we're letting the next 500 callers try ProRadiance - FREE - for a full 30 days. ProRadiance is a revolutionary system that combines an illuminating skin cream with a formula proven to lighten dark spots. And for a limited time, you can try ProRadiance FREE for a full 30 days if you'€™re one of the first 500 callers. Again, if your skin has unwanted dark spots, sun spots, liver spots, freckles or discolorations, we want you to try ProRadiance FREE. But this free giveaway is only available to the next 500 callers . . . so don't wait.

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    This is an actual audition I just did and these are the actual notes from the voice seeker. Please evaluate everything. I have been doing auditions steady for about a month. I took a master class last year at Voices for All, Albany, NY and am hoping to get some work very soon: Apologies for the fast turnaround needed on this one. We need a talent to read just the "woman" part . . in a very clear, well-paced and conservative matter. While the read leans more on the serious side, the talent should still hit the best selling points hard so as not to sound monotone. Good luck!

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    Hi,

    Thank you for your work. Your read is very clear and well paced and has a good sense of smile. I don't feel it is conservative though. It feels a bit announcer like. I believe the voice seeker proabably wanted you to personalize the high energy SALES copy and make it current and conversational. I would try the read again and decrease the pitch range a bit...use as much smile but less music. A large dynamic range will make you seem enthusiastic but if it is not supported by a very active imaginary life it can sound fake or like you are trying too hard. The overall tone should be beauty meets science. You are talking to a close friend about a new science supported product that actually works. You love her so much you want her to share your excitement. Think about it being an exciting secret that you are allowed to tell only to her and this character( narrator-you!) is very smart as well as beautiful. You have the solution to your friends problem and you understand her.You have walked in her shoes. Try to use an image of a good friend who would appreciate this product as you talk. Perhaps do a paraphase exercise...put the sales copy into words that you would actually say to a friend if you were really talking to her instead of reading. Record yourself and playback. How do the vocal rhythms and the way you hit the important words sound different than when you are reading? In addition, you can record yourself just talking to a friend...a live human being in the room with you. Talk long enough that you forget you are recording. Get familiar with your natural conversational sound. Then re-record this audition. I would love to hear it again. If you have not done the Technique 101 class at EDGE. That is a great low cost way to review your basics...tone volume ptich and tempo , your list work and how to hit words with pitch lift. You might also look for a good voice acting class. I sometimes teach The Acting of Voice Acting at EDGE.

    Thanks so much. I hope those exercises help and that I will hear you again soon on your first gig!

    All the best,
    Danielle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach June 23, 2011 at 12:52PM

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice for the script. The delivery was certainly within the range they were looking for. You had a few plosives going on that mic technique would remedy. I'd pull you in for a second audition. Good job.

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    Children's Advil

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    She has a high fever. You know what it's like to wait it out. When time counts, Children's Advil relieves her fever fast. Faster than Children's Tylenol. And lasts up to 8 hours. Children's Advil, fights fevers faster.

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    Cigna 1

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    Four years of dancing lessons. Nine years of piano. It all adds up. Today, it costs over $200,000 to raise your child to college age. And that’s assuming she’s going to like her nose. At CIGNA HealthCare, our plans are designed with this in mind. We include well-child exams and immunizations as part of our coverage. So you can worry about bigger problems. Like whose turn it is to change the diaper. CIGNA HEALTHCARE…A business of caring.

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    Cigna 2

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    Lullabies at 7. Diaper changes on the hour. 2 a.m. feedings. You put in a full day’s work before you put in a full day’s work. How can you find time to take of yourself ? At CIGNA HealthCare, we’ve created programs just for a woman’s special needs. Because wouldn’t it be nice to have someone take care of you for a change? CIGNA HealthCare…a business of caring.

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    Cigna Mobile Wellness Clinic

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    Hmmmm, very, very, very, interesting. I see from this completely fake chart that many of you haven't been for your annual check up yet. There's good news! You can start your check-up by learning your key health numbers. Just go to the Cigna Mobile Wellness Clinic for a free biometric screening. Hey, TV Doctors' orders. So go, know, and take control of your health.

    Cigna, together all the way.

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    Clairol Herbal Essences

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    Work yourself into a lather. Feel what it does for your hair. Ohhh, the organic herbs. Ahhh, the all-natural botanicals drenched in pure mountain water. Ummm, the way it leaves every strand of your hair feeling revitalized. Clairol’s Herbal Essences shampoos and conditioners. Oooh, you’ll love it. Herbal Essences…a totally organic experience.

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    Clairol – Condition 2

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    Illuminate! Shine! Glow! With new Condition finishing shine. Special lightweight ingredients give your hair so much luster, but never leave it looking greasy. Advanced dual protectants leave your hair looking better than ever. There’s never been a better way to shine. New CONDITION BY CLAIROL ... because you’re worth it.

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    Clarinex 3

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    Bothered by allergies? Sure, I was. But Clarinex keeps my allergy symptoms from becoming a big deal. That's because Clarinex is the only nondrowsy prescription antihistamine that provides relief from pets, pollen, mold, and dust. All day. Every day.

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    Claritin

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    It’s another beautiful day, don’t lose it to seasonal allergies Take control! Talk to your doctor about Claritin Just one Claritin tablet daily brings you 24 hours of non-drowsy relief from seasonal allergy symptoms Claritin has a low occurrence of side effects such as headache, drowsiness, fatigue and dry mouth, similar to sugar pills Take clear control, take Claritin.

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    ClearBlue Easy

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    Only one mechanism on Earth is more complex than the female body ... the female mind. And when it thinks the body might be pregnant, the clever mind chooses Clear Blue Easy. It was the first one-step stick test ... and no one’s ever made a test that’s easier, or more accurate. Blue, the body is pregnant. Clear, the body is not. In minutes, the mind is no longer in doubt ... the body rests assured. And both move on to simpler things. CLEAR, BLUE, EASY. What you need. To know.

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    Clinique

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    Circles under the eyes? It can be fatigue, stress, age. And now, Clinique Even Better Eyes. A proven dark circle corrector. This is what a 30% improvement looks like. It’s clinically proven. Visibly lightens dark circles on all skin tones. Even Better Eyes from Clinique. Available at Macy’s, your skin care destination.

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    Clinique

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    Mark your calendar. It’s Clinique’s year-of-great-looks workshop. Twelve months’ worth of looks-to-love, happening all this week, at the Clinique counter at Lord & Taylor. Go one-on-one with an expert for the latest makeup news. Views. How-to’s. Learn tips, tools and techniques. For the looks you want now, come to CLINIQUE’S year-of-great-looks workshop. Happening all this week. At Lord & Taylor.

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    Clinique 3

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    As always, allergy tested, 100% fragrance free. Why not wake up in great skin? Clinique's custom 3-step skin care.

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    Clinique Happy

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    Make it a happy holiday. A hint of citrus, a wealth of flowers, a mix of emotions. Clinique Happy—a very personal gift.

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    Coastline Fragrance For Men

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    A windswept coastline. Waves crashing against the shore. The endless sweep of horizon. Introducing Coastline our newest fragrance for men. Fresh. Liberating. Distinctive. An invigorating blend of cool aromatics and rich warm woods.

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    Colgate

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    Now, Colgate toothpaste introduces a new Winterfresh flavor to give your family two great flavors for fighting cavities. New Winterfresh is cool and refreshing, with real wintergreen flavor. And both Colgate flavors have MFP fluoride to fight cavities. No toothpaste fights cavities better. So give your family a Colgate choice ... Regular COLGATE or Winterfresh flavor. One great cavity fighter in two great flavors.

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    Colgate - Precision

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    Clinical studies prove that Colgate Precision removes more plaque in a single brushing than Crest Complete. And Oral B. And Reach. Which makes it an ideal weapon in the fight against gum disease. So choose the brush that really cleans up. Colgate Precision.

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    Community Center Message On Hold

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    Why drive so far to get a great workout? The Easton Community Center has what you need to get in the best shape of your life! Take one of our dynamic classes, such as Zumba, Jazzercise, Kickboxing Pilates or Yoga. Or you can do-it-yourself with state of the art cardio and strength trainign equipment.

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    Cool Water

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    When it's hot, it's the only thing to wear. Cool Water. By Davidoff.

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    County Hospital

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    County Hospital in White Plains … we’re a community hospital with only one purpose -- to be here when you need us, with the advanced technology, the skills, and the knowledge to give you high-quality, compassionate care. COUNTY is your hospital. We’re here to provide high-quality medical and surgical services. And, we have the people -- and the technology -- to provide that care with compassion …and a commitment to excellence.

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    Covergirl Pixie Magic

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    Our Pixie with her magic wand paints her shiny GlossSticks on. Eyes a-shimmer, lips a-rosy shades of once upon-a-posy. Create your own magic at covergirl.com. Easy Breezy Beautiful Cover Girl.

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    Covergirl Waterproof Mascara

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    Washable waterproof mascara? Now that's remarkable! New improved remarkable washable waterproof mascara from Cover Girl. Now more smudge proof than ever. Washes off easily with soap and water. And just look at those lashes! Now that's remarkable.

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    Cpc Hospitals

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    If you’ve noticed that your teenager has become extremely hostile or depressed, is having problems at school, or shows other harmful or destructive behavior, then your child may have a problem. These behaviors may be the signal that your child has stopped growing up and started growing away. The Adolescent Program at CPC Hospitals is specifically designed to help young people identify and resolve their problems, providing each a healthier, happier life. So, if you even suspect it’s not just a phase, call your nearest CPC HOSPITAL. Call now. We can help.

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    Curves For Women

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    With more than 10,000 locations and 4 million members worldwide, Curves offers something others can't: the support you need to reach your goals. Discover a gym where women change their lives… 30 minutes at a time.

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    Dentist

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    You already know you’re supposed to take care of your teeth. And you know what happens if you don’t. We know you’ve been meaning to call the dentist. You’re gonna call soon, really. There’s so much stuff to do before you call. Feed the dog, call your mother, and you need to research the dentist. Or you can do the smart thing, let 1-800 Dentist do the research for you. Come on, call 1-800 Dentist today.

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    Dove

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    My life is not bound by being a woman. I’m interested in what I think is important. I hardly ever do the girly thing. I don’t go around thinking I look beautiful, but I think I am beautiful. I like my skin to be soft. So, I wash with DOVE. I’m happy with my skin and my life.

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    Dove Daily Exfoliating Bar

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    Nut shells? Crushed pumice? Exactly how many layers of skin do you want to take off? Dove's daily exfoliating bar, with tiny blue beads, polishes skin gently. And conditions it with a quarter moisturizing lotion. Revealing beautiful new skin without scratching it.

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    Dove Firming

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    Let’s face it, firming the thighs of a size 2 supermodel is no challenge. Real women have real curves. And according to women who tried new Dove Firming, their skin felt firmer in just one week. What better way to celebrate the curves you were born with? New Dove Firming. For beautifully firm skin.

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    Dove Shampoo 1

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    Our new shampoos do more than moisturize. They defy gravity. Dove introduces shampoos and conditioners with weightless moisturizers. A formula that thoroughly hydrates hair without weighing it down. Leaving hair soft, smooth and surprising light.

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    Durex - Bob Is An Idiot

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    This is Bob. Bob is an idiot. Bob makes mistakes. A lot of them. Oh, Bob. He may not be the sharpest tool in the shed, but despite all his faults, even an idiot like Bob knows he needs protection. Durex. Smart.

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    Escape Day Spa

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    We live in a stressful world. Some estimates say up to 80% of all doctor visits are stress related. Here at Escape Day Spa we believe taking care of your mind and body isn't just a luxury - it's a necessity. Unwind. Feel pressures disappear through massage therapy, a relaxing facial, or a rejuvinating skin peel. Our skilled therapists will cater to your specific needs. Take care of yourself. And escape.

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    Fairfield County General Hospital

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    Choosing a good physician is one of the most important things you can do for yourself and for your family. But how do you find the right one? By asking a friend you can trust. And in Fairfield County, that’s FAIRFIELD COUNTY GENERAL HOSPITAL. Our medical staff includes the finest physicians found anywhere. Educated and trained at some of the nation’s finest medical institutions and located right here in Fairfield County, they represent more than 30 medical specialties.

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    First Practice Recording

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    "No matter how much you move around at night, there's a pad that can give you great protection. Introducing a new Always Overnight without wings. It's longer and wider to absorb what regular pads don't. Always Overnight now with or without wings."

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    Ginkoba

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    Imagine a natural supplement that can actually help you think better. Ginkoba is a unique daily supplement that’s clinically shown to offset the momentary forgetfulness, loss of concentration, or mental “fog” we can all experience from time to time. Ginkoba is an easy-to-take, easily digestible supplement that contains no caffeine or sugar. And it’s safe and natural. So remember Ginkoba. The Thinking Person’s Supplement.

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    Got 2 B

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    You choose the attitude, we help you create it. Got 2 B - attitude for hair.

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    Harmony Chiropractic

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    I love to eat pretzels...but I don't like feeling like one.. all twisted and knotted up. But that's just the way I was feeling after years of football, baseball and pick up basketball games. Some days it was hard just getting out of bed in the morning! I knew I had to do something about the way I was feeling.
    That's why I decided to call Harmony Chiropractic, the Northeast leader in the treatment of sports related injuries and chiropractic care. The initial consultation was free, and the knowledgeable, friendly staff was quickly able to develop a plan of care that has gotten me on the road to recovery. In fact, I was feeling a lot better after just one visit!
    Call 1-866-555-3569 to schedule your free consultation today. Trust me, your body will thank you.
    Hmmmmm, now, where did I leave those pretzels???

    Harmony Chiropractic...working to keep your body in tune.

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    Infusium 23

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    I can’t believe my alarm didn’t go off! I’m late for work, there’s no time for coffee, I forgot to pick up my dry-cleaning, and where in the world is my other shoe! I’m glad I’m smart enough to use Infusium 23. Because even when it seems like everything that could possibly goes wrong, does, at least my hair looks great doing it. Infusium 23.

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    Intuition

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    Now there's a solution to the soap-opera of shaving. Introducing Intuition. The only all-in-one razor that lathers and shaves in one easy step. You'll never need shave gel, soap or body wash again, because Intuition's triple blades are surrounded by a unique Skin Conditioning Solid. With just water, it smooths and soothes to give you soft, smooth, touchable skin with every shave. Shaving's never been so simple.

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    Invisalign

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    Your smile says you’re happy, confident. But, if you’re uncomfortable with your teeth, your smile could be saying just the opposite. Fortunately, there’s Invisalign. The clear alternative to braces that’s comfortable and removable for eating and brushing. Straighten your teeth little by little until a new smile emerges. Join the millions at Invisalign.com and arrange a free, no obligation consultation with an experienced Invisalign provider and let the world see the real you. Invisalign. Learn how to smile again.

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    Ivory

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    I jog every day, cause being healthy is important to me. And using natural products like Ivory, well, that’s a part of it. Ivory’s a natural soap -- it doesn’t have a lot of perfumes and deodorants, and I like that. Ivory gets me naturally clean.

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    Johnson’s Baby Oil With Lavender

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    Lock baby softness into your skin. New JOHNSON’S Baby Oil with Lavender helps keep your skin naturally glowing and feeling as soft as a baby’s. When used on wet skin, it provides a protective layer that helps lock in moisture, leaving your skin feeling irresistibly baby soft.

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    Johnson’s Baby Shampoo 1

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    All too soon there’ll be ballet lessons and boys at the front door, but for now, just Johnson Baby her, with Johnson’s Baby Shampoo. Clinically proven to be as gentle to her eyes as pure water and the number one choice of hospitals. The ways of the world can wait now -- while you can protect them, shelter them, JOHNSON’S BABY them.

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    Johnson’s Bedtime Bath

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    Turn you baby's bath into a lullaby. Nothing helps settle down a fussy baby like a warm bath and Johnson's Bedtime Bath. Let the soothing scent of lavender and chamomile help calm your baby down just before bedtime. Johnson's Bedtime Bath. Not just gentle. Johnson's gentle.

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    Just For Men

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    Saturday night dinner ended with Sunday Breakfast. Was it Just for Men? Shampoos away gray hair in 5 easy minutes. Rejuvenates hair. Who knows...just might rejuvenate your social life.

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    Kissing and colds

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    Go ahead and pucker up -- a smooch won't transmit the sniffles, according to experts. Your mouth contains natural defenses such as antibodies and enzymes that make it hard for cold viruses to set up shop. Rhinovirus, the germ responsible for the majority of colds, prefers to hang out on your hands and in your nose, says Barry Stade, PhD., director of the department of clinical virology at Paterson University Medical Center. So unless you rub noses when you kiss or hold hands and then immediately wipe your nose, it's safe to smooch when you're sick.

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    Listerine

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    C'mon! You can do it. Just 30 seconds of Listerine. Think of all the germs you're killing. Listerine even kills the germs that cause plaque and gingivitis. See? You can handle it. Germs can't. Listerine, worth the time, every time.

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    Luster

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    Natural hair to luxurious silk
    Now you can transform anytime, from natural to silky straight, without the chemical
    commitment of a relaxer
    Get the best of both worlds
    With Luster's Pink Glosser
    10 natural ingredients combine to protect and nourish your hair
    Just apply, blow dry and silken your way to luxurious softness
    So go ahead
    Start a true love affair
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    Luster's Pink. It's an everyday thing.

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    L’oreal Excellence Creme

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    Now, go beyond protection...to revitalized color. New Excellence Creme with ceramide and protein. Revitalizes for rich, healthy color. Provides extra protection against damage. Absolutely doesn’t drip. For superior gray coverage. L’Oreal. Because you’re worth it.

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    Makeup and Minute Clinic practice taglines

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    (Female: deep, a little sultry): Thicker, fuller brows. Two easy steps to "wow."
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    (clear pronunciation, upbeat): Allergy relief is just a minute-clinic visit away. Find a Minute Clinic near you at minuteclinic.com.

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    Max Factor

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    Color Me Naughty. Color Me Nice. Now there’s a gloss for both sides of you. Introducing the MAXalicious Gloss Collection in naughty or nice shades. Collect them all to express your dueling personalities.

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    Maybelline Illegal Lengths Mascara

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    Are lashes this long legal? Maybelline introduces new ILLEGAL LENGTHS MASCARA. It makes lashes long, longer, longest! Take your lashes beyond their limits ... make your lashes so long it’s positively scandalous!

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    Maybelline Slim Elegance Lipstick

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    The lingerie? Unimportant. The shoes? Who cares. The dress? Forget it! Accessorize what really matters, with Slim Elegance Lipstick. Twelve smooth, sensuous colors that make lips sizzle. SLIM ELEGANCE ... smart ... and beautiful ... by Maybelline.

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    MD Anderson Cancer Center

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    When cancer strikes, we strike back. As the nation’s top-ranked cancer center, MD Anderson continues to pioneer new approaches in cancer treatment. Using the latest genetics-based research, we can develop targeted treatments, personalized to the individual patient. At MD Anderson Cancer Center, we’re focused on Making Cancer History®. To learn more about how we’re raising the bar for cancer care worldwide, or to make an appointment, call 1-877-695-0835 or visit MakingCancerHistory.com.

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    My Body Shots

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    MY BODY SHOTS
    A new drink to support your active livestyle,…
    7 great tasting vitamin enhanced rehydration shots.
    At work, travel, play or when you’re feeling down…
    MY BODY SHOTS will help you and your family
    STAY HEALTHY, STAY HYDRATED AND STAY HAPPY.
    MY BODY SHOTS available now!!

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    Nicorette Gum

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    When you smoke, nicotine goes right to your lungs and then to your brain. When you want to stop smoking, you chew Nicorette gum. You get just enough nicotine into your bloodstream to help you cope with your cravings. And as the cravings get fewer and fewer, the less Nicorette gum you need…until you use none. And none is a wonderful number.

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    Non 24

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    I am totally blind and I live with non-24 a circadian rhythm disorder that can through my days and nights out of sync, keeping me from the people, places, and things I love.
    The people I love have always been there for me and now I’m there for them too.
    Talk to your doctor and call 844-214.2424 to learn more

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    Noxzema K-3 Triple Blade Razor

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    At last, a triple blade designed especially for women. The Noxzema K-3 Triple Blade Razor System. The K-3 features a pivoting head and micro foil guard to prevent nicks and cuts, and a Noxzema moisturizing strip to lubricate and prevent irritation. The k-3, The Triple blade that delivers more.

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    Nu-Vile

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    We all worry. Funny how the more secure we get, the more we seem to have at stake. Getting older used to be about getting closer. Closer to freedom. Closer to goals. Closer to life. Now … it's different. Now, we want it back. That's where Nu-vile comes in. Nu-vile provides tailor-made transfusions of rich, rejuvenating blood, drawn from only the healthiest babies on the market. Nu-Vile. Get closer to life again.

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    O.b. Tampons

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    Say goodbye to the ouch factor with new O.B. Silk Ease tampons. They’ve got a silky smooth cover that makes them easier to insert and remove. And only O.B. tampons were designed by a women gynecologist to give you unsurpassed personal fit protection. Know for yourself.

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    Oil Of Olay 4

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    Who says you can’t have it all? New Complete UV Protection Moisture Lotion. Now have everything in a lotion. This is new Oil of Olay Complete. And is it ever complete. It protects against damaging UVA and UVB rays. It’s got vitamin E and light, greaseless Olay moisture for healthy, beautiful skin. This one lotion has it all. Oil of Olay. Proven to give your skin everything it needs most to look beautiful.

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    Old Spice

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    Pushing myself to the limit is what this is all about. And I need and anti-perspirant that can keep up. That's why I use Old Spice high endurance clear gel. Try it. If you don't like it Old Spice will buy you a stick of something else. A clear gel that’s strong? I'm there. Old Spice high endurance clear gel.

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    Old Spice - The Man, Your Man Can Smell Like

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    Hello, ladies, look at your man, now back to me, now back at your man, now back to me. Sadly, he isn’t me, but if he stopped using ladies scented body wash and switched to Old Spice, he could smell like he’s me. Look down, back up, where are you? You’re on a boat with the man your man could smell like. What’s in your hand, back at me. I have it, it’s an oyster with two tickets to that thing you love. Look again, the tickets are now diamonds. Anything is possible when your man smells like Old Spice and not a lady. I’m on a horse.

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    Origins – The Genius Of Nature

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    Your cell phone is vibrating… again. There are 40 unanswered e-mails in your inbox, and your boss has marked 3 as URGENT! Stress has been a dominant feature of our way-too-busy lives for decades, but with the increase of noise, lights, and sounds in our 24/7 world, life can be overwhelming. Now there is a way out…thanks to Origins new Peace of Mind botanicals.

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    Osteoporosis

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    If you are over 60 you should know the warning signs of osteoporosis. Unfortunately, there aren't any. The fact is, nearly 40% of women in their sixties have osteoporosis. Your risk may vary but it does increase with age.

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    Pampers 2

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    Every baby born at this hospital is put right into a quilted Pampers diaper. In fact, more hospitals use quilted Pampers than all other diapers put together. Pampers help keep a baby’s clothes and bedding dry. And that saves on laundry. Quilted PAMPERS ... your baby deserves the best.

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    Pantene

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    When your hair gets what it needs, you can't help but feel special. That's the experience of Pantene conditioners. Pro-vitamin formulas designed to give you hair strength, moisture, and shine - all in one week. Feel like one in a million. Pantene.

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    Pfizer

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    Before it became a medicine, there was an idea, an inspiration, a wild what if. So scientists went to work, they examined 87 different proteins structures, had 12 years of setbacks and breakthroughs, four thousand four hundred twenty three sleepless nights, and countless trips back to the drawing board. At first they were told No! Well,
    maybe, and finally yes, then it was 36 clinical trials, Eight-five hundred patient volunteers…and the hope…of millions, and so after it became a medicine, someone who couldn’t be cured, could be………..me.

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    Philips

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    In healthcare, there are a million stories every day. At Philips, our job is to change each outcome for the better, by understanding every point of view and every place that healthcare is needed. A million stories every day. At Philips, our aim is to make a difference in each one.

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    Procrit

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    If you’re on chemotherapy, and finding it difficult to do the things you normally do, it’s important to tell your doctor about your symptoms. You may actually be anemic and not even know it. Anemia can cause extreme tiredness, dizziness and shortness of breath. You may also find it difficult to think clearly. Fortunately there’s Procrit. It treats the symptoms of chemo-related anemia which can give you more strength. Ask your doctor if Procrit is right for you.

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    Proleva

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    Sick and tired of feeling sick and tired? Use the power of anti-oxidants to fight the signs of aging. Scientifically studied and doctor approved, Proleva is a natural breakthrough that nourishes your body. One serving of Proleva has health benefits equal to 5 glasses of red wine, 9 glasses of green tea and 4 cups of pomengranate juice combined. For a free 10 day trial of Proleva, call 888-261-7171. Offer ends soon, so call now. 888-261-7171. Proleva.

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    Puffs

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    I know. You think tissues are wimps. Well, my friends, that's ordinary tissues. Not me. Puffs Extra Strength. I'm the strongest tissue around. Even wet, one of me is stronger than two of these guys. Cause I'm no wimp. Leading brand -- hah! So go ahead --- give me all you got. I'm built for it. As for my name, Puffs ... ah, that's another story. I'd have called myself Tuffs.

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    Q-tip

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    Everybody’s always telling you how to clean things. Your hair, your nails, your sink. Anybody ever tell you how to clean an ear? Well, I’m gonna tell ya’. First, find an ear. then grasp a nice, soft Q-Tip Swab. Firmly, stroke gently. Careful! Only on the outside. Ahhh, soft....oh, and remember, never put anything inside your ear....except your elbow.

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    Ralph Lauren

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    Saturday night ... six o’clock ... and you’re late for the hottest date of your life. He’ll be here any minute ... What? You haven’t chosen a perfume yet? Okay, okay...what kind of mood are you in? Aaaaaahhhh ... Well in that case, you’d better wear Lauren, by Ralph Lauren ... Me? ... I love it; chances are he will too ... Quick, put some on ... There ... Now you’re ready.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Peer Feedback:

    Consider your audience. Your delivery is too bold for this subject and audience, in my view. Calm and reassuring would be a better choice. Great voice though and sweet production work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto what Bill said, both the pros and cons. I wanted to add, too, that the timing/pacing on this one worked for me.

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    Afternoon Diamond67,

    A nice read. You have a soothing voice that would ease concern. So perhaps add a bit more warmth and concern to your reading. More dynamic range and perhaps a little more space(just a touch slower?) would make the reading hit home more effectively. Good luck :)

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    I think that it sounds great !

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sonia - I thought your read sounded very authentic and really like something I'd hear on a radio or tv spot on this product. Your voice sounds very much like whatever the trend is now and your timing and delivery were great. Very nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with MHeyden that this sounds great! The one nit-picky thing I noticed is when you say "in ONE box"...rather than it sounding like a good thing, that it's all in ONE box, your tone reminds me more of your first line, when you definitely make it sound like a drag that your period comes every month. So I'd like to hear the "one box" bit sound a bit happier, like it's a good thing (which I'm sure the manufacturers believe).

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there... you sound great! May I ask what hardware (mic,amp) etc are you using, as well as software? You sound so crisp and clean. Once again great job. : )

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    Thanks for the feedback! This is another original script that will probably end up in my demo.

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    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, the read is just a little "studied".

    A couple of things:

    When do people usually get a cold? Around winter time, right? So a "summer" cold, although not unusual, is rarer. So, IMHO, that is the emphasis here. I would imagine that cold remedy product sales drop off during those "off-season" times. Thus, the reason to advertise.

    Not sure if emphasizing "stick" is the way you would normally say that in normal "conversation". Ask someone - wife, kid, friend - to read that sentence to you cold with out telling them why. You'll, more than likely, get an "honest" inflection. Sometimes we overthink.

    Also, it's the over-articulation thing again "sticK - To", "YeaR(uh) - Round", "jusT - Two". It's more a case of using "Articulated Elision™" than articulated separation.

    One phrase: "...so I can continue working (h)and get through the day." That little aspiration before "and" caught my ear and changed the meaning of the sentence, so I had to second guess what I heard. That's a place where separated articulation IS needed.

    Little tweaks.

    Peer Feedback:

    My first impression was that this was an excellent recording. After reading the comments from James I can see where he is coming from. Each comment is true. These very minor tweaks would take it from an excellent read to a near perfect read.
    I really liked the "I'd have to agree" line as it sucked me in and made me feel like you understood the issue.
    Excellent recording quality as always.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like how casual, and conversational your reads are. You have an unusual tone, but it is very pleasing to the ear. While this one I thought had the proper pace (not too fast or slow) a couple of times it seems you cheated the pauses a little. For example between "by." and "Just" and "starts." and "Nothing's". Almost like you ignored the periods. So I guess I thought the reading part was the right speed, but the stopping part was too fast. We have no way of knowing how long this should have taken. Too much for :15, and not enough for :30, so you get to read it the way you think it sounds best ignoring the clock.

    Also, as someone else said about another of your posts, you have a pretty wicked hiss or hum in your recordings. Get cracking on figuring out how to use those noise filters in your software. Invest the hour and the results will sound much better. Audacity is free so if you don't have something comparable, or better,download that.

    You definitely have a voice that should be marketable I think.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom, Thank you so much for your post. I appreciate your thoughts. I do have a hum that's driving me crazy. I'm working on. I do use Audacity.

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    nice pace...and inflection. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I also use Audacity but I noticed that your recording sounds so better compared to mine.

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    Hi Dana-B. I could barely hear your read....although what I heard sounded really good. You need to work on your volume.

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    Peer Feedback:

    What a lovely , fresh , young voice you have!! I loved your friendly read. It was just wonderful. I think "multipack" should be multee not multie. Nice genre for your voice!!

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    wow, great voice. nice read. I agree with the comment above , multee. I went out to you tube, and played the ad,, thats how they say it. It also sounded like you said, "That’s why ALWAYS design",,, instead of "That’s why ALWAYS designed". The only other comment is, you have some back ground hiss,, and I think your trebel may be a bit to hot, and bass to low. ( which would make the hiss sound louder as well. ) if your useing audacity, it will take out the hiss for you. email me if your not familure.

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    Thank you so much for the feedback. Since that recording I have changed microphones and the environment in which I am recording. That has been extremely helpful.

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    My 1st attempt at a non-anime character based voice. Trying to take some advice and get some basics down.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is a tough piece commercial copy. It's a mouthful. It's also probably a 30 second spot, so the read needs to be tightened up considerably. (The bulk of the copy is what is known as the "legal" - the disclaimer portion that usually clips along a bit briskly and usually comes at the end of a commercial like this, but the copy writer buried it in the middle here.)

    Watch tricky words like "bronchodilator" - you put an extra "i" in there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Dan. I thought the second half of your read was more engaging than the first which seemed a bit lazy and uncertain. You dragged and paused a bit on the first Advair and some of the words were not clear. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dan. You need to sound more caring, concerned and serious with this subject matter. This read was a bit too laid back and casual.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys,
    will keep working on those points.

    Peer Feedback:

    Like the casual tone. Watch the copy I think you said "fact acting" instead of "fast acting" towards the end your tone goes down giving a repetitive bored quality. This medicine is life saving it's important! Not that you have to be over the top but a more serious tone. You are the doctor, the specialist tell it like you mean it :)

    ALL THE BEST
    Josiah

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    Hi Dan-
    Nice read, but maybe a little too laid back for Advair. But completely appropriate for a ton of other ads.
    some of the lilt in the delivery adds a texture that is nice too. it's anti-pro-announcer-guy sounding.

    Having said that, you have a really nice sound. It reminds me of John Krasinski.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    I used an AT2020 mic with pop filter and audacity on my PC. I haven't manipulated the recording yet. I just read the copy twice on this recording and will use the first one. Just wanted feedback on the performance itself. I am new to the VO industry. Also, are there any websites to get free background music for VO commercials?

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    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, the first take was preferable to the second, simply due to the fact that the second was so broken up by so many breaths, Speaking of which, you fall into the habit (as is common with many people) of completely closing your mouth at the end of a sentence before you take your next breath which causes a certain strange noise - kind of a lip smack or a nasal click. Practice keeping your mouth open (not always possible -especially with words ending in an M) as you finish one thought before another inhale. However, more often than not, the breath sounds would be completely eliminated in the fully produced spot for broadcast.

    Do a Google (or Bing) search for "Royalty Free Music" - lots of sites will come up. Same for YouTube, if you know how to rip the sound from them.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very clearly enunciated, but LOTS of inhalation noises at the beginning of each sentence. Also, at the end of the first read, you left out the final sentence.
    All the Best,
    Mike W.

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    James gives some good pointers. Too much mid-sentence breathing. Practice taking a deeper breath and delivering the sentences in a single breath. The breaths can be edited out (and should be for something of this nature.)

    Mouth noises are pretty present. James again gives good pointers.

    This is a medical ad...be sure to insert a smiling delivery so that the listener will feel that you're happy about the product, the results it gives you or them...pep up the tone!

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    Margaux,

    Nice voice. You did seem like you were running out of breath on the reads. Try to slow down a little bit and it will go smoother for you.

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    first recording attempt

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    Peer Feedback:

    Generally, an ok read. Of course, I don't know how old you are and would never ask (you just don't ask a woman her age), but your voice sounds very young. So, I'm having a little trouble believing that you have arthritis pain. I am aware that arthritis is not age discriminatory, but we generally associate arthritis as an older person's ailment.

    So - it's a little rushed. I wasn't sure about your attitude with the first question. I expected the next sentence to be, "I don't have arthritis pain," instead of it being a constant companion. And all of the sentences sounded like you were reading rather than experiencing pain or relief or relating to me what that means to you and why I should try this product or the NEW gel caplets. Exciting! Pride in the product is missing. The client wouldn't like that.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with James that this spot probably needs an older (perhaps elderly) voice to make the arthritis believable.
    and the delivery might start out as tired and painful, and then brighten up as you go into the Advil part. you know: "problem -> solution" kind of progression.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Generally, good pacing and vocalization. You could use a bit more emotion on 'Arthritis pain?...it's part of my life' Make it sound more believable!

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    first time with this script trying to focus on talking to just one person making the read more personal instead of a generic feel. coaching starts on saturday.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Kinda feel like I'm being shouted to. I'm getting a little hard of hearing, but....

    BTW - Who are you coaching with?

    Peer Feedback:

    You get louder as you go along. Why post two attempts at same read with each attempt? Do one and get a critique. I stop if I hear it starting up again. I know a couple others who do too. Point being...present the read YOU think is the one and take the critiques. If you did a second, post that one then. But if you don't pick ONE, it's as if you're hoping that someone will tell you what's better when YOU are supposed to know.

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    Disclaimer: totally new to VO.

    I thought the recording quality was good.

    You sounded a little out of breath, like you had some vocal tension/anxiety so the phrases seemed to burst out a little in a rush.

    I would analyze this copy differently, make it more of a conversation, and I wouldn't go with the second, faster version. I envision someone responding to a question about if they're feeling pain with their own question, "Arthritis pain?" (would swoop it up into the question at the end, like, did I hear you right? I sure do have pain.) It's a part of my life... Then I'd keep it conversational, like here's this poor arthritis sufferer who's nevertheless upbeat and has some friendly advice.

    I like your warm voice (all these great voices on here!).

    Peer Feedback:

    I will second TxTom's mention of submitting more than one read. You need to deliver the read YOU think has got it right. Submitting two or three indicates you're not sure of how it should best be read. Deliver one and take your comments and hits. If it's good, you'll hear about it. If it's not, you'll hear suggestions on this forum of how people would have liked to have heard it or how they think it should sound. Take their advice and internalize it and process it. Learn from the mistakes and choices you make along the way. As TxTom said, if there's more than one submission, I won't bother. In fact, if it's a pattern, I take note of that and avoid even clicking. That's how it works in the business. If someone sends in a clinker, more often than not, they get branded as a clinker and passed over time and again.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Evan. You definitely have a unique way of delivering script. I would say the first recording was better than the second. The first one, the pace was good until Nothing's proven where you started rushing. The second one you started rushing almost from the start. Brian is right, no need to put 2 takes, one's enough and you will get the feedback you need to do another one. However, when you submit auditions they say that giving 2-3 takes is ok but don't quote me on it. Depends on the client.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lana! Nice work, but a few comments. There is a lot of echo and noise in your recording. Might have to do with your recording space and mic placement. Try reading the spot with a bit more familiarity and as though you're telling your best friend about this great new product. Best, Scott

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    Health and Beauty Practice. Comments welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nicely done, but sounded in places like you were trying too hard. Some emphasis on the words was obvoius and hurt the naturalness.

    For example - it's a PART of my life - seemed like an odd word to punch. Wouldn't the word 'life" been a better word to punch? Near the end I thought the same about "or". Made it seem less like a natural conversation and more like you were working a script.

    I would also spend a little more time cleaning the dry voice track. Listen to the last Advil in particular - needs a little cleaning of the crackle. Those "A"s can be a bear to clean up.

    You obviously are not a beginner so sorry if I am being picky. You are good enough to need someone picky.

    Peer Feedback:

    "You are good enough to need someone picky."

    I hope more people understand that advice. Some critiques might not feel 'encouraging' but more critical...and what you said explains it.

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    I truly appreciate all the constructive criticism that helps me hone my craft. Tom I leaned on the "part" of my life to emphasize that this nagging pain is embedded in my body and I won't ever get rid of it. That sets up the need for Advil to come to my rescue. And the last Advil was a little flat. I have stopped tweaking the dry voice altogether. No more EQ, normalization, noise reduction, etc. I figure the person that gets the recording can do what they want with it. Thanks for listening. Larry

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nick. I like your voice and I think you could have done better if you started off with the question "Arthritis pain?" sounding more like a question. I like the way you said "Advil works at the sight...." but the line "Nothing"s proven....." should be the real selling point and should have come out strong especially "...and now introducing New Advil Gel Caplets"..Best.

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    I couldn't tell if it was a processing thing or just a series of sighs or grunts to indicate pain at the end of some of your sentences. If it's the latter, It really doesn't add to the copy and there are too many of them. If it's the former, it was a bit distracting.

    I agree with Arlen about the first line. Use the upward inflection to ask the question, even if it is retorical.

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    Revision based on comments from peers, please provide additional feed back?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello how are you,

    One thing I learned pretty quickly is that this is voice ACTING, you must make the script come alive, you are a sells person, you must sound believable even if you do not use the product, believe in said product, or have even heard of the product.

    my first suggestion would be too work on your sound quality

    secondly and my mentor had to impress this upon me and that was not to READ the script but act out the script.

    I hope this helps, keep pushing, never give up, practice makes perfect.

    Peer Feedback:

    A good deal of commercial copy is a back and forth between you and another person, real (as in a person you're directly talking to) or imaginary (the listener out there).

    It's also about answering questions and solving problems.

    A good way to get into this copy is to imagine a person in front of you with a furrowed brow, possibly saying "ouch" and rubbing their fingers - obviously in pain.

    You ask, "Arthritis pain?"
    Person: "Yeah, it really hurts."
    You: "It’s a part of my life. So I keep Advil close by."
    Person: "Does it help?"
    You: "(Yeah.) Just ONE works as well as TWO regular Tylenol. Advil works at the site of minor arthritis pain -- stopping it where it starts."
    Person: "But I always take this other product."
    You: "Nothing’s proven to work better or last longer than Advil."
    Person: "Yeah, but I have trouble swallowing pills. And I need something that gets in my system fast."
    You: "And now introducing new ADVIL GEL CAPLETS. One more advance for Advil."
    Person: "It sounds better than what I've been taking."
    You: "(It's) Advanced medicine for pain."

    That's a dialogue. Thew only thing is with this copy is that the other person isn't there to ask you the questions, so you have to imagine that part to fill in the blanks.

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    Looking for feed back on everything... tonality, clarity of spoken words, pronunciation, etc. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The trick to any read like this is to sound as natural as possible; not to sound like you're reading the copy. This takes a lot of practice. It also takes coaching. One trick that helps bring out a natural read is to have a friend help you read the script to him/her. Break it down so that your friend asks you questions about the product and listens as you answer naturally to them. For instance, he can ask you, "Is arthritis pain part of your life? What do you keep close by for flare-ups?" Then you'd answer with the first two sentences of the script, but answer TO them, not to the microphone. Play around with this type of Q and A throughout the script until you feel like you are carrying on a conversation with your friend. Then go back, take each line on its own while recording. Then string a couple together. I'll bet you'll be able to get through this much more smoothly after doing an exercise like this. Also, put a little smile in your voice. Obviously arthritis pain isn't something to be happy about, but you're selling the product, so you don't want to sell misery, either. :) I look forward to hearing more from you. You have a pleasant voice! Leaving comments on recording quality for someone else. There are issues, but first things first.

    Peer Feedback:

    Do you suffer from arthritis pain? If not, substitute something else that Advil might help you with. Do you use Advil? If not, substitute some other pain reliever hat you believe in. This is not to say to actually change those things in the script, but to help you get into what the script is about - to personalize it. Because I don't believe you by just reading the words.

    You have to persuade me that this is a superior product and that I should use it instead of the competitor. Not to sell, but to persuade.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the background sound. Great tie-in. The first part of your read very conversational, like you were just telling a friend what to use. Its when you got to the gel caplets, I felt you started to read. Great voice, perfect for this spot.

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    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-137/ADVIL2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, what an utterly gorgeous voice you have! You read the piece nicely but I would have loved to hear you bring it off the page with a more conversational tone and a connection to the message and the listener. Also, watch out for a bit of slurring on "just", "nothing", and some of your "s"'s. You've got great pipes; now add some acting technique and you'll be golden!

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    Shana

    Thanks for the input. I have done absolutely no acting in my life so this is my challenge. Thanks for your time.

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    Click to hear TxTom's recording

    Practicing at TRYING to not annunciate as much as I do naturally. Trying also to be conversational as this spot is in the first person. I do recognize that I need to find a space less noisy because after I do noise reduction, the sound starts to sound as if it's in a rather live room when the mic is in a pretty decent harlan box. With the b/g noise in place, you don't hear any 'live' echo, but after the n/r, it adds some harshness to the timbre. Good thing I'm still new at this...practicing.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good interperation. As you say, try not to over annunciate (which is also my issue). You might want to pick up the pace a notch. I did also hear ambient sound, you might want to try moving blankets and dense foam ie Aurolux or even memory foam itworks for me. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good job Tom. I thought that you did succeed in being conversational. I did not notice recording problems but I'm still new as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read and pronunciation. I agree that picking up the pace and picking up the volume and vocal variety on the line about "And now introducing ...." would do more for the read.
    Thanks for sharing and keep it up!

    Tony

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    Tom, I have an idea that might interest you. What would you say about trying something entirely different than what you've done in the last few weeks? And don't get me wrong, this is good, but I think you've reached a plataue with these ads. I think if you tried something that forced you to be more expressive and casual, that it would help you sound even better when you get back to these reads. Sometimes a little change can make a big difference. And something tells me that you'll benefit from this approach. Now, can you please tell me how to spell plataue? LOL

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    plateau. I'm trying to find a music bed for something I've not done that much of...a bio read...trying to do some things away from the ads. I mean, I could do sports products with a gravelly gritty delivery and feel happy with that...but I need to expand as you mention. It's all about expanding experience. thanks to those who commented above. all appreciated. And yes, I agree that I should have toned it up at 'And now introducing'.

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    Trying new editing procedures using Audicity. Your critique and comments appreciated in advance. Thanks and God bless.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice, pacing and emotion. But you missed the word NEW. Background music is too loud.

    Pretty good job, though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback Javier - after listening to it after I had posted it, I realized I left the word "new" out and you're absolutely correct, the volume could stand a tweak to lower it. Again, thahks and God bless -

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with Javiers about good voice tone and emotion. It sounded though as if you were holding your breath a bit and so you weren't projecting that loudly. That resulted in a somewhat choppy read, with pauses where there probably shouldn't have been pauses. Try to read without pausing where there aren't commas and it will be much more natural. Well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Muddyshoes -

    I realize I need to work on pauses where there are no commas, but not to use this as an excuse, but I'm a quadriplegic and breathing is something I need to practice in order to get the air that I need to speak out whole sentences - thanks for bringing it to my attention. God bless -

    Gazman

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Terp's recording

    Healthcare practice. Comments welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Larry,
    That list in the final sentence includes the key words town, family, and you. I think you hit the first two just right but put too much emphasis on the word AND and not enough on YOU. Just noticing that you sometimes hit the "and" before the final item in a list too hard. It's just a conjunction and doesn't seem worthy of that emphasis to me.
    I like the tone and inflection in the first sentence. Maybe just a touch more smile/warmth in sentence two as you share the good news.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Larry,

    I think this one, as your voice has a natural friendly tone which will make the audience interested and the music choice was good.

    Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    LCW.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I'd like to start doing voice over work and I would appreciate a full critique. Thanks! Gisele

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Gisele,

    From what I can hear, you do have potential for the Voice Over industry, as your voice appears friendly with a good tone to it. However the sound quality was very low and I did hear a little background noise. I would re-record this to get a perspective of your voice.

    Keep practicing and looking forward in hearing more from you.

    Best of luck,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm just starting as well so no pro tips, but I did hear a lot noise and a thump on the recording. As to voice is sounds good but I would hope it gets a bit louder and brighter. They tell me I "read" and that's sort of what felt from you as well. It;s tough stuff, hang in and keep on swining...

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Gisele,

    One big ouch that is playing on my system is that you are only coming across on the left channel. I think you want to set your software to record in two channel mono, so that you will come through both channels. Also, you want to bring you mic gain up a good deal (without going to 0dB or 'clipping'...)

    You have a lovely voice and what sounds like a sparkling personality (or is that 'acting'?!)

    Good on you!

    Regards,

    Steve O'Sullivan

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there!
    I thought your copy interpretation was very good including the pacing, varying levels of pitch and speed. You nail the annoyance of the cold! I would add a little smile at the end to indicate "change is coming" for the consumer.

    The recording was tinny. What type of mic are you using? And, is it possible to get in a more soft sounding area to absorb some of the reverb?

    Great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Slow down! This is probably a :30 spot. The time on your recording showed :25. There was 1 second of silence at the beginning and 2 seconds of silence at the end, which makes your actual read about :22. You have time to "billboard" the product name (important to the client), lay out drug names (that would be important to the client too) and present your case (why you find it better than,say, Claritan). There will probably also be visuals as well, so imagine them in your mind as you paint the word picture.

    Peer Feedback:

    Maybe slow down the read just a bit and try to imagine talking to someone you know. I find it helps to figure out the conversational pacing. You pronounced the medical words perfectly; great job on that! There was a lot of reverb; you'll need to deaden the sound in your recording area. :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto what jewelraquel said. I'd say the first line differently, too.

    "Unbearable COMMUTE? Or unbearable CONGESTION?"

    You're comparing the two and highlighting the fact that it's the "congestion" that stinks. More like "congestion" is the answer of the day.

    I might also imagine a bit more smile with allegra's awesomeness right before imagining more of a frown with "the drowsiness that can be caused by other antihistamines". Comparing to sell. Allegra good. The other's not-so-much.

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    New booth setup. I would appreciate any feedback! Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Kelly. I thought the recording quality was quite good. The copy sounded clear and there wasn't any obstructive sounds that I could hear. I felt that you could have played with the text more to add a little more variety and maybe a shift from the beginning (congestion) to the end (relief). You have a nice sound. I enjoyed listening.

    Peer Feedback:

    I feel like I am being read to instead of being talked to. Try to make the words yours as if you knew this was the best product out there for me and that you knew I really needed to know it so I would try it. Watch out for the micropauses. If you were talking to me you would not put a pause between the last two words "releif" and "today". As far as recording quality it is pretty good. You may want to work on editing out the noise at the beginning of your recording though. You have a nice voice and a quiet room which is good so keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good pronunciation and a nice clear voice. However, the performance lacked a little oomph. The recording quality was great.

    Overall, could use a little more emotion pronunciation-wise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all! You made excellent points!

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    The pollen in my area is so thick that my dark blue car is now light green. This is all I can manage for today. However I would like to point out something that could be helpful for all of us. When I use this forum I am going to try to find some good descriptions of the unique voices found here and add them to the end of my comments. We all think we know what we sound like but it could be eye and ear opening to have a new perspective. It may help a touch with marketing as well. NGB

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your pacing and clarity was good, although I would have liked to hear you be more upbeat since your offering a solution to problems. Your tone sounded a little downbeat the whole spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your dry tone. I can go over the top with my choices--and I think a number of tone choices could work with this--but it's always a nice reminder when I hear someone with such a fun, understated tone. I agree, however, that it would be good to hear a change when we realize the product is going to solve our allergy problem (I hear you on the sinus misery of this time of year!). I'd direct you to throw some smile into that. You've mis-pronounced the medical terms. Some harsh s's. Editing problems between first and second sentence and before "without the drowsiness". There's some hiss in the room tone. Some noticeable breaths. Nice little pauses and pacing that worked for me.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Total newbie and would love input!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did well here. I like the style and pace of this - your delivery matches the subject matter, and you have a warm and clear voice. The reverb on the voice is unusual and while it gives an interesting feel I wouldn't think it would be proper in a commercial - you can just let the pleasant music be the bed underneath. You've got some strong plosives on P, CH, TH, D that could be from being too close to the mic, or you don't have a pop filter. If you need to be close, maybe try talking across the mic, instead of straight into it, to see if you can keep the puff of air from hitting the mic directly.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the suggestions and feedback Gary! I don't have a pop filter and I do have a tendency to put the mic right up in front of my mouth. I actually just read the comments you've gotten on your recordings as well as listened to them...GREAT voice you have btw! I didn't know the mic placement and I know very little about equipment...much to learn still as a new newbie. Appreciate the feedback totally!
    Kinda curious about the thing I think you mentioned but have to go back to see what it was. I think it's a software program...

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    Re-recorded using suggestions recommended in prior recording. New mic and learned more about placement etc. would love any and all feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Anjylkat. You sound great but you could have done it much quicker in 15 secs or less. Best.

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    First recording! Just trying this out. Any feedback is great.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Have you taken or are you considering taking some of the webinar classes and coaching? There's a lot to learn from the people at Edge, as well as on this forum.

    Not knowing what your recording setup is, it sounds like it's pretty bare-bones. Nothing wrong with that for testing the waters, but the further you get into this (if that is your intent) you will need to invest in some quality equipment, learn editing skills in whatever software is comfortable for you and work with a coach on how to break down and interpret copy.

    There's a lot of distortion due to puffs of air hitting whatever mic you are using, not only the plosives (p's, t's, etc), but also in words like "month" where you expel a substantial amount of air. Over time, that will change as well as you develop your skills.

    As for the read, (and you will hear this a lot), who are you talking to? Pick someone, just one someone. Your best girlfriend, your sister (if you have one) or a confidant would work best for a spot like this. Someone you can relate to and that both of you can relate to this problem that can be solved by this product.

    There's also something I call "acting the punctuation." People don't always or normally talk in completely correctly formed sentences. But good writers write them. If you listen separately to each word that came before each period of each sentence, you will hear the same downward inflection on nearly the same vocal pitch with a full stop. That's reading instead of interpreting the idea of the sentence(s) for your friend.

    But it's not a bad start. Keep posting.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Production treatment on this was a little off! :) Sounds like you are reading this in an empty gymnasium or something and an ad of this nature needs to be a little more discreet.

    Your voice though, I think is very well suited for this, good inflection, and a very nice smooth flow. It may sound better if there was a bit of space after the first word 'Listen.' You seemed to rush too quickly into the next sentence but other than that the pace was good.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Cherlyn's recording

    Choosing another script to practice performance.

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    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, you've definitely got the kind of voice for this type of spot. We're getting the "young" but not the "perky".

    Secondly, the read is much too slow. This is probably a :15 radio spot - maybe even TV. You need to shave off 2 seconds.

    Thirdly. Who are you talking to? I don't think you would talk this way to your best girl friend over cappuccino, would you?

    Break down the script. First word is a throw-away, not really important. It can even be attached to the next sentence, and it's a fact that every woman is aware of. The next sentence is added information, so it's important. I could not tell from you read that ALWAYS is a product. It needs a little emphasis. Almost as much as MULTIPAX. The rest was very good, just pick up the tempo.

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    Take 2 of yesterday's script based on feedback. I do find that I'm having trouble remaining conversational on mic (I practice off mic, but when I hit record, I notice that I stiffen up). But does this go too loose? Particularly around "so mo matter what." Also, I picked up the pace to get it under 15 seconds, but also tried my first hand at editing with editing out lead and ending spaces and breaths. Good or bad editing job?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Like night and day. Warmer, friendlier with good up energy. just one tiny little thing. An ever so slight pause before ALWAYS MULTIPAX. It completes the previous thought and billboards the product.

    Sorry - upon a second and third listen, watch the pronunciation of the second "protection" - it almost sounded like "p'tection".

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much James. Your feedback has been extremely helpful. I'll continue to practice and will listen to make sure I fully enunciate each word regardless of pace. Also, I just got some great coaching feedback on a previous performance to help me to recognize my slight southern sound. The Edge coach gave exact specifics and pointed out words and their sound (my way and the correct way); gave tips on cleaning those up as well as my slightly nasal sound on some words. Thanks much!

    Peer Feedback:

    I hear you on the conversational thing.

    You've a nice, friendly voice in this, and you're stronger with the product names, now, but I think you're still too one note with this. The pacing and pitch don't vary much between sections. It risks coming off more instructional than conversational-ish. ("ish" 'cuz like we'd ever say these actual words, right?)

    I broke it down beat by beat thinking about how I would go about it with different intentions for each beat. Body language can help give a shortcut to getting that intention into the voice, so I put that in, too.

    Now, I'd probably go over the top or too flat with it, and then the conversational thing would be ruined, but here goes my breakdown, anyway.

    Beat one: Listen, you get your period every month. (Intention: Set up of information, and also set up that you're comparing "every month" to "every day". You could try actually shrugging with this. I like what James said the other day about it not really being news to anyone.)
    Beat two: But it *CHANGES every DAY*. (Intention: Ah, but here's something interesting to consider. This, the problem that Always is going to solve, is also the punchline to the previous set-up. If this were a joke, one might tell the first line kinda quickly then slow down for the punchline so that it's understood. This is the real news, so you could lean in to reveal this gem of information.)
    Beat three: That's why Always... (And here's Always, our hero, with the solution to our problem, including some details about it--which includes a joke about a smart box, so "one smart box" could be said with a wink and a smile.)
    Beat four: So no matter what... (One possible intention: So no worries--we gotcha covered (so to speak!). Maybe another shrug.)

    Anyway, hope this helps. One could probably have different intentions and tones to match them depending on where the conversation takes place and one's own personality.
    ex.
    a hush-hush conversation in the restaurant
    a perkier "we're all girls here" conversation over coffee
    a know-it-all, animated sanitary napkin giving you the good news in a drugstore (Just kidding! I got to thinking about the instructor's suggestion on Saturday that we could also be the product. :) )

    Your mileage may vary, but hope this helps.

    Re: editing. It's so much work, isn't it? And it's kind of like reinventing the wheel, or at least that's how I felt. There's dead air in between sections, so I can hear your editing. You can insert silence from your recording space into those spots or put a second track of silence into your mix to get rid of that. There's some method of fading in and out of those silences to help, but I haven't figured that out yet (anyone?). Also, a couple spots where the cut wasn't quite clean enough and I think I could hear the end or beginning of a sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much for the breakdown Tonia! Really helpful. The funny thing is that your interpretation was my exact same interpretation. Apparently I'm not getting it across as such though. I must be holding back too much because when I do a heavy change on the sentences, I tend to back off of it because it sounds unnatural to me (in listening). On the other hand, from feedback it sounds like you can't hear my changes. I'm in the process of signing up for my first coaching session so I can work with an Edge coach directly. I understand the principles but need direct feedback on my correct application of them.

    Thanks for the feedback on the editing. At the moment, I don't know how to put in silence or fade in/out. I'm signed up for the next Home Studio class so hopefully I can learn editing. I'm using audacity and some of the YouTube videos helped in getting me started with it. I'll look for tutorials on adding in silence and fade in/outs. I also noticed the sound difference. The first take yesterday was done in my closet. This second one was in the livingroom--big open space with cathedral ceilings. Just listened again and it sounds echo-y to me. Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    It's like you're my VO doppelganger. I swear, I say that same thing in my head all the time about how I mean a certain intention--and to my ears it's there even in the recording--but to the listener, it's not getting across. I tend to be quite understated in real life, so much of it feels over the top to me. I often go either too far or do the 180 correction and go too flat!

    I found an interesting discussion about sounding "natural" the other week. Here, I found it, again. Look what Daniel says about "natural-esque". Interesting.

    http://voicethedream.com/2011/03/14/voice-over-tip-for-achieving-the-nat...

    Peer Feedback:

    Ha! So we have the same experience with that, huh? :-) Yes, I totally understand what you mean. Thanks for the link! I'm going to check it out now.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey There. I'm going to check out that link as well (http://voicethedream.com/2011/03/14/voice-over-tip-for-achieving-the-nat...). Thanks for sharing. Working on that regional sound is tough isn't it? I try to let my roots come through and they don't and then when I don't want them to - they shine in all their southern glory! Seems like when I try to add a little more emotion is when it happens the most.

    Editing: I'm using Audacity as well and have learned a little (I think....I hope.....). It varies from recording to recording, but sometimes I use the Effects-Noise Removal before I equalize or silence or anything else. What I am finding too, less is more. In your larger room, experiment with the medium gate processor - also on the Effects list. For my voice, I have often used the Processor:Medium Gate. We just have to keep plugging at it. Keep it fun!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Mellonee. That's what I want to learn to do. Use to when I want to. Got a feeling it's not easy, as you have just stated. :-)

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    This is my second attempt. I made a few adjustments.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Better attack on the spot, IMHO.
    A couple of strange things. Hitting "of" in the 4th sentence where "protection" is the more operative word. And the overall message of "Three Levels...in One Smart Box." And treat the product/brand as one thing, without the pause. Otherwise it sounds like you're saying "always (use) MULTIPAX."

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes James. That makes sense. I'll try it again tomorrow. Thanks again for the feedback.

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    Kimberley you have me sold! If only I wasn't menopausal :D

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    LOL! Thank you HighPriestess :)

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    Really nice! I'm sold! ... regardless of the product! :P

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    DIALECT????? Good idea? Bad idea? Never mind?

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    Peer Feedback:

    It was OK, but I have been told by my friends that whenever I try a Dialect, or Accent, I don't go over the top enough. To me I think I am. I guess that's my comment to you - not sure if I didn't read it that I would have picked up on what you were trying to do.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it was ok too. But I think the dialect kinda went in and out at places. Still I could pick up that you were going for a US southern accent (I think). Otherwise, I think the read could have focused more on just trying to tell the product's story dialect or no dialect as simply and as naturally as possible - like you were talking to an interested or concerned girlfriend about the product. I think maybe a little less "coloration" or emphasis of certain words might really have brought out that accent, because you could focus on it more rather than coloring the copy so much. I'm pointing to words like 'listen', 'month', and 'protection'.

    Aside from that Lana Borza, I think it was a good read. And it felt natural in places, like "three levels of protection in one smart box". Again dialect or no dialect, I'd be interested to hear you interpret this story like you were talking to a friend, giving the read all your natural inflections, intonations, character, and so forth.

    ROC

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    Click to hear LaraHopewell's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Smooth, polished, professional voice quality. Overall copy interpretation and read was believable and pleasant to listen to. On the technical side, it sounds like maybe a bit too much processing (or maybe it's just the microphone) but your breaths in between sentences sounds a little distorted, an there's an odd drop out before the last mention of the product name. I know sometimes when working in the multi track editor, if you split blocks of audio and pull them apart on the same track, when the cursor goes over the part of the track with no audio associated to it, it goes TOTALLY silent, then when it get back to the audio block it has a bit of ambient background. So the silence really stands out. That may or may not be what caused that right before the product name.

    Whatever the case, you have an obvious natural talent and voice. If I haven't already heard you on air, I'm sure it won't be long! - Mike Mortensen

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Mike! Technically I'm really green right now so I appreciate the feedback. : )

    Lara

    Peer Feedback:

    great recording quality.. very professional.. smooth voice.. very nice :)