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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Promotional

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    "Clem the Prospector - Nebraska Lottery"

    Script:

    Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin in this old mountain here.
    The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.

    81 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    zm15 - This was just too fun to pass up. I haven't done many character voice things on the forum. Thought I'd try a little pseudo Yosemite Sam on this one. I could not find your script in the library. The only one that was similar was for "Giant Food Store," therefore I did not upload it.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/NebraskaLottery-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome, I'll have to try this next time I can record!

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty danged good for a yankee!! Pretty danged good period! I enjoyed the performance, James. Nice job.

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    That's great! Great work James, i really like your interpretation of the script. Really brought it to life. Well done!

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    Niiiiice. This script brings alot of fun to the board. Thanks jr

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Read!!!! Very fun to listen to

    Jt

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    Well tarnations that was a great read!

    Peer Feedback:

    First time I think I've heard you do a character voice.......Great read! Is there anything you can't do James? (with admiration and respect of course!)

    Ed

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    Hello Very good liked the change of pace.

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    ..Amstel Light.

    Script:

    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy.Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light.

    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vegasfatts's recording

    All new equipment as well as new to VO

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104795/script-recording-83517.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You've definitely got potential as a voice double for an actor whose name I can't recall right now! Very distinctive, and not in a bad way.

    I liked the intonation, but I thought it could benefit from maybe being a little more upbeat or energetic. I'm thinking that it SHOULD be a seen-it-all barman about to tell me what beer to REALLY drink, but getting overtones of Moe Szyslak :)

    As for recording quality,it sounds like you might have gone OTT on the noise reduction. But that might also be overcompression of the file size.

    I'd like to hear what if sounded like if you tried again with a bit more pace, no noise reduction tweaks, and saving at at least 44.1Khz and 192kbps.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a great read!
    But the recording quality is really sub-par. I think you need a much more treated recording space. Your voice is big and powerful, so it's going to throw A LOT of echo and noise in the space.

    all the best,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Interesting sound as a character read, especially for a beer commercial. However you need better ambient noise reduction, a better recording space to turn out better quality reads,

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    20/20

    Script:

    "Three happy wives. They vowed to be faithful. But one is more likely to cheat. Is it the
    firsttime
    mom, the model, or the housewife? Cast your vote online at ABCnews.com. What
    you learn may save your marriage

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rantoolio's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123788/script-recording-94492.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Rantoolio,

    great pipes! Interpreting the script , you may want to sound a little mischievous , than a walk in the park with the kids/

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this read. even though you have it at 0:14, the spots could flow even faster....
    director's choice.

    nice job. marketable.
    cheers,
    DS.

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    23 women

    Script:

    Women make up seventy percent of the labor force in Uganda,
    yet rarely get the chance to bring their own products to market.

    23 Women is a real story of real women who saw the need to join together, work hard, and deliver the best coffee their country could offer.

    Rated the number one coffee in Uganda at the AFCA Taste of Harvest Competition, these women produce some of the best coffee in the world.

    They are an exception, and an inspiration to the other women of their culture; growing specialty coffee on their own land and bringing it to the world markets themselves.

    They do this through Kabum Coffee.

    We have joined their cause by creating a brand for this group, to give them a direct avenue to the word markets.

    You can make a difference in the lives of these women and their families by buying their products…it’s that simple. And it’s that good!

    Your purchase empowers Kabum farmers in ways that meet or exceed fair trade practices, and allows our company the opportunity to share in their lives and create a more sustainable and giving way of life for us all.

    23 Women. Kabum Coffee. Buy it at kabum dot org.

    98 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear robert palmer's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-63479/script-recording-64429.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Robert,
    It looks like this is the first recording you've put on the site, so I'm unsure of your level of experience. I'm going to skip over what I assume is obvious, as far as need for attention on your recording environment, and possibly equipment. If your unclear on that part, please say so, and there is a ton of knowledgeable people on here that can help. Now on to the rest of the story... Lets start with you... You have a nice sounding voice, and I think can do well. Here are some questions,, did any part of your body move while you read this? Did you gesture? Did your face make expressions? If no,, that explains a lot. It was read well, for reading. But think about what your reading,, it a script with emotion, with passion, with people's lives, achievements, hopes, and future in it. Do you feel that in your reading? I am a painter,, so think of it this way,, you did a nice black and white line drawing, as an outline of this picture... now go back in and fill it with color, fill it with life... Motivate the next person that hears your take on this , to web-surf to order some coffee. Don't tell me about it,, make me experience it ! When I saw your take and this script on-line, I tried a take at it. I'm not saying I did it right, but you can hear my attempt at it. There are times when the style of reading you have hear would work much better, so play around with outher scripts,, but also play around with letting your self emote.

    Peer Feedback:

    I LOVE your voice. I thought this was a good start, too. It's a very straight style of delivery, but lots to like. You're smooth and get some variety in there. There could be more, and some more of the acting ("and it's that good") that I can hear at times.

    I'm a very straightforward, just-the-facts-ma'am, person with how I talk, and I find in my VO that even when I FEEL like I'm acting and adding in emotion, that when I listen to my recordings it's actually very subtle compared to how others would do it. So I have to go back and add in more, and then more, and then more. Maybe that will ring true for you, too? Or not. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia and knm:
    Thank you so much for your positive feedback. As a "newbie" to this site, I am finding it is a valuable resource to connect with fellow actors and learn, learn, learn.

    Peer Feedback:

    You betcha. Sometimes I get busy off the site and don't pay attention to postings, but if you want feedback at some point you can ping me through one of my old postings or my email: tjblake2001@yahoo.com. I'm not a working pro, yet, but I'm happy to spread my opinions around. :)

    There's some serious talent on the board right now. It's a great time to join in.

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    3Play Media

    Script:

    3Play Media
    There's the old way of doing captioning and transcription.
    The way that's expensive, complicated, and well, unreliable.
    And then there's the 3Play Media way - The most advanced solution of video accessibility ever. It's captioning and transcription, utterly transformed.
    3Play Media makes it simple to upload your video and get it back with near-perfect captions and transcripts - in just about any format.
    But that's just the beginning. With 3Play Media, the text of your video comes alive. Every word becomes searchable and interactive.
    It's now possible to clip a video section and share it - right down to the exact quote or scene.
    And you can even edit your captions later on the fly.
    Simply put, 3Play Media opens more possibilities for your video than ever before.
    Now, once invisible text can be found by search engines.
    Now, people are engaged and interacting with your video.
    Now, you'll wonder how you ever did video any other way.
    3Play Media Captioning and Transcription, Transformed.

    23 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ajairaj's recording

    I know the first cut at the beginning sounds funny.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17687/script-recording-49747.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, smooth and inviting. It seems to me, because of the editing that two people are reading the script taking turns on each line. I don't know if that"s what you were shooting for but it sounds pretty cool, gives the read some nice tempo. Good job, don't forget the last line next time. Voice On!

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    ABC - 20/20

    Script:

    Three happy wives. They vowed to be faithful. But one is more likely to cheat. Is it the first-time mom, the model, or the housewife? Cast your vote online at ABCnews.com. What you learn may save your marriage!

    87 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Murray O's recording

    Wouldn't upload to the contest. Want some feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6210/script-recording-23291.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    So I'm new to this, but I really liked your emotion and inflection. It seemed a little slow maybe. I'd say that the recording quality would be an 8 out of 10. Best of luck.

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    a bit slow and too much inflection. to hard to follow line to line.

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    My thoughts not that i know anything but i felt like you could have brought it back a bit but I loved the overall performance!!

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    ABC Friday Night Lineup

    Script:

    Start the night off when Cory accidentally sets fire to the biology lab at 7:00 on Boy Meets World. Then at 7:30, Al has a hot date until Frank cools her off on Step by Step. Finally, Mark is putting on a talent show and the girls think THEY are the stars on Coop at 8... ABC Friday.

    42 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jason Starr's recording

    I have my first home studio set up. Rode NT1A mic, Tascam US-122 interface, Garageband '08 on my mac. I'm delving into editing and am looking for guidance regarding compression, EQ, effects settings, and the basic sound of my room. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2835/script-recording-26510.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Clean and crisp. I did not pick up any echo. My only observation was a bit tinny in spots.

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - you started out so strong on the first few words...you gave me this impression that you might be angry. I know that is not the case.
    Recording quality - the room sounds good to me. Your pauses sounded natural.
    Good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    A little over-the-top for my tastes. But that's just MO. I thought you edited the pauses a little too tightly.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think in this case being over the top was warranted. These ABC comedy lineup spots from the 80's and 90's were always pretty forced. I felt right at home listening to you do this read. Although Tom does have a point about the pauses. Nice job !

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    ABC Radio

    Script:

    You're talking about it, We're talking about it... News Talk Radio 77 WABC

    34 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Homage again to the wonderful SabrinasVoice who did it so beautifully. I wanted to record a couple of things because next month I'm going to concentrate on narrative reading at Librovox.org It's will give me some long projects to do (that you don't want to spend 10 minutes listening to anyways :) ) I'll stop by and critique, but may not post too much. Critique away! and Thanks Nodo420

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-28211.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    What I'm picking up with your voice is a lot variation in your reads which is wonderful.

    Like Sabrina, you did this very well too. The music bed really captured it. I would try some more scripts like this, as you've got the voice for it.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    My first reaction is,, have you listend to 77 talk radio. Most of the talk radio station,, including this one,, are much more hard hitting,,, aggresive sounding. So if you were looking to do a real spot for them,, I dont think this would fly. They stream on line live,, and have all kinds of archived stuff to listen to. Just google 77 wabc, and you'll find it...

    So stepping away from that,, If I ignore that,, looking at it as just a typical spot....

    The end is just a little to much on the happy side for me, then the drop on "C" stand out,, I would not go up so much on the last 7,, and then anchor the WABC part with more of a downward slide, instead of just the C

    Peer Feedback:

    What a GREAT TIP! DOH, I should have checked to see what they do. I didn't realize until you pointed it out that, ya, it's a talk radio station. I'm going to go have a listen! Good heads up, preciate it!

    Peer Feedback:

    untill I did the Senior Bowl spot the other day,, I had never thought of checking that kind of thing myself,, I waslooking at these as abstract scripts , that were in a vacume. Which they can be done that way, and that is better then nothing,, but attaching them to a real life thing, and place,, really ups the bar. And is another skill set all of will need to master to make it anywhere in the industry.

    Peer Feedback:

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    Peer Feedback:

    I agree on multiple levels. This a good site, with good people ,, and a good way to get our feet wet.

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    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there. I'm looking for overall feedback -- on the recording quality, performance, believability, etc.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-97495.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The delivery is nicely done. very believable,.as for recording quality , it sound like a hollow room. sounds like you need more sound absorption .like foam or moving blankets on the walls.great voice for this kind of script !

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the voice and the delivery, very nice. I would agree it does sound a bit hollow.

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    ACT Testing

    Script:

    N: This is a story about a little girl. She’s like a lot of other girls. She likes school. Gets good grades. Has lots of friends. Loves horses. And her favorite thing in the world is playing with her cat, Oliver. Star, her Guiney pig and Fish, her goldfish, are a close second and third.

    N: She likes doing normal girl stuff. Like exploring.

    N: And dreaming up adventures.

    N: But when she lays her head down on her pillow at night, she dreams about the future. Next year. Junior high. High school. All the new kids. All the new classes. The prom. The swim team. And drama club.

    N: And college, what’s that going to be like? What’s she going to study?

    N: And sometimes, she dreams about what she’s going to be when she grows up. Maybe someday, she’ll be a famous jockey.

    N: Or a park ranger.

    N: Or a veterinarian.

    N: Or… a marine biologist.

    N: What if you knew this girl. Really knew her. Her strengths. Her interests. How she’s changed. How she’s grown. Where she came from. And where she’s going. From early childhood throughout her career. You could help her do what she loves. So she can reach beyond what she imagined was possible. And dream bigger.

    N: How do I know? That little girl is me. This is my story. But no matter what path you choose, ACT provides information that can help you make better decisions all along the way.

    93 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear valrock's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107125/script-recording-85164.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I've listened to both of your postings and am curious why you've posted the scripts as you have. "VO" preceding each line and "N" as well. It seems as though the script could be simply be posted as a continuous narrative.

    However, in listening to both posts, I have to say that I'm not hearing a connection the the script through your performance. Some would say that this sounds "read" (red) as simply someone reading words off a page without consideration to the listener's response to the performance. Not listening through headphones, your recording space isn't bad. But you're not delivering the words with any special effort to give emphasis to any thoughts or phrases that the author might need to be put out there.

    Think as though reading/delivering these words to your best friend who might be interested in the subject matter. In such a setting...perhaps at a table over coffee...you would have enthusiasm and want to emphasize certain points ..we talk with our hands, for instance...it makes us stress certain thoughts. Imagine that scenario as you read the script and listen. It's not here. Give that some thought and maybe try re-reading this.

    Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    I listened to both submissions and they both have something in common, aside from the fact that you have a very pleasant, articulate and youngish sounding voice.

    It sounds like you're reading. The personal connection to the words, thoughts and concepts is missing. I hear all of the punctuation - full stop after every period, slight pause after nearly every comma (big pauses at the ellipsis marks in the previous submission). It's ponderous and stilted.

    Who (that one person) are you addressing? What important points do you want your listener to come away with? How do you (or do you want us to) feel about the subject? What's the setting (where do you imagine yourself to be)?

    Generally, the recording quality is good, but there is a sense that you're talking into a tube. Maybe something with the EQ and/or noise reduction. I'm not hearing the richness of your voice - kinda more AM than FM.

    Peer Feedback:

    Relistened with headphones on and agree with james on the sound quality.

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    44 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jessgaylor's recording

    I cannot get rid of the sound issues. Using a Blue Yeti with Audacity in a sound proofed closet studio. Looking for feedback on how to move forward with my VO studies. Interested in Commercial, Animation, Telephony, Audiobooks (children's). Thank you for your time & advice!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-64539/script-recording-68034.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    there's a little boxy sound I detect but with the sound track, it's drawing away from the ability to listen to what ails the vocal. What are you concerned about? Perhaps you could post this again without processing for critical commentary.

    Peer Feedback:

    I, too, would like to hear this without the music bed and with much less processing to get a better take on your vocals... my initial impression is that you have a very nice voice and your pacing was good. The word "little" in "just got a little easier" got swallowed up a bit and kind of came out as "l'il".

    Peer Feedback:

    There's an audacity class coming up. Technical issues can be worked out and don't get discouraged.

    I don't like music beds on this forum. We are trying to help each other with voicing not production.

    Try to be careful with your diction. It's ok in this instance to have "little" come out "liddle" as it is a relaxed read. Maybe slow down a touch when you practice.

    If I were your coach, I'd have you practice with different emotions. "getting them out of the car a little harder" <-- add a little extra smile or minimal laughter. Figure out how you speak when you are happy or excited in your typical daily conversation and use that to start with. "Ejection seat not included" also called for a little less "straight" read and a little more smile.

    I agree you have a very nice voice for this type of work. It isn't all about that, though. Get coaching and push yourself. You'll do great.

    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice for this read !! So much promise . I'm not a pro engineer but it sounds to me like the voice track is a little too compressed . Also try with a little more smile . You can actually physically do it some parts of this to sound more conversational . Please , please , please keep trying !! Please believe you 've got a bright a bright future !!

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know much about the Blue Yeti mic, but it could be that it isn't the one best suited for your voice and/or that the processing that you're using isn't optimal. It does sound a little tinny.

    The read is really nice. Watch words like "fer", "er", "yer" and "gitting". Just takes a little more concentration to more fully form the words.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi jessgaylor -
    You have a nice voice, but you seem timid at the mic.
    This script has a techie feature feel and a little tongue in cheek (the rocket scientist line). I think you need to give it more energy.

    there's this weird sound effect going on -- it almost sounds like a "tremolo" - phasing in and out. I don't know audacity, but I'd say you have some distortion feature turned on somewhere.

    yeah, I'm with the group. let's hear the track without the music.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders

    Peer Feedback:

    I would also like to hear the read without the music bed. I heard some of the issues you are having and, although my ears are really untrained in the area of audio engineering, I really think you did well with what you have to work with. You have a nice voice.

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    Acura Audio Interface

    Script:

    Quality. Clarity. Sophistication. Simplicity. The New Acura Audio Interface for Ipad. Watch movies, play games or access you music library. Whichever you choose, just got a little easier. You won't have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it. But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder. The Acura Audio Interface for Ipad….ejection seat not included.

    44 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Redeux.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-50506.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good clarity and pacing. You also did a good job with inflection and emotion in the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Better than the first. I feel there should have been at least a brief pause in " You won't have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it", that felt rushed, as well as "But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder". You avoided the punctuation altogether.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not big on punctuation. I like to color outside the lines.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mackmediaproductions's recording

    ANOTHER CAR AD

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10177/script-recording-63834.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The first two words, you hit the T, but I missed it with the fourth. You skipped two sentences, but I'm assuming that it was on purpose. The beginning of "You..." was a little funky.

    The rev-ing car doesn't make sense to me. You're not selling the car, per se, you're selling a feature - the interface. And the rev-ing negates the opening. Who could hear the clarity of the iPad interface over that engine?

    The tag was really good though.

    Peer Feedback:

    More of the over-processed sound....and a real disconnected delivery from the script. You're reading to us. Reading THIS...and then THIS and then THIS. James properly knocked you on missing a couple of sentences. You can't do that. It will get you tossed from consideration and most likely disregarded on further submissions.

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    Adventure Travel

    Script:

    (Inner monologue) Back to the old to do list again. Let's see... Climb Mount Everest... done. Snorkeling with the dolphins off the coast of Australia? Done. Sky diving in Borneo... yup, that's checked off too. Barreling over Niagara Falls (chuckle) – Nah, too risky! How about discovering a Land of Lost Caverns in the highlands of Costa Rica? (Reading) Easily trek to view scenic wonders of beauty and mystery... ancient unexplored caverns await...
    (Said to another person) Hey Jeff / Alice, what do you think of this?
    (Announcer) Why just travel when you can ‘adventure' travel? Call us today to book your next out-of-this-world thrill seeker vacation.

    61 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there! Doing a cockney accent (London -- along the lines of the Geico gecko) in this one. Had some fun with the production! Again, practicing with gear and software. Any feedback is welcome! Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-97221.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    amazing voice. just bueatiful

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    100 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Thank you for any and all feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-79672.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Jerry,

    Great to hear you again. These two are both really good. Nice tone, great quality.

    If I had to under threat of death or something find a complaint, it might be the pause before "along the way" which didn't thrill me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very professional, and you sound great! Good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, nice, nice! Crisp and clean. America First should hire you NOW!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great sound! Agreed, crisp and clean. Wish I had pipes like yours! If you're not getting paid to read, you should be.

    Dave Clarke

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    Answersthatwork.com

    Script:

    OK, that meeting is at 11 - and at 10:00 I'm sitting here with a jammed printer, a crashed computer, a fried network connection and I'm pulling my hair out - which is NOT good, 'cause I don't have much hair to begin with! Then it dawns on me - I've got that Ultimate Troubleshooter Package from Answersthatwork.com.....all I've got to do is fire that baby up and....oh, yeah. Life is good.

    56 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hinojosad's recording

    This is one of my first VO recordings (3/3) ever for the class I'm registered in at ES. This is the first time using Audacity and a recording headset from my home office.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126764/script-recording-95938.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonal quality was great. Liked the flow of your voice, pacing and clarity. The recording quality sounded nice and clean. Your performance was believable. Just a few tweeks from my ear: more internally thinking at the beginning, like seeing a bubble over your head much like a comic book. The light bulb goes on when "it dawns on me" section. I loved the ending. Felt complete. Nice read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Pacing was good but recommend that you push through the punctuation during the list of problems. Your list of problems sounded the same "jammed printer" (pause) "crashed computer" (pause), "fried network" (pause), etc... A huge percentage of VO talent will read it that way. Recommend changing the tone on each of the problems and dont get so hung up on the commas. Good read. Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it. Nice tone and pace. Good voice. Good pacing. It had me listening. Still, a hint that you were reading a script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey waynes7, jamescooperVO, and Idelre, thank you all for the feedback here; this is all useful to me for my next read. Your input is greatly appreciated!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear peter.oneillca's recording

    My first time uploading for feedback. Thank you for your assistance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113513/script-recording-94886.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Peter,

    Great emotion and interpretation of the script! Technically a lot of echo, maybe room noise or not close enough to the microphone. Not Bad though?

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    Apple Computers

    Script:

    CONVERSATIONAL / EXPLAINER

    At Apple, we design our computers specifically for the needs of education. We design them to be powerful enough to prepare high school students for the technology they'll encounter in the future. yet we also design them to be easy enough for a first grader to use. We design our computers to run all of the Macintosh programs schools are already using; and ewe design them to run a whole new family of enhanced software that makes graphics, video and animation even more life like and exciting.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hey Ya'll. Kevin Davies from Canada (in Bangkok)again. I wanted to go for a conversational kind of neighbor next door talking about what he does for a living kind of read here. As always please feel free to critique ANYTHING you think I could improve on. I really do appreciate the listens folks. Cheers.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-91576.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read imo was more like an Apple rep trying to explain his product to a school board or rep of the school board vs two neighbors talking - which I guess IS okay.

    As I'm often told, you used "ta" instead of to ("...ta be powerful, ta run all..., ta run a whole new...) in each case.

    Find a way to make the music more seamless, sounds like it looped on an off beat (hardly distinguishable, but with headphones you can hear it).

    Overall, imo, sounded pretty good. Wasn't as good as some I've heard maybe due to mix or something... I liked it but it didn't pop.

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty good spot. Let's pick it apart.

    First - let the music start the spot with the first 3 beats (if you think of it in a fast 4/4 time) before the VO begins - So "Apple" more or less hits the downbeat of the 3rd beat of the first measure. (Or, if you think of it in a slow 2/4 time., the second beat of the first measure.) Just that little lead in (with a fade) will lessen the "jar" of the voice and music starting at the same time. Which means that the overall pace may need to be picked up just a touch to fit into 30 seconds - because you'll also want to fade out the music at the end for 1 or 2 beats.

    Second - Have you ever tried "ducking" or "side chain compression"? It essentially uses the voice track to "trigger" a compressor to lessen the volume of (or "duck") the music bed under the VO. Don't know which DAW you're using, but it should be possible. Here's an example:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pvg0m3iQS-0

    Third - Look at the compare/contrast in the copy:
    "powerful enough" and "easy enough"
    "high school students" and "a first grader"
    "Macintosh programs schools are already using" and "whole new family of enhanced software
    Those are the important aspects of why to use an Apple.

    IMHO, the tone and vocal quality seem fine. It's the stresses of those finer contrast/compare points above that I'm not getting. Without pointing those things out, it lies kind of flat.

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    Apple iPod

    Script:

    Presenting iPod. The first MP3 player to pack a mind-blowing 1,000 songs and a 10-hour battery into a stunning 6.5-ounce package you can literally take everywhere. But iPod isn't just a revolution in portability, it's also a revolution in simplicity. Just plug into your Mac and all of your iTunes songs and playlists are automatically downloaded into iPod at blazing FireWire speed. With iPod, it's that easy to take your entire music collection with you wherever you go, in the pocket of your choice. Get your iPod at The Wiz, Circuit City, or Best Buys

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JasonArnold's recording

    Hello everyone! My first submission for critique. Please be honest. Also the first time playing around with my new audio equipment and editing software so please any comments there would be appreciated too! Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-118023/script-recording-93944.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi again, Jason,

    Voice quality, recording quality, diction, etc. still good as before.

    Again, my personal preference would be for a somewhat slower read with a bit more intensity. The spot wasn't particularly well written with some very long sentences which make it difficult to deliver in a conversational read.

    It needs a little more "sell" which doesn't always mean speed or volume. Think it through, then try to convince a friend over coffee that he or she needs one, too.

    One person's opinion. I look forward to seeing others.

    Great start. Keep plugging.

    Steve

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Steve!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

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    Apple Test Commercial

    Script:

    Here's to the crazy ones. The misfits. The rebels. The troublemakers. The square pegs in the round holes. The ones who see things differently. They're not fond of rules, and they have no respect for the status quo. You can quote them, disagree with them, glorify or vilify them. About the only thing you can't do, is ignore them. Because they change things. They push the human race forward. And while some may see them as the crazy ones, we see genius. Because the people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world, are the ones who do. Apple. Think different.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jds311's recording

    Here is my take on the iconic Apple commercial originally narrated by Richard Dreyfuss. Please critique my performance. I certainly appreciate any feedback. This is a tough read for me. Thanks! JD Silva

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8416/script-recording-60350.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you're off to a good start. You really warmed into it in the middle of the script when it gave you something to sink your teeth into.

    Listen to your recording at:
    Because they change things.

    And then:
    we see genius

    And then:
    Think different

    I point out these spots, because for each of them, your intention--the way you wanted to make us feel about the story--changed particularly well at these points. That gives the script movement, story, opinion...Something to make us FEEL, and that's what makes a script interesting and memorable to the listener.

    The tough thing about this script is that you have this LIST to contend with in the beginning. It's long, and I think it would be a tough one even for someone way more experienced. Because it's good to get that kind of story movement--make it GO somewhere--even within a long list like that. Think of how the word "crazy" differs from "rebels" and "troublemakers". To help, you can find a physical movement that fits each word, like flexing your biceps for "troublemakers" and whirling your finger next to your ear for "crazy".

    You have a nice voice and you've kept it relaxed and real throughout this. You dip into some nice gravel and you don't get sing-songy at all--the way many, many of us do at the beginning when we have an idea of how we're "supposed" to sound. And that's AWESOME, a huge plus for starting out, and I'd wish I'd had it. So I'd say just try to give more (without ramping up into those common mistakes).

    I don't remember the Dreyfuss recording, so I'm just going with my own script analysis.

    Hope this helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    More of the same type of comment as the last one. At the top, this is a list of 5. And, just like your previous post, you landed on every period on the same musical note. As you got into the copy, it came more alive. I got the feeling that you were connecting to the story a little more.

    One thing that always bugged me about this campaign was the incorrect grammar. It should be "Think Differently." I'd always yell that at the TV when I saw these commercials. Jobs still sold a boatload of them, so who am I to say.

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    Arizona Lottery

    Script:

    So who’s ready to play for Arizona’s biggest jackpots?

    That’s right, Arizona Lottery fans. Now you can get a chance at the three biggest
    jackpots with one $4 ticket bundle. It’s called the Trio. When you purchase a
    Trio, you get a ticket for Powerball, a ticket for MegaMillions, and a ticket for The
    Pick. Each ticket is a Quick Pick for the next drawing in each specific game.

    Sound good?

    Then head over to the customer service counter and just say: “Gimme a Trio!”

    It’s that simple. And if you’re lucky, you could win really big!

    The Arizona Lottery. You can’t win if you don’t play!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hinojosad's recording

    This is one of my first VO recordings ever for the class I'm registered in at ES (2 of 3). This is the first time using Audacity and a recording headset from my home office.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126764/script-recording-95937.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice energy! I thought the read was good! The last line, "you can't win, if you don't play",,I was wondering what if you did like a "can't stand the heat, stay out of the kitchen",,kind of vibe,,kind of like a "I dare ya to play" vibe. But what do I know?! lol I'm new as well. Heard a little echo, probably nothing a blanket in the right spot couldn't solve. All in all, good stuff. I'm new to this, but I'm enjoying it and a I would encouraged you to have fun with it as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    At first I thought it was going to be sports-related, which says something about markets that you can pursue. Nice diction and voice. "That's right" sounds acted.

    I think more love could have been given to "Powerball"and "MegaMillions". You did give extra attention to "the Pick", but it sounded like an adult trying to convince his child of something. Who are you picturing just on the other side of that mic? Who is your audience?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear margauxlivrich's recording

    I new and learning how to edit properly with music, breathing, pacing and so on... I really like this music but not sure if it's working with the copy. Should it be slower, quieter etc. How is the my reading of the copy itself?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-80641/script-recording-80079.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice. It sounds like your voice would really enhance this piece by adding a lot more energy and excitement. You're talking about "biggest jackpots" but I don't feel the excitement. The excitement level is on the line of a good shoe sale or sale on beef. Even on the last sentence, you end with a down note that makes it sound like a downer. I think you can escalate it and sound even better. I think that would be a good start.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Margaux,

    Your voice is great for commercial! The music is over riding you. It sounds a little echo y? Maybe a little more excitement? Not too over the top.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm guessing that this is a radio commercial and not TV. Really copy-dense things like this is one indication. And it is also more than likely a 30 second spot. The "excitement" that CherylLinn and marysboy1 are missing is partly due to the leisurely pace. You need to shave off 6 seconds - and add a little more wide-eyed enthusiasm to wanting to win the lottery. The pizzicato violins clip along, so should you.

    There is a bit of room echo to the voice track in the recording, indicating that you may need more sound deadening treatment for your recording space.

    Also, your S's are a little sharp (sibilant), more common with women than men. It may be matter of using a de-esser plugin or possibly investigating a different microphone as some emphasize sibilance more than others.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with James in that cutting six seconds off the read, not the background, by speeding up the the tempo with audacity, or what ever editing software you use. I don't know what mic you are using, but if you go a little to one side of the mic while recording you might lose some of that sibilance.
    Han a heavy blanket on each of you and the mic while recording. Perhaps that will deaden your space enough to get rid of that echo.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Sosullivan's recording

    I guess the only thing I DIDN'T do was throw in "SUNDAY! SUNDAY! SUNDAY!" Need to work on clarity on this one (green apple maybe?) I THINK the energy was up...what do you think? Regards, Steve O'Sullivan

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12277/script-recording-31515.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, your voice is awesome, but read a bit fast for my liking. However your recording quality is great, except You might want to lubricate that squeaky chair with some WD-40 or something (I think that's what I heard at the beginning).
    Overall, You do have natural talent my friend, keep it up..

    Peer Feedback:

    Steve...are you processing your voice at all? After you answer this question, we go to the next step. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom,

    I think I ran compression on this through Amadeus Pro. I think I normalized the stream as well prior to that. So, yes.

    Not being funny, just have been real busy lately.

    I look forward to hearing your advice.

    Regards,

    Steve O'Sullivan

    Peer Feedback:

    Is there a way I could hear your unprocessed voice? Have you put up a clip with nothing done to the vocal?

    Peer Feedback:

    Do you want a read, or just my speech?

    I can put something together (whichever you are requesting) tomorrow....

    My website is steveosullivanvo.com, and my Documentary demo is unprocessed.

    Regards,

    SteveO

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought your read was a little fast, too. I think your 'gravelly' voice and tone gave it a blue-collar appeal. Like you were any guy picking up some lottery tickets on his way home from work. I would think Arizona would be trying to speak to that demographic with this ad, so I would say your voice suited the purpose of the ad. I went back and listened to it again, because pmcondon said he thought he heard a squeaky chair...for what it's worth, I didn't hear anything but you. What do you think about throwing in some background music? I would expect to hear this on the radio with music playing behind your voice...

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    Arizona Lottery

    Script:

    So who’s ready to play for Arizona’s biggest jackpots?

    That’s right, Arizona Lottery fans. Now you can get a chance at the three biggest

    jackpots with one $4 ticket bundle. It’s called the Trio. When you purchase a

    Trio, you get a ticket for Powerball, a ticket for MegaMillions, and a ticket for The

    Pick. Each ticket is a Quick Pick for the next drawing in each specific game.

    Sound good?

    Then head on over to the customer service counter and just say: “Gimme a Trio!”

    It’s that simple. And if you’re lucky, you could win really big!

    The Arizona Lottery. You can’t win if you don’t play!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TallRobert's recording

    Still working with my iPhone, but thought I'd try something whacky. Feel free to comment on performance and delivery. Thanks so much! -Robert

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Arizona_Lottery_2014.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Robert,

    "ready to" sounded unintelligible
    slightly off script at "Now you can get a chance "

    Now for the good news...
    Very good delivery - good choice of music and VERY energetic!!!!
    I'm getting the next flight to Arizona now... :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Yup, I caught it only after uploading.. DOH. Thanks, TJStorms!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, TJ. That "fast talking" takes a bit of getting used to (tho I'll admit I chopped up the lines closer together to make sure I hit the 30 sec mark) I think I need to work on it a bit more, a few words feel a little stumbly to me still (customer service counter and the "ready" you already called out for example). But, that's what this is for, practice and critique..:)

    Peer Feedback:

    Other than "ready to play for Arizona’s biggest" which sounded like " M#$^4 Fgdd%$$&*" - The rest is good. Keep in mind at the start, and the end,, the "Arizona Lottery" is who's paying you,, make it clear, bright, and memorable. That would be memorable, as is stands out in their mind,, not - wow that was odd LOL ...

    Peer Feedback:

    Robert,
    Also wanted say nice timing too... nailed it :30!
    Alot of the comments members will get from me are on the technical/ "nit-picky" side as that is all I have to offer until I get better trained in script interpretation and the like (like James or knm) I tried reading this myself and came up with some fun, but not necessarily useful, interpretations myself. :-)

    Robert, Ah, I did notice the chopping, but it seemed to fit the script, so felt no need to critique it.Liked it actually.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I've noticed that even the pro commercials you hear on radio and TV even cut lines together, so I I figured it wasn't too much of a "cheat"...:)

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    Arizona Lottery

    Script:

    So who’s ready to play for Arizona’s biggest jackpots?

    That’s right, Arizona Lottery fans. Now you can get a chance at the three biggest

    jackpots with one $4 ticket bundle. It’s called the Trio. When you purchase a

    Trio, you get a ticket for Powerball, a ticket for MegaMillions, and a ticket for The

    Pick. Each ticket is a Quick Pick for the next drawing in each specific game.

    Sound good?

    Then head over to the customer service counter and just say: “Gimme a Trio!”

    It’s that simple. And if you’re lucky, you could win really big!

    The Arizona Lottery. You can’t win if you don’t play!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TallRobert's recording

    As usual, crap mic, but trying something a little more effected with the read... Let me know what you think! Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-27041/script-recording-47402.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pace is good, music is a bit overpowering and if you can, I think you should get more "on mic"...there seems to be alot of air between your mouth and the mic. Your voice is somewhat unique to my ears, almost like George Takei (sp).

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks chuck. yeah, my mic sucks (webcam one, honestly)... wil be upgrading to something decent in the new year and hopefully getting a proper soundbooth to work in.

    Closer to the mic it is.

    OOOOh Myyyyy

    :D

    Peer Feedback:

    I use a Studio Projects C3 for most of my work. That model is discontinued but they make excellent mics and they are VERY cost effective. When you start shopping, take a look at them.

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome. Thanks for the heads-up, Chuck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Music a little hot for the vocal. That's been mentioned. I was trying to pick out the vocal delivery 'uniqueness' and I do hear some of the George Takei kinda vibe there. Interesting. If you animate your delivery a little more, this would be better.

    Peer Feedback:

    I personally love your read! I agree with everyone's comments on the mic, but you know that already. I actually didn't mind the music; maybe with better recording quality, the music won't sound as overpowering. The point of the script was translated clearly. Just watch out for adding, changing, or omitting words:

    "with one $4 ticket bundle" ended up being "for one $4 ticket bundle"
    "head over" became "head on over"
    "Gimme" turned into "Give me"

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    AT&T- Broadband

    Script:

    Confused about choosing cable or a dish? Don't be. ATT Broadband gives you more. Go with Cable and get up to 230 channels on 2 TVs for only $39.99/month. Plus get free Cinemax, The Movie Channel and free professional installation on any Cable TV Package. Call 1-800-CABLE-ME today.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VideoJames's recording

    I've just started using an MXL 770 with a Behringer XENYX Q502 USB mixer. This was a little heavy on bass and compression, but I did want it to sound like a radio advert.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-90975/script-recording-78667.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's radio, but it's hard to say what you were hitting well and weren't with the gating again. Sorry.

    Peer Feedback:

    -bean420

    Thanks for the heads up. I wouldn't have otherwise known there was an issue. Do you think any of it could be cleaned up in post? If so, what should I focus on doing? Otherwise, I'll just run it through again.

    Edit: I'm getting an access denied with the edit form. I'm going to have upload again entirely.

    Peer Feedback:

    You can't edit the recording, just delete or let it hang out.

    Peer Feedback:

    There are several glitches in the software that Edge uses for the Forum. One of them is that, even though there is an "edit" feature indicated, it doesn't work. (However, it does on the "Script Contest" page. Go figure.)

    Another glitch is that if you click on someone's name or your own (in blue) and then go to their "Recordings" and then select one, often times it will not come up and you'll get an "error" message. I found that a workaround is to click instead on their (or your) "Incoming Comments" and find comments around the same date as the recording you're looking for, and the recording will magically appear.

    The only way to "edit" one of your own recordings is to delete it and re-post a new one. But there are two caveats with that. 1). If you delete a recording, then all of the comments will be deleted as well. 2). You can't submit a new recording with the same name attached to it because the software thinks that it is the old recording and will post that one instead (somehow the server keeps the first file archived, so that's the one it searches for). You need to label the new recording differently for it to appear.

    I've discovered all of these things the hard way, by trial and error.

    If you want to delete this one, here's what to do:

    Click on you name (in Blue). That takes you to your Feedback Forum Participation page.
    Click on "Recordings" (in Blue). That will bring up a list of your submitted recordings.
    Find the one you want to delete and click "delete" (in Black) and confirm.
    Poof! It's gone. (Sort of)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    A Second try... Hopefully its better??? Thanks all!!!! Don't forget, still no training... AND any comments on neutral American, regionality????? Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17894/script-recording-49954.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I was listening as I was reading the text. With the first 4 words, you acted the punctuation, perfectly. Big period - stop. No space after the comma - say both words quickly and stop for the next comma because there's more space. Period - stop.

    OK. Now forget the punctuation and give each word equal weight. Don't punch and vary the pitch and intonation. Just say the words, slowly and deliberately, and have a picture in your mind of what each one means (to you).

    You missed the "funny" in the last line. Smile, it's a joke.

    Peer Feedback:

    as others say it (to me too) its so easy to "advise" to tell this story to a friend or your dad maybe a relative.And it's not as easy to do it!!!
    This is why this business is sooooo great.
    Keep going ,,,,,there is no question if u make it or not .
    Just a lot of effort and work:))))))
    Second recording? Well good job.
    regards
    Balazs

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear turner73's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8096/script-recording-31917.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I was a little puzzled at first as it does not appear that your read matches the script posted above ("audio interface"). For feedback on the read that you presented I would offer the following: I did find the recording to be a bit thin, which I would attribute to a lower quality microphone, along with some unwanted background noise. If you're able to get a condenser microphone, even a low-cost USB condensor mic, it can make a big difference in the result. Most recording software programs will allow you to reduce or eliminate background noise as well. Also, the pacing was a bit monotonous, that is to say that it was largely unchanged. With long reads, particularly a biography, it's easy to lose the attention of your audience unless you can throw in a bit of variety with your pacing and changing up the emphasis on certain words. Try smiling a bit more as well, particularly when delivering a sentence with a punchline, as this can actually come across in your recording. You have a very trusting and down-to-earth voice, so keep honing those skills I can sense some real promise.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi!

    I realize you intended to upload the Seinfeld piece so I'll just go with that :-) This is a well chosen piece-- you naturally have a very "real" down to earth voice with a NY regionalism which would fit this piece well.

    However, in terms of improvement, I think there's a lot more you can do with this copy. Right now it is simply sounding "read" (reading words off a page with very little inflection or emotion) Try to make it sound more conversational and natural. Imagine telling this information to a good friend. Use a lot of facial expression and body language the way you would in regular conversation. You'll be surprised at what a difference it can make! Take breaths at the periods. Right now it just sounds like one continuous sentence. A good technique is to record yourself telling a story to a friend and listen back to hear how you sound.

    Production quality wise, I would agree with Robert's feedback.

    Keep practicing using the techniques I mentioned, and good luck!

    Best,
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach May 29, 2012 at 12:51PM
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    Band Of Brothers

    Script:

    There was a time when the world asked ordinary men to do extraordinary things. Tom Hanks and Steven Spielberg present, Band of Brothers.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Murray O's recording

    Just starting out. There is a feedback ring in the recording that I have since fixed.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6210/script-recording-22877.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry guy...it felt cheesy. I get it that you're acting out different scripts and all,...actually liked the canuk sound to the Amstel Light thing...but this just didn't sail. And I don't know if you MEANT to use over-do 'extraordinary' but the 5 syllable pronunciation is FAR more common. Keep going, you're blessed with a good voice and you're clearly willing to try to stretch it out there. So definitely keep at it.

    Oh!! You were 'just starting out' yesterday. You're now started. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom. I have to agree...too much "Master Thespian" and not enough heart. I appreciate your honesty. And yeah, okay, I'm started :)

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    Band Of Brothers

    Script:

    There was a time when the world asked ordinary men to do extraordinary things. Tom Hanks and Steven Spielberg present, Band of Brothers.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Robert Fairbairn's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6325/script-recording-26607.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice recording quality, and good mixing of the music. You have a great rich yet approachable sound. I felt there needed to be a lifting (in terms of expression) on the "extraordinary" clause that's in the copy, as that is the feeling part of the promo. Then to add again an adjustment of intent on "Band of Brothers" to set it apart from the other parts of the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job!
    The only thing I would say is that I would drop into the weightiness of what you're saying--the extraordinaryness of it. Like, maybe imagine you have overseen all of the extraordinary but dangerous, painful things these men have done that took great courage and sacrifice- -and you are profoundly, almost sacredly, letting the world know this.

    Hope this is helpful :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - this read and music was too much. The music gave more drama and sadness than was needed.
    Copy interpretation - I got the impression that is was Hanks and Spielberg who were ordinary men asked to to extrodinary things. There was no signal for me listener to indicated the drama had ended and these two people produced this program called Band of Brothers. Very slight but I had to read the copy to get the real meaning.
    Ok keep at it. thank you

    Peer Feedback:

    Sabrina, your wrong. I would probably do that piece "big." I was alive then.
    But that was long ago, and his 'family' approach on "ordinary men" is right.

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    BBC HD- BAFTA 2016

    Script:

    Monday... same day as the U.K

    It's the British Academy Film Awards 2016.

    It's the biggest event in the British movie calendar, and the red carpet is where it all begins.

    The film industry's brightest stars are all here, hoping to get their hands on the coveted BAFTA mask.

    Same day as the U.K.

    British Academy Film Awards 2016... Monday night at 9... on BBC HD

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hello all. I know my pacing is off for this one, but I really liked this script and I decided to give it a shot. Maybe it's the pace and choice of music that's off with this one. I was hoping to use a more glamorous tone, but it comes off a bit... sleepy perhaps? Any advice is always appreciated. Thanks in advance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-93129.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did a very good job with this read. You have a really nice voice! You mentioned you thought the pacing was off. Maybe try giving less pause between the lines? Otherwise I think it sounds great. Music too!

    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, your initial instincts are correct. Music is too mellow, delivery is too mellow and the pacing is too slow. Don't know if time is as much of a consideration as the excitement factor.

    Take clues from the text:

    "It's the biggest event in the British movie calendar..."

    This is exciting stuff! Even if the British are somewhat more subdued than us Yanks. Careers are made or broken with these awards! And the public lives vicariously through this stuff.

    Sound quality is fine, as always.

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    Belkin Home Automation Test 2

    Script:

    What if you could check on your home, from your phone? And switch off that lamp you always forget about downstairs? And what if you could actually watch the nanny put the kids to bed on time, all before you're home from dinner? The new Belkin home automation system, your home, at your fingertips.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    I know my environment isn't ideal, so until the booth is manifest it is what it is, I figure why wait to start practicing and learning? Might as well improve as much as possible and when the booth is ready, hopefully so will my presentations. In advance, thank you for your help and assistance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-77929.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey ChasA,

    Glad to see you posted again. The read is flat. Almost makes me sleepy. This read should reach out to those tech geeks who want home automation (me) and get them excited about what you have to offer. Add some energy and smile when you read. Believe it or not, adding a smile on your face can be heard. Try it. Keep plugging away.

    Peer Feedback:

    Also needs to be tightened up a bit. 15 seconds is too rushed, but 20 seconds is do-able. This is runs about 23.5 to 24 seconds, just a little plodding. (Of course, if there were visuals, you'd leave just a titch of space between the questions for the editor to sync the voice to the picture.)

    These questions are those "imagine the world of the future - that's already here!" rhetorical kind of things. Kind of what redrocket was saying - it needs a sense of geeky excitement and wonder.

    Were you just concentrating on the words? Or did you see the visuals in your mind as you spoke them? For instance:
    1st question - We see the interior of a house. Cut to the customer looking at that image their smatphone.
    2nd question - A lamp goes out (seeming) by itself. Cut to smiling customer upstairs in bed placing their smartphone on the bedside table and tucking themselves in for a good night's sleep.
    3rd question - Customer watching nanny tuck the kids in on their smartphone. Cut to parents pulling into the driveway.
    (super) - Picture of the Belkin System and/or Logo

    That might be the storyboard you'd get, if you were lucky. But if not, you'd have to conjure some images up in your imagination. That will bring an "aliveness" and meaning to the copy that just reading the words can't.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear nergin1's recording

    Testing mic quality and vocal performance- I just put padding in a small closet at home. Also, there are 2 takes normalized to -6. Take 1 is totally dry, and take 2 has slight eq (dropping some bass rumble) and compression. Let me know! Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-66016/script-recording-77292.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Engaging, effective delivery overall. Pacing might be even better a little slower and smoother. You know what they say, think about exactly who you're talking to and tell them about this system. The second version benefits from the technical recording changes you made. All the best with your recordings & studio, Mary

    Peer Feedback:

    How "hot" are you recording before the normalization? Even dropping the overall volume (through normalization), I'm still detecting a little clipping distortion (going into the red). Normalization only lowers the overall average volume but will not un-distort an already distorted recording. It will also only knock down the average volume of the rumble, but if the rumble is recorded at a high level, it is much more difficult to eliminate even with plugins and EQing. (The opposite is also true. If the rumble is present, even at a low input level, normalizing will boost it's overall gain creating the same problem. Best to determine it's source and minimize it or eliminate it.)

    Is your computer in your recording space? Could simply be that the computer's cooling fan is too close to your mic.

    The read is nice and friendly. The pacing is nice as well. You missed "on time" in the third sentence. I'm not one to strictly observe punctuation, however, the first three sentences are questions. They don't necessarily need an upward inflection at the end, but they have to sound more like questions (what if's - wondering) than statements of obvious answers (a more rhetorical nature). Think about what the listener might answer to each of them - #1 - "Wow! That would be cool!" #2 - "Yeah, I always miss that." #3 - "That would be nice too. So, what would you recommend?" Then you offer the solution to all three of these puzzlements. That's your "conversation" with your listener.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Mr. Nergin1 !
    Nice job on this spot with your resonant voice and tone variation throughout the spot.
    First take is great for dry reads/ internet auditions/ IVR/etc output. 2nd version has a bit too much ambient noise in background. Subtle; however that ambient noise actually gives a bit of more natural sound amidst your oh, slightly too commercial/Sales tone. More on that aspect below...

    Be mindful of the human element throughout this spot. That will change your voice tone and range completely. You can launch into the upper register of your voice here with those stative queries however, I'd allow your air supply to round out a slightly deeper and older voice (3-5 years older) to be the 'genius' sharing his new toy with his best friend who is also a Dad. Makes sense?

    Be real. Be the Dad dealing with the Nanny ALL the time and that you are thrilled to have this new feature (at your fingertips) In essence, pick up the pace as it will lessen the chance of sounding too polished and rehearsed. You would not talk to another parent in that type of tone. You started to add your vulnerability (that darn lamp) and a cool alternative to a Nanny-cam. All from the comfort of dinner away from both house and kids. And remember to include that phrase 'on time' as its KEY to the delivery of the next thought that you share with the listener.

    The words, 'you' and 'Your' are sprinkled throughout this script for a reason. It's personal. So make it personal. And great way to imply the word "introducing' when you tell us, "The New Belkin Home Automation system. Nice flow in the making.

    Re tag ending , 'your home, at your fingertips.' don't run all those words together / it sounded more like you were reading /even slightly rushing that last thought. Try three in a row of recording the closing thought as you may be surprised at how a pause at the comma, will make all the difference in how you can sound believable.

    Otherwise - great job - allow your genuine voice to come through time to time and you'll be truly believable in the ears of the listener. And here's to future bookings in 2015!

    Best,
    Marjorie Kouns

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 14, 2015 at 6:06PM
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    Belkin Home Automation Test Script

    Script:

    Belkin Home Automation Test Script
    What if you could check on your home, from your phone? And switch off that lamp you always forget about downstairs? And what if you could actually watch the nanny put the kids to bed, all before you're home from dinner? The new Belkin home automation system- your home at your fingertips.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear me@maryeasterling.com's recording

    I am a returning actress to the VO field after many years away. I am new to home recording and would greatly appreciate any constructive criticism.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97132/script-recording-84656.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    wow. you've done this before...
    sounds pro.

    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not listening through my monitors or cans, but from my office, it sounds very good in sound quality. Great smile to your delivery, clear diction without being too precise, just an overall very nice submission. If someone were to twist my arm and force me to nitpick, I would probably suggest billboarding the brand just a little bit more...maybe separating it from "home" a tad.

    Very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for the comments. I agree that brand needs a little more punch. I'll try another script tomorrow. Really appreciate your time!
    Mary

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is very, very good.

    My nitpick would be to edit out the breath sounds and fill the gaps with room tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done!

    Peer Feedback:

    thanks to all for your comments. I will incorporate it all and try to apply it to the next script. after reviewing many older postings and comments I find this space a real community, supportive but critical at the same time. just wonderful. Thanks to Edge for providing this "safe" place to practice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, what a professional sounding voice. It's perfect for this type of voice over work. Your voice is so good, but there is one persistent problem with the recording itself. There are several small breaths in this take, placed right before you begin a sentence. If these breaths were simply removed or quieted down in post production, this would be a nearly flawless read. I love listening to your voice, keep it up!

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    Beringer Wine

    Script:

    California is the perfect place to learn about wines, but to save you time I’ll let you know that Beringer Wines are the best!

    Beringer California Collection, offers a wonderful array of smooth and fruit forward wines that always pair well with a variety of foods.

    If you want to enjoy wine from our best California vineyards, go to the liquor department right now and get a bottle of any wine varietal from Beringer’s California Collection like our White Moscato or Red Moscato. On sale today starting at only $4.99.

    Beringer Wines, California Collection…hallmarks of the Beringer winemaking team.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear odetofross@yahoo.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7195/script-recording-24049.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Lovely use of pitch. It kept the copy fresh. There were a couple of places at the start where the words sounded a bit slurred. Maybe elongating a word or adding a bit of a pause would make the rest of the line more distinct. I can't really comment on the recording quality. But this is a good overall read.

    Jan

    Peer Feedback:

    The copy interpretation sounded very nice. However, I thought your mouth sounded a bit dry. I know there are some hints on this site to help you deal with this. I think that is what was causing the slurring jdonna was talking about. I would also edit out the tongue clicks, there are some demos on this as well. Other than that, I would process your voice slightly, to give it a bit more punch, say use a slight bit of compression. No problems with the over all quality of the read from me, sounded great.

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    Best Friends Animal Sanctuary

    Script:

    What’s more romantic than cuddling old dogs, cooing over kittens, walking potbellied pigs, cleaning bunny pens and shoveling horse manure? Just ask Takiko May and John Ewing. Instead of sipping mai-tais in Maui, they spent their honeymoon as volunteers doing just that at Best Friends Animal Sanctuary in Kanab, Utah.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there, I've been working with accents this weekend, but this is my regular speaking voice. I'm practicing with all my gear and software. Any feedback is appreciated! Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-97209.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I hear your delivery here as very "travelogue romance" but the script reads more "upbeat, casual" documentary, but for what you were going for, you pretty much nailed it, though personally, I think shorter pauses here would be better. You do have a handsome natural voice.

    Technically, it sounds like you're rather too close to the mic as your plosive "p"s are very loud and the resonance is a little bass-heavy too. 6-9 inches away and the mic should pick you up just fine.

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    Biography

    Script:

    Let the stars shine this holiday season and all year long. Give Biography and save! Get one year for just $18. That’s almost half off the cover price! Just call 1-800-323-9264 today. Biography. Every life has a story.

    33 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Elisa's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-50479/script-recording-53228.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Elisa,

    You have a wonderful voice, it's warm and inviting. I thought that you could have added a little more emotion into your read, it sounded a little monotone. Picture in your mind, what you are reading. Really see the stars shinning. Punch, or color the adjectives in the script. Keep practicing, I have learned so much from this Awesome forum! Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Carol for listening, and for the great suggestions.

    Yes, this is a wonderful forum, for so many reasons!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice upbeat read. Try the first sentence without taking a breath in the middle, kinda breaks up the thought rather than adding on to it. I hear even more perky-ness in your voice than what I got. Not ditzie, but really go for it. Real high energy. Tell me how great this is. This is the bestest thing you could give anyone for the holidays!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James for the feedback. Good point about that breath. And I like your way with words, haha.

    Peer Feedback:

    To my ears, I heard a person who simply read it to no one in particular. I hoped to hear more energy and a variation in inflection.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Eisa,
    You've gotten some very good advice here. I really liked the way you said "today!" An upward inflection is often preferred with ads like this, and you nailed that part. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Sabrina and Javier for the valuable feedback. I'm going to work on this and my other reads based on the helpful advice presented here. It has really helped me pinpoint the weak and strong points.

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    Book Promo

    Script:

    Grab your seat for audit success and learn about the traits of those who have earned the trust of top executives!

    Read Trusted Advisors: Key Attributes of Outstanding Internal Auditors, the latest book from The I-I-A’s President and C-E-O Richard Chambers.

    45 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for authoritative, deep, positive announcer

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94561.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    clear, concise, very well read! Not to sing song-songy....WELL DONE!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken, great job with the announcer! I wonder if you approched it with the subtext of actually announcing a big corporate event. It may help to add not just energy, but excitement to your read.

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    Branding Video

    Script:

    This should feel like a conversation with a friend, not a sales pitch or a sermon.

    Sample Script
    We are builders of the future.
    We are environmental stewards.
    We are energized by challenges,
    Undaunted by obstacles

    91 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Laney's recording

    I feel like I'm emoting and putting my all into it, but sound kind of flat.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-53002/script-recording-91363.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Beautiful tone quality and recording quality is excellent. Felt like it lacked the flow of conversation, or like you were reading each line as a single unit rather than part of a whole - if that makes sense.

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a little ethereal sounding, a little otherworldly, like describing a dream.

    If you were talking to a friend and these thoughts were coming spontaneously to your mind, you would be forming the concepts and images in maybe a halting way - not knowing exactly what word you might use next, but it still has to flow and sound personal.

    In this I hear a line. Then the next line. Then the next line. Then the last line.
    I don't hear a mind thinking.

    I need an ED on the end of "energized"

    The sound quality is a bit muffled, un-crisp. Sort of like you're talking through a towel between you and the microphone. It also sounds like you're either using a noise gate or are cutting out sounds between the sentences and leaving total silence. I could be wrong (I often am) but my bet is a noise gate of some kind (maybe a de-breather) because it's ever-so-slightly snipping of the ends of some words.

    Peer Feedback:

    Lisa and James, thanks for your feedback.

    My understanding of the instructions is that there will be a video with employees speaking and that each line will introduce the next video.

    I'm not satisfied with the time it takes me to edit. I've found that if I normalize, the noise floor in the spaces is too loud. I have normalized only the text and left the beginning and end as is and then cut and paste from the end on each pause and breath. I'm not silencing but using the room noise. It's pretty tedious but I don't know what else to do. My DAW dial is at 2pm (I don't have numbers). If I put it higher, I get more noise. I have two pop screens to minimize plosives and hard c's. I also use Base and Treble in Effects in Audacity that seems to give it a richer sound.

    I'm in a closet with good wall coverings. I have a vent above me that may be causing a little noise. I covered it loosely and put foam against it.

    Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    One misnomer (or mistake) people have (or make) is: "If I record at a lower input level, then there is less noise in the recording." Well, as you have discovered, when you normalize up to -3dB from a lower input level, it also raises the noise level - and that includes the noise level underlying the vocal. It's is always in there, you just don't hear it as much at a lower volume level.That's why you should normalize first, then take a noise sample from that to use for your NR. However, if your noise level is too much (the frequencies are too loud) and you lessen or eliminate them, you might create sonic artifacts in the vocal - what sounds like talking into a metal tube - because some of those frequencies are also in your vocal range and are being lessened or cut out as well.

    The only "cure" for that that I know of is to get your recording environment as dead as you possibly can and record at an input level approaching -6dB or better. Understand that you can't possibly totally eliminate noise only lessen it, it's always there. Also understand that "noise" isn't always room noise. It can also be "line noise" or electronic interference of some kind - a bad cable, a faulty microphone (unbalanced impedance), florescent lighting and the like.

    Many people use Audacity because, first of all it's free, and relatively simple to use. But it is worth taking the time watching instructional videos on YouTube or taking a class to better understand how to fine tune it for your particular voice - adding NR, compression, EQ, etc. for richer and fuller sound to your recordings.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, thanks for help.

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    Brandon Oaks

    Script:

    Brandon Oaks

    Brandon Oaks is more than everything you'd want in a place to retire. It's everything you'd want in a place to live. Elegant surroundings. Plenty of activity. Great people. And because Brandon Oaks is a Lifecare community, you have peace-of-mind, knowing that your future healthcare needs will be taken care of. Brandon Oaks, conveniently located in the heart of it all.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mhoffman97@verizon.net's recording

    How did I do?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-14327/script-recording-49833.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello fellow Hoffman!!!!!!
    Really like your voice... you sound very friendly and comforting!!!!
    You replaced the word anything for the first everything.... then there was a stutter on "want in a place to live"
    Other than that you sound great!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - read too slowly, it was not a believable read for me. Good try. Keep at it.

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    Bull Riding Toy

    Script:

    Inside every world class bull rider is a child-like faith...and inside the heart of every child lives world championship dreams…

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for the style of a laid back Texan. Sort of like Sam Elliott.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-93351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you achieved what you were going for. I heard some "Nick Searcy in Justified" also. The question is whether that's right for this script. :-)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there -- this is a practice demo -- working on my southern accent. Looking for feedback on performance, sound, and overall recording quality. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-97998.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think if you want to go for understated, charming and folksy, this is absolutely perfect (which is great because that's going to be what a lot of scripts ask for).

    But for this script: Luckiest day of your entire life, you're mystified and then there's a bit of jovial hyperbole with "richest man alive" over a bottle of whiskey.

    Listen back and see if you can find opportunities to inject a little more fun, smile and tone changes into this read. The opening line could definitely use a little more smile and fun to pull us in.

    You can keep the understated tone through most of it, it really was fantastic, just find those little spots for little, but impactful tone changes.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love it. I think the performance is great, but just to add a little fun, pull your mouth into a wry smile on "I reckoned I was the richest man", like you're going to tell a little in-joke to your audience. It will connect the audience to you a little more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback folks -- great tips -- much appreciated!

    Peer Feedback:

    you have skills. this sounded great.
    I wouldn't change a thing.
    Great sound quality too.

    cheers,
    DS

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    Cancer Free Anniversary

    Script:

    Today, my friends are throwing me a party. They do it every year on this date. It's not my birthday, but it's the fifth anniversary of the day I was told my cancer was in remission. And it's a day I thought I would never see.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear maria.makis's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3764/script-recording-29200.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like it a lot. You didn't play up the party aspect, you just went into your feelings.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a great voice for this, but now you need to learn to relax a little but more. Essentially, you're pushing really hard with your voice and audibly putting a lot of effort in, and it makes the read feel very unnatural. Try to loosen up a bit, you're working too hard! Have a little more fun; imagine you're talking to a friend whose sitting right next to you when you read.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear wendiebell's recording

    I am new to all of this. I am just looking for direction really. And constructive feedback. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-19524/script-recording-45521.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Really great work! Nice dictation, great emotion... the music fits well (though it isn't quite the right length for the copy, but that's a minor issue)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Wendie!
    Lovely read, good pace, great clarity and you had subtle variations for each word in the list which is very important. Keep it up!
    Niki

    Peer Feedback:

    A really nice read for the most part. You speak clearly and have a very pleasant voice. Your read had some really nice qualities. However, the recording quality is something you'll want to work on. Your recording is overly-bright or sibilant. Your 's' sounds really 'zing' on my monitors and my headphones. Worse on my headphones. Not knowing how you record, it's hard to advise on the matter. But if you're adding EQ and pushing up the treble range...definitely don't do that!

    Nice early post!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    More heartfelt that the last one. Small hitch in "it made h-her strong"...I left it in. all comments welcome same sound chain description as before.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2126/script-recording-87392.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds really pro to me. Maybe work on emphasizing different words, as sometimes it seems there are words that should be highlighted more than others. And maybe work a little on making it warmer, like you really care about this person and we should too :) Minor adjustments, overall sounds really great. Hope that helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    thanks for the comment, AA.
    appreciated. the pitfalls of self-direction; it can always use an outside opinion.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave, nice read as an Emcee for an awards ceremony. I guess that was where you were going with this (applause fx, musicbed etc). If you were a friend announcing the arrival of Carrie, I think there was be more emotion to it. If this was a rep for an organization, the would be a mood change/shift at around 25 secs announcing her arrival to the stage. A couple of small details (finishing the "g" on strong), and tightening up the phrasing a bit in a couple of areas. Overall a great read tho. Very nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    TMM -
    great direction, very much appreciated and exactly what I'm looking for.
    this was an emcee thing.
    I'm going to go back and walk through the details of your input.

    cheers!
    DS

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    CBS Short

    Script:

    Script:

    This CBS Sports telecast is brought to you by Wells Fargo.... together we'll go far.

    19 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    I was inspired by SabrinasVoice. She did such a nice job on it, I wanted to give it a whirl.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-28206.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job!

    Sabrina did a good job too and I liked her performance, but with this script, sound effects and a sports-like music bed blends in perfectly.

    You're doing a lot of different reads lately and very well. Good performance!

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job Nodo,
    I liked the break after together. Nice piece.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments. I was trying for the football game kind of thing. Halftime at the Superbowl brought to you by Gilette, except with of course Wells Fargo. Was trying to time it and get the CBS Sports, Wells Fargo and catch line "We'll go far..." all to kind of stand out. hard when there are like 7 words to the script!

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    CBS Sports 1

    Script:

    This CBS Sports telecast is brought to you by Wells Fargo.... together we'll go far.

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Gary Ericson's recording

    I remixed my contest entry to see if I could make it better, especially pulling the music further back. Would love comment on the voice (a VO newbie) as well as the production quality and choices.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5183/script-recording-24472.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wearing the cans when I hit play and had the volume up so it nearly made me jump out of my seat. I think the your voice is competing with the background a little too much particularly when the stage coach comes riding through the scene.

    Billboarding the client name sounded good but the tag line gets a little lost due to the stage coach FX.

    Drop that back a little more and I think you have a winner, just don't start off a demo with it, I think. That stinger really comes as a surprise when your not ready for it. Maybe ramp up to it with a short fade of something matching and complimentary so the listener is prepared for it. Unless your intention is to scare the snot out of them, then leave it how it is.

    my 2 cents.

    Wren

    Peer Feedback:

    How 'bout drop the music and keep sfx of the coach

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, sorry about the opening blast. Didn't mean to scare anyone snotless. :-) Definitely need to watch that. I kept pulling the music down, but I guess I never did enough. I wonder if it's 2 things: not confident with my voice and so being afraid to have it exposed, and looking to the music to provide the energy in a piece like this. Gotta think about that.

    I was kind of proud of the coach - pieced it together from 3 different fx. That's why I liked this exercise.

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    CBS Sports 1

    Script:

    This CBS Sports telecast is brought to you by Wells Fargo.... together we'll go far.

    26 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Murray O's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6210/script-recording-23952.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Thought it sounded very good, one of the better reads I had heard in the contest. I don't want to critique since the contest is still on and I did enter as well. But I think you have a good chance!

    Peer Feedback:

    Have a good voice for sports intros. The only things I would suggest is turn down the gain on the music a bit, it's over whelming your voice. And the last word "Far" seems over emphatic.

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    Church Volunteering

    Script:

    We are surrounded by people separated from God; people without hope who need a change. People like Dave . . . filled with doubts, loneliness, hurt, skepticism, emptiness.

    What if you could help make a change? Would you do something small to make a big impact?

    78 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    This is a promo to be presented to church members and to encourage them to volunteer. Going for warm, compassionate and then slightly upbeat in the last two sentences.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94238.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there! I thought it sounded good. Maybe a tiny bit difference in between the "loneliness, hurt". Overall sounds good. Keep doing you.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you succeeded in being warm and compassionate; definitely felt that. To add to the prior comment, I think a bigger difference in the way you read all 5 of the items in the list would help. Noticed a slightly different read for "emptiness", but the rest were pretty much the same. I think that would make the list more interesting. But overall, a really nice feel to it.

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    Classical 98.6 - WCLX

    Script:

    CLASSICAL MUSIC STATION
    (Rock Music – Screaming Guitar, Rock Beat)
    Some days, I wanna ROCK!
    (Downer Blues Song)
    Other days, I get the BLUES.
    (Elevator Music – Big yawn)
    EASY LISTENING makes me sleepy.
    (Shouting over grinding Heavy Metal or Rap)
    AND SOME OF THIS NEW STUFF JUST GIVES ME A HEADACHE!
    (Something recognizably Classical, Mozart or Bach)
    But CLASSICAL MUSIC is always just right.
    98.6 - WCLX.
    CLASSICAL MUSIC that’s always just right.

    19 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I wrote this and put it together weeks ago, thinking that it might eventually work on my demo. But at 30 seconds, I think it's just too long. But it was fun to do and I didn't want all that work to go to waste, so I'm posting it here for your reactions.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-47480.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed this one James, very good job. Just curious why you toned it down so much at the meat of the script. WCLX sounds like the elevator music station.
    Merry Christmas, Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    Still figuring out how to be intimate with the mic and give more voice and energy. A lot of the "DJ's" at the big classical station here in NYC are pretty laid-back and mellow (except when they're asking for money). I went with that example. I'm going to keep playing with this 'cause it's a lot of fun.

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't really dig the script that much...but you should back off the echo. Are you recording in GarageBand? If you are, don't use any of the presets -- they all add echo to some degree.

    Peer Feedback:

    Brian - Just fooling around with the echo. Knew it might be a bit too much. As for the script. If I hadn't posted that it was of my own creation, would you have knocked it? Would you go into a recording session and criticize the copy? Or would you pass on the job? I'm not being defensive. One of the consistancies I'm taking away from the lessons from Edge (and in the on-camera and theatre world) is that actors (voice actors included) have to make something from the text they're given. Success or failure depends on that.

    Peer Feedback:

    I guess I said that I wasn't digging the script because you stated that you wrote it -- it wasn't meant to be insulting. I probably wouldn't have auditioned for that one. But you are right that the talent doesn't get editing rights. I've recorded a couple of times where I was able to contact the customer and make suggestions for improvements, but that's because I was self-producing. Sometimes ya gotta play with those who brung ya.

    Peer Feedback:

    Brian - No offence taken. I have a pretty thick skin. I was trying a "Goldilocks and the Three Bears" approach to selling a classical radio station. I may have gone overbaord with too many bears. 3 jokes work, 4 is pushing it. And there's the possibility that it wasn't even that funny anyhow. But it gave me a little bit of pleasure just putting it together. Who knows, maybe somewhere down the line I might still be able to get it to work.

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    clem the prospector- Nebrasks Lottery

    Script:

    Clem the Prospector - Nebraska Lottery"

    Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin in this old mountain here.
    The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.

    101 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mikep1's recording

    Just wondering if the voice sounds authentic?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed the character you went for

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Mike,

    Character sounded authentic ! Recording quality was a little echoey? I got a tip from this site and have used it. I bought some moving blankets from Harbor Freight, about 7-8.00 per blanket. Hung them up on the window nearest my microphone, very sufficient! One thing I have noticed Mike we're always learning , there is a lot of support here in all aspects of voice over here at Edge Studios.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the performance; not so over the top as to distract from the message. It sounds also as though you made a good choice in stepping back from the microphone, looking for a more realistic sound. Just need to deaden the room a bit as already mentioned.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the positive feedback,I will be buying the moving blankets soon.

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    98 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Andres Berrio's recording

    Just hoping to get some feedback on my approach and the sound quality. Thanks for all the insight!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I know that this is about football (and I'm a huge football fan) And I think I understand what your approach is. You're the coach giving the locker room pregame pep talk. But this is a little too "in your face" for my taste, even for a football promo. You're scaring me, not enticing me.

    But it might not be if it wasn't taken so seriously and delivered in a little more of a tongue-in-cheek way - way, way over-the-top and with a touch of comic parody - but also with the sincere honesty of this guy as a "true believer" in the religion of Colorado Buffalo Football.

    But this "real guy" sounds more angry than "rah, rah team" to me. It's like you're chewing me out because I don't share your passion, rather than the pride you have in and want me to experience with Colorado Buffalo Football.

    You're also probably pegging into the red by punching the words so hard, actually assaulting my eardrums. It also muddies up the delivery where some of the words get mangled and/or are unintelligible.

    There is also a low level noise, a scratchiness, underlying the recording. It may be an amplification of the line noise or ambient background noise. And a little popping of plosives here and there.

    It also seems that the script is incomplete, that the ending is missing. There's a list of four, but no "and this final thing" to cap it off. No, "So, come out to the stadium to see blah blah blah take on blah blah blah in the biggest game of the year!" kind of thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    An interesting choice for a script...like James, I had the feeling I was being scolded. Your voice sounds quite suitable for this type of read. Try it again and scale back a bit. Pretend you're talking to me - or your sister - who's only luke-warm about football. Excited but not angry.

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    Commercial with a Friendly, Storyteller Voice

    Script:

    RAISE YOUR HAND...
    IF YOU’VE WATCHED THE SUN RISE…
    PLANTED A CROP…
    HELD A CHICK…
    CHASED A COW…
    BURIED A FOUR-WHEELER.

    ALABAMA FARM CREDIT’S RIGHT
    THERE WITH YOU.

    WE COMPLETELY UNDERSTAND THE LOVE
    OF COUNTRY....

    FINANCING THE THINGS YOU NEED TO GROW
    LIKE LAND…

    LIVESTOCK…

    SEED…

    AND EQUIPMENT.

    WHEN YOU’RE READY TO RAISE THE STEAKS...
    WE’RE THE ONES RAISING OUR HANDS TO
    HELP.

    ALABAMA FARM CREDIT.

    96 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for a warm, friendly "storyteller" style

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-95553.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I believe you need to be more enthusiastic yet friendly

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is not bad. As for performance, I would agree that pacing and emotion are much needed.

    Peer Feedback:

    You might take it a bit more "to the country" ... put on a Stetson & boots, wrap a bandana around your neck (or forehead) slip a single stalk of hay between your teeth, think Dixie, pick-'em-up trucks, banjo, fiddle, and then re-try the read. In other words, pard...loosen up a little, you'll be just fine. Wishing you much success. ...bob

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    Conestoga Continuing Education

    Script:

    In today’s competitive job market upgrading your knowledge and skills can help you stand out from the crowd. Whether you’re looking for a single course, or an entire program, Continuing Education at Conestoga can boost your career.

    Continuing Education is structured with you in mind. We understand the need for flexibility, so you can work around other priorities, like your full-time job and family commitments.

    107 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    Hi folks. I have an on-going challenge with my "voice" age vs. my "real" age. So I need some help and or suggestions from as many of you as possible. When I see an audition that seems "comfortable" for me and says they want a voice say, between 25-35 yrs old or 35-45, it presents a quandary for me. First it's best to be yourself and authentic. I've been told I have a youthful voice for my age (More on that later). So, how old do I actually sound? What does 25 or 35 or whatever age actually sound like? What is an age appropriate script for me? (Hint, I am NOT 35 or even close). Do I sound 45, 55, 65. See my dilemma? I need others in our profession to judge me on this. I'm thanking you ahead of time, and apologize for the lengthy prelude. In a later post I'll tell you my real age (If that's kosher on here) and then perhaps I can determine what the best "age" auditions to do naturally. I can do many character voices, but that's another genre completely and I don't want to confuse those with straight reads. This was an audition that simply said natural and good energy, Middle-aged (whatever that means these days). Thanks so much for your patience! Of course, critique this performance and sound quality as usual. There are so many real pros, beginners and in-betweeners here and I value each and every opinion. Many thanks! - PSJ

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    Peer Feedback:

    I hear you loud and clear!

    You read well, good diction, pacing and all that stuff. As for your voice; had I not read your post first, I may have guessed you were in your mid-30s/early 40s...

    As for auditions seeking 25 year olds... err on the side of yes, because the tone of your voice borders that 25-35 year old range. Your voice is charming-sounding enough which might possibly convince tee totaling producers a second listen.

    Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You start at around 25 then move into the 45 range by the end.

    You have a brightness that's higher up in the throat at the start, and then you begin to sink into this lower "dad" register near the end.

    So you can do both, once you get the control down.

    Peer Feedback:

    First, I would caution you not to reveal your true age.

    A good deal of vocal expression is in the energy, intensity, pitch and inflection. Age appropriate copy, in some instances, may just be a state of mind and/or attitude and not necessarily reflective of one's actual time on this earth.

    There's a story I was told recently straight from the horse's mouth. There's a voice actor (we'll call him Bob, for that is his real name) who has been in the business for over 40 years - you've probably heard him and hundreds of his voices on nationally broadcast commercials. (Personal note: I actually booked a job with Bob recently.)

    Anyway. He was booked for a job from an audition his agent submitted. When he showed up for the session at the studio, the person who cast him for the commercial took one look at him, called his agent (right in front of Bob) and said, "I asked for a 20-something for this spot. Why did you send me this old man?"

    Bob was booked (hired) from what he "sounded" like from his audition. Bob is in his late 70's and can still cut it as a 20-something. He did the gig.

    Yes, we should all have some idea of where we fit in (age range wise) as voice actors and realize what limitations (and strengths) we may have AND how others hear (or see) us. But, occasionally, it is an interesting exercise to step outside that box and push the envelope (to mix metaphors). (Incidentally, that is why I do not think it wise to have an actual photo of yourself on your VO website or business cards. Whether we like it or not, there is a certain visual prejudice, or at least a pre-judge-ness.)

    As far as this read goes. There's a difference in "going for" a young-ish sounding voice and "being" or inhabiting the character of a young person (voice). There's energy here, but it is a little forced and sing-songy. So the impression left is one of, "This guy is trying to sound young and hip," rather than just "being" young and hip.

    The timber and quality of your voice is young adult to adult - grad student to young dad. But with a different piece of copy about an entirely different subject, you may sound older (more world weary) or younger ("Ev'rything Is Awesome" to quote the song).

    The copy is perfectly fine for you. You just need to give it YOU and not some vision of what you think a young hipster might be like. It's in the personal investment and the person you're addressing.

    Who are you? A career counselor? Someone on staff at Conestoga?
    Who are you talking to? A new student who can't decide on a major? OR, since it's continuing ed, another adult who is fed up with their dead end 9-5 job and who is going back to school for retraining in another field?

    Effectively and honestly communicating that breaks the boundaries of age-range-ness.

    Peer Feedback:

    It is so funny bean, I mastered the art of aging 20 years in 24 seconds. Actually after I originally recorded this I had another listen the next night. I picked up some background noise that I missed before, (truck driving by my studio). So, I rerecorded the last half or third of the audition at night. Matching the exact processing or voice tone is not easy or advisable. I eventually sent another version that was done all at once and more uniform. This version was sent here as an exercise and to get suggestions, without the truck noise. But I do sound deeper towards the end, my voice is naturally deeper and "older sounding" at night without trying. Gives you an idea how my voice can naturally fluctuate in tone (Is that normal) ?
    James, I removed my picture from my website awhile ago for the exact reasons you mentioned. I do however have a "caricature" that in no way gives away my age, generic male. (My age shall remain a mystery)! Gotta say, either 25 or 45 (I wish) is a complement bean and Jimmy. It's been really difficult for me to judge my own voice, so thanks to all for your input and time.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you gave a good read. I don't have the best trained ear, but I was hearing someone in their later 30's early 40's. There was a grandpa sweetness I was hearing. I was hearing someone akin to Bunsin Honeydew from the muppets, a familiar, academic, friendly voice. I hope that helps, any at all with vocal.

    Peer Feedback:

    You've only mastered it when you can do it on command ;)

    But knowing that your voice is deeper later in the day is really important. So I don't need the idea -you do! lol If someone wants that deeper voice, you know you need to be recorded later in the day, savvy? Yes, very normal.

    To do pick ups like this, you need to be aware of vocal placement, and train your ear to hear the differences in your voice, and correct them. But if it were to cover noise for practice, I'd just do the whole thing over again.

    You'll know you've mastered it when you can do the full age exercise (100 to a child) and keep it in control the whole time! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,

    Your voice is wonderful and clear. The age I would guess is someone in their mid 50's, but in a good way. It's very wise and friendly sounding, like someone I would trust to tell me the truth. Your inflections are really well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, what James said re: acting it out and how this got pitchy on you. I thought you sounded about 40, maybe even 45 at the end in a Casey Kasem kind of vibe.

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed your read. You have a warm and trusting voice. Based upon this material I would guess you are in the 55-65 year old range.

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    Connecticut Lottery

    Script:

    I couldn’t stop laughing. I mean me…win the lottery? I couldn’t believe it! I mean, at first, I figured it was just my husband…or even a couple friends playing a joke on me. But when they gave me the money…well then I knew it was for real. I’ve been playing those same numbers for about 2 years…and wow…it really can pay off. The Connecticut lottery…somebody’s gotta win.

    70 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LJDaniels's recording

    I have been working on my recording space and hope that I haven't picked up much noise. I have also been working on reducing my mouth noise and harsh Ts. Also, performance wise, I am trying to work on my timing. I get too speedy. Finally, if you would suggest the adjectives for my voice I would love to hear the input.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-108042/script-recording-85383.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You're about 6 seconds too long. This is probably a 30 second radio spot. Could also be for TV, but it's still probably a 30 second spot.

    A lot of people see ellipsis marks (,,,) and assume that it means to pause or break the sentence up. Not necessarily always the case. For instance: In a play or movie dialogue, the ellipsis marks often mean an interrupted or overlapping conversation.

    And that's the kind of thing it means here. You're excited about winning the lottery. So much so that you can barely take a breath to tell me about it - you're giddy with happiness and almost overlapping yourself - "a fast talker" as they would say on Seinfeld. That's the charm of the piece and projects the excitement. Just ignore all (well almost all) of the punctuation and plow on until the end with as much joy and amazement as you can muster.

    I don't think you're recording hot enough, the volume was kind of low. Either that or you need to normalize to a -3dB peak. The sound is also a little "dry", in that I'm not hearing the total richness of your voice - it's almost an AM radio sound, lacking a certain "body" to it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, James. I tend to go through copy TOO fast, so I actually went in and added pauses to compensate on this one. It didn't sound right to me, but I questioned myself. I should stop second guessing my instinct.
    I played around with my mixer settings for this recording and felt it made me sound a little tinny, but wanted other opinions (again, second guessing).
    Thank you so much for your input.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is one of those pieces of copy where it almost doesn't matter what the words are so much as getting the attitude, excitement and punch line (the tag) right. So, ripping through it wouldn't necessarily be a bad thing. Make me excited for you and along with you, even though I didn't win - so I will maybe next time. Imagine that your husband is standing next to you and can't get in a word edgewise. So he just has this dopey grin on his face at the end, like it's perfectly normal behavior for you.

    That's subtext - creating the situation in your mind's eye. The where, what, who, when, etc.

    As far as production goes. Always listen back through a good pair of headphones. Play around with your processing, but don't go overboard. Subtle is better. It just sounded like you took a lot of the "life" out of the sound. Others on the Forum are more tech savvy than I am, so you might offer up what your process is - mic, interface, computer, software, FX processing, etc. It may be that your processing chain order may need to be rearranged or something.

    Peer Feedback:

    I am going to try to get in the studio and redo this one today so that I can have you compare (if you don't mind). I want to make sure I can take the advice I get and put it to good use.

    Thank you again!

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    CONRAD BRAND VIDEO SCRIPT

    Script:

    VO: What does it mean to stay inspired?
    VO: It’s in our DNA.
    VO: Staying inspired is having the freedom to relax…think…create
    VO: …in a place where everything is done just the way you expect it to be.
    VO : It’s finding somewhere to imagine
    VO: …things that have never been seen before…and things we will see one day.
    VO: It’s gathering inspiration…
    VO: …in the world around you…and around the corner.
    VO: After all, it’s not just where you stay, it’s how you stay

    SUPER: Never just stay. Stay inspired.

    80 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear valrock's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107125/script-recording-85163.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    In your defense, I have seen scripts like this with VO: and N: (usually NARRATOR:). Copy writers are funny that way sometimes. And it's hard to read, broken up that way. However you should learn the terminology and nomenclature of a script like this.

    Sometimes there are other characters who will be listed (especially if it's an on-camera spot - radio will specify who is who) and/or actions and/or directions included in the script. So, the VO: will be clearly marked as such, and sometimes the text will be printed in bold type. The others will look something like: MAN 1: or MAMMA BEAR: or FX: or MUSIC: etc.

    However a SUPER: is strictly a visual, like a logo or slogan that appears printed on the screen which is not spoken unless that slogan is preceded by VO:, in which case both VO: and SUPER: will appear on the page on their own separate lines. But, generally, the SUPER: is not part of the VO. Think of the Nike swoosh with the "Just Do It!" slogan. It's usually the last thing that appears on the screen, but there's no voice under it. That's a SUPER.

    Also, the ellipsis marks are like visual place holders - it's a way for the copy writer to indicate that something is happening on the screen that needs to be synced-up with the VO. But not necessarily for pauses so much as for emphasis and/or pacing. Copy writers are funny that way too.

    One last thing. Unless it's required by the client or casting person, there's no need to slate with the product/service because you will have labeled your MP3 properly with that information, and sometimes the client/casting person will tell you specifically how they want your submissions labeled right down to the extra characters like an underscore, period or dash between the script title and your name. The client already knows what their product/service is, no need to tell them. However, if you are a character VO, you will slate your name and then the character. Example slate: "Your Name (pause) MAMMA BEAR" (beat) then go into the copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the quality of your voice. It's clear and very pleasant to listen to. However, I thought the overall energy of the piece was too low. The copy is about inspiration and inspiration is upbeat. Also, to piggy back off the previous critique I thought your pauses were a bit too long which interrupted the flow of the piece. I think if you work on it a bit you can come up with a really nice read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the last comment. I didn't feel inspired by the sound of your voice. I thought it was easy to listen to but need much more of an upbeat vocal. good luck with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Valerie,

    Your voice is crisp and clear. The spot is about inspiration and your delivery was a touch on the side of monotone in spots. Best of luck

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    Construction Promo

    Script:

    9 to 5.... never heard of it.

    I consider myself a 5 to 9 guy.

    Up with the sun, coffee in hand heading to the next job site.

    Though I don't wear a blue shirt, my collar is still blue. -

    Hard working, nose to the grind stone, honest kind of guy.

    Some days your digging a hole and others your building your way out of one.

    No matter what the day is, your always busting your ass to try and get ahead

    And that's the reason it's all worth it.­

    It's hot and it's tough but it's all in a day's work.

    NoLimits

    NoExcuses

    NoSweat

    84 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Trying to sound like the no-nonsense, hard-working, blue collar guy for a construction promo.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97418.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken I love the even tone of your voice, super smooth! Recording quality is good also... On performance, if I were hiring for this spot, I think I would want more modulation in your voice - maybe a bit of edge in the beginning where you say your a 5-9 guy, I want to smell that coffee you love when everyone else is still asleep... more intensity when you talk about "busting your ass" and relief that it is "all worth it" -- hope this helps!

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    59 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesdoit1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104406/script-recording-82395.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Since you're new here, I'll let you in on an unwritten rule of the contests. Asking advice for your read on the current contest is considered uncool as it's supposed to reflect what YOU would submit as an audition or end product. Asking everyone here about it would get to where multiple people--if not all--would do the same and basically flood the forum with the contest. And the forum was/isn't intended for that.

    So, if you're wanting opinions on your contest entry, you should submit it at the earliest after the deadline for submitting corrections/updates/new submissions to the contest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the heads up.

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    Corporate Video Narration

    Script:

    When you first start trying for a baby it can be the most exciting time in your life, it’s only natural to feel a little impatient for it to happen soon.

    Couples around the world are planning their families around their career, financial situation, or other siblings.

    But are you aware that one of the key reasons it can take longer to get pregnant is that you may be missing the small number of fertile days in every cycle when it is possible to conceive.

    75 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear holly.chou's recording

    I booked the first two auditions I submitted to voice123, but on this one, I was ranked 14th out of 32. From the instructions: "...corporate / promotional video project...The project is geared around pregnancy and ovulation tests...will discuss what products can help you know your body better. We are looking for a professional tone of voice which is educational, accessible, clear and engaging. This voiceover should optimise empathy between the brand and the viewer. The style of delivery will be documentary in style. We are not looking for a voice style that seems patronising in any way." I tried to keep it "clear" and "professional" while still remaining "engaging" and "empathetic." I also tried to slow my pace, which is usually too fast. Worried that I ended up sounding too stiff as a result.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2306/script-recording-42888.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's clear, it's professional, but it's a bit stiff which lessens the engaging and empathetic. If you put more energy into it physically, I think it'd do you a world of good. You have a great voice, keep it up. :]

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice voice Holly, good clear quality, however, I have my volume cranked up higher than normal. I would suggest to add a little amplification or compression. According to the directors notes I think you did an excellent job. Maybe if you relaxed a tad and had just a little bit of fun with the script it may have helped? Who knows, I guess you can't win them all. Take care.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wouldn't be too disconcerted by the Voice123 ranking. If it happens regularly you may need to take a closer look at, not only your vocal, but possibly your sound. The pay to play sites never provide helpful feedback on what's not acceptable with your audition. So you have to consider everything. For me I found it was my sound. After some new equipment and some expense I was able to remedy the problem.
    A word of caution: A client is likely to take a very dim view of posting their pre-production script material. You don't need a law suit or loss of a paid subscription. I have a subscription to both Voices.com and Voices123.com and make it a policy to never post material from those sites.

    Peer Feedback:

    What Richurd stated about making public a pre-production script is good advice. I did one read for a company that required that I sign a NDA before they even let me see the script. Depending on the producer or the company, you might find someone getting litigious.

    Peer Feedback:

    You booked your first 2 jobs that you auditioned for on VOICES 123..Thats great!! You have a great voice..you will do well in this business. Practice your flow. Keep up the good work!

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    Corporate Video

    Script:

    Carl loves owning a small business and makes sure he provides the best service to his customers. But Carl has a dirty little secret… he’s a hoarder – of paper.

    He stores his customer’s records himself and it’s REALLY getting out of control. But he doesn’t know what to keep, for how long, or where to keep it all– putting himself and his customers at risk.

    Don’t let storing your customers records be a nightmare. C’mon Carl, you’re better than this. Let Iron Mountain be the answer to your problem. When it comes to storing customer information, join the “DDIY” movement, and Don’t do it yourself.

    Iron Mountain For Small Business: Records Management, Secure Shredding.....Piece of Mind

    Contact them today!

    66 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    While the audience for this promo is business owners, still just going for a casual, fun delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94562.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, clear read! The audio quality seems to be right on par, and my one suggestion would be to relax and make it a more converstaional read. There is a noticeable shift in halfway through the copy where you are no longer giving background information on Carl, you are actually talking to him. So imagine the scenario where it's you, Carl, and one other person having a conversation: how would that sound? If you wanna take it a step farther towards humor, maybe you are holding an intervention to save Carl from his hoarding ways.

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    Cybersecurity Promo

    Script:

    We are constantly under attack.
    Every minute, of every day
    Threats are all around us.
    Some lurk in the shadows.
    Some don't even know they pose a threat.
    An attack is inevitable.
    The time for protecting tomorrow is today.
    You need an advanced threat detection, protection and intelligence platform...
    ...
    So your network remains secure, and your world stays safe.
    Protect your tomorrow, with OPSWAT.

    102 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Tried to make it dramatic in the beginning then finish with it being uplifting and reassuring.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97315.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    For this commercial you may need to sound more like you're having a conversation with the consumer rather that commanding. The sound quality is good but there are places where you voice should reflect some type of emotion-I.e the time for protecting is today. Thanks for the post and good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    This could do with a heightened sense of urgency. Not so much volume as emotion and intensity. Picture someone you care about whose safety is at risk and plead with them to be more careful. ... Great job!

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    Dark Souls III

    Script:

    Your time has come. All things must pass.
    Protectors are saved. Intruders… slayed.
    You have to yet to realize your true purpose.
    You must persevere.
    Dark Souls 3.

    Embrace the darkness on PC, Xbox One, and Playstation 4.

    106 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    This was a fun one. I took a really close stance to the mike. Perhaps only 1.5 inches between my mouth, filter, and the mike. I had to play around with the Gain quite a bit to make sure I wasn't peaking, and used some post processing to even it out. A bit of characterization in performance. I went for an aggressive, almost soldier like character. Fully glaring into the microphone. Imagine a grizzled knight staring into the face of a new recruit who has no idea about the battles that are about to await him. Script interpretation was simply building the story up in the listener's mind. Let me know what you think! As always, any feedback / criticism is always appreciated. Thx

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-93388.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Before listening to your recording, I also recorded with my own voice and recorded with the same tonality you use. I thought you did a nice job, I'm very new to VO, but as a consumer of gaming systems, the sound of your voice really set the stage.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Phyl.

    i'm about 2 years into voice over, but I still haven't managed a full time career out of it.! I've met some wonderful people here, and I always suggest posting, or checking back often, because there is so much great advice and talented people here. You'll learn a lot of Dos and Don'ts of V.O here, so keep working at it and try to do your absolute best! Good luck man!

    Peer Feedback:

    From my rookie VO perspective this was pretty awesome ..

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome read; would just make it a little faster for each line. Pauses between lines sounded right on.

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    13 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dennis conklin's recording

    I know I have a lot of improvements to make voice and engineering. I appreciate any constructive criticisms anyone would like to offer. I have more demos at dennisconklinvoice.com, but this is my lead in demo and I need to improve on it asap if I'm going to have a chance in securing more gigs! Thanks Tons!! Dennis

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-14484/script-recording-37241.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dennis -

    You clearly have talent, and my suggestions are minor. Speaking broadly - while I like the energy you're bringing, it seems to drift in and out a bit, and I feel like you lose some of the enthusiasm that you create. This tends to lead to a more
    "scripted" sound, and I lose the interest. Relax, but get animated. Never waver your commitment to the copy throughout the take, and really concentrate on being just as animated and enthusiastic with the last syllable as the first. Even if every syllable isn't emphasized, you absolutely have to make sure it's at least there and audible...I lose some in this recording. Another small thing - these spots are all presenting a very similar sound. If you can and want to market yourself more broadly, you might want to vary the bed a bit more, and maybe showcase different pacings, etc. Also, bring down the bed music or boost the vocals on your "spirituality.com" spot, I'm losing the words. That's really the only recording issue I can hear; I think you sell yourself short a bit!

    Again, these are small things. Your talent and ability are there, absolutely. Good luck to you!

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    30 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dennis conklin's recording

    I know I have a lot of improvements to make voice and engineering. I appreciate any constructive criticisms anyone would like to offer. I have more demos at dennisconklinvoice.com, but this is my lead in demo and I need to improve on it asap if I'm going to have a chance in securing more gigs! Thanks Tons!! Dennis

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-14484/script-recording-37243.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, it sounds great, Dennis! You've got a very natural, "regular guy" (and that's a compliment) delivery...not overly announcer-y.

    I do have some suggestions, though:

    1. This is just my opinion, but I'm not really feeling the second spot. You start out really strong with the Ford spot, and then it feels like the brakes are being put on going into the second spot. Also, because the music/sfx are very dynamic in that spot, occasionally your voice sits a little too low in the mix. If you're set on keeping this spot in there, I would fix the mix and possibly move it a little farther back in the order.

    2. I'm picking up some regionalisms...I'm guessing the Illinois or Wisconsin area...primarily on the "Turbo Tax" spot when you say "Turbo Tax". Keep an ear out for those and see if you can make some adjustments.

    3. The audio levels between the spots is a little off. If you listen to the end of the last spot and then jump to the middle of the first spot, you can hear a noticeable increase in volume. Not a huge deal...but fixable.

    4. The recording quality on all of the spots sound good, but they also all sound the same. When producing a demo in your own studio, it's a good idea to change the sound of the various spots to give the impression that they were recorded at different times, in different studios, by different engineers to make the demo more "believable" and less like you're manufacturing a demo. You can achieve this by making some changes to the EQ/Dynamics for each one...cut the low end on one, do a mid range scoop on another, use some heavier compression on another, etc. It may not sound as flawless, but it will definitely be more believable.

    5. This one may sting a little. However, since you put a link to your website in the description, I'm assuming it's fair game for critiquing as well. I have to be honest...it's pretty awful. There are waayyy too many conflicting colors going on, some layout issues and there's no labeling of the demos until you click "play". If I were a prospective client seeking pro voice talent, I'm not really sure if I would even take the time to listen to the demos...which would be a damn shame. I would recommend hiring a professional web designer...since it's a simple one-page site, it shouldn't cost you too much. Or if you need to do it yourself, I would use WordPress as they have custom themes already designed for you...many for free. The website simply needs to appeal more to your clientele and make a good first impression.

    Whew...glad that's over...haha! Bottom line...you have a really good voice and delivery, and with a few tweaks and an overhauled website, you should be in good shape.

    John

    Peer Feedback:

    I just wanted to echo John's sentiments about the site. Just polish it up and you'll go far. Good luck!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    This is my first upload. Let me know Daisy

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8010/script-recording-28278.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great! Enthusiasm, authentic, believable!

    Peer Feedback:

    For a first submission: nice. All the sound is to the left, so you'll want to address that. And if you listen carefully, you'll hear that you did a slur (lack of good diction) at 'what's as strong'....lost some precision there. You don't want to be TOO precise, but this went a little to far the other way. Also, the pace is probably too fast. You're talking to kids and there will be video or words or something on screen with your words. Slow it down and let the video develop. Relax a little. I think you have a nice voice and look forward to other submissions from you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality - At the beginning of the read the volume was very loud. Perhaps you should try and Normalize the sound. I heard a strange sound when you said, "and can see in the dark". Not sure you can edit that sound out, you would have to re-record.

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    Drunk Driving Prevention Campaign

    Script:

    You're not paranoid; they really are out to get you. If you plan to drink during the holiday season and get behind the wheel of a vehicle, the police are determined to get you off the road.

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mariee's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-28948/script-recording-47570.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Not a critique.
    If you were entering the weekly contest, you posted this in the wrong place.

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    Durable Income

    Script:

    Investing for retirement means steering clear of bumps in the road ahead. Yet most people underestimate the income they need to maintain their standard of living in retirement. What’s more, retirement for today’s investors will last longer than prior generations.
    It’s time to consider the smarter, more durable approach to investing, a choice that could mean the difference between living retirement to its fullest or outliving your savings.
    Find out more at DurableIncome.com

    19 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MusicJunkieK1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-131/script-recording-64235.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Junkie,

    You've got a great voice, man. There are many interpretations of what a read is SUPPOSED to sound like, ultimately it's up to the client to decide. Here, I might try to be more empathetic...maybe a 40-something that has the concerns outlined in the script...will I be living easy at 65, or worried that I might run out of money? I heard a lot of smile in this, and that's not a bad thing! Maybe practice this one with a level of concern...or try a script that fits the smile you're giving out.

    Little enunciation here and there, watch for "to" instead of "tuh". It amazed me when I started to pay attention to that small word and how everything else fell into place...

    Happy Thanksgiving!

    David Michaelson

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/EdisonStateCollege.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi jh10015,
    I will admit the material is rather dry but all I hear is you reading. Not everyone, but almost anyone can read. I'm not going to want to go to this school because you haven't sold it you read it. You need to do more with this script. You read well but what do I care? Sell me. Make me think why I want to be apart of this school as opposed to a better sales pitch.

    Peer Feedback:

    You left some edits in there...or didn't edit out mistakes. Rich is right on the 'reading to us" instead of personalizing it.

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    eHarmony

    Script:

    The only thing harder than finding someone … is dating them.

    Welcome to eHarmony… Now you’ll get to know someone while still having fun, safely, and anonymously.

    eHarmony begins now… (chuckle) without the two drink minimum.

    84 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hello all. Kevin here. Just another practice recording, using a few new techniques for the mix. Nothing special, a short and sweet advert I was messing around with. As always I appreciate any feedback you want to offer from voice, mix, and anything in between. I went for a natural/ casual tone with a little bit of humour added. A red-blooded male who doesn't enjoy the bar scene, telling his friend about a website he thinks is a much better option for meeting people. Let me know if you think the chuckles ruin the read. :P

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-91845.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the chuckles add to the light heartedness and they don't sound forced. I'm not sure it goes with the "red-blooded male" vibe you were going for though. Overall, I like the sound and feeling.

    Peer Feedback:

    Unless the script specifically asks for it, NEVER, NEVER, NEVER laugh or chuckle in VO commercial copy. Use the "smile" instead. This rule has confirmation from at least two professional sources in the upper escutcheons of the VO industry. One is a very prominent coach and the other is a booth director of the largest bi-coastal VO agency in the U.S. And here's why:

    It sounds like you're commenting on either the script or the product/service and/or sounds condescending whether that's your intention or not.

    Listen very closely to the many (national) commercials for well-known major product/service campaigns on the radio, TV and web. You may discover that only a tiny fraction, if any. contain a laugh let alone a tiny chuckle. That "joy" you may hear is in the "smile".

    Here's a story that that agency booth director told us in a recent class at the SAG VO Lab in NYC:

    Lowes hired this guy (one of the booth director's agency's clients) to do the VO for a wide ranging national campaign. The producer wanted a tiny laugh in the VO tag line. They cut the all of their commercials with it and sent them out for broadcast nation wide. The commercials didn't do well and didn't help with the store's "brand". The ad agency couldn't figure out why, so they "tested" the ads with a sampling of consumers. The feedback was that they thought the guy at the end was making fun of the store. Lowes scrapped the ads, re-cut them without the laugh and had great success after that. Incidentally, all of the talent, including the VO guy, got paid for a complete session fee as a do-over. All because of a little laugh.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, that is an excellent story! That explains why I've never seen laughter in a script before, even when it's supposed to be light heated or humorous.

    I'm going to give this another go and take out the laughter. (the last one does sound a bit condescending about doesn't it?)

    I really appreciate the expertise you've been giving (to myself and others) on this forum James. Mucho Gracias!

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    Energy Company Promo

    Script:

    At Bosselman Energy Companies, we are proud to be a trusted partner to our customers,

    A strong member of the communities we serve,

    and a family business that really cares.

    With more than 70 years in the industry, we will continue to succeed well into the future by following the same principles that have guided the company since 1948:

    Do what’s right.

    Use common sense.

    And be the best at everything we do.

    55 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for friendly, yet still professional. But also, did it have somewhat of a "hometown" feel to it?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97286.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pacing was generally good; your read is clear, I heard pride and strength being words you brought to the read. Recording quality sounded very good.
    On the first part of the 3 list at "a trusted partner to our customers,"you read that comma like a period; the other phrases in the list are read well, but the extended pauses between seemed unnecessary.
    You sped up quite noticeably at "by following the same principles that have guided the company since" and you hit "1948" rather hard.

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    ES Script Contest - Jan 11, 2014

    Script:

    Script: (E.S. Script Contest - Jan. 11, 2014)
    Does your downward dog yoga pose lie down and can’t get up?
    Has your horizontal leg press become more of a horizontal nap position?
    Getting in 40 winks more often than 40 reps?
    Well, bounce off the couch!
    Sign up for a Pump U Up Gym membership today, and get January free!

    34 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Resonant-VO's recording

    Seeking full evaluation to help win more work. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-84063/script-recording-65589.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Resonant,

    Maybe could be slightly more energetic (think personal trainer), but your tone and recording quality are great.
    I've been struggling with this one, so right now, this sounds better than I'm doing!
    Oh yeah, and pay close attention to the slating instructions for the script contest as well...
    "Please slate, “[Your name or username] for Pump U Up Gym” before the copy"
    I realize this appears to be your first recording and it's only practice, but you'll get dinged for this slating alone if submitted for entry!
    Nice Job - Good Luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    R'-VO- If I were to listen,, with out regard to the intent of the spot,, I could say,, sounds nice, good voice ... blah, blah, blah. BUT This is a spot for a Gym, and unlike most of the random scripts on the general site, the contest has some instruction from the "client" - " like a friend who is also a terrific personal trainer! ". Have you ever had a personal trainer? They motivate, and push you to do things you don't think you can do, things you don't want to do at the time. I've spent time in gyms,, and I've dead-lifted over 900 pounds,,, my trainer did not sound like your spot. True, I don't think over the top screaming and yelling is right either, but I get little to no motivation from the read. Also, the name - "Pump U Up Gym"- kind of calls for some energy.. and if you remember the SNL skit's that I assume they are playing off of...they had energy... they had pizzazz.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is this week's Script Contest, and as such, I believe it unfair to seek critique from this forum in advance of entering in order to gain some kind of advantage over the other entrants. It should disqualify you from consideration and I hope the judges take note, although I do not think that they also monitor the forum. Only my opinion.

    That said, I concur with the previous critiques about the general feel and lack of vigorousness of the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I understand the comment James, on the contest,, but I would submit , that its not an advantage, if more of us do it as well... Working together to get everyones best. As this is a practice site, and we're not fighting for a gig. What's wrong if someone asks for help? I think it helps others as well to see how other people interpret things. In baseball, if a first time hitter, goes against a pro,, I think its ok, for them to show the pros what their doing , and ask for pointers. IF the first timer, is then able to master the skill, and knock it out of the park, good for them. If some one beats me at the competition, over a tip I gave them,, its my fault,, because I knew the information as well. Not trying to argue, and I totally get what your saying James,, just a thought.

    Peer Feedback:

    I see both sides of the coin. Maybe a little more from JAme's perspective, but not exactly for the same reason.
    This recording is basically akin to asking a friend sitting next to you in real life, " hey, what do you think?"
    However, that being said, as for me, I won't submit my contest script before a contest because of this very thing. Not that I think it's "wrong", but just for the sake of not taking away from the learning experience others not taking part in the contest. After all, there are some "4,837 Scripts and growing every day..." to choose from. I think the forum is most effective if there is a wide variety of genres to listen to, evaluate, and learn from and would be a benefit to all, instead of just trying to win a contest. Also, there is a very large commentary given at the conclusion of the contest selection (given bty paid Edge staff I'm sure) which covers ALOT of detail regarding entry recordings!
    I see alot of thoughtful and insightful feedback given here by voluteers. If every week, we had 50-60 recordings of the script contest awaiting feedback (implying all the same genre), it could take away from the time to give a quality evaluation (although script contest entries can simply be overlooked, I'll be happy to give a quick note or two, but not spend a whole lot of time - like I'm doing now...LOL)
    I hope I didn't sound too critical. I'm looking at it from the point that not everyone will, but everyone could, submit the same recording in a short peiod of time... I believe RVO appears to be new to the forum, so I think RVO should be afforded the slack. THIS time ;-).

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    Family Golf Advert

    Script:

    Did you hear that? That’s the sound of setting a goal and achieving it. Taking it slow, grasping the club gently and focusing in on the ball... (anticipation builds) lining up the stroke, and... in it goes! Treat your kids to some family fun and excitement while teaching them the value of setting a goal and achieving it. Tetherwood Country Golf: it’s more than just mini putt!

    80 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hey y'all. I'm Kevin, 33 year old, male, living in Bangkok Thailand. I recently started producing my own commercials and v.o demos, and I'm looking for any advice, tips, helpful hints, anything that can help get me started. I'm concerned mostly about my range and communication, but am willing to take criticism on anything and EVERYTHING. Been at this for about 6 months now. Thanks for any helpful advice you can give me in advance. I'll be posting more of these in the future!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-90942.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    That was good! Script interpretation was great. It helped that you included the music and the sound effect of the golf ball going in the cup. Recording quality was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job! I thought your script interpretation was outstanding and the sound of your voice so great for this type script. Recording quality also very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Kevin -
    welcome to the forum.
    great voice, and the recording quality was top-notch. well done.
    The pace seemed unnaturally slow. I get that you wanted to finish up at :30, but I think the spot would sound better if it were sped up a little.

    "If I were the director", I might do a 2nd take on some of the inflections. For instance, the first line seemed a bit off - maybe, "Did you hear THAT?" might've sounded a little more natural than "Did you HEAR that?" (as opposed to "Did you SEE that", or "Did you SMELL that?"....)

    Having said that, nice job.
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, I'm with Dave. Maybe just a few different reads to play with some of the inflection. Otherwise, sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with Moe and Dave. A little more variation would be great. Nice job !!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey guys!

    Thanks for the great advice. I appreciate the tips. I actually took about a half a dozen takes on this one, and the inflections were all over the place, but this sounded the best of the bunch. As soon as Dave mentioned it, I was like... oh yeah. did you HEAR that, sounds a bit off...

    I got my very first voice over gig last week, and it was a heck of an experience! Thanks for the motivation ya'll. Much appreciation!

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    Fish Boil

    Script:

    Even people who don't like fish, have been known to like this fish. That's why a fish boil is a must-do experience when you visit Door County. It all starts with a blazing bonfire under a kettle of salted water. People circle around to warm themselves and take in the crisp smell. When the temperature is just right and the crackle of the fire is just loud enough, the boil master adds a basket of potatoes and onions to the kettle. A few crackles later, the mild whitefish steaks, fresh from Lake Michigan, are delicately lowered in. At just the right moment, kerosene is tossed into the fire, exciting the blaze and causing the water to boil over, dramatically carrying off the fish oil that has collected on top. The fish are pulled out and greeted with a generous drizzling of butter. Ladies and gentlemen, dinner is served.

    19 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstorms's recording

    Takin' a crack at sounding older with some Good Ol' Fish Boil

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83579/script-recording-65713.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First, I've been to a fish boil in Door County... and it is quite the thing to see. Fire ball about fifteen feet into the air. But any way ... I really liked the start,, very convincing. The phrase "potatoes and onions to the kettle", was a bit ruff for me,, I think you were trying to make it "special"... but I just found it odd. Once you get to the fire part, I think it would of been nice to hear the old timer sound a bit more excited, a touch more dramatic but over all, very nice, well done. Like the choice of music, and the volume of the music. You could give the old guy a "out of breath " sound a the end of a sentence or two, help sell the feeling. To give it a bit more of a finished feel, I would not cut the music off so abruptly at the end,, maybe fade off , or edit it at a ending of a "phrase" for the tune.

    Peer Feedback:

    Knm,

    I agree with all of your points - when listening back even before submitting, I found the "potatoes and onions to the kettle" a little off myself, but this forum is great for letting me know that it's not " just me".
    In some earlier takes, I did have the kerosene part toned up some as it should be, for some reason it wasn't as much in this one. Also will work a little more on the "out of breath".
    The music track is an Apple loop named...forgot the name and I can't check now. The music volume is usually set to -33.6 dB - I'm not sure exactly where it was in this one. I have to admit, I did get a little lazy with the end and did not fade it out like it should have been.
    Thanks!!!

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    Fitness App

    Script:

    Shedding pounds and keeping them off takes time and serious effort
    If weight loss is your goal our fitness pass can help you get that visible toning and extra calorie burn-up

    Introducing Freeplay, the all access fitness pass to the hottest gyms
    and studios in your area…Get that visible toning while having fun!

    With just a single membership, get full
    access to climbing gyms, yoga studios,
    boxing clubs, Zumba, CrossFit,
    trampoline parks, and tons more. That
    means no matter what you like, you’re
    sure to find the best workout you’ve ever
    had on Freeplay.

    Here’s how it works:

    Download the Freeplay app…
    Sign up…
    Check out all the gyms and studios you
    have access to, and use your pass to get
    into any of them…

    and you are ready to have the time of your life while learning a new skill that you love!!

    You can also explore classes and events
    and build your own weekly workout
    schedule to keep your body guessing and
    your heart racing…

    Download Freeplay today and get 3 free
    visits for you and a friend.

    68 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Was going for an exciting and enticing delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97112.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good, Clear reading. possibly change up the pace a bit. I felt as if I had just called into this place and got a recording:
    Can't helping thinking of "Thank you for calling MOVIEFONE...for your selection please press one...."

    Maybe a little warmer tone...I don't know....I DID enjoy it however! Cheers!

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, I agree with the poster above, this sounded just like I called and reached a recording for a gym. You tone and pacing were spot on. Great job.

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    Fitness Equipment

    Script:

    There was a dance craze that swept the nation in the 60’s.

    Now over 50 years later we’ve combine those famous dance moves with the ultimate workout machine.

    Twist your way to a better waistline.

    Shape your arms, legs, hips and waist in just minutes a day.

    No more lying on the floor to tone your core, you can injure yourself with regular sit-ups and crunches.

    And bulky clumsy machines at the gym are difficult to use and can strain your muscles and joints.

    This machine is low impact and easy on your joints but best of all it is FUN and gets results!

    Simply step on the platform, grab the handles and twist!

    89 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for fun, energetic, attention grabbing.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94979.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice over is engaging, with rolling hills, as in peaks and valleys, in your speech. This produces a lively result, which is what you're going for. It is attention grabbing, as it seems you believe in the product, and so you convey that in your voice over. The fun element is there, too, because, again, it seems you believe in the product. Good work, just needs some music.

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    Fluke T-5 Electrical Tester

    Script:

    Whether you’re a residential, commercial or industrial electrician, the T-5 was really designed for you.
    The T-5 electrical tester makes it easy to check voltage, continuity, and current with a single compact tool.
    It automatically measures AC and DC volts and displays resistance up to 1000 ohms. With easy and accurate open jaw current measurement, you can check current up to 100 amps without breaking the circuit.

    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear WhatBobThisBob's recording

    I've been lurking for awhile and now it's time to start getting some critiques :-) I'm not sure which genres I really want to pursue so I'll be uploading a variety of different ones to see if anything really clicks. This is a dry recording with no clean-up or post processing. I used a slight southern accent on this one because I thought it sounded better than my natural voice for this type of spot. Thanks in advance for the feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95410/script-recording-78103.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a great start, I think. I would have preferred a slower read though, especially with the accent, since I had to read along to follow it. While you're discovering what works for you, might want to keep the accents to character scripts :) It'll be easier to give you feedback on what you're real potential is that way. (it's not impossible to get something like this in a southern accent, but far less likely than a natural, neutral read.)

    It felt a little read-y to me with the start of each sentence, but the natural flow would kick in by the end of most.

    Peer Feedback:

    To bean420's point, a good many people who have a natural accent or regionalism go to great pains to lessen or eliminate them to be competitive in the Neutral American accent market - which is most commercial and narration VO. The good thing is that you informed us of your choice, and you maintained it through out. But unless the spec calls for it, going with the conventional neutral would probably be better because accents and regionalisms may only serve a narrow/niche market of clients and listeners.

    As to bean420's other point. Pick a single person to talk to, not a general audience. That will give you connection to the material and the listener - a personal touch. And you could slow or fluctuate the pace a little, assuming this is a 30 second spot - or even better if it's an instructional or product demonstration video with no time constraints.

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah...I don't think an accented read is appropriate for this being a corporate/commercial read about an electrical product. I think they'd be more inclined to choose a neutral sound. Want to shill blue jeans or chill? This sound would work better for that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. I'll try another read more natural and post that later. I have a few others I'll be posting here soon.

    Peer Feedback:

    *your* (my typo is killing me! lol)

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    Fox News

    Script:

    Your weather authority, Fox News at 9 starts Now...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    This is the final short. I wanted to show 2 different examples of lead ins. one fades, the other fades in so stay tuned! Again, props to SabrinasVoice who did it so nicely!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-28213.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Liked the first one. Sound more natural in the delivery.

    So, are you looking to become a Newcaster? Come to NYC and I can brag to my friends and say..."I KNOW HIM"!!!! LOL!!!!

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice,, I can see it going with a video,,, the pause in the middle would have to be timed with the shots,, on its own, with out the a video, the pause is a bit to much

    Peer Feedback:

    Liked the second one a lot more. I just felt like the emphasis should have been on the word authority . Great job Nodo.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would have emphasized/pitched up "weather" over "authority" - having the emphasis on the 2nd syllable of "authority" sounds a little awkward to me. The 2nd read sounds more relaxed. Nice production.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for all the feedback, really appreciate it, It didn't occur to me to change the emphasis on Weather. Gerry and John, I tried it and Lo and behold, it sounds better. Kmn, I looked at this like the beginning to a tv show or something, but I did it a few times without pausing and I will look at that next time I do one of these. The pause was more for the music to catch up and balance. :)

    Oh and John, those reads, they are exactly the same. I copied it while I was looking where I wanted the music to go and couldn't make up my mind. The second was my favorite too, so I included both. It's interesting how much different it sounds, and that's due to the way the music is perceived. Interesting what you can do with the edit... Thanks again!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    re: different background music under same VO: There's a PhD thesis in there somewhere! Fascinating...

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    Freight Company Promo

    Script:

    You’ve got freight to ship. It could be one. It could be many. A to B… or A to infinity. Either way, you got this…with Freightquote. Do it with us…or do It yourself. Either way, our killer combo empowers you with the freedom to move freight YOUR way, right now.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Gong for an energetic, "no-nonsense" delivery, sort of like Dennis Leary in those Ford F-150 commercials.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-96225.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like where you were going with this. Good energy. The recording quality was clean. Pacing, clarity, inflection and emotion were all felt. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice. Just a few things.

    I missed the VE on "You've". Could just be my aged ears.
    A few F farts - mostly on "Freight"
    The first K sound on "killer combo" was a rather harsh attack. The second one was less so, but it was still there.

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    Funeral Home

    Script:

    Losing a loved one is never easy.
    When you're in mourning, the last thing you want to worry about are funeral costs.
    At K&B Funeral Homes, we're here to help ease those worries.
    We offer a variety of funeral packages, at dignified, affordable prices.
    Customized funerals are also available.
    Your family's wishes are our TOP priority.
    K&B Funeral Homes, seven convenient locations throughout the state.
    Call today, or visit our website, at k&bfuneralhomes.com

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    It's a funeral home ad, so going for somber but also warm and compassionate.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-95778.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good, solid read. While it is tough content it seemed a bit monotone, try a little different pacing. Tough subject matter to work with......

    Peer Feedback:

    Greetings!

    This is a rough subject. But the read was really good and clear. I do agree that you could use a little different tone through out the read. I love the background music, very soothing while reading.
    Good work.
    Ken P.

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    Game Show Promo

    Script:

    Life’s BIGGEST moments are often a surprise.

    And you never know when your life will change forever.

    But what if your moment suddenly became…MUCH BIGGER??

    What if you were on…A GAME SHOW?

    Each week, unsuspecting contestants, at ANY place or ANY time, will play a pop up game show where ANYTHING can happen.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Confident, upbeat, strong is what I'm going for here.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94288.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken,

    Like your enthusiasm! A little choppy, and stiff though in the read. Could be a little smoother....

    Peer Feedback:

    Your delivery is quite good. You're on your way. Just have a little bit more confidence and speak more naturally. I feel your enthusiasm, but your voice is a bit stiff.

    Also, the noise reduction should be improved to make the recording sounds clearer.
    I like your voice. It's suitable for this type of ad.

    Hope it helps.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear EvanJohn's recording

    How does my tone and energy come across? How is the sound quality?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107313/script-recording-98106.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    In my opinion, this was done really well. Your tone fits in with the script really well. if i didn't know, i would have thought this was a ad. Honestly, there isn't really anything id change. like i said this was done really well...
    The sound quality, to me, seems fine. You were clear and easy to understand.
    Good Job!!

    (sorry if im not much help, my criticism has never been that helpful...)

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow I really love the tone of your voice, I feel like I could really envision it in a real commercial. Overall I thought this read was done fairly well, though there a few things I want to point out: at the start you don't seem to hit a strong tone for your first word or two, it quickly gets stronger as you get further into the script, but you don't want to let the first thing your audience hears be a sour or weak note. Also, in general I think that you could use more tonal variety when listing things (especially as this script lists things a lot). Try thinking about what each individual thing is and why it differs from the last as you list them, hopefully that should help.

    Peer Feedback:

    EvanJohn
    Great voice....... love that deep tone...
    Sound quality very good....
    Maybe slight up beat and tempo speed..needed
    Beginning weak but also a bit intimidating Who are you!?
    Perhaps a little on the lighter side as the question is asked( Who are you?)
    Seems more like the begining of a conflict not someone who cares
    Thinking if you could take about 5 seconds off time it would be a bit more engaging holding my attention

    from a newbie take me for what its worth
    Really great potenial

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice read. There's a commanding quality to your voice that doesn't come across forced. Very effortless and natural and held my attention all the way through. Nicely done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Love It!! Great Tone Base and of course Voice..My only Hip would be keep your Timing try not to slow pause too much..in a script like this..but well done over-all I would certainly hire you.!!

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    Go Daddy

    Script:

    This report is brought to you by Go Daddy! Running your own business running you ragged? Go Daddy can help. With memorable domains, website design, online marketing and 24-7 expert advice. You can do it...correction...you can kill it. Go you. Go Daddy.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hinojosad's recording

    This is one of my first VO recordings ever for the class I'm registered in at ES. This is the first time using Audacity and a recording headset from my home office.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126764/script-recording-95936.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall great read. Recommend you put a little more emphasis on "Go Daddy" since it appears numerous times in the copy. The first "Go Daddy" sounded almost like "Go Dad". Perhaps a more upward inflection on Daddy as opposed to dropping off. I liked your take on the ellipses. Who are you picturing as you read the copy?
    Keep up good work.

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    Grammarly

    Script:

    Not everyone can be the best coffee snob in the office, but you can be the best writer in your office. With Grammarly.

    Grammarly is a free writing app that helps you make sure you’re always putting your best foot forward. With Grammarly, you can easily find and fix errors, improve word choice and sentence structure, and make sure your message always gets across clearly and effectively. Download it free at grammarly.com, and turn your writing into one of the finer things in life.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear cary22reese's recording

    Recently finished my studio for the first time. I feel like there's something just a little bit off about it, but I can't place it. Any advice or feedback on the audio quality or delivery would be spectacular. Thank you for your time.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106794/script-recording-95543.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    What size of a space are you working in?

    Is this a RAW unprocessed file or did you add some processing? If you did add some FX, it is difficult to diagnose because the processing is masking or enhancing some things. Almost sounds like the NR captured some of your vocal frequencies which is causing sonic anomalies.

    Initial impression is that you are too far away from the mic and/or the mic's diaphragm isn't in line with your mouth. You sound distant. Stupid question, but do you have it pointed it the proper direction? I only ask because somebody made that simple mistake once. The pick-up point is usually on the side where the logo is.

    Second thing is that there are still some reverberative surfaces in your space. There is a bit of an echo. Don't neglect the ceiling and the floor and any hard surfaces that reflect sound.

    Let me go out on a limb and ask if you wrote this copy?

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a little wooden box, 6ft x 8ft. The majority of the walls are covered in acoustic foam, but the ceiling is untouched.
    The only things I did to the audio are noise reduction and compression. Do you have any advice about more effective noise reduction?

    I do have it pointed in the right direction, but I will see what I can do about moving closer to the mic and correcting position. I have it in a Kaotica Eyeball, which might be causing me to stay farther away from it than I should.

    I didn't, actually! This script was an audition that I did for a pay2play site.

    I really appreciate the feedback. I'll be rectifying these things as soon as possible.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bit of a red flag: you say that this was an audition you did? Has that job gone public yet? If not, you very likely are operating under a non-disclosure agreement based on membership of whichever site you auditioned through. Better be sure!

    Peer Feedback:

    Is your "little wooden box" insulated? Meaning, is it actually a "room within a room" built with studs and such? Or is it just a thin plywood box with the foam on the inside?

    Here's the thing with foam - even acoustic foam. It's not a sound "absorbing" (sound "deadening") material. It's more of a sound "defusing" material. meaning that sound can penetrate it to the hard surface that it is attached to and the sound can (potentially) bounce back through the foam as a muffled echo - depending on how close your mic is placed to the foam covered wall.

    And if your box is only made of a thin sheet of plywood or other thin materials, the outside noise and sounds can penetrate it because the hard surface acts like a kind of drum head - it has it's own resonance qualities. Whereas an actual "room within a room" made of stud construction with Roxul insulation in the bays is more sound proofed.

    Personally, I am not a big fan of the Eyeball thingie or those portabooth thingies. They're ok in a pinch for auditions on the road, but as a standard part of a home studio, mehhh. INHO, the closeness of the walls surrounding the mic makes VO sound boxy and confined to a tiny space - which was the impetus for my question. In a home studio, the mic has to "breathe" in open space, even though the room should be treated to deaden the ambient sound as much as is possible.

    IMHO, moving blankets - even maybe a double thickness - is a far better solution than foam. And it's cheaper too.

    Which DAW are you using?

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a room-inside-a-room made of dense MDF board. I couldn't afford to put insulation inbetween the walls, but there is a solid 2-3 inches of air disconnect between the inside and outside. I generally don't have an issue with outside sound, since it's in the basement of a very quiet area.

    Thanks! I will try out getting some moving blankets - particularly on my ceiling. I've found that moving closer to the mic when I record so far has drastically improved the quality - even the noise removal does less damage, now. Thank you for that advice!

    It's a little late for me to change the boxy nature of the studio - as it stands, I've spent far too much money and time to take it back now. But I will try to manage the mischief as best as possible.

    As far as my research shows, the pay2play website that I use does not hold auditions under an NDA. I could be wrong - I'll avoid using auditions for that site in the future.

    I use Audacity.

    You all have been very, very helpful.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-73941.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Literally just found out through my spam folder that I landed this job, Then learned I the client went with a female. Though I will be strongly considered for the radio spots. These emails were roughly 5 hrs old. LOL always check your Spam folder.

    Peer Feedback:

    5 hours??? Really? Yikes...

    Only one comment - at least in my headset, it sounds a bit tinny....not sure how else to describe it. The read was great, just the sound thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    What Shelly's probably describing is a lack of deep frequencies. I haven't done a scan of your submission, but it's probably due to a low sample rate to what you're submitting here. I'm hearing some artifacts in the sound that makes me think along those lines.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Resubmission with a higher resolution mp3 setting.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-73948.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your pacing was a bit staggered and not as smooth as conversation. It sounded like you were reading copy. You have a good voice and I could hear some deep resonance in it. If you were "nicing" that up dont do that. Let the depth come through. It provides warmth.
    The recording quality may not be good on the sample we're able to hear. It sounded windy or breathy on your words ending in "s". Once again that may be the compressed sample.
    Overall it was good, but didnt stand out because it sounded like Jerry reading for the part of Jerry. I hope that helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the critique Joel. The casting director who hired me for this job didn't have the same opinion but I'll take your advice and work a little harder on the next one. Welcome to the world of VO by the way. Best of luck to you.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear tjordan's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12015/script-recording-32447.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    recording quality: good. vocals: need more emotion for a hard sell, pacing was good.

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    Health System Promo

    Script:

    Best is an endpoint. Better is a quest.

    Better is believing, as great as today is, tomorrow holds even more.

    Northwestern Medicine is all in for better.

    Offering better solutions to all the speed bumps life can throw your way.

    We make people better by making medicine better. By creating a health system comprised of over 100 locations throughout the region, anchored by the #1 hospital in Illinois as ranked by US News & World Report.

    With Better access to World-Class medicine, stretching from Downtown Chicago to both the northern and western suburbs.

    With better thinking, resources and, above all, better physicians, nurses, researchers and care teams working together to give our communities access to a better experience, every single day, so that when you or someone you love needs us, we’ll be there.

    Because what makes us better, makes you better.

    Northwestern Medicine. Better

    Visit us at nm.org

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for confident and conversational

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-92870.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ken...

    I listened to your recording a bunch of time, like I was listening to it on the radio.. I like the way you enunciate.. Clarity and pace seemed right to me too.

    What I did notice is your voice raised up a tad at the end of the sentences. it was/is something I have been working on, as well. You have a smooth, friendly sound with your normal voice. Keep that all the way through.

    Also, I remember a voice coach once ask me if I knew what I was saying, and did I believe it. At the time I wasn't completely sure what she meant.. It meant was I just reading this, or was I truly invested (and understood what was) in this copy.

    Picture talking to a friend, or co-worker and read them this copy. Northwestern Medicine has been great to you -- and you are just giving them info you already know.

    You sure appear on your way to good happenings.. Best!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, Bill!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Ken,

    I, too, work to sound more conversational in my reads...depending on the script, of course. But one trick a VO friend taught me is to (either in your head or out loud) start by saying, "Hey listen, I've got something important I want to tell you...". Then talk to the person like you would normally talk. Give it a try.

    Nice work, though. Rock on.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ken,
    First of all..excellent technical quality. Very pro sounding. I agree with other comments,,in that maybe it lost a little enthusiasm due to its length. Great job though,,again really nice sound quality.

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    Healthyplace.com

    Script:

    At HealthyPlace.com, we believe the more you understand about Schizophrenia, the more likely you are to get the full benefit of treatment. We want to help you learn as much as you can about this devastating illness and to offer you the support you need to begin treatment.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Hi all, This is a re mix of a piece I did earlier. I specifically ran some mastering software on the original vocal, remixed the new vocal in with the music bed, Remastered the track with the music. I was looking for that "finished" sound that you hear on Demos. I'd appreciate critical feedback on the mixing/effects or lack there of, So break out the CANS and get busy!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-28292.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    Good to hear from you! I like this, you read this at a relaxing tone yet informative and the music bed fit perfectly.

    I also listened to a lot of your other work you told me about; and you are destined for Voice Overs! Because some of your other work is amazing!

    Good job, looking forward to the next script>

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your confidential approach is right, but I didn't hear the first words over the music.

    Peer Feedback:

    A lovely read! Your tone was excellent for the subject matter. I would take the volume on the music down just a tad so your listener is not distracted from your great delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments on music volume. Exactly what I was looking for. Didn't know if the bed was too loud. I think a touch lower would be the ticket. Thanks for taking time to comment!

    Peer Feedback:

    This was a great read. Your tone and speed were really good. :-)

    Daisy

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    High Tech Racing Gadget

    Script:

    We are thrilled to announce the most advanced handheld device the racing world has ever seen.

    Look inside and you’ll find a modern, powerful processor and support for WiFi, Bluetooth, and 4G. But what sets it apart from a tablet or smartphone is that it includes two unique pieces of hardware that no other device on earth has.

    There’s never been a better tool for race fans and teams. But the best tools money can buy can be used again and again, day after day... Even in the garage at home or on the open road.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for upbeat and enticing

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-92969.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you did a good job with this read. Your enthusiasm comes across well.

    The pacing seemed a little quick in the first line of the second paragraph ... right after you say "modern" through "4G". Slow it down just a bit. There are a couple of pauses where there aren't any commas. Between "smartphone" and "is", and also between "hardware" and "that". Eliminating the pauses will smooth out that sentence more.

    Also, the plosives on the P words are very audible. Are you using a pop filter?

    Overall, it's sounding good. Make a few tweaks and it'll sound even better!

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    History Channel

    Script:

    If you lived before our time, who would you be?
    Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
    Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
    What if you could choose from a thousand yesterdays; a thousand lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
    Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?
    Remembering every generation before us;
    Remembering for generations to come.
    The History Channel. Where the past comes alive.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    All feedback welcome. I recorded it too low and had to process it, then process out all the processing :) But by that mistake, I had a lot of room to play with the sound and learned a lot. Took way too long though...Thanks in advance

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27769.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    That was intense! I really liked this delivery as it was at a good pace and I listened to this with my eyes closed to capture the visuals whereas this could be a Narration for the History Channel.

    Also, your music, was a good choice...AND...it was at the right level! Well done!!!!

    Give us another script A.S.A.P.!

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved it. What a great example of a not so hurried read. Where do you usually look for your music backround? I need much more practice with Audacity to add backround correctly as you did and to know where to look for it. Thx, Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Nodo, I have to admit that this particular read left me waiting for a little dramatic interpretation. I really felt that it was pretty dry overall. The music was calming...where history is FULL of calamity, war, conflict and development that just isn't 'calm.'

    I like that you didn't rush it, but it really need some tension or drama. my humble opinion, of course. But that is how I hear it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for all the feedback. I recorded it somehow very low so I learned a lot about how a lot of the tools and filters work. I've a lot of work to do there too, The original music I selected bombed. I couldn't make it work after a few hours of playing with it. I was trying something new out. I broke the script down and did a couple of variations on each phrase during the take. Then as I listen, I cut all the good takes of each phrase and put them on a new audio line. Then, I mute the original and import the music, try to match the cut phrases with the music. It's labor intensive, I'm sure there are better ways, but after I couldn't get the music to work, the chopped up file was much much easier to adapt to new music.
    A lesson perhaps in what NOT to do or something you may have to do to save a file in an emergency. After the music fiasco, I almost dumped it. But something about the tone of the vocal made me want keep at it. As an ad, it's off the mark. it's more about "who would you be" as in a better person as opposed to The History Channel preserving the history of humanity. It might work with a video montage of clips/pictures of famous people throughout history. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    I added a comment on one of Henry's scripts and saw the link to the Youtube video regarding this script. Honestly...You sound better than the VO Talent they hired to perform it! Seriously! You added more emotion and like I said there was a certain amount of intensity within your read. Maybe you should get a demo done and send it to the History Channel because you've got voice for this!

    Take Care, LCW.

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    Hockey Promo

    Script:

    Hockey Fans.

    We dance to the beat of a different drum

    And we are proud to say

    This is our town

    And its hockey town

    We are The Fans of the Cincinnati Cyclones

    And we own the Ice!

    Come join us.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for energetic and dramatic in this read

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-92351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Quality is good.
    Overall, I don't believe what you are saying. That is the most important part of what we do and is one of the hardest things to master.
    I need to feel like this is YOUR town, you DANCE to the beat of a DIFFERENT drum and that the Cyclones OWN the ice. Say it as if you own the team and that you are the proudest hockey team owner in the country!
    Good luck!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Thanks for any and all comments

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-90860.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm no pro, Jerry, but I love your work. Great voice, great interpretation = fits right in with the script. There are those better qualified to give critique on your audio, but it sounds good to me. Cheers.

    Peer Feedback:

    Another winner!
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved your voice and delivery. Great pace and tone changes.

    I'm curious though. You changed the script in numerous places. Was that on purpose?

    Recording quality was great. Clear, low noise floor.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys. As for the changes to the script, this was originally posted on Voice 123. I received a personal invite in which the script was slightly different than the one originally posted. I posted the script by accident lol
    Regardless, I didn't get the gig. It's good practice though.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear erapp1@yahoo.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-15345/script-recording-49089.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Erapp. I love your voice. You didn't follow the script though. The inflections are all over the wrong places.and you mentioned your name in between which didn't make sense. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not too sure of the choices you made in this script on half singing and the sing song delivery. Mentioning your name in the middle? You should get an intro evaluation done if you haven't yet. You have a nice voice, you need some direction from a coach. Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just remembered. It's one of the many ways you can watermark an audition to prevent it from being used..

    Peer Feedback:

    Thats true Arlen .... but at this stage of the game? Even so, I find that pros don't do it even the greats. Directors truely frown on it because they are focusing on the read then "pow" a watermark .... it does more harm than good for you.

    Peer Feedback:

    You are absolutely correct Daniel. I brought it up as this has been a moot point in vo circles. I agree, in addition to the reasons you mentioned, the risks of offending a potential client far outweighs the benefits. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wish to thank everyone for their comments. The reason why I gave the intro the way I did was because it was per the director's instruction. This was a script used in the Edge Studio Script Recording contest.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear garfieldanthony's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9303/script-recording-27218.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the fact you did 3-4 reads of the script to build variety for a potential client. The only draw back was on the audio side of your piece. It sounded a bit hollow throughout the read.

    Otherwise, Great job!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi garfieldanthony,
    The specs for the contest were to provide a variety of reads for the tag. The first three were indistinguishable and the 4th was the only noticeable change. I'm afraid any producer wouldn't have listened beyond the second tag. If they are asking for variety you have to give it to them on the second read and read in such a way as to have them want to listen to a third and even a 4th.

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    In-home massage therapy service

    Script:

    Thank you for choosing Oak Haven for your In Home Massage Therapy session. Oak Haven Massage has been a leader in the industry of professional massage therapy since 2005 and currently delivers over 2,500 sessions, by licensed massage therapists each week. As an established name in the community our clients have come to expect a level of expertise connected to a massage from an Oak Haven massage therapist. We are extremely proud of our reputation as we aim to deliver amazing massage and bodywork services.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear k-soul's recording

    Direction was "the V.O. should be relaxed and peaceful."

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-80313/script-recording-63879.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording a little echo-y. Some mouth noise. Some editing artifacts. Remember to cross-fade between edits when sections touch and to have a second track of room sound when there's dead air. (I think there was a helpful Edge newsletter about editing a couple months back...?) Also, this script is TOUGH. I mean, wow, those clauses go on forever, don't they? I read it several times and it kicked my butt. One really has to plan breathing around this kind of script so that you don't have to splice together in the middle of sentences too much. Or splice super carefully, making sure your tone matches, and make certain to cross-fade or we'll hear a little blipping where they join together.

    Performance gets a little pitchy, with a bit of a rhythm that can happen when you're livening up words too much. (including pitching up at the ends of sentences too often/much)

    Careful with zesty words like "extremely" and "amazing". They're already so jazzy that if you hit them, too (Nancy Wolfson would say "admit" them, instead), they'll come out over-the-top. You want it more like a confession so the client won't sound braggy.

    This is one where I'd say
    - really plan out your breaths
    - group entire phrases that need to be said together with lines or parentheses or something to keep the flow,
    - and maybe try adding in some lead-in questions, as if someone's asking your questions about this massage place. Then you can really act it and find that conversational vibe. You can always edit out the lead ins. What your shooting for is to find your authentic voice--not a "voice-over-voice" even if the words aren't something you would ordinarily choose.

    Hope that helps!

    Best,

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia,

    I'm not exactly sure what you mean by "remember to cross-fade between edits when sections touch and to have a second track of room sound when there's dead air." Do you mean to insert a little dead air between edits?

    And thank you for your detailed critique!

    Thanks,
    Kathy

    Peer Feedback:

    Okay, someone who knows more please pipe up if I get this wrong...

    Editing:
    Breaths, noise: Say you have a big breath or a tummy gurgle and you want to take it out. You select that part of the waveform and delete it, right? That leaves space in between the remaining sections. That space, if you don't fill it with something, will show up in the sound of your recording if your recording space isn't really terrific. It shows up as the absence of sound in between sections of sound from your room. I call it "dead air" because there's nothing there to hear but I'm probably using a radio term incorrectly. Anyway, the listener will hear the sound of your room on either side of the blank spot and that highlights the edit. Many times one can cover this nicely with music beds and noise reduction, of course, but if you need a quiet, good quality narration without any bells and whistles, another solution is to add in a second track of your room sound. Then, when you mix down with both tracks, there will be room sound over all those dead air spots. If your recording space is always the same, you can even record a nice long section of room sound (like at night when all is quiet), and then label and save that track on your computer for use when you need it.

    Splicing together pieces of track: If you abut two pieces of track together, like your favorite sentences from two different takes, you'll sometimes get an editing artifact. It can sound like a little "blip". To guard against this, cross-fade: fade out over a very short period before the first section ends, and fade into the new section. In some DAWs you can select one of the sections and hit a single command for it.

    :)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gmura's recording

    This is only my 6th recording to date, so I'm still very new to this. I wanted to try something a little less 'commercial' than my last Honda practice spot - something more dramatic to practice, so I chose this script for it's inspirational tone. Worked on my mic technique here, recorded in Audacity and used only normalization to process. Looking for feedback on both the recording and performance. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116549/script-recording-91742.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Ughh. Just realized upon proofing my upload here that I changed a 'that' to 'they'. While I think 'they' may fit better, a script is a script, and I should have caught that before uploading. My bad.

    Peer Feedback:

    The read is, for the most part, very nice. The "inspirational" tone is good, but in places it gets a little actor-y at times. There was one spike in volume - where you interpolated "they" for "that". (More about "that" later.)

    Listen closely and look at a closeup view of the waveform of the first few sentences. Right at the beginning of each, there is a little "tick" - a kind of mouth click or lip smack - that could have been surgically edited out without sacrificing anything from the read. There are other places with mouth noise where that isn't so. Some of those are buried in a word and are tongue, cheek or nasal clicks. Just something to be aware of, especially for long form reads.

    IMHO, there are problems with this copy. Not necessarily the copy itself or the message, but in the formatting - no spaces after periods, broken up sentences and the like. It was probably transcribed by someone from something they heard. But the sentences and sentence structure isn't quite right and/or misleading. I would submit that the reason you interpolated the wrong word is that "That" isn't the beginning of th sentence but a continuation of the previous thought. For instance, here's the way I would picture that thought to look like:

    "Belief, at it's core, has always been the first foundation to ideas. And if those ideas are strong enough to form into greatness, they have the power to soar beyond the heights of our imagination and can turn good things into amazing things that have the power to change, to improve, to make everything in our lives better."

    That second one is a pretty long sentence, but, structurally, it makes more sense. That thought clump wraps up a single idea about ideas. (Whoa! I just think I blew my own mind.) The challenge for performer is to decide where and how to breathe through that darned thing - and then edit the breaths out to make it seamless.

    The beginning question, although pretty much rhetorical, can be posed as an actual question. For instance, how would you have expressed that thought if someone were to innocently ask "Daddy? What is innovation?" Then you repeat the question (as a question) and offer this looooong drawn out answer, that may possibly put that child to sleep. - or at the very least get a blurry-eyed, "Oh." And then the kid simply walks away.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with James. the performance was pretty good. The first 2 sentences sounded really good in my headphones. (beneficial on auditions - nailing the first 3-5 seconds)

    there's room for recording technical improvement. I heard some pops, and there was a couple places that seemed a bit clipped or over-driven. I think that maybe mic proximity could solve this. Use the "hang-five" hand span shortcut to keep the minimal distance from your mic.
    I like the "thickness" of the sound, but perhaps you need a little more high end EQ to brighten it up a little.

    I heard no room noise, and I thought the editing was clean.
    overall nice job, and be mindful of your mic technique.

    hope my opinion is helpful. cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Great delivery. The rest is just technical stuff with mic and mouth, I think. Speaking of which, the clipping-ish buzz I hear (such as at "If you are willing to believe") sounds like a problem I'm having occasionally--it's not that the sound is clipping in Audacity, but that the mic is stressing your interface because the interface can't keep up or something.. At least that's what I've gleaned from what I've found on the interweb. When my mic does it, it's only peaking on Audacity at around -6 or -4. Now, I try to keep my recording peaks below that (using my interface gain). I also have a PAD switch on my mic that I think helps with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, DS, and Waltonia - thank you very much for your detailed critique. I believe my mic is often too close, much due to my lack of space in the closet and the boom arm of the mic stand being too long for the space... I'm being more mindful of spacing of mouth-to-mic and watching my preamp gain closely. Voice control is also something I'm working on - my voice tends to spike naturally when I speak and I need to learn to limit that naturally without going to a compressor. Mouth noise is also something I'm becoming aware of, and it's now starting to stand out to me in my recordings. A box of Altoids and a bottle of water in my booth seem to help along with some selective editing and careful use of the 'generate silence' feature in Audacity... And, always, looking to improve my reads.

    Again, thank you all for taking the time to give advice. It is invaluable to me in my quest to add VO to my repertoire of skills. Cheers.

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    Internet Service

    Script:

    From the beginning - fast has been important (showing video clip of 2D cartoon caveman running from T-rex.)
    Today's world demands fast.
    Faster cars, faster planes, faster eaters (showing video clip of hot dog eating contest)
    Whoa...that's too fast.
    So we know that your internet needs to be fast.
    Stay out of my way fast.
    Surfing. Streaming. Downloading.
    You want fast...we got fast.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Trying to convey message of faster internet service, so the rapid, "no-nonsense" voice over delivery is intentional.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97837.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done! I'd love to see/hear the final product! One thing -- I think you could have condensed the back half -- after the "Whoa..." line (which you nailed!) -- and gotten it down to 14-15 seconds. Also, maybe a tad more energy/emphasis on the very last line -- "You want fast...we got fast." Otherwise, great job!

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    iPhone

    Script:

    Say hello to the most amazing iPhone yet.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear VegasChris's recording

    This was my entry for the iPhone script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5318/script-recording-27276.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hmm, I don't think you can get feedback from peers for a contest.

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds a tad lispy; try to fix that. Also, try to think more along the lines of what Apple is looking for. watch some Apple commercials online. Takes like your third won't do; they need to be casual, confident, and perhaps a little pompous sounding.

    Peer Feedback:

    David -- This is feedback on my submission for a contest that has just ended.

    Peer Feedback:

    jmm878 -- I disagree with the lisp, but I do appreciate your feedback. :-) The one thing I've always admired about Apple is its commercials. They are very well done and very appealing. (and this is coming from an ex-Microsoft employee!) I think the coach nailed my main problem:

    "...they sound like you are reading because you are being careful about HOW you sound."

    I'd love to hear any additional thoughts you may have!

    Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    My thanks to David Guzzone! The advice given was well worth the cost!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, whether you agree with Jmm or not, I hear "thay hello" in both of the first two samples. That's 'lispy" or 'lithpy' in MY book. Good voice, but there are some problems with s/th sounds in the first two samples.

    Peer Feedback:

    I disagree because it isn't there, not because it's my own recording. What you may be hearing is a result of my having trimmed the lead-in so close that "Say" was almost clipped. The takes were recorded at a proper level, perhaps even a bit higher than need be, and there is no "thay". This is apparent when the speaker volume is at an adequate level.

    I appreciate your thoughts.

    Thank you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry Chris!

    Peer Feedback:

    No need to be, David! :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    How did you trim the audio to create that effect we both heard?

    Peer Feedback:

    What I offered was a hypothesis, because I don't hear what you hear. I've never had a lisp in my life, and I would have re-recorded those takes had something like that crept in. I review everything I record wearing Sennheiser HD 280 professional monitoring headphones because I don't trust external speakers. I have no idea what you're playing your sound through, but any recording engineer will tell you that no single speaker can accurately reproduce the range of audio the human ear can hear. That's why there are woofers, tweeters, etc. So, computer speakers are not reliable; some may do better in the high frequency range while others will do better on the low end.

    Prior to recording, I use a SPL meter to determine how much ambient sound is present. The meter picks up sound between 40-130 decibels. The meter detected no ambient sound in that range during the recordings. Another factor could our ages. If you're substantially younger than I am, you will be more sensitive to sounds in the upper frequencies. As we age, we lose our ability to hear extremely high tones. That's why a teenager can hear what appears to most of us to be a silent ringtone.

    One final explanation could be my software settings. Because I detected some RFI in the line--a hiss--I opted to record with an equalizer enabled. This allowed me to lower the sound output in the 4k, 8k, and 16k range. (high frequency) What I didn't do, however, is use the same settings across all takes. This could also account for what you may be hearing. Takes 3 & 4 do sound a bit cleaner than the first two takes.

    Finally, the studio coach makes no mention of a lisp or any other vocal problems. As a bonafide VO professional, I trust his feedback

    Chris

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I think AKG 240K Studio cans are pretty damned good, as are my M-Audio BX5a Deluxe monitors. AND...despite being over 50, I can still hear upwards of 19k.

    Oh, well. I heard what I heard but I'm not going to argue the point.

    Edit: Wife heard exactly what I described without me pointing anything out before hand.

    Peer Feedback:

    We've reached the point of beating a dead horse which does neither one of us any good. We'll just have to agree to disagree and leave it at that. No harm, no foul on my end.

    It's good to hear that you have quality equipment and that you're a knowledgeable individual--seriously. I'm amazed by the number of terrible recordings I've listened to so far; a problem that can somewhat be easily rectified with a trip or two to eBay. I haven't yet listened to any of your recordings but I feel reasonably sure that they are of high quality.

    I'm considering buying another mic, which do you use? I use a Shure SM57 (same capsule the SM58 uses) connected to a MBox Mini. The mic is mounted on a desktop stand behind a double pop filter. I have Pro Tools but I didn't use it for these recordings. For simple tasks, such as this, I use Total Recorder Professional Edition by High Criteria. It's lightweight, low-cost and has a number of nice features. (PC only)

    I look forward to your comments on future work I post on this site.

    Chris

    Peer Feedback:

    Ah, you're using a dynamic mic....at the moment I am as well as my AKG Perception 220 had to go back for warranty work. At the moment, I'm using a Sennheiser E835 which is my dynamic mic running into an Apogee One interface. I much prefer the AKG for its sensitivity and clarity. I'm really missing that mic right now. If I upgrade, it will be to another AKG. The audio program I'm relying on currently is called Amadeus Pro and it's Mac only. Will likely move up to Audition at some point.

    If you stick with dynamics, make sure your interface has enough gain (as my Apogee really doesn't....I have to really bring up the levels with software) to work with the lower output of the dynamics.

    Like ya said, we just hear this a bit differently and it's NOT something to get worked up over. No harm, no foul here either. I think ya have a good voice and I'm willing to bet you have something good to bring to the table.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom:

    I've been doing some hunting and I'll probably pick up a condenser mic in the next couple of weeks. I like the SM57 but also I like having another option. I'm considering the AKG Perception 220 based on your comments as well as others I've read. If you don't mind me asking, how long have you had that mic and what prompted you to send it in for repair? As you know, reliability is a key factor.

    On the issue of gain, my MBox Mini interface couldn't cut it so I use a Shure X2U XLR-to-USB Signal Adapter which provides 40db of gain (the newest model provides 50db) and has phantom power for condenser mics. Problem solved until I can buy a reasonably priced preamp. Any thoughts here?

    Thank you for the compliment on my voice. I'm working hard on getting the best out of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Whoa...didn't see that this dialogue was still on-going. Chris, if you're still getting prompts that you got a message on the board...here's my answer to your question. The Perception 220 is part of their entry-level mike line. It developed some self-noise that was getting worse as I used the mic more and more. It got to the point, I couldn't wash the sound out with noise reduction! I called AKG and they had me send it in...once they confirmed it's defect, they sent me a new mic. That one is fine and works great for the money. I do like the 220. Another one I can strongly recommend because the excellent Bill Anciaux has done wonders with his is the Studio Projects C-1. Its a little more than the 220, but it's a darned nice mic for a 'low end' entry.

    As for preamp, I'm using an Apogee One interface. It's USB and has a fantastic D/A converter. Mac only, though. Focusrite makes some similar devices which are great for voice and they're PC/Mac. The Sapphire 6 is one such sample of excellence.

    Sorry I lost track of this conversation as it went further down the page!

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    Irish Accent - Another Take

    Script:

    In Northern New Jersey
    There's a place where the grass is greener
    the views are nicer
    and where the crew works harder to make your day on the links just a little more special.
    Bally Owen is Calling
    We're ready. Are you?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Taking another shot at doing an Irish accent. Been listening to some online tutorials. Would like feedback on the accuracy of the accent and of course, the overall delivery. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-95929.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Kenbond,

    The Irish accent, in my opinion was done quite well here, specifically where you hit the "d" sound in place of the "t" sound we have in American English. The accent dropped off at the beginning of the last line on, "we're ready," or so it seemed to me. The tone here seemed just right to me - it was very warm and welcoming. Good work!

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    Irish Accent for Golf Resort Promo

    Script:

    In Northern New Jersey

    There's a place where the grass is greener
    the views are nicer

    and where the crew works harder to make your day on the links just a little more special

    Bally Owen is Calling

    We're ready. Are you?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Branching out from my natural voice and trying an Irish accent.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94688.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good Job Ken, liked it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice. I felt the ends of the sentences dropped off a little but nice sounding

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there! Thanks for your feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-97301.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good background music for this type of read, but a little too loud.

    Love the "laid back" southern country man tone. Good fit for this promo.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really enjoying your reads, Mac. The effort you put into the production is apparent.
    Can wait to hear more !!

    Peer Feedback:

    This thing is hot...volume-wise. Just fyi...for most purposes, 0db is not the goal. -3db is common. Commercial customers might want something different, but for most applications, -3db is what to aim for. This file has clipped and is just generally quite over the regular levels. Your music beds are too hot to your vocal tracks and the adjustments to bring them down quite noticeable as a result.

    I personally felt that the music you chose was way too fast-paced for a script which suggests a laid back approach (you can park in the middle of the road...)...imagine doing that with the Duke boys rushing upon the scene with this music. It all makes the message work. If you're going to put music to a vocal...it's all got to work together.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback guys!

    Ken, I did feel like I was pushing it with the music level -- but thought maybe the voice still cut through. I'm probably too big a fan of the genre -- and the pickin' on this track is fantastic! :)

    Thanks for the kind words, Jerry! I'm having a blast putting these things together! And I love everything I've heard of yours so far -- I hope you're doing a ton of work with that voice!

    Tom, I'm using the loudness tools in my DAW -- I'm very cautious about clipping, and I can assure you that nothing is clipping in this recording. I can see why you might not like the music selection for this read -- it's all subjective. For me, the script has a subtle humor, and the music fits it perfectly! I took a listen to you, you've got a great sounding voice -- look forward to hearing more!

    Peer Feedback:

    "This file has clipped" means that there is at least one clipped sample. There is precisely one. That typically means that you normalized to 0db and when you do that, it will take the entire soundwave up until one of them hits zero. I assure you my stats on your sound file are accurate.

    Minimum sample value -0.9910 -0.9494
    Maximum sample value 1.0028 1.0290
    Peak amplitude 0.0 dB 0.2 dB
    DC offset -0.0000 -0.0000
    Minimum RMS power -37.0 dB -40.5 dB
    Average RMS power -13.0 dB -13.0 dB
    Maximum RMS power -8.9 dB -8.9 dB
    Clipped samples 1 1

    Again, if you normalize to -3db you will be reaching the norm most specs will call for. 0db is an old analog standard for getting maximum signal on the tape without saturation/distortion. A clipped digital sample is more distorted/harsh than the old analog equivalent.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom, I stand corrected -- and with egg on my face! The mix that I analyzed in my haste this morning was not the one that I uploaded. You are correct -- the uploaded file did clip -- my mistake. Fortunately it's a practice file, so no harm done. But lesson learned -- which is why I'm posting here in the first place! Thanks for the feedback.

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    Law Promo

    Script:

    What does loan default mean for me? Should I file for bankruptcy? How is child support determined?

    Just because you can’t afford a lawyer doesn’t mean you can’t get good legal advice. At Missouri dot Free Legal Answers dot org, qualified citizens can get up to three legal questions a year answered by licensed Missouri lawyers who volunteer their time. Missouri dot Free Legal Answers dot org. Missouri lawyers are here to help you. Brought to you by the Missouri Bar.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear don4673's recording

    Here is the direction I received from the client: "The voice performance should be bright and welcoming yet professional. No deep gravitas needed. The questions at the beginning will be performed by three different voices, but please read those as well in your audition"

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104853/script-recording-92848.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You do have a professional sounding voice, but this read seemed a bit rushed. Also, not much variation in tone; like you were reading from a script and thus, did not make it sound very welcoming..

    Peer Feedback:

    This is most definitely rushed...and quite choppy in delivery. Start, stop, start, stop. Quickly.

    Sound quality seems fine and your processing seems fine...but your pronunciation of "Missouri" seems off to me. Bear in I'm not from there, but most often I hear "mizz-OOOR-ee" and here I hear "mizz-OR-ee" with a bit less emphasis on the "ooo" sound. Just sounds off to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    In my experience, even if you're not going to be any of the 3 voices asking the first 3 questions, read or act it as if you were. Then follow the spec for the part that you're being considered for.

    The whole thing was rather clipped and choppy. Some of that I can hear in the editing, but some is also in your speech pattern. Use the vowels. As the elocution instructor says int the movie "Singin' in the Rain", "Round tones, round tones."

    Peer Feedback:

    I guess I need to get back in the practice of listening through the headphones for critiques. I only listened through good computer speakers....which aren't anywhere near monitors or cans.

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    MacBook Pro

    Script:

    It’s razor thin, feather light, and even faster and more powerful than before. It has the brightest, most colorful Mac notebook display ever. And it features the Touch Bar — a Multi-Touch enabled strip of glass built into the keyboard for instant access to the tools you want, right when you want them. MacBook Pro is built on groundbreaking ideas. And it’s ready for yours.

    82 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Macintheus's recording

    Hi there -- this is a practice demo. Looking for feedback on performance, sound, and overall recording quality. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130354/script-recording-98057.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Mac -
    great voice and delivery. I like it....
    BUT....having said that.....wow, you've got ducking run amok. It's almost unlistenable, and disqualifies this track as something you would send to a casting director.
    should be easy to fix.

    I'm not kidding about the performance. I really like it.

    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice and interpretation. I liked the music but it is just is too loud and coming in/out takes away from your performance. I would like to hear you read this without the music because I think you have a really good voice and don't need the music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, guys. Yeah, the music ducking is off -- working on it -- living and learning. I really appreciate the honest feedback.

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    Marathon Promo

    Script:

    (suppose to be upbeat, exciting)
    Are you ready to experience Chattanooga? Come, explore the unique qualities of the Best Town Ever, by running the innovative, exciting, and breathtakingly beautiful course that is the Erlanger Chattanooga Marathon, presented by BlueCross BlueShield of Tennessee.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-90457.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well-paced, but I'd like to hear sentences end on an up-beat instead of a downbeat; especially the first sentence ending in Chattanooga. It's a question, but didn't come across as one. Sound quality sounded fine from my laptop speakers, but I'll let someone else chime in on that because I don't have my headphones handy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Listening with headphones (as I always do), there is a lot of room echo to this recording. Also some hard edits (or noise gate) between sentences or phrases that seem completely silent (no room tone) creating a slight pumping effect.

    Agree with TomJ, in that you need to ask the question with an upward inflection.

    The overall delivery is upbeat and exciting, but really "in your face". I feel like I'm being shouted at rather than friendily (is that even a word?) persuaded to participate in this marathon and the benefits of viewing this beautiful city. And don't shortchange the sponsor - you kind of sped through the end.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the energy but as JamesR mentioned it did feel like you were somewhat forcing it on me to visit Chattanooga. Maybe emphasize on the "You" in the opening question so it can lead to a more upbeat question. The quality was fine although you can here some echo. As for the ending it felt a bit rushed and could've been slowed a bit. Amazing voice and energy! Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    The way you finished the first sentence almost sounded exasperated. Like you've been asking me forever and I keep saying "No". I like the enthusiasm you're trying to start with but the trailing off inflection of Chatanooga really threw off the first sentence a little.

    Same thing with "Best Town Ever". I like the lead up to it but the end falls a little flat.

    Try to maintain a consistent tone all the way to the last words. Sometimes it can be hard to avoid dropping at the end of a sentence or before a pause.

    There's an almost slight lispy noise or it's static from the recording going on towards the end that I picked up. Despite the potential recording quality or pronunciation issue, I really like the delivery of the end.

    You've got a real friendly, welcoming delivery and voice overall.

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    Medicare Benificiaries

    Script:

    Attention Medicare beneficiaries.

    You may be eligible to help lower your costs or get extra benefits you don’t even know about.

    Dental, vision, hearing, and prescription drug coverage may all be included in your plan.

    The Solution Medicare Helpline is accepting calls. Find out if you’re eligible to enroll now.

    Don’t miss this opportunity to see if you may get extra benefits and possibly lower your Medicare costs.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for an urgent, "breaking news" type delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-98770.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you're speaking so fast that you're taking away the clarity in your speech. I don't think the script calls for a faster delivery. I think it's better suited for comedic purposes. Therefore, you need to sound more relaxed and slow down so you can add more clarity to it.

    Good attempt!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,

    I see where your're going with this, and the delivery is good--but just not for this particular client, in my opinion. Most Medicare beneficiaries are age 65 and older, and might not take well to this speedy pitch. I think you may do well using this rapid delivery for another type of client, but since you want your ad to actually convert into sales, it's really important to know your listener. For an elderly demographic like your target market for this piece, I would definitely slow it down to a pace that is much easier for your listener to process and trust. Best of luck!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Just trying for warm, friendly delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97947.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice smooth Voice Over!

    Could not have done it any better..

    Just a quick note for you,I heard some slight pops or clicks at the end of sentences.
    Apart from that very Good!

    Peer Feedback:

    outstanding job. Sounds better than most commercials I hear over online radio services. very professional, yet personable.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent recording quality! You voice is warm and I can see how serious you are about good healthcare. Excellent phone number. It was a long phone number and you didn't rush through it.You obviously had someone you love in mind while reading this copy. I would personally like to hear you do this copy again with a bigger smile. Such a great sound.

    Stuff to work on:
    Just a tiny bit of mouth noise in the first phrase. Not a big deal, just re-record that first phrase. Don't hesitate so much at the punctuation. Smooth it out a bit by telling the story of this healthcare plan instead of "informing" someone of the healthcare plan. Also practice "representatives" in the mirror. Open your mouth a bit more/ relax your chest/ do some tongue twisters to loosen that word into a natural crisp delivery. It wasn't as clear as the client would want. I liked the gentle personality it gave the copy, but it probably wouldn't make the cut because of the word "representative".

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    Membership Benefits Promo

    Script:

    It’s never been a better time to be a member.
    We’ve partnered with some of the best brands in the world…
    to bring the most thrilling moments to life.
    From one-on-ones with your favorite stars…
    to once-in-a-lifetime sporting experiences…
    and exotic travel adventures.
    There’s something for everyone.
    So what are you waiting for?

    69 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for energetic and enticing but not over the top

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-95809.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds authentic and friendly. Church goer's voice. If you were using effects it may have removed some clarity from the vocal.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice energy and tone throughout, and the recording quality sounded very good as well. I wonder if background music would help to complement your voice - this copy seems like it needs a sound track of sorts to round out the message and delivery.

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    Metrocard

    Script:

    Metrocard

    When you buy a MetroCard, you get access to all the famous places in the entire city. And with an Unlimited Ride Card, you can hop on and off New York City Transit subways and local buses as many times as you like, all day long. It’s the fastest, least expensive way to see it all. For more information, call 800 METROCARD. And let us be your guide.

    71 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TKVO's recording

    Hi. Newbie here, about 6 weeks in to this, practicing often and enjoying it a lot. Invested in an AT4040 so any and all comments welcome, from performance to record quality. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99564/script-recording-94962.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd say attempt a more conversational tone, less pregnant pauses, and try to speak as if you are talking to someone next to you. Relax. Speaking the contact info was done in an authoritative tone, which is good for this portion of the script!

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    Michigan Strong

    Script:

    (Delivery with conviction)

    You know… It’s the getting back up that counts..
    We’ve been here before, We know what it means to be down.
    But we’re here, seeking something greater, something bigger, something better.
    Finding your dreams, your life, your soul, your passion, your place...In this beautiful land we call Michigan.

    106 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-91231.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Again. You're hammering the words too hard. It sounds cold and distant and somewhat unreal - not at all (say it with me) "conversational".

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, but the delivery is suppose to be "with conviction". Doesn't "conviction" suggest I would need to hammer it?

    Also, if you have a moment give me a recording sample of how you would do it. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not sure "conviction" means punching the words. This is like jabbing your finger in my sternum on every accented syllable.

    Rather than offer up the way I would interpret "conviction" or give a 'line reading", here's a clip of the Clint Eastwood "Halftime in America" Chrysler commercial that played during the SuperBowl a few years ago. Now, granted, he's Clint Eastwood and his "voice type" isn't your "voice type" (he's older and raspier, you're youngish and more full voiced), but there's still "conviction" in what he's saying, without hammering at the words. And it's virtually the same message.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8iXdsvgpwc8

    Peer Feedback:

    "Conviction" is more about tone than over working words. Still feel like there's a hallow sound...some mid-range missing here.

    Peer Feedback:

    Talk a little more about what you mean when saying "hallow"

    Peer Feedback:

    Hollow. I feel like there's some mid-range frequencies not being brought to the finished read. I don't know if you're EQing or not, obviously...but through headphones, monitors and computer speakers it seems like there is something missing in the mid-range to my ears. My ears are not the end-all for sure. So it's worth the virtual ink on your computer screen.

    Peer Feedback:

    What TxTom is talking about, I call "body" in the voice. There's a fullness to the entire harmonic structure of the sound that's missing. It could be in your EQ settings, or some of the NR is clipping out some of your natural vocal frequencies - or a combination of both. Dunno

    There also seems to be some reflection to your recording environment - not a reverb-type echo, but some quick bouncing around or slap back of the sound - like you get from hearing both the direct input and the end of an ever-so-slight latency delay at the same time.

    It also sounds like you're somewhat distant from the mic.

    Are you using a mudflap or portabooth or eyeball thingie? Because it sounds like the mic is in an enclosure of some kind rather than out in open space. And the sound deadening material is so close to the mic, that certain vocal frequencies aren't getting pulled in or being absorbed before they get there. Dunno that either.

    Just attempting to troubleshoot without knowing your setup.

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    Michigan-Ohio State

    Script:

    Thanksgiving time. A time to gather with family and friends. Share joy and reflect on the year gone by. Gather round the dining room table and share a sumptuous feast. Later on, indulge in leftovers.

    And what goes better with leftover than…..college football?! Some of the greatest rivalries are played this time of year: Alabama-Auburn, USC-UCLA, Florida-Florida State. But arguably, the greatest rivalry of them all is between the Ohio State Buckeyes and Michigan Wolverines!

    Ever since Bo and Woody first squared off in 1969, this game has become a classic battle that football fans look forward to every year. Tee up the pigskin and play ball! Hail to the Victors valiant! Hail to the conquering heroes!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    This is a fictional script I put together, promoting the Michigan-Ohio State football game. The favoritism I show for Michigan (punching the words "Michigan Wolverines", "Hail to the victors valiant!" and using the Michigan fight song as background music) is intentional. Also, was trying to be a little "tongue and cheek" by using soft violin music at the beginning then using the Michigan fight song when I went to a more high energy read.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97721.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The music fit your script. I heard a lot of dramatic pauses - too many from my perspective. This seem to be more of an affected delivery especially like a football announcer which maybe exactly what you were looking for - but most popular today is the unaffected or natural style which I felt you captured at the start with the warm Thanksgiving gathering of family and friends.

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    93 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for conversational, yet still professional.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-93339.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the real trick to this script is getting it to sound personal, conversational, instead of "read." One thing you might try, as an exercise, is to record yourself answering each section as if a question was posed. For example, take the first sentence, first paragraph: Ask this to yourself as if someone else is asking it: Who is MileIQ for? Then answer the question with the text in the script, but answer it as if you are answering the person, not reading the script. You can do this to just about every one of the statements. See if this makes a difference, and keep posting! :D

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Another client contacted me to voice one of his promotional videos. Again, the pacing on this is fitting the text of the video... David Michaelson

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-61534.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Generally, very nice. Good "up" quality. Some of those dramatic "breathy" bits seem a little overdone and there are too many of them. Example: "...very expensive..." Might be more effective with a fuller voice and inflection.

    The line "And what are our clients saying?" seemed a little odd. I think I understood your intent, just seemed like you were scolding me rather than taking pride in pleasing your clients.

    Peer Feedback:

    What James is describing is something I continue to describe as "announcer" delivery. That is a trait of someone who speaks into an SM-7B or RE-20 for a living. It's a very difficult habit to break. But it's a distinctive trait.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KcMike11's recording

    I am using my iphone mic so please be aware. but how is my overall voice sound? Thoughts? First time submitting something online. Always had an interest in announcing/v/o.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-34153/script-recording-97492.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality wasnt that good (because of the iphone mic Im sure) Your voice has good depth to it and very mature sounding. I did notice an issue with sibilance during your read. There was a distinct emphasis of the "S" sound at the end of several words (Voice, effects, ears,ways and emotions).

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    N/A

    Script:

    I am looking for feedback on sound quality, not acting. See notes below.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jallen's recording

    I am in the process of initially setting up my studio. I would just like some feedback on whether the sound quality is sufficiently professional, anything I can do to improve it, etc. (I am very new to all of this :)). The attachment is entirely raw and untouched. Please let me know if I can provide further information -- I have pictures/video of my studio, etc. Thanks! Jen

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-94504/script-recording-74345.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    There are others here on the Forum that are more tech savvy than I am and can even analyze your file for levels and such. That said, here are some impressions.

    To begin with, you may be recording too "hot" (volume wise) on the front end. You may need to fiddle with the gain control on your interface (if you're using one) or fiddle with the levels in your software (if you're using a USB mic).

    That level is also boosting the volume of your room tone or line noise level. There's a low rumble and hiss in the first 10 seconds of tone that's pretty loud and noticeable between sentences of your vocal recording. (Do you have your computer in your recording space? That could be fan noise.) According to George Whittam, an acceptable "professional quality" room tone or noise recording level is -60dB or lower. You do not, however, want absolute dead silence (no sound) for your recording environment. And unless you have tens of thousands of dollars to spend, you will never achieve that anyway.

    It might be helpful if you could give us an idea of your equipment - mic, interface, computer (Mac or PC), software and room (booth) treatment (and a link to the pictures/video of your studio) as baseline information to better judge what might need tweeking.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Jamesromick!
    Equipment is as follows:

    Computer: HP Pavilion dv7 (laptop)
    Mic: MXL V63M Condenser Studio Microphone with Shockmount
    Interface, etc: Zoom H4n
    Mic cable (I understand that this does make something of a difference?): CBI MLC20 Low Z XLR Microphone Cable
    Software: Audacity
    Room: I have a small walk-in closet that just fits a chair and mic stand. The mic itself is placed in a shelf that I have lined entirely with studio foam. Placed some studio foam on the corners nearby and along the top of the room, though I admit I don't have an entirely good sense of where the foam should go other than generally hit corners and space it out.:). One wall is mainly clothes, and covered the two remaining walls with two layers of moving blankets.
    That is probably confusing, so here is a link to a video I made of the space: https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B5S6EiARRuMnMHN6ZmJtNTdNX0k/edit?usp=dri....

    Yes, my computer is indeed in the same room. I'm sure that this is the main source of the noise. However, I am not sure how to alleviate this problem, as I rather need the computer with me to start and stop the recordings, as far as I can see. Perhaps just lowering the gain and applying a high pass filter would help? I have re-recorded the audio with a lowered gain (level 30 on Zoom H4n interface and .11 on Audacity). I also added a version of that same recording with a high pass filter added (just the standard parameters that pop up in Audacity -- rolloff of 6 dB per octave and cutoff frequency of 1000 Hz).
    I would love to hear thoughts on how that has affected the quality/anything else I might do to improve things.
    https://drive.google.com/folderview?id=0B5S6EiARRuMnWUItdHp6UUc4Qm8&usp=...

    A million, thousand, trillion THANKS!

    Peer Feedback:

    Judging from the video, the mic is picking up the sound from the open room behind you. Lots of reflective surfaces. A few squares of Auralex here and there won't really do the trick. The foam and materials behind the mic on the back walls help to keep your voice from reflecting off that wall, but isn't necessarily deadening the sound for the mic. You will need a panel or folding screen draped with those packing blankets behind (and possibly above) you to help deaden your recording space.

    And yeah, you've got to get the computer away from the mic. You're picking up fan noise and possibly errant electronic interference (static noise) and there are a lot of reflective surfaces on that shelf that it's on. It's a pain, I know, but you'll just have to start the software to record from another location, use a few seconds to get into position and burn a few more seconds to move back to the computer to stop the recording when you're done - then edit all of that out later. That's kinda how I did it until I actually built a dedicated booth, in which I have a second monitor, a wireless mouse and keyboard to control my computer on the outside. My mic is on a boom - a stand was to cumbersome for the limited space.

    And it will still take a lot of trial and error to get your levels the way you want them. No really easy fixes.

    Don't know much about your mic or interface. Others here on the Forum might. However, if your mic is sitting on a shelf (as opposed to mounted on an actual mic stand), even with a shock mount, it will pick up sounds and vibrations if you happen to hit the shelf or there is something rumbling (like a running dishwasher) in your house.

    Others may also have some ideas about the high-pass filter. 1000 Hz may be too much. Human hearing goes from about 20Hz - 20kHz, so a 50Hz-60Hz range might be a better starting point. That will help eliminate rumble but not detract some of the lower frequencies of your voice. (Even the female voice has some fundamental pitches/frequencies in a lower range. You may be taking some of the "body" out of your voice.)

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't know how this fits into your equation - I have an Audio Technica 4047 Mic that is plugged directly into a Zoom H4n That is a sufficient preamp - and it produces a .wav file that has more info than .mp3. I then carry the memory card over to my PC (in another room) and use a USB SanDisk "micro mate" to make the memory card visible to my desktop machine. Hint: I have a Plugable (mfr) 10 port USB hub - that makes inserting the USB device rather easy.(and handles a bunch of other USB devices - find it on Amazon)

    I can then copy files from the Zoom H4n to my terabyte hard drive, rename them properly and bring them into Audacity for editing,First I combine the H4n stereo tracks to a mono file - do the editing (Amplify is needed because I record at a low gain -as you do - to avoid plosives) When the editing is complete - I export the finished monaural .mp3 file and off we go.

    The key is the SanDisk USB 'micro mate'

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    Netflix Night

    Script:

    We'd like to remind you that whenever you make it a Netflix night, you never need a babysitter, the parking is always free, the atmosphere is as casual as the dress code, and you always get the best seat in the house.

    32 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Moe Biscuits's recording

    This is a recording I did last week during the Audition Ringers class. Just recorded into my iPhone while practicing for my actual read. Done in the style of Patton Oswalt's impression of the old Carvel ads, crossed with the coarse construction worker from Futurama. I'd love some feedback on performance, but if I can get at least one laugh out of it, I've done my job. Thanks everyone!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-59923/script-recording-64670.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Fell a little flat for me. Most of your inflections at the punctuation go in a downward direction. A little monotone and metronomic. No discernible emphasis on the product - a Netflix night as opposed to any old ordinary night. Other words that could have further emphasized the point are: "never ... always free ... atmosphere ... best seat". Other words that could have gotten secondary emphasis are: "babysitter ... parking ... casual ... dress code ... always"

    I guess what I found missing is that if you're going to go for it, really go for it! Make that character bigger. Have him a little more excited and authoritative about what a Netfilx night will do for me.

    He also sounded more like Popeye to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    James,
    I'm taking that as a compliment. And absolutely no snark implied. I should have specified: (at the risk of sounding like I'm backpedaling here) the flat, monotone is what I was going for. Kind of like the commercials where the business owner with no VO experience is doing his own voice over work, or those "client testimonials" on the mid-day ads for an attorney.

    With so many opportunities for pacing, inflection, and timbre; and so many over-the-top reads on this one, I just felt like adding an air of irony. You'd expect to hear a degree of warmth, an inviting tone with a touch of humor that would make you feel comfortable about spending a night at home with Netflix, and instead get, as Patton Oswalt so succinctly put it: "...Tom Waits gargling hot asphalt."

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, if that's what you were going for, I guess you achieved your goal.

    But it's like the old adage: If you have to explain the joke, it ain't funny.

    What I'm saying is that, with such a short script, your intent needs to be crystal clear with no ambiguity. The contrast of the unusual character voice and the flatness of the delivery seem at odds with each other. If you went all Eeyore on me, then I'd buy the subdued delivery, no problem.

    In the end, I'm not sure that this approach would win you the job. If I were a Netflix executive screening the auditions and did not hear the talent punch my company's name (it's only mentioned once so you only have one chance), I'd hit delete and jump to the next contender. Playing with voices to make the copy more interesting is an ear catcher, but the delivery still has to please the potential client.

    I give you kudos for making a bold choice. But you still have to fold in the practical implications.

    If you haven't watched it yet, take a look at David Goldberg's interview on VOBuzzWeekly. He hits on a salient point. Voice actors often think that their reads are fine because they're pleasing themselves and they're not in the heads of the clients, engineers, directors, copywriters, etc. The VO artist is at the bottom of the food chain. We're subservient to all others. It's not about what satisfies us, it's about what satisfies those that we serve.

    Peer Feedback:

    "If you have to explain the joke, it ain't funny." Super-constructive feedback. Again, no snark implied. I like to play around with voices, even if it's not entirely my forte. It's good to get some honest feedback on something like this. There were about 40 people in the class that night so the script was cut short. It was getting monotonous after a while,so I just recorded this as a goof. Without that frame of reference, I can see where the humor would get lost, and I certainly wouldn't submit this as an audition. Actually, I didn't even read this in the class; just recorded it while I was on mute, waiting for my turn.

    I'm still gonna hang on to this voice though. It might not fit so well for this particular ad, but I think it has a place somewhere. Maybe with a little more emotion/inflection.

    Peer Feedback:

    Moe,

    There's a Lender's Bagels (radio Commercial) script in the library that would be perfect for this kind of voice - typical gruff-type New Yorker. Why don't you give that one a whirl?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear inourto's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7536/script-recording-84204.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Would have liked to have seen the script, but I must say that was great! You have the same sound as Denis Leary so sounds like you should submit a demo similar to one of his truck commercials.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice! Awesome read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely a Denis voice:) Great read and sound!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice & read. Your voice gets a little lost in the music and reverb you used. I would suggest using a little eq to brighten things up.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear redfrohock's recording

    working on choppiness and conversational style. thanks in advance for any and all feedback, good or bad.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95270/script-recording-74888.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Red! That sounded pretty good!! Very clear recording, smooth, well paced. I liked your tone and point of view. One criticism...the word "often" should rhyme with "soften" -- the t is silent. But no sign of choppiness and you've achieved a comfortable, conversational style.
    ~Laura

    Peer Feedback:

    I have wondered that about the word often. hmmm. I'll have to look it up. thanks LAURA!!

    Peer Feedback:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z1ioA77rKaM
    Pronunciation guide lines for "t"'s in the middle of the word..
    GOTTA LOVE YOU TUBE!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read. and really nice voice. I like the pace.
    The only "choppiness" I heard was more like a little staccato in the cadence, rather than choppiness, per se. Maybe soften it and tighten an edit here or there -- on the next one. this one is fine as is.

    really nice job,
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Red. I loved your texture and the tone particularly at the beginning. I thought you were rushing in places and your re-recorded and edited portions didn't match the overall sound. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your voice is made for spots like this! Your tone is very friendly and informative. In terms of what can be improved, pretty much what was said above. But I wanted to point out that the first "WeLearn" was stressed much louder than I think you intended. Also, you let the word "area" trail off; as our mentors say, make sure to value all words in a script! Keep up the good work! :)

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    New Golf Product

    Script:

    Want to lower your score? Well you better know the impact zone.
    The M-Tracer’s patented 9-axis system delivers the accuracy you need.
    Attack Angle.
    Club Path.
    Face Angle.
    Club Head Speed.
    M-Tracer unlocks the secrets for solid ball striking.
    Get it at Amazon today!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for energetic with a sports announcer type feel. Appreciate your feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-93158.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken really liked it. Perhaps with even more energy would be great.Recording quality was good just a little more energy great job

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    New Truck Spot

    Script:

    Audition guidelines: Our client likes the tone and pacing of https://vimeo.com/48211796 but with touch richer, deeper Sam Elliott style toughness to the VO. Do not add sound effects or background music. Take your time between sentences.

    SCRIPT:
    There’s a storm coming…
    re-defining the landscape…
    re-shaping the natural order of things…
    requiring us to adapt…
    to a brand-new environment.
    With it, comes change…
    big change in the vocational truck market.
    It’s time for proven leadership…
    a line of trucks designed for your applications…
    custom-built to your specifications…
    and backed by the best dealer network in the business.
    You deserve trucks that work as hard as you do…
    trucks that deliver the results you demand.
    Some would say timing is everything
    well it’s time…

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear joesmithreally's recording

    Hello, This is the 17th audition I submitted to Voice123.com over 3 months. I have yet to get a job and have not received ANY feedback at all. I'm very new to voice over and, since I don't get any feedback (good or bad) from my Voice123 auditions, I'm hoping you can critique my performance and recording quality. Thank you kindly. All the best, Joe Smith (Really.;-)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-79753/script-recording-62845.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    For seasoned pros, the pay to play sites can be an exercise in frustration, desperation and futility. Going at it right off the bat can be even more so...discouraging. I would recommend that you keep an eye on the sunday call-in (9:15PM on Sunday nights.) There has been a P2P night before, but it might be time for another one.

    Sonically, your clip sounds clean. Mic seems well-matched to your voice. I listened to the sample clip on Vimeo and I think you did a good job of imitating it...however, the direction asked for Sam Elliot toughness. That would call for a bit more attitude than the Vimeo clip. I think you delivered more to the sample than toward a Sam Elliot sound. It's more subdued in tone than a SE delivery.

    Welcome to the forum.

    Oh...someone will probably have something to say about posting scripts that originate on the V123 type sites. There are protocols there.

    Peer Feedback:

    I did this audition too.
    Your's sound grittier than mine. You're more Sam Elliott than me....good luck (but not too much!!)
    ;-)

    One thing I've learned is that even though they say "a little more like Sam Elliott" it's really bad to try to do a Sam Elliott imitation...so I just smoke a pack of cigarettes and then just do me.

    BTW, you'll get a job at about 50:1 auditions to call backs. that's been my average. and your voice sounds really good, so you should do better than that.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Joe,

    I was careful not to read the comments already posted, so that I can give you what occurred to me without prejudice.

    I think this script needs a single style of delivery throughout. Right now the delivery is a bit tentative in the beginning and gets confident as it progresses. In my view, the delivery will turn out great if the tone as at "You deserve trucks that work as hard as you do…" is maintained from start to finish.

    The concatenation at "line of trucks" and "custom-built" needs to be reworked to make it sound better than it does now.

    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom for the info on P2P.
    Dave, I loved your remark, "...smoke a pack of cigarettes and then just do me." You are someone I look up to.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you TXTom, Dave, and Jothi for your very helpful comments. I really appreciate it. Best of luck to you all.
    Cheers,
    Joe

    Peer Feedback:

    I think that I might like to give this script a go.

    Just curious, I see that the direction says, "Take your time between sentences." But was there a time limitation in the specs? I mean, was it intended as a 30, 45 or 60 second spot?

    I am assuming that the ellipsis marks indicate that they wanted space enough to sync the sentence fragments up with video.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi jamesromick,
    It was a 90 second spot. I should have read it slower, and with more dramatic toughness.
    Thanks,
    joe

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    68 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear micahtouchet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-90296/script-recording-81958.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    micah --
    I'm not en expert on imaging and news promo pieces, so take this with a grain of salt:
    sound quality -- seemed pretty good to me. EQ'd well, crisp, thick, a touch of added stereo microshifting. Did a pro engineer mix the VO track? just asking...

    performance -- seems fine for an imaging promo spot.

    but this demo needs a whole bunch more post production. there is a whole genre of News leader music beds that would spruce this up nicely. Tons of news promo music beds are available on Youtube.

    I'm interested to hear what others have to say about imaging.

    cheers,
    DS

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    Nike - They will tell you no...

    Script:

    All your life you are told the things you cannot do. All your life they will say you’re not good enough or strong enough or talented enough. They’ll say you’re the wrong height or the wrong weight or the wrong type to play this or be this or achieve this. THEY WILL TELL YOU NO, a thousand times no- until all the no’s become meaningless. All your life they will tell you no, quite firmly and very quickly. They will tell you no. And you will tell them Yes.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kimlicarlson's recording

    Simply practice, I have a rudimentary mic and software. I am looking to upgrade soon!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-127241/script-recording-97700.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    For a basic setup, it sounds decent through my computer speakers. Also through my computer speakers, though, I can hear a LOT of mouth noise. You're going to want to drink a lot of water over at least a couple hours prior to recording to make sure you're properly hydrated. AND...avoid caffeine prior...it will create more mouth noise than you thought possible.

    A little regional accent is coming through. Workable. Almost everyone has some kind of accent to work with or around.

    On the tempo. Nike commercials are typically 30s in length. This ran 39. That's a lot of tightening up. I read through it with a stopwatch and hit 28 seconds trying to give it a little intensity/motivation and it's doable. I get that you're wanting to get under the skin of the listener and motivate them...but the time slot is a merciless b**** and the ultimate winner every time. We are totally at it's mercy. Can't get around it. So if you're interested in trying this script again...see if you can bring it in at 28.5 -29s as it would properly time out for use. Good luck. Nice practice.

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    34 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/okiton.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! I like your take on this! You were friendly, informative, easy to listen to. After the words 'Japanese restaurant' there was a longish pause. At first I thought the text had ended.

    Peer Feedback:

    This was a fun read! Pause was a bit long after "Japanese restaurant," but other than that, good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    A noticeable increase in energy about half way through. You need to start the read with that kind of energy, and maintain it throughout. Yes, the read starts out talking about the daily grind, the some old stuff, but you need to use a little more energy to make that point. Just direct the energy a little differently. Especially, if this is really an audition! If you don't grab the client, or, the listener, in the first few seconds, you're going to lose them.
    I absolutely agree that your read IS fun and friendly. Keep it up.

    Ken

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    64 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear zdthomas@ualr.edu's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-109459/script-recording-89669.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice production quality. The voice is a little more "present" than the music bed.

    There's also something happening with your S's, they're really dull and almost lisp-y. If you used a de-esser or dropped the EQ of those frequencies to lessen or eliminate sibilants, you went too far. Also some plosive popping.

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    Parody (Most Interesting Man in The World) - Radio Station Ad

    Script:

    “The 60’s, one of the most interesting periods of the great rock ‘n roll era.
    Fluently spoken is Doo Wop, Teen Idols, British Invasion, Surf Rock, Motown, Novelty Songs, Pop and Folk Rock.
    When the 60’s speak, Judy takes off her glasses, The Miracles shop around, Nancy puts her boots away, the Rolling Stones get satisfaction, even Sue stopped running around, probably because of Tommy Roe and Sweet Pea.
    When Sam Cooke’s Chain Gang is heard, Ronnie Spector feels an overwhelming urge to visit Phil, singing “Be My Baby” during the trip.

    100 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    Translation like a "oldies rock n roll" soap opera.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-83684.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds a bit over processed, and even sped up at the end there. You said "in" instead of "is" in "...is Doo Wop..." There was technique in the lists, but not connection. I personally didn't get any connection, love of or understanding of that era.

    Peer Feedback:

    PS.

    I think you have the voice and style for narration. Maybe a little more conversational tone was in order, like you actually lived the era and telling a younger generation all about it?

    Peer Feedback:

    Script called for "deadpan" delivery like Will Lyman in those "Dos Equis" beer ads. That's what I was going for anyway. He is also the voice of Frontline on PBS, love his delivery. Of course he is an icon in the VO world. Bean good "catch" on missing the word "is", busted! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, deadpan you got, but I think they put that so that people wouldn't play to the joke, not so that they wouldn't get emotionally connected. The Most Interesting Man guy still has plenty of time and swagger in his delivery. There is connection, but he's the straight man in the joke. I think a little more passion, slowing it down a bit and keeping that vocal placement and matter of fact thing you got going is gonna make a nice delivery.

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    PBTS Ain't Misbehavin' Spot

    Script:

    Players by the Sea jumps jives and swings to the tunes of Fats Waller January 7th to the 22nd. The hit musical Ain't Misbehavin' recreates Harlem's Golden Age with songs like Honeysuckle Rose, Mean to Me and Your Feets Too Big. It's music and laughter all the way at Players by the Sea. 106 6th Street N. Jacksonville Beach, FL. For tickets, call 249-0289 or log onto playersbythesea.org

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear Steven Anderson's recording

    Old audio I did for a theatre I volunteer at, looking for performance feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7852/script-recording-26775.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent job, Steve. Most of what you did worked quite well, with a few minor exceptions.

    I don't know if you're African American or not, but considering the musical genre, plus the content and period of the show (Fats Waller, Harlem, the 1940's) you might have leaned a bit more broadly on the ethnic vocal lilt/dialect you used. This was one of our country's most colorful and creative periods, especially amongst the African American musical artists living and working in Harlem. Despite the danger of being politically incorrect, more of that vocal quality (and a little more "smile") would invoke a connection for many listeners to that rich period of our history and the wonderful music it generated.

    Also, your track appears to be mono, or at least the music is. Perhaps the recordings you had available weren't stereo. I don't know. I would suggest you rerecord it with better quality stereo recordings of the songs that sound less "tinny." Currently, the combination of your somewhat edgy vocal quality and the thin musical accompaniment make the mixed track sound a tad edgy. Slightly richer stereo background music would counter your voice and create a lovely bed to surround it.

    Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Jim,
    This particular spot wasn't produced by me - I recorded it at a local radio station. So I wasn't really in control of the quality. I usually use stereo recordings when I'm in control. The Showtime 25 spot is a better example of my work.

    That aside, this was also from before I was taking classes and focusing on what I was doing (rather than simply relying on my acting). I felt like something was missing, hence I posted it here. I was trying to ride the balance between the way I talk when I'm polite (clean, no accent) and when I'm casual/excited/less polite/hanging out with my cousins (accent). I am African American, but that's beside the point.

    I tried splitting the difference vocally to be better understood, but it didn't quite work. I've been posting some of the older audio so I could get confirmation on what I hear. Thanks for the feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your performance. I'd prefer the music to be slightly lower in volume as not to compete with you, and the mono recording actually worked for me because it gave it that old-time feel. Nice work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved it man !! Great energy and Great music !! Loved your delivery .. very enthusiastic !! I'm addicted to exclamation points !!! LOL

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    Pepperidge Farm

    Script:

    If you're going to have a cookie, have a cookie. Pepperidge Farm. Never an ordinary day

    38 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear courtland.smith's recording

    Just started using this forum and will be doing my demo next month...practice... practice...practice. This is from the contest. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4372/script-recording-45707.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your delivery, but be careful with pronunciation....there is no "T" in Pepperidge Farm.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love it .... can't wait to her your demo.

    Peer Feedback:

    Courtland: I liked the warmth and friendliness of your voice. The last line of the script is "Never have an ordinary day". You squeaked on the beginning "If" and you did not sell me on "then have a cookie". Voice acting in commercials is about getting the listener to take some action. The experts say don't rush into doing a demo that will only get tossed in the trash. I would participate in this forum, read books, listen to webinars, get coaching and then think about it. Please correct the script and re-post this commercial. Good Luck. Larry

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Toad in the hole's recording

    Thanks all for taking the time to hear this "one more time", I promise it will be a little different. Had this ready to go last Tuesday and looked up at the clock, 9:03PST my time, Darn missed it. What's unique about this is I quietly listened in on last Sunday's Tech Talk (love being a fly on the wall with all you experts!) and was intrigued by the use of a Cellphone to record VO. I have a Galaxy II and it just amazes me with what it already does, with the proper plug in microphone (just ordered on Ebay) maybe it would make a recording I could then download, convert from the default .3gp to .wav and then in Audacity edit and finish in .mp3, just like my recording studio aka Foam Box. Let me know on the voice (not my usual) because I was envisioning what a person that weighs this would sound like, kind of hoarse I think. And yes there is backround noise at the end because I stood up from my desk at work, turned the window a/c off and just let 'er rip. Love what's done here on Edge and good luck to all on the contest. Toad (non-de-plume).

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10743/script-recording-35146.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Toad!
    I never met anyone with that weight, I...just don´t know how he´d sound but I admire your ability to imagine and impersonate it on the read!! That´s a special gift you have there! All the best, Eva

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    Portray practice for demo

    Script:

    The challenge facing consumers today is that we get up to 5,000 marketing messages a day. Too often do these ads interrupt consumer’s entertainment, instead of adding value to the context the message is serving. As a marketer, it’s tougher than ever to break through this clutter. Catching the consumer’s attention and moving them to action is becoming increasingly more difficult. So why not make it easy on yourself? Portray is the perfect marketing vehicle to inspire shoppers to follow a curiosity or passion, and immediately convert it into a purchasing experience. Showcase relevant updates on your latest products,
    promotions and can’t-miss events while daily shoppers are within close proximity of the point-of-purchase and in the purchasing state of mind. No other media platform closes the gap between an impression and instant gratification like Portray.

    70 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VoxShark's recording

    Hi, I'm using a Php400 Labsic condenser mic (extremely cheap) as I wanted to just try this out before getting anything more. I recorded in my living room/dining room and had a lot of clothes and drapes hanging. I used Adobe Audition for post production. This is my first ever recording. And I'm new to literally everything about it. I know that my voice audio is bad but I need to know what you think please. I have tried to record a narration of a few paragraphs from Johnathan Strange and Mr. Norrel, and voice act some characters but this commercial is where I focused. I really would like to get hard feedback because this is something I really want to do. Thanks, Gino

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-132413/script-recording-98161.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretations - good for a first recording! I like the music/whistle upbeat and it was at a good volume level. Sounds like a commercial, but if "Portray" is the product it kind of was lost in all the fluff, (not your fault as I think this is a script thing) IMHO

    Vocal Performance - my suggestions are to try make the read as smooth as possible, so pretend that you are talking to someone rather than reading. If you are not using a pop screen I suggest you get one. Watch the sing/song rise and fall in your voice - it shouldn't become a pattern. You rise your voice up for several words at times it seems just a tad forced, unlock your natural voice.

    Recording quality - You need a good microphone, I'll leave it at that.

    Good read for a first job!

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    Previously On Reveal

    Script:

    Previously on Reveal; Zug the Friendly Orc... Next week on Reveal; Zug the Friendly Orc

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Goofing with some drama for a web program, Reveal is the program name, the Character for this month was Zug the Friendly Orc... Just a little drama and fun with the processing. I don't do trailers for obvious reasons, but this was fun. Have a listen, leave a note! All are welcome Nodo420

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-52713.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice little production. I would try it without the pause after previously I think it would flow better then put the pause after reveal. Nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Funny, Ted. Parody? Maybe not so much upward inflection on Reveal.

    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of...This isn't ready for prime time...But since I'd never done "trailery" voices, I thought I'd give it a shot.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted, I liked it. Your tone matched the music nicely. Well done.

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    Promo for a Free Photo App

    Script:

    (Delivery: upbeat, friendly).

    Pandora listeners, try FreePrints, the free app that lets you get all those great photos off your phone and into your hands in just days. FreePrints lets you print up to 1,000 4-by-6 photos a year, absolutely free. All you pay is a small shipping charge. It’s easy! Just select the photos you want to print, choose the sizes and quantities, and you’re done. The app is free, and so are the prints. No subscriptions. No commitments. Just free prints! Tap now to download.

    88 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-91666.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Generally, very nice.

    Watch all of the "up talk" at the end of most of your phrases. A few times is fine, but too much gets a little monotonous.

    Timing is good.

    Whatever processing you used (probably the EQ) dulled your S sounds to almost a lispy kind of S rather than a sharp S. It sounds like you're talking through a wash cloth before the sound gets to the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken -
    this sounded pretty good. The faster paced "hard sell" seems to suit you.
    That said, I thought the flow was a little choppy....you could probably tighten up some of it with editing.
    To James point, the up pitching everywhere loses the importance of emphasis. If it's all amazing, then nothing is amazing.

    I did this audition on V123 also. Meh. not good enough to share here......
    Hope you get it.

    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Appreciate the feedback, as always, guys.

    When I first started posting recordings here, both of you and others had commented saying the tone was somewhat monotonous and the end of my sentences actually had a downward tone. I guess I took that mean that all of my sentences should have an inflection at the end.

    Dave mentioned the faster pace. I did that script read in 28 seconds. That's a relatively short script, I think, so I thought 28 seconds was relatively slow given the amount of script. My concern is if I read even slower for a short script like that, it will seem obvious that I'm trying to stretch it out and thus, severely diminish the quality of the read.

    Plus, Dave, you mentioned it being somewhat choppy. I deliberately had some longer pauses in there to try and avoid going to fast. But, if I tighten it up, as you suggest, it would eliminate some of the choppiness, but, on the down side, it would make it seem much faster, wouldn't it?

    In that respect, I guess I'm feeling like, "damned if I do, damned if I don't." Lol. :)

    Would appreciate your feedback on what I've just said. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    Going back and listening to and reading some comments on your previous submissions and your counter comments/rebuttals, I'm sensing a pattern. Might I suggest that you're working too hard - in that you're taking comments and coachings too literally to heart to where the "technique" is getting in the way of a "natural" and (say it with me) "conversational" flow. What does "conversational" mean to you? Maybe something different than it means to me or Dave. Dunno.

    The only people that I know of that naturally talk with so much "upspeak" are very valley girl types and surfer dudes. It's good as a character study, but is really irritating in real life. That's why we roll our eyes and laugh at the stereotype.

    That said, I'm going to offer up some technique. Some of that choppyness that Dave mentioned could be glossed over by picking important words and their vowel sounds to elongate. Case in point: The first iteration of the name of the app - Freeee-Priiiints. That's an exaggeration, of course, but you said it so fast (and this is one time you dipped down where you might not have) that I nearly missed the name or misunderstood that it was the actual name of the app. Even though it appears as one word, make it two. Nobody's reading the copy (they're only listening), so they're not going to know what it looks like, only that they heard the app's name cleanly, clearly and succinctly.

    So, as an exercise, have the conversation with yourself.

    "Pandora listeners,"
    "Yeah?"
    "try FreePrints,"
    "What is it?"
    "the free app that lets you get all those great photos off your phone and into your hands in just days."
    "Oh, cool! How does it work?"
    "FreePrints lets you print up to 1,000 4-by-6 photos a year, absolutely free."
    "Free? Really?"
    "All you pay is a small shipping charge."
    "Oh, OK. But is it hard to use?"
    "It’s easy! Just select the photos you want to print, choose the sizes and quantities, and you’re done."
    "Hey, that IS easy. And it's free? What about the prints?"
    The app is free, and so are the prints. No subscriptions. No commitments. Just free prints!'
    "Cool. What do I do to get it?"
    "Tap now to download."

    You may even find a volunteer to read the other lines to "cue you in" to the copy. Then edit them out and splice your dialogue (answers) together. You'll hear the difference, because it's an actual conversation with another human. The trick then is to fill in those spaces in your mind.

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    Promo for a health care service

    Script:

    What if there was a service—paid for by Medicare—that helped patients transition home and stay home with a team of medical professionals to coordinate their care? Elite Patient Care has created such a solution, the Transitions to Home program.

    One of the greatest benefits of referring patients to Elite Patient Care is that more than 9 out of 10 of our patients transition to home—and stay home—within 30 days.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Voice is suppose to be friendly, yet authoritative

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-89569.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Friendly, you have in spades. Authoritative? Not so much.

    It also seems that EVERY word has equal value.

    Take the first sentence. Can you do it on one breath? It's a kind of rhetorical question that you're going to give the answer to in the next sentence. I would submit that the more operative words in that sentence are "transition" and 'stay" - punching "and" seems a little awkward, IMHO.

    Then you need to "billboard" the service. Take a moment, an ever-so-slight pause, before offering the solution. That will set off the service, giving it some natural emphasis. The same thing with the name of the "program". This sentence got a little rear-ended into the previous one.

    Same thing with the next paragraph. It's an addition (more of a reiteration) of the first sentence. But it got butted right up against the previous sentence. (An editing thing maybe?)

    I'm also thinking that this is not the end of the story. I picture Alex Trebek chiming in to seal the deal.

    I'm going to give this a try.

    Peer Feedback:

    To answer your question: It seems (and this is only my opinion, so take it for what it's worth) that, because the sentence fragments are broken up by so many breaths, when you come back in, you attack the words with the same energy and emphasis. Everything seems important and the pace is very even, in that nearly all syllables have the same length and value. It's all very even. (The exception is that "and" that really sticks out, which is why it sounds awkward to me.) You have variations in inflection, but some words of the script may not be as important as others which might be stretched or elongated, warmed, colored and the like.

    It's subtle and very difficult to verbalize. Just saying, "Make it more conversational," isn't particularly helpful, in my opinion, because that concept is very different for each individual. BUT, we kind of intrinsically know it when we hear it, the same as for when we know something sounds phony to us.

    But warm, honest, caring, hostile, angry, mad, furious, loving, caring, happy, jubilant,
    commanding, etc. - more objectively specific adjectives - are a better guide than subjectively "real" or "conversational".

    And don't get me wrong, I can fully understand that you don't "hear" a difference between my read and yours. Ear training (like knowing when a note sounds flat or sharp or off-key when listening to music) is just as important to VO as what you do with your voice and script interpretation. Some of it is innate and some of it is a learned skill. That's why, I feel, it's just as important to listen to commercials (for structure, style, messaging, form, content, pace, timing, etc.) as it is to read the copy.

    I am, by no means, an expert. I'm still learning myself. But I do have 38+ years of acting and singing experience to draw upon, which I attempt to use to good effect. Sometimes I hit, sometimes I miss.

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    Promo for Online Booking Software

    Script:

    (informative and friendly)
    The internet...never sleeps.

    Things that once had to be done during normal business hours, can now be done 24/7, with the click of a mouse.

    Can you say the same about your business' booking process?

    Megabook is your solution.

    Megabook is a $7 a month, easy-to-use online booking program.

    It lets your customers book and pay for anything at anytime...through your Megabook customer booking application.

    It even issues automatic reminders!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-90469.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice booming resonance to your voice. I think you also had nice variety. I think the end was rather abrupt and felt like you were cut off rather than finished, so you may want to "button" that - make it feel like an exclamation point rather than a technical cut off. I have a lot to say about the recording quality - it sounds decent to me - thought there seems to be a brightness to it that I haven't heard in strong professional recording. Nice pleasant voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback.

    Could you elaborate more on what you mean by "brightness" when referring to the recording quality? I've heard that term used in critiques of others here in this forum, but not sure what it means. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    What I meant to say was I DON'T have a lot to say about the recording quality - however what I meant by "brightness" was that it has an almost tinny sound. It is not a full and solid sound, It may be that the space is too "live". Sorry I don't have a more technical term for it, but it's about dampening the space around you.

    Peer Feedback:

    "... 24/7, with the click of a mouse.
    Can you say the same about your business' booking process?
    Megabook is your solution."

    In that whole section I feel like the pauses are a little too long. I'd also like it if Megabook was hit a little more and if it was really touted as the solution a bit more with your tone.

    "anything at anytime" I agree with you choice to try and emphasize these I just think the way you actually did it sounds a little awkward.

    "It even issues automatic reminders!" this felt a little too flat.

    Overall this sounds really good and your delivery, for the most part, is conversational. Just a few tweaks here and there are really all I could pick out. You have a good "everyman" feel to your voice.

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    Promo for Online Therapy Service

    Script:

    Do you or someone you know suffer from depression, anxiety, too much stress in life, or just need someone who understands what you’re going through? What if there was a place where you could talk to a licensed therapist from anywhere in the world, on your schedule.

    Introducing Better Help!
    The affordable, private online counseling you can access anytime, anywhere.
    You can speak to one of the over 2,000 licensed therapists within 24 hours. Talk, text or video chat. It’s all up to you.

    Over 2 million sessions have already been conducted, and hundreds of thousands of people just like you are finding the answers they’re looking for through Better Help dot com. It’s private, it’s mobile, and it’s on your schedule.

    This is not a call center or an answering service. These are real, experienced, licensed therapists ready to help you. Anytime and Anywhere!

    If you or someone you love is suffering and simply need someone to turn to, Try Better Help dot com.

    There’s no limit to the number of sessions available and your first 7 days are Absolutely Free!

    So stop repressing your emotions, and Try Better Help dot com. A simply Better way to getting the answers you need. Anytime, Anywhere!

    104 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    For this read, presenting the problem at the beginning then going for reassurance when explaining this therapy service.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-92209.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    My biggest note would be to relax the piece quite a bit. You really want to empathize with your audience and put them at ease. It has this very business man approach to it and it doesn't quite fit the piece. Definitely add more smile and try to visualize who you're specifically talking to and then imagine being their confidant. Since the service is dealing with human emotions I'd say you'd definitely want to bring out that more natural human side of you. A read like this could work for a different piece but since we're dealing with therapists I think the piece should be a little more sensitive. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of agree with kckretzer. This sounds more like an informercial for Super Beta Prostate than a for a stress, anxiety and depression therapy service.

    Here's an example of a more soothing and sympathetic VO about depression and getting help. You can hear the concern and the knitted brow in her voice. Only listen to up to 1:31. After that it's just the "legal" about using Cymbalta. But the tag is good too.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OTZvnAF7UsA

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    Promo for Plumbing Products

    Script:

    If you've spent any time in the kitchen with your family,
    you know it's a place where you can smile, laugh and be yourself.
    So at Elkay, we don't take ourselves too seriously.
    We prefer to be a little more down-to-earth.
    After all, life is to be enjoyed, savored and celebrated.
    We use our heads, our hearts and our hands to solve real-life problems.
    When there's an unmet need, we address it with purpose and passion.
    Over the years, we've discovered that there are very few problems that can't be solved with the experience borne of nearly a century of American manufacturing excellence.
    Elkay. Ingenuity for everyday life.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for friendly, uplifting and conversational.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-92453.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You sound great, very clear. What a coincidence to find this as I live very near the Elkay plant and they are a major employer in my area. The reading was good, I would think adding a little more emotion in the reading would be an improvement. What do you do to eliminate mouth noises?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

    I have a friend that has a recording studio setup in his home. He does the recordings. I think he uses Audacity but not certain of that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Friendly? Kinda. You have a naturally friendly voice and demeanor.

    Uplifting? Not sure why. Unless this manufacturer is going provide free or charitable products and services for underdeveloped countries. The constant punching of "we" is more self aggrandizement that uplifting to a community. Lay off the pronoun and emphasize what we "stand for" and would "do" - the action and discriptives.

    Conversational? Not so much. I hear all of the punctuation - pauses at commas and full stops at periods. And the inflections sound planned and studied rather than organic.

    It's not so much "emotion" (which is a loaded word and too vague), but pride of product and service. Tell me a story with warmth, pride and satisfaction. And maybe a little self-deprecation. After all, "we don't take ourselves too seriously."

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it sounded pretty good. The sound quality was a bit boxy but that can be eq'd out by adding a bump (3-4 db) around 4-5K for some added presence. The read itself was good. I don't completely understand James' comments above since this would be added to a video with Music like they already have on you tube. It's a family run business for a century so I think your read fits the mold. A lot of the flow in the delivery can be changed in the edits and mix so I wouldn't really have any problem with your delivery. Good job!

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    Promo for Technology Event

    Script:

    (delivery suppose to be wise and friendly)

    Time has run out.
    A chaotic future fueled by technology and production automation is here.
    Every industry is undergoing transformation.
    The speed of impact is accelerating at an ever-increasing rate.
    The physical and digital worlds are colliding.
    Geographical boundaries limiting markets are no more.
    The overexploitation of existing business models will lead to failure.
    Success belongs to courageous executives who choose to explore this new landscape together.

    It is time to set the course for personal change with conviction and gather a trusted team around you.
    Lead your company to success and mastery of the disruptive forces which shape this new world.

    Thrive on complexity.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-91227.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Down, down, down.™

    Aside from simply sounding like you're doing a quick, rough read through a script, it sounds like you're reading and not speaking naturally. AND...every line ends in a downward inflection. If you spoke that way naturally, I would recommend a visit to the doctor for some uppers or something...but no one really ends every sentence downwardly.

    Sound-wise...there's a hallow sound to the vocal.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're also overworking the words. It went in an announcer-type voice that didn't fit you, kenbond, all that well. It sounded forced and uncomfortable.

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is great! Pacing and clarity were good. Emotion was a little flat, kind of like an announcement.

    Peer Feedback:

    practice makes perfect , put more emotion in your voice apart from that your ok.

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    Purina Farms Haunted Haystack

    Script:

    Join us at the Purina Farms Haunted Hayloft!

    Enjoy magic shows, pumpkin painting, storytelling, and trick –or-treating.

    Don’t forget to dress up for the kids costume contest for a chance to win great prizes.

    October 16th through 18th And 23rd through 25th.

    Admission is free! Call for reservations.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Cassandra Wladyslava's recording

    I'm new to commercial work, so any kind of feedback/advice is appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-79767/script-recording-84596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds great and is perfectly timed. You definitely sound like you worked on your breathing. I hope I can get to that soon!

    Peer Feedback:

    You really raced through this copy and I felt like you where yelling at me. Plus it was all one note, no emphasis on anything. I could hear you running out of breath. That makes your listener uncomfortable. You were really pushing too so it put the tone of your voice in a higher register. Relax, SMILE and just tell me about the event. You can be excited and have energy but still, just talk to me.

    Your recording sounded fine, didn't hear any background noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you both for the feedback!

    Dave: The biggest problem I had was this read had to be 15 seconds and not a second over. When they wrote the script I don't think they took into consideration that human beings need to breathe. lol.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hey y'all. I'm Kevin, 33 year old, male, living in Bangkok Thailand. I recently started producing my own commercials and v.o demos, and I'm looking for any advice, tips, helpful hints, anything that can help get me started. I'm concerned mostly about my range and communication, but am willing to take criticism on anything and EVERYTHING. I'm a total newbie. Thanks for any helpful advice you can give me in advance. I'll be posting more of these in the future!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-90687.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Once again, the copy interpretation was great. The music enhances the read. Vocal performance, good. Recording quality, can't say anything more. It sounds good to me. I'm just getting into voice overs myself, I'm not an expert. From the novice's ear, it sounds good. Sounds like a radio commercial I would hear while showering.

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    Real Estate Advert

    Script:

    Located in the gated community of Shavian Lake, close to Montgomery Airport, this fantastic rental home is perfect for the outdoorsy nature lover. Features include a natural
    gas fireplace, tiered floor design, and a lovely all-season sun room, perfect for bird
    watchers or bookworms. Imagine waking up every morning in your master bedroom to
    a glorious Shavian Lake sunrise. Make breakfast in a kitchen complete with brand new
    stainless steel appliances, agate counter tops, and updated parquet flooring. With a
    covered balcony facing the lakefront, summer paddle boat rentals, and access to a
    year-round nature trail, the Shavian Lake community is truly a community for all seasons
    (and you can bring your pets too!). For more details, contact Hinterland Rentals at
    555-3489. Inquire about this rental home’s short-term leasing program, starting at
    $1500 per month.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Hey y'all. I'm Kevin, 33 year old, male, living in Bangkok Thailand. I recently started producing my own commercials and v.o demos, and I'm looking for any advice, tips, helpful hints, anything that can help get me started. I'm concerned mostly about my range and communication, but am willing to take criticism on anything and EVERYTHING. I'm a total newbie. Thanks for any helpful advice you can give me in advance. I'll be posting more of these in the future!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116299/script-recording-90688.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your tone is real good and you've got a perfectly friendly, relate-able voice to work with but I'd say you are definitely pausing too much, for too long between too many words.
    Example:
    "It's truly a community. For all seasons. Annd....you can bring your pets too."
    It sounded like these were different sentences because of the pauses. The last line ended in a way that was definitely a little too small and quiet.

    With "Short term leasing program" the word program kind of died off. Take a listen to see if you here words that are too drawn out or paused for too long. If you can fix the tempo a bit it'd make it much better.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the advice, I had my first audition last week, and they basically said the exact same thing! Too many pauses between words. I took it to heart and I found trying to read ahead certainly helps with it. Appreciate the feedback!

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    Representative Audition

    Script:

    Progression and Innovation…
    Inspired by our continuous need to improve…
    Advance…
    And grow…
    To do all it takes to make better…
    Natural Gas…
    Changing the world we live in…
    A cleaner, more efficient energy alternative…

    49 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear squiffy225's recording

    Hello; I am currently trying to build a VO business. However, I am woefully inexperienced and ignorant as to the nuts and bolts of the voiceover world. I wish to change this. As part of this building process, I realized that I have absolutely no idea if what I am submitting is acceptable, poor, or absolutely amateur. Audition responses has been poor despite a BUNCH of them, so I assume that I am missing or neglecting something fundamental with my; elocution, editing, performance, or all of the above. In short, I would love a practiced ear to review my efforts. This is an audition I submitted today, so it is representative of what I have been submitting, in terms of style, and sound. I welcome any critical assessment, criticism, advice, etc. that anyone may have regarding how I sound, and the level of quality of this typical submittal. Please feel free to be brutally frank—I sincerely wish to improve, and would greatly appreciate honest appraisals as to what needs improvement. Thank you so very much!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-86337/script-recording-69955.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi. Nobody ever started out in VO at the top.We are all building our hopes and dreams here. I think you have a fine voice but a little lack of conviction for what the copy says. "to do all it takes to make better" has odd stops in it. This makes it sound as though you are reading the words as opposed to saying them. The people who will hire you would like to hear you verbally endorse them with tone,confidence and conviction.( The same conviction that we read in your notes about your budding business should be heard in your voice in the audition itself.) Someone who founded the business you are advertising once felt the same way about it. Be in those shoes. And then relax in those shoes,this is your baby,you are going to make it work and you are justly proud of it. Keep trying! I would like to give you more constructive feedback but I am in the same crowd of newbies you are in. NGB

    Peer Feedback:

    The first question I would have is: Are you getting any coaching? Understand that even seasoned veterans who are making the big American dollars (or Eruos, Pounds,Yen, Pesos, etc.) continue to take coaching from other seasoned VO talent, agents and/or casting persons. That's a fundamental starting point. It's an investment in your career.

    Secondly: I'm not sure how kosher it is to post actual audition scripts of auditions that you have submitted yourself for on the Forum - at least not until after the actual spots have aired. You may be leaving yourself open to a law suit (especially from a client as big as Natural Gas) for (possibly) giving away copyrighted copy. Usually something like this is vetted through a legal department (even though "truth in advertising" seems to be a thing of the past).

    Third: There's a kind of maxim - for every 100 auditions, you may win one job. There are exceptions, but that seems to be more the norm. I'm assuming that you are submitting your auditions on the P2P sites like Voices.com and Voices123. Many people have mixed feelings and opinions about these sites, and many get varied results. The lucky and dedicated ones seem to make a fairly good amount of scratch for their efforts, but most others never get even a nibble. I do not subscribe to any of them myself, but from talking to others who do, it seems that you need to be quick with your submissions and persevere.

    What is your recording setup? I ask, because there is a certain level of standard (noise level, background noise, pops & clicks, etc.) that has to be met, without excessive processing. This recording sounds like you edited out the breaths (which is a good thing, in my book) and boosted the lower frequencies a bit (which muddies up the crispness of your voice just a touch).

    The read, itself, is a little sing-songy, there's a lot of raising and lowering fluctuation in pitch. It sounds "technical" - like I'm hearing technique - rather than one human relating a message to another human as a friend. The buzz word is "conversational" - which also means "believable". The sing-songy quality tends to sound a little more condescending (whether you intended it to or not) than the delivery of a positive message.

    All of those ellipses are a challenge in themselves. You need to decide and/or understand why they are there. I suspect that this is an on-camera spot, so these are for visual pauses. Therefore, you need to imagine, in your mind's eye, what those visuals might be. But the words also need to be strung together in a complete message. Tough stuff.

    Finally. Never admit that you're a newbee (especially to a potential client). The one common trait that I have found in all successful VO artists (whether they have been at it for only a week or for many years) is an abundance of self confidence.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13633/script-recording-77994.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality seems fine. Clear, no echo. Picking up a Boston/NE accent? Unusually long pauses like after "success of school" with a little mouth noise. Mouth noise heard several other places as well. Work on technique and try to clean it up with editing.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ArlenChitty's recording

    I put this together from a newspaper ad. I have speeded up the read in keeping with the theme of the script. Would appreciate your feedback on whether my reading is understandable considering my accent. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-852/script-recording-52189.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it and understood it. This got my attention and held it to the end. Nice production work, Arlen. What sort of accent was that?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bill. My accent is not typically Australian where I now live nor is it wholly from my birth place of Sri Lanka but considering the British influenced english education in the country it is probably somewhere between the three which is somewhat of a set back when auditioning for voice.over work. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Arlen. Enjoyed the edit with the natural sound at the beginning. Thought you had great urgency in your voice. Did seem a little fast however.

    Ed

    Peer Feedback:

    You got the information in within 30 seconds and didn't ruin the inflection or flow, very nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, that was my intent, Richurd. Thank you and EStaton for your feedback.

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    Sample Script

    Script:

    I love my wife because she invents words when she plays scrabble.

    Because she loves soccer and thinks she should be invited to the World Cup.

    Because she eats the chocolate chips out of chocolate chip cookies.

    And

    Because she does not pressure me about my erectile disfunction.

    I don't want to lose her, which is why I am going to talk to my doctor about Cialis.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear ShortHairedGirl's recording

    I'm tying a new genre and would love to know what you think. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-15401/script-recording-34684.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You need to brighten it up a lot. You sound like your bored with your wife. Think of someone you really love and just talk about her...let it go! Thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not feeling the emotion in this. It sounds like you're reading a script to me. I agree with Shane, think of someone you really love and the great things you feel about them (even if it's just your dog). Then go for this with that emotion, with that intensity.

    Thanks for sharing and I'd like to hear a second read.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Wanda Phipps's recording

    This is a the script from last week's Edge Contest but for some reason my audio didn't upload so I am trying it here. I don't have my studio really set-up so please disregard the recording quality and just let me know what you think. They asked for a "subdued approach" for a TV "juicy teaser" promo. This is the first thing I've uploaded here--have been training for a while and hope to make demo in the fall. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-27888/script-recording-58279.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this was a particularly difficult contest this time around - as you might have gathered from the week extension and no winner awarded on the first go-round. I tried doing a read myself - it's not an area that I'm pursuing (or really any good at - I've posted one or two reads on here poking fun at myself and my inability to get the promo sound). I didn't submit it because I just couldn't get it to work. The thing that makes it so hard is the combination of Promo and Subdued. If I got a "promo" sound, it wasn't very subdued, and if I did a more subdued read, it didn't have the right promo sound, at least to my ear. I would say that your read falls into this latter category - to me, it sounds subdued but not sufficiently juicy promo/teaser-ish. But I've listened to all of this weeks submissions, and they all pretty much sound equally flawed. There were maybe a couple that were close, but I didn't think anyone nailed it. It will be interesting to see the results and the justification from the judges.

    Aside from that, there is a lot of mouth noise in your read. I don't think that would necessarily disqualify you in the contest, but it sure doesn't help your chances either in the contest or in a real audition...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks sundance kid! I really appreciate your feedback. As I said I don't have a real home studio set up yet and I am still just using a headset microphone and just figuring out my Audactiy software. So, the recording quality isn't great since I don't have a real microphone (hence the mouth noise from being too close to the headset mic). I am not a real "promo" person and was just doing this as a practice exercise. Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    You did the best with what you had on this one, both in regard to recording and performance. Your read was subdued, as Sundance Kid said and I did notice the mouth clicks. You have a really nice voice, though, and I think a subdued approach with just a little more energy would work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Chris--maybe I will try to do another pass on it and load that up. Or maybe I will just wait until this weekend when I have access to a friend's studio with better equipment.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-62910.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. Hit all the right notes.

    There was one hard edit (after Europe) that was quite apparent. Other than that, not a whole lot else to criticize

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with James on hitting the notes. However, I'm hearing through the cans that you're using a noise gate....and if you're not, I'd really like to know. But it was noticeable to me. I'm not quite sure I agree with James on the "hard edit", but he's probably right. Something edited out and brought too close to the previous words. Hard to find too much wrong with this one.

    Peer Feedback:

    I edited with Audacity and used noise reduction. Recorded this one awhile back and I can't remember the exact details. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jerry --
    nice pacing, and of course, great voice. I really like your narration reads.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jerry

    Very nice...a great voice for narration, you leave me hanging for your next words -- which is the idea!

    Maybe a tad faster?...otherwise GREAT!!

    Bill

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great, Jerry! Other than that little edit after " . . . Europe." I can't really think of any suggestions. Audio sounds nice and clear as well!

    Peer Feedback:

    Jerry,

    Caught that edit after "Europe"...but otherwise I thought it was masterful. Perfect tone, attitude, inflection, etc...Really nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought this was a pretty good read, sounded good to me.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rapha16's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-77392/script-recording-60484.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi...

    A lttle more emphasis on certain words to make them stand out. "the BELTWAY bunch".. "NEW YORK news.."... and the word regaling should be pronounced re-GALE-ing... keep it up, you're on the right track

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey,
    It seemed a bit rushed, no or little emphasis on "the beltway bunch" they are what the script is about, not too many words were really, hit, or stood out.
    Good voice i think,
    Recording quality needs to go to a whole other level up, not sure what your using but it sounded underwater, bubbly. Our recordings need to be very clear, dry, like talking to someone in the same room.

    This of course is just me keep at and learn from more feedback

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Bill2's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116641/script-recording-90887.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bill2. I think the recording quality was fine although you can hide some things behind the music for sure. On the performance side I had a hard time hearing the last T in start (sounds like star) and the K in Peak (I won't say what that sounds like without the K) the first time. I got it better on the second Peak. Overall it seemed a little choppy because of some long pauses in a few sentences. It's OK for dramatic effect once in a while but easy to overuse. I did like the quality of your voice, easy to listen to. Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree on the choppiness. I'm ok with relaxed pauses between phrases, especially if the copy is supposed to convey relaxation, etc., but the spoken phrases weren't relaxing - they were really fast and curt. I'd suggest matching the feel of the pauses with the pace of the delivery. Either all peppy, or all relaxed.
    Your voice is very marketable, and should quality seemed really good.

    hope that's helpful,
    DS

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    What the heck is going on in this country. Drove downtown Chicago today couldn't find any Jazz on the radio?! WNUA 95.5 Smooth Jazz is now espanol. Any good Jazz stations on the east coast?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Cool Jazz.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave,

    Liked the music which fit perfect, however I think the delivery could have been a little bit more upbeat with the pace. Otherwise good job. Here's an online jazz station you may like: www.wbgo.org They have nice jazz, as I'm into the classic jazz such as, Dave Brubeck, Charlie Parker, Lee Morgan, Miles Davis, etc...

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey thanks Lenny. We used to have a radio station here in Chicago I would listen to around midnight on my ride home from work. Their promotionals at that time were always slow, smooth and sultry. I always thought that was pretty cool, tried to mimic it.
    Peace! Voice On!
    Dave K.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave,

    I liked the choice of music and thought that was a good read. I feel like jazz stations always have that over the top sexy/smooth voice over. I'd see if you could exaggerate it and get really slow and smooth on one take, and then find somewhere in the middle ground between the over the top and this read. I think then you'd be in that oh so sensual sweet spot.

    John

    Peer Feedback:

    So ....THAT's how Obama got the hispanic vote!! I knew there was something!

    Peer Feedback:

    You got it Tom, this corupt town is falling apart.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks John, I hear what you are saying. You know it;s one of those weird scripts that is only 2 lines long, but you find yourself doing it over and over again. Unless you are Quincy Jones i don't think there is a perfect way to do it. Kind of depends on the region and the type of listeners.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Director's Notes:

    This radio commercial is part of TravelWild’s fall marketing campaign. This is an extraordinary adventure and we want the narrator to bring that to the script. Think exciting, fresh and adventurous. The script should be timed to be 15 seconds exactly.

    Script Title:

    TravelWild Radio Promo

    Script:

    The world’s greatest gathering of polar bears occurs each autumn in Churchill, Manitoba. Join our naturalist guides for an unforgettable journey. Call TravelWild Expeditions at 800-368-0077.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    I am currently using an AKG Perception 220 with an ART Tube MP interface recording with Audacity software. I do not have a zero latency output so I do not use headphones. Can I improve performance without spending much money? Also, do you offer a class to learn how to use Audacity to it's full potential? How do I win a script contest? Last weeks top 3 winners didn't have enough "Zing" according to the evaluation and fell short on time.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/TravelWild Radio Promo.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the double take. Very subtle; yeah, like a brick :-). Where did you get the bears? Great audio and a great read too. Nice mic. All the best - Ian

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dave, I really liked the natural excitement in your read. And the music matched the vocals perfectly. I use an AKG Perception 200 myself. Pretty good mics for the money.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nothing wrong with the mic or pre really. I've got a 220 and had some problems with it and had to send it in for warranty work and they sent me a new one which has been just fine when I pull it out. It's not my main mic anymore. But it's a good practice mic. You wouldn't want to rely on it for paid work IMO. ART makes some nice gear. The tube pre might introduce some noise along with the warmth. If you're on a Mac, you could upgrade your software fairly inexpensively by going with Amadeus Pro which is a multi-track editor that is wonderful for the paltry sum of $60. I have Audition 6 and often come back to Amadeus because of its simplicity. If you're on a PC, Audacity is always there, and I'm sure there's some good choices for less than $100, but I don't know what to suggest. There are a LOT of GREAT choices for about $300 (Audition, SoundForge, etc) so it's a matter of what "not spending much money" means in that regard. Sweetwater.com is a great resource, by the way.

    EDIT: I checked out budget multi-track editors on PC and Sony Acid Music Studio looks pretty good at about $60 for the PC. Just in case you're interested. It will be limited for full-blown DAW work, but for things like VO, full DAWs are way too much software for our simple needs.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you everyone for your feedback. I just don't understand why the Voice Coach states that there are no changes in my delivery. The top three winners for this contest were criticized for not having enough zing or zest and fell short on time. I guess I have to come up with some more cash for Professional Coaching.

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    Showtime 25

    Script:

    Don’t miss Showtime 25 – an alumni reunion performance celebrating 25 years of graduates of Douglas Anderson School of the Arts and benefiting the Douglas Anderson School of the Arts Alumni Scholarship Fund. Join us Friday evening, August 19th at 7:30 at the Douglas Anderson Theatre. For tickets and more information, visit www.showtime25.com

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear Steven Anderson's recording

    This was a job I recorded last July for a client. I thought something was missing, but they liked what they heard. What do you think? I recorded it on a WINXP laptop with an AT2020USB using Cool Edit Pro.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7852/script-recording-26440.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job on this one Steve !! Great pace and a very clear sound. I also use the AT2020. I use Audacity though. I'm thinking of upgrading my recording software. How do you like Cool Edit Pro ?

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good to me. I can see why they liked it. Did you do the music bed or did they? Good friendly sounding read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks much, both of you, I won't second-guess this piece anymore. :) Jerry - I love Cool Edit Pro (I think the later versions of the software are officially Adobe Audition, though, but the laptop I'm currently using is so old I can't run it. :)). It's very easy to use and the post processing steps I use were pretty simple to find. There are tons of walkthroughs out there on the 'net.

    Tom - I found a site with some good royalty-free music for download with a reasonable licensing. There are a couple of sites I use to practice mixing with CEP.

    Again, thank you both for the feedback. Often I'm a bit too hard on myself. :)

    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    I know what you mean. I've NOT posted probably 2 dozen different script reads because I just didn't think they were even worth posting for critique. This was a good one.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great work sir, I am beginning to gravitate to a few choice voices here to pick up what ever gems I can get, and yours has become one of those voices.

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    Slow, Gravely voice

    Script:

    Dear Spring........

    Thank you for painting the land with your vibrant color. Thank you for your greens and yellows... reds and whites….your blues and your browns. Thank you for the sounds that echo in your stillness. Thank you for the new life you bring the forest and the wildlife held within. Thank you for your cleansing rain. Thank you for your warming sunshine. Thank you for steaming cup of coffee to start the day. Thank you for the twinkle you bring to the eyes of a farmer. Thank you for the helping hand you give the crops that will feed a nation. Thank you for Easter and the salvation story. Thank you for family and nights under the lights. Thank you for the smell of fresh mowed grass and the feeling of growing your own food. Thank you for crops that grow, fish that bite, antlers that fall...and the sights and sounds of people enjoying it all.

    Thank you, Spring. See you next year.

    Sincerely, Iowa Land Company

    69 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Promo for a farmland real estate company. Going for a slow, somewhat gravely delivery. The laid back, country guy.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-96678.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You place too much of an emphasis on the words "thank you" when the real meat of the piece is in the coloring of the words that come after it. In other words, this piece gives you an opportunity to paint a beautiful picture of what spring is like in the countryside but you spend most of the time hanging on the words "thank you"

    If you were to do this again, maybe you could spend some time breaking down the piece into each image and really imagine what a "cleansing rain" sounds like or a "warming sunshine feels like". It will give you a more personal connection to the piece and convey much more to the listener.

    Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the prior comments. By finding a more personal connection to each image, I think it would vary your inflections on each thank you. It's a tough piece, with about a dozen thank yous, but each one should be a little different, slightly different inflections and thoughts behind it. You did it a little bit on the twinkling line, but most read about the same way. A little more of that difference between them would help a lot, I think.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear amichaelgray@bellsouth.net's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5268/script-recording-24816.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice which is perfect for this read. It gets a bit choppy in spots, however. For example, you should eliminate the pause between "at work" and "with the commercial-free...". Again at "your day" and "make you feel good", the pause should be eliminated.

    Overall, good job!

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Micheal,

    Real smooth delivery with an appropriate music bed.
    Well done!

    Just a couple of creases to iron out:

    1. can't hear 'd' of the word "unwind" in ""not a lot of time to unwind". Maybe got clipped during editing.
    2. You have added 'to' to 'stay' in "we’ll help you stay stress-free". I think it is better without the 'to', meaning wise.
    3. You have emphasized "commercial" in "commercial-free" more that "free". I think it should be the other way around if that is possible. Worth trying I think. Keep it as it is if that doesn't sound better.
    4. You added 'it' after "find" in "I think you’ll find we". I think that is grammatically incorrect.

    Good smooth job for a practice recording.

    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys. I listened to the read again and paid closer attention to the areas that you commented on and must say that your comments are right on. Good call, really appreciate.

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    SMOOTH JAZZ 105.9FM

    Script:

    Smooth Jazz 105.9 FM
    Smooth Jazz 105.9 FM is the radio station designed for people like you – with busy lives, demanding jobs and not a lot of time to unwind. You can listen to Smooth Jazz 105.9 FM anytime. The day begins with Smooth Jazz, traffic, weather and the latest from ABC News and the WMAL newsroom. Then, weekday mornings at 8:30, we’ll help you stay stress-free at work with the commercial-free music hour, a full hour of commercial-free Smooth Jazz to help smooth out your day and make you feel good! Try Smooth Jazz 105.9 FM. I think you’ll find we are the smoothest place on your radio.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dltittley1@gmail.com's recording

    1st time using new mic, how does it sound?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-14418/script-recording-45251.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Mic sounds ok, but your delivery needs some work. SMOOOOOth JAAAzzzz....sorry. I can't say that would sell. If there are other samples of this script, I would suggest listening to them and the critiques of them. This just doesn't work on so many levels. I like the mic. It sounds nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    kinda sounds like your trying to hard. Relax and let it flow and don't hang on to smoooth jazz too long or repeat it the same way too many times. Good voice!

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    64 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    Voice123 was offline today, so I had a little spare time to have some fun and throw this together. all comments welcome. jamesromick - I welcome your analysis, if you are inclined. Merry Christmas, Dave S.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2126/script-recording-76807.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Since you threw down the gauntlet, here goes.

    Generally, it's a very good ad. Good copy, nice tone and soothing vocal quality to the delivery. However, one of the first things that struck me was Nancy Wolfson's term "voice under" for something like this - in that the voice was too prominent, too far forward (volume wise). You kind of need to support the message without calling attention to yourself and the delivery. Not sure about the music selection. It fits the timeline very nicely, but might be a little too mellow for the playful side of the message - that everyday is a play in the snow day when you visit Michigan. This selection is warm and fuzzy, adult sounding. You want to awaken the kid in me.

    I listened to it about 10 times. Had to rewind quickly the first time through (about 4 seconds in) because I thought there was something wrong with the connection with my headset - a crackling noise. The second time through, I got it - crunching snow! So then I thought, why not drop that FX closer to the line, "The crunch of snow as it packed under our boots." - paint the picture, add FX.

    (Not sure how effective the snow blower effect is [or is it a snowmobile?]. Reminds me too much like a chore, the work I have to do to clear my driveway. Might have been fun when I was a kid, now-a-days, not so much. If it's a snowmobile, it might need to rev and rip along a little longer.)

    Got any FX with a horse drawn sleigh and sleigh bells? (on the fresh powder line). Might even fit with some more "festive" type of music - not necessarily of the holiday variety, just something uptempo and light.

    Move the kids playing further up to the memory, "Remember “Snow Day”?" Maybe open with that and then glide into the VO. Put a smile in your voice and on my face, 'cuz, yeah, I remember staying home from school on Snow Days as a kid very fondly.

    An acting note: When you have something repeated, try not to say it the same way or give it the same emphasis both times. Your inflections on "Snow Day" were different, but you gave them the same emphasis. At the risk of giving a line reading, try this on for size. The first one is fine, we get it (the setup). Change the emphasis in the tag sentence to:

    "Because this winter, EVery day is snow day"

    Because EVERY SINGLE DAY you spend (on your vacation) in Michigan playing in the snow is going to be like that childhood memory. Make sense?

    Another suggestion? Maybe vary the pacing a little by stretching some words like, "and the day was wiiiiide open."- but not sing-songy. Give the "snow crunching" line a little more staccato onomatopoeia. And make the "pull you hat down" line a really inviting challenge to come along and experience that memory in real time.

    Just nit picking an already good read.

    Peer Feedback:

    James --
    great feedback on the delivery and FX.
    I'll take another look at the 'every day is snow day' line. good point.

    on the soundscape, I'm not loving the snowmobile either. probably an overreach without visuals.
    the idea here was kids (and adults) having a Snow Day. so mostly snowball fights, stuff like that (not sleigh bells).

    I'll play with it a little more before I post on soundcloud....
    thanks again!
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave
    Ol' Rex. cousin Cletus and I ain't nit pickin' nuthin'. Any pickin' we do involves strings. We like! Bravo! Now the fat girl can sing!
    Happy Holidays!
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with James re: the snowmobile F/X (assuming that's what it is...listening on cheap computer speakers at the moment). After a couple of listens, I'm curious whether the director was thinking of this type of delivery. I was kind of hearing "Christmas Story" in my head when I read the script before listening. A little more whimsical in tone. You'd get direction there on which way to go, I would hope.

    Production quality was pretty good...James makes excellent points about the prominence of the voice OVER idea. That's WAY more thinking than I'm willing to call upon at 8 in morning. ;-)

    Nicely done overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bill and Tom for the feedback and encouragement!
    I'm reading this script as sort of a tourism, feel-good theme. you know, every day is a like a "surprise-day-off" kind of thing.
    But, yeah, the client gets final say. It could go more in the "Ralphie" direction too.

    My personal edition of this read already has the snowmobile nixed, and the voice track is toned down, and the snow crunching more closely synced with the line about snow under the boots. Now I need to play with the tag line....

    cheers everyone.
    DS

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    Sony Bravia

    Script:

    Of course it’s bigger than a plasma. There’s an entire movie theater in there. The Sony Bravia SXRD

    12 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Terry Michaels's recording

    Here is a revised version of my last recording , thanks for the help .

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9326/script-recording-26885.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Terry,

    I think I'd say it like this... of COURSE it's bigger than a plasma (you idiot) there's an entire movie theater in there! instead of ...Of Course it's bigger than a plasma, (thinking introspectively) My humble opinion. Recording was good and your voice is nice. Good Luck! Nodo420

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    Spices Promo

    Script:

    Do you like it hot?!...your food, that is. Well, then SPiCES! Restaurant is just what the fire chief ordered. A delectable, racy fusion of Taiwanese & Sichuan cuisines that will tingle the tongue, clear the sinuses and possibly even conquer the colon.
    SPiCES! Listed as one of Bizarre Foods Andrew Zimmern’s top 5 San Francisco moments!
    Whether you choose the explosive chili pepper fish fillet, the gangsta casserole or are daring enough to try the infamous STiNKY! Tofu, SPiCES! Will serve up a scandalously scintillating sizzling surprise that will seduce (well , some may say accost) your senses every time.
    Visit one, or all, of the local SPiCE! Sisters today! But be warned… multiple daily SPiCES! Encounters can be hazardous to your health, …well, not really, but it may feel like it!
    COME ON…let’s go spice it up! At SPiCES!

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rbvoicedover's recording

    My question is basically, if you think that my english is good enough to deliver also for the english spoken market. My business is german based primarly, but I really would love to do also voice over work in english. So I was really happy when I found you here with the possibility to upload some samples and receive feedback. Thanks to rondirooboo, who provided the Spices promo script I used here for this example.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-82651/script-recording-64820.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Really good energy...Fearless delivery. I believe that the first line is supposed to have more of a sexual intent , which not only goes with the "..your food, that is..." but it's supposed to be an out front attention getter. I didn't get that so much. I'm not sure why colon was punched so hard either... Accent didn't seem to bother me but that may be different if you were pitching some other product.

    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of what touzet said,, on this spot, I did not mind the accent,, on others, I might. But over all I liked this, it was more of a charactor than a person with the wrong accent.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much so far!
    I see that I am too fast at the beginning and completely messed up any sexual intent I tried to put in there. The "colon" part was "punched so hard", because I took it more of a joke in the way of "it may blow up your ***!"
    May I ask you guys what kind of accent you hear there? (if it's possible to describe that).
    And would you have some script example, some "other product" I may try myself on to see how it goes with that accent? Much appreciated!

    Peer Feedback:

    Your accent lends character and does not feel "foreign" at all.

    Your energy is infectious, and your timing is solid.

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    SPiCES! Restaurant Promo

    Script:

    Do you like it hot?!...your food, that is. Well, then SPiCES! Restaurant is just what the fire chief ordered. A delectable, racy fusion of Taiwanese & Sichuan cuisines that will tingle the tongue, clear the sinuses and possibly even conquer the colon.
    SPiCES! Listed as one of Bizarre Foods Andrew Zimmern’s top 5 San Francisco moments!
    Whether you choose the explosive chili pepper fish fillet, the gangsta casserole or are daring enough to try the infamous STiNKY! Tofu, SPiCES! Will serve up a scandalously scintillating sizzling surprise that will seduce (well , some may say accost) your senses every time.
    Visit one, or all, of the local SPiCE! Sisters today! But be warned… multiple daily SPiCES! Encounters can be hazardous to your health, …well, not really, but it may feel like it!
    COME ON…let’s go spice it up! At SPiCES!

    84 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear rondirooboo's recording

    Just set up a home studio and am concern about sound quality/noise. Also, this audition was commercially oriented and I'm naturally more narration inclined. I feel my tempo may have been too fast, and I did stumble across one word - so appreciate all the feedback you can provide. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60938/script-recording-58282.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the read. The first line was really sultry and led into a total change of energy as you transitioned into a description of the food. I wonder if it would be possible to keep just a touch of that sultry tone throughout the whole read while still changing the overall energy to a more perky and upbeat sound. Nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    What a great, fun voice you have! I think you can totally do commercials. I thought the tempo was great.

    That said, I LOVED "do you like it hot" (you can SO do sexy with your voice) and I think this script wants to be sexed up in a jokey, winking at us kind of way. But I thought the sexy tone was lost after the first line, or at least only very subtle in the rest. Then, if you have it all sexy, the jokes about colons and stinky tofu and accosting will be funnier because they'll be in such direct contrast. By sexy, I don't necessarily mean full-on, but instead still fun. Maybe even (and I'm going out on a limb, here) goofy? I don't know, but Cameron Diaz popped into my head. Deb Munro has a mix of humor and sexy in her commercial demo. http://debsvoice.com/debs-demos/

    Okay, all that said, I'm still very much a beginner and have no confidence when it comes to talking about commercials, so here's the usual disclaimer: "Commercial folks, please shut me up if I'm way off."

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    Sports Medicine

    Script:

    Life isn’t made for pain. Life is for living.
    For breakfasts.
    For basketball.
    For getting your hands dirty.
    For mornings on the river.
    For afternoons at the park.
    For art.
    For sport.
    For the hobby you can’t get enough of.
    Don’t let a joint injury or back pain keep you from doing what you love. Take charge. Turn to the
 orthopedic experts at General Hospital
    Get back to what matters. Because this…is…. LIVING.

    79 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Going for a motivational, no-nonsense, "get back to life" delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-97479.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice variance in each transition. Vocal levels remained consistent and the interpretation of the script was delivered in a believable manner. The ending could be tweet a bit by lingering between the pauses. Nice read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, you have a really nice voice! I feel like I need to train for a triathlon right now! I really like how consistent you were. It wasn't too intense or too bland. It was like I was listening to an actual commercial!

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    Spot for development company

    Script:

    Nowadays, having a full-time web developer is very expensive, and when considering the whole department, the costs go up, and up, AND UP, so what if you need one developer, just occasionally? It’s even more expensive.

    Have you ever tried outsourcing? That is what we are here for. Mindzipper developers are here for you.

    We are reliable.
    We deliver on time.
    And we deliver on budget.

    Did you know that 57% of agencies are outsourcing developers?
    So, why should you outsource too?

    First, it's much more effective. The process is faster, and the costs are lower. So you can finally focus on what you really need.

    With Mindzipper you have guaranteed quality of service and service level agreements for the projects we deliver.

    What can be outsourced in general? Basically anything! From cooking, to design and development.

    So, what can Mindzipper do? Nearly anything from simple websites, to complex projects.

    And what are our clients saying? They are happy. We have successfully delivered projects to clients around the world.

    So, do you need to get things done? Contact Mindzipper. We are ready to start working for you.

    25 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mindzipper's recording

    This is my first actual project. I did this for a video I was making for my company. I was going to hire a voiceover talent to do this, and thought I'd give it a shot myself. I've actually really wanted to do this kind of work for years, and I've been told I had a decent voice. I dislike the sound of my voice. To me it sounds 'whiney'. but i suppose most people hear themselves differently. So this was my first shot. i did a read of a script here too, but it was awful. so i thought I'd upload this. Please give feedback. i'm new, and I need it

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-79001/script-recording-60667.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    FYI, the timing might sound a bit 'off' but there's a reason. you can follow along in the video I made and it makes more sense.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p-LEmA89qgU

    Peer Feedback:

    The vocal is balanced to the right side more than the left.

    Peer Feedback:

    hrm.... i could look. i might have messed up the balance. i'm new, and these buttons and sliders on adobe audition are easy to 'accidentally' mash.. :)

    thank you, i'll figure it out. i didn't realize that

    Peer Feedback:

    i uploaded it here, just pushed the voice to mono. is that the best way? or should i adjust the levels themselves?

    https://soundcloud.com/jt-thompson-7/balanced

    Peer Feedback:

    Am I the only one who finds this ironic?

    Peer Feedback:

    how is it ironic? I don't understand

    Peer Feedback:

    wait, are you referring to ironic because I'm the owner of the development company? As in thinking I should be a pro at this?

    Development studios generall use multiple outside vendors to put pieces of a puzzle together so they can offer complete packages. I don't think I know a single developer that is proficient in design, development, and video/audio production. think of it like a stereo. you can buy a stereo all built by the same company. I'm referring to those old component stereos. But when you do that, you'll find certain parts of the system aren't quite as good as others. The best method is to piece together hardware from different manufacturers that are all the top of the line in what they specialize in. that way, though you spend more money, it means you end up with the best of the best. It's very similar in development. 90% of our work is true development. Not writing markup, designing graphics, or producing audio/video. But we offer all those services. For the things we don't do internally, we have freelancers, and hire outside vendors to fill the gaps. The other alternative is to be a brick and mortar company, with full time employees that work in an office. But in my experience, when you hire those companies, you're paying a premium,. and there is really two bad things that come with that. 1. you pay a higher fee than you need to, in order to cover the expenses of a large company. 2. Hiring full time expert developers is extremely expensive and Iknow many that charge much more than i do.. My direct rate to contract out is $145 per hour. Imagine having 3 or 4 of those so you could cover high end work. They you'd have to be in the same ballpark for designers, and audio/video production. I would imagine a very proficient person that has the same level of expertise at audio/video work would charge at least as much as I do. That's a huge nut to crack :). So generally design studios are mostly made up of a specialty group, and vendors/freelancers are hired to do the other work. It's done more as a courtesy so you can offer clients an all in one solution. I don't make much at all from audio/video work. I spend almost 89% of the rate i charge paying the people doing that work. This business is primarily run like a general contractor. They do the heavy lifting int he work, but hire other pros for ancillary aspects to their offering.

    I don't know if that helps with what you're referring to, but I assume that's what you meant.

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know what Kid was referring to as ironic...but I think in this case, he might be referring to the idea that the business owner should leave the VO to the VOs. Pretty much anyone posting here has been told they've got a great voice/should be doing commercials/should do audiobooks/should do movie trailers/should do narrations....ad finitum. If it were polled, probably 99% of those posting here have someone who has that statement "you have a great voice--you should do announcements/commercials/etc" in their past. Let go of that and see if you can listen to your reads un-objectively and still think you shouldn't have hired someone with real experience in delivering this copy with the proper nuances that would kill in the final edit.

    Peer Feedback:

    see that's pretty much exactly the case here. I never thought I had the right voice for this sttuff, but over the years i've been told often i'd be good at it. So when I was rendering this video I thought heck, why not give it a shot? it's free to try, and who knows, maybe i could get lucky. But I think i'm seeing that i probably don't have the voice and that's ok. it's not like my heart was set on it. I will still try to learn it, I ordered some decent hardware and I'll see if i can get better. if not, it's ok, not like i quit my job. But if it's possible i could do some, it would be better than just getting a little extra cash. if you think about it, as the business owner, not only would it save me paying someone else, then i'd be bringing it in as well, so it's two fold.

    But I'm pretty thick skinned, I wanted some honest feedback. i'd love love love to do this kind of thing, but i think there are so many fantastic talents out there on sites like this that i've heard just poking around here, it's a miracle id ever have a paying gig.

    Still fun to learn. I remember I decided to sit down and learn html/php/mysql and that technology. i read through source code and picked up things on the web. now I'm a senior programmer/developer and a business owner. So you just never know. Sometimes you get lucky! It'll be a fun journey either way

    Peer Feedback:

    Advice I try and give to new submitters here is "have a thick skin." That is really important because people are here in a wide-variety of experience levels. If you get a critique you can't quite get a grip upon...listen to some of that critic's reads and see if you can connect with where they're coming from. If someone rips you a new one....see if they can deliver a read. Thick skin is very important. Open mindedness is also equally important. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    You've gotten some great advice. I'd add in to not only upload work but to critique the work of others--copiously. You'll get a feel for how it can be hit or miss from the critics side, too, and it helps improve your ear for your own work. It will also make you better able to understand the comments other folks make about your recordings.

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah that one's tough for me. I listen to LOTS of them, but when it comes to responding, i think... OK, I'm obviously a newbie. My input isn't going to be expected.

    But I suppose I could. it's certainly for lock of want

    Peer Feedback:

    Here's the point that everyone has missed so far.

    IT'S NOT ABOUT YOUR VOICE! IT'S WHAT YOU DO WITH IT!

    It's about the acting. Whether you like your own voice or not is irrelevant. You sound like you're reading to me and all the pretty pictures and video graphics doesn't change that, synced up or not. I feel fairly certain that if you were telling a client about your services over the phone, it wouldn't sound like this.

    And to keep stirring this soup, I immediately understood Sundance's comment. Your company is about outsourcing to dedicated providers but you stayed in-house and didn't seek out "professional" VO? Business owners do their own commercials and voice promotion all the time. Nothing wrong with that. Just ironic considering what your business is all about. If you left that little tidbit out of your initial description, you may not have gotten the reaction that you did. And your explanation? No need to justify. But it's a bit like telling a joke. If you have to explain the the punchline, it ain't funny.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ah...that IS ironic.

    Peer Feedback:

    i understand what you're saying about me staying in house. I was doing it becuase I thought it might be fun, and maybe i could do it well enough to be justified. I'm certainly not tied to it, and based on the feedback, it sounds like vo might not be for me at all.

    I think at this point I'm going to go ahead and hire someone for the spot. It's no big deal, I just thought i'd give it a whack.

    So, since i found this site, maybe someone can point me in the right direction to hire someone at a reasonable rate. I honestly had no idea as many people would be on a site like this as there are. I had found a place to hire the talent before i did it. but i think i'd rather give someone a shot that posts here becuase the people here seem to be good at give and take.

    Can someone point me to the right spot at contacting a talent i think is right for the job? i've listened to lots of reads, and there's a ton to choose from, but i didn't immediately see a place to hire someone.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would hope you wouldn't give up after just a few attempts. Everyone starts somewhere. People could give you "encouragement" in false platitudes if that's what you want, but wouldn't you rather have direct honesty? No one has said (that I've seen) said you shouldn't make a go of VO, just that in this instance, it would probably work better in the short term to hire someone who has experience in delivering the script most effectively. Very, VERY few are just naturals at the VO craft. Most have had to work and practice to overcome habits they've had ever since they've started talking. Don't be so quick to give up...

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh i'm not giving up, not at all, just that i need to practice more, and take some guidance courses. I just ordered a mic stand today.

    I'm giving up on THIS spot, but i'm just starting out, i didn't expect to be a hit or anything. if I can learn over the next year or so, I'll be happy. things will come around

    Thank you for the advice. Really I appreciate it all, good or bad.

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    St. Pat's Sale

    Script:

    Save big during tomorrow’s St. Patrick’s Day Sale! Up to 40% off products throughout the store. Tomorrow only, during the Savin’ o’ the Green at eWow!

    98 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear anei's recording

    First time posting, missed the contest deadline, but would appreciate any feedback on any part of this read. THANK YOU!!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm hearing your room pretty prominently in your recording. They always comment on that for the contest. I'm hearing some room echo and some low level room presence. Can be fixed, but it would be mentioned by the judge of the contest.

    Your recording (aside from the ambient sound issues) sounds pretty nice. With room treatment, you might be pretty close.

    In the performance, you'll want to try and avoid breathing in the middle of short phrases or sentences. Breath control is something to practice ...mark the script where you should breath...keeping it from the middle of phrases/sentences as much as possible.

    The specs for the contest were "friendly without sounding announcery but still doing a sales pitch" or some such. If you ask me...that's open to all sorts of interpretation and will really depend on whether David's coffee was good or stale before he started listening. You sounded friendly, but the flow could have been a little more natural. It sounded like you were hitting the periods too deliberately and it broke up a conversational vibe. It's a real fine line...but that's my take.

    You have a nice, clear, friendly sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your delivery , for a first time recording i think it was pretty good. I agree with the room echo its pretty loud I use blankets on my walls and it killed alot of my echo problem. keep up the practice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! First, the mention of your name and then a different tone/accent on "Up to 40% off products throughout the store" were a slight distraction from your read, but I liked the energy in your performance. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    lol I guess this is why we shouldn't post them until after the winners have been announced ;) (and I say that as someone who has btw, nothing personal!)

    Peer Feedback:

    Good energy, A little too announcerish for me, Good pacing, I agree with TxToms comments about being a little more natural.

    Great presence in your voice. Some room echo, don't know if it was intentional.

    Keep it up !!!

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    Stepworks

    Script:

    It’s not about stigma, guilt, or being a moral failure … recovery is about life.

    If you have a spouse, child, or friend who is suffering from addiction, there is hope … but you have to help them take the first step!

    STEPWORKS has helped thousands in KENTUCKY recover their lives, marriages, and families from addiction. Come rediscover what it means for your family to live, love, and be free.

    Come rediscover life … at STEPWORKS.

    For more information, contact us at 8-0-0-5-4-5-9-0-3-1
    Or visit our website stepworks.com

    85 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear joypacevoice's recording

    Would like feedback on recording quality, studio sound, and performance. Any feedback is helpful.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114464/script-recording-93178.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The first line sound very robotic and the audio seems over processed. I didn't feel like you connected with the copy. Your voice is nice and soothing but was missing a flow. It sounded choppy to me. But I am also pretty new to this!

    Peer Feedback:

    I went back to listen to your other recordings and look at the comments.

    Are you still using the headset mic? If so, consider saving your pennies and upgrade to a serviceable condenser mic/interface and studio headphones. If you have changed your mic/interface/headphones, then it's time to think about treating (sound deadening) your recording space as there is some room reflection. And, as I mentioned before, Audacity is fine, if somewhat limiting. You'll need to experiment with recording levels and some processing FX.

    The robotic and choppiness mentioned above may be due to a couple of things.
    #1 - For that "real" (what used to be called "conversational") tone, you have to imagine a single someone to tell this story to.
    #2 - The actual formatting of the copy on the page.

    The first thing is something that you have to discover, so lets talk about the formatting.

    Your eyes see the ellipsis marks...your brain thinks "pause". But that's not necessarily what this copy writer meant. I would submit that in this copy, they're intended as a change in tone. Bad...Good. Sad...Happy. Negative...Positive. But not always to such extremes, like in the last bit. Welcome...Here.

    Another formatting thing is the phone number. You'll hardly ever see an 800 number (or a telephone number) look like that in copy. Here, the dashes are probably meant for pronunciation clarity. Of course, it would be up to the client or director as to how they would prefer the number to be spoken. But the norm is usually:

    "Eight Hundred - Five Four Five - Nine Oh (Zero) Three One."

    Then, to tie it all together, there's pacing. I would submit that this is a 30 second commercial (yes, it is possible) or 40 seconds at most. This delivery is a little ponderous which doesn't necessarily leave me with a positive outlook that STEPWORKS will work.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear inourto's recording

    This is my first stab at this and I have only listened to it through my headphones. Welcome to all comments and suggestions. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7536/script-recording-52582.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    ramjamz, good voice. good read. bring the music down and rock!

    ramjamz

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't hear that great voice , cause the music is so loud.
    not bad at all!!