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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Character

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    " Fly and the Flea"

    Script:

    " A fly and a flea flew into a flue. Said the fly to the flea "What should we do?" "Let us fly" said the flea. Said the fly" shall we flee?" So they flew through the flaw in flue."

    218 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TimE13's recording

    I have always wanted to be a VO talent. I really enjoy character voices. I was working on a new character, Nervous Ned. Does it sound worthy to be put on a demo? I have new mic a Shure SM7B, how does that sound? Does my character sound believable?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13606/script-recording-61093.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it was good. It was really clear and convincing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi TimE13,
    I like the character voice very much. It's the nervousness that doesn't sell me. It's fine at first but gets overdone as you go. A little tweaking and I think you'll have something. Personally I would just drop the nervous aspect of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I get you're taking a tongue twister and doing a character read, but in doing so, you deviated from the written script.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the voice! I agree with Richurd that the nervous quality needs a little tweak, but it's awfully close.

    Recording quality sounded fine.

    Peer Feedback:

    Have you ever seen Don Knotts (Barney Fife) on The Andy Griffith Show or, better yet, on The Steve Allen Show? Do a search on YouTube. That's a nervous guy, a really nervous guy. Don't copy it, just use it as a guideline.

    IMHO - It would serve you better to find a straighter type of copy for the nervous character. Tongue twisters are are structured to get your lips, tongue, jaw and breath working in sync with a rapid fire delivery (or as rapid as one can go without stumbling). Basically a muscle exercise. All of the hesitations defeat the purpose. However, doing them in character voices is cool too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good I felt your intentions and creativeness coming through. I don't do character voices except when I'm manic hahahahaha but I got mad respect for people who ando it. You have a great voice for telephony great clear diction.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gary lincoln's recording

    Following a liquid lunch I decided to have a crack at 1-800 collect in a Bob Hoskins Cockney voice just to make it a little more interesting,"Lord help us all"

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1918/script-recording-21162.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved it! Made me smile for sure. maybe those liquid lunches do you some good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job, Gary. Very entertaining.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for those comments, just looked like a boring read really so I thought I'd try and give it a new angle although my Cockney accent is'nt that great, I was born in East London but over the years its died a lot.
    Gary

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    A Boy Named Sue

    Script:

    The script is in the Edge script library: English Adult…Commercial…Character.
    I changed a couple words to read better for me.

    100 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear oddisee's recording

    Would like to get feedback mainly on the quality of my newly built sound booth and new mic.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-78978/script-recording-66683.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm hearing a consistent background hiss that could be anything from your sound chain...mic or interface or even air movement in your reading space. Basic noise reduction can probably handle that. As to your space...listening THROUGH the hiss, I couldn't really hear any interaction between your voice and the space. No boxy sound, no live walls....so seems like you might have something to work with. Need to work that hiss down though. If it gets too high, removing it will affect your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you were brave to try doing a song lyric without the background music. I think the pace could have been a little faster but otherwise it sounded good to me. I didn't hear the hiss Tom mentioned but then he's probably been doing this a whole lot longer than I have.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for all of your input. Any suggestions on toning down the breathy sound would be appreciated.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your energy and the choices you made. You sounded more natural as the reading progressed--the accent was a little heavy handed at first. I didn't hear the breathiness.

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved this performance!! Very nicely done!

    On recording side, maybe run it through a noise filter or something and it should be good.

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    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Coach_AVE's recording

    This is something I just decided to vamp in the booth at the end of my last session, but now I am thinking about using in my demo. Hope you get a chuckle and have some raw feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/02 Voice Over Intro (Funny, Characte.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You may want to see a therapist. ;-)

    Edit: I hope you know that comment was in jest. Funny bit and impressive ad lib!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like to do the same thing. A little airy on the high part, but I liked it.

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    Age Range Vocal Exercise (Getting Old)

    Script:

    Today I'm 100. I don't feel older...I mean, mentally. Physically, I am tired. I walk with a cane and have fallen a couple times lately. Been trying to eat right still, and watch my blood sugar. Have to be fit and nimble for the ladies.. Heh, heh.. *cough*. I try not to spend too much time thinking about the old times. The memories and all. Everyone I knew in school has passed on. Two of my children are gone. It's just not fair for parents to bury their children. *sniffle*. Well, I suppose that's all I want to talk about today. Not much of a birthday when the ones you love and miss the most aren't around to share it with you. It's tough getting old...it really is.

    105 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TomFields's recording

    Practicing an old character. Also trying out a new mic. Love some feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-14161/script-recording-90554.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds decent. You gave an impression of a lonely man. The sniffle part sounds, you know, kind of phony, but you can work on that.

    Peer Feedback:

    That cough was the fountain of youth! You sounded really old and worn but as soon as that cough hit, your energy levels seemed to bring you back to 70. Maybe a bit more regret and sadness is needed toward the end.

    Other than that bit of energy inconsistency I thought it was good. I was feeling bad for you the whole first half. Maybe deliver the "I've fallen" line with a little more trepidation to show that it's a sign of how broken you are but you don't want to say it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. The copy sounded a bit sad, so I was kinda going for that 100 year old attitude. Maybe thinking about the ladies and the cough brought me out of my malaise a bit. :-) thanks again.

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    Age Range Vocal Exercise

    Script:

    Today I'm 100. I don't feel older...I mean, mentally. Physically, I am tired. I walk with a cane and have fallen a couple times lately. Been trying to eat right still, and watch my blood sugar. Have to be fit and nimble for the ladies.. Heh, heh.. *cough*. I try not to spend too much time thinking about the old times. The memories and all. Everyone I knew in school has passed on. Two of my children are gone. It's just not fair for parents to bury their children. *sniffle*. Well, I suppose that's all I want to talk about today. Not much of a birthday when the ones you love and miss the most aren't around to share it with you. It's tough getting old...it really is.

    127 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jrandy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117268/script-recording-93501.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey randy.

    I like this exercise. It looks pretty interesting for characterization which is something I really want to get into. So many opportunities if you're good at it!

    Performance was pretty good in my opinion. You certainly pulled off the elderly feel. But 100!!!! That's super elderly, and hard to emulate well.

    I liked the addition of the 'southern gentleman.' and it suited this read nicely, yet maybe it masks the elderly concept a bit.

    Everything is really steady and you held the character throughout.

    Some mouth noises, BUT I think that added well into the read for an old guy IMHO.

    Two of my children are gone. It's just not fair for parents to bury their children. *sniffle* (that's pretty sad, but then again the aged have a different way of looking at things, so perhaps it's not as emotional as it is for the young, good job not overplaying that line)

    Maybe put some more weariness into that last line.

    I'd like to know your process of getting ready for something like this to be honest! Do you have someone in your mind when you practice?

    (I remember when I was working in this video store in high school, we had this elderly customer, who was a WW2 vet and LOVED classic black and white movies on DVD. This guy was absolutely with it, very worldly, and easily pushing 90 when I met him. What I found when I first met him was he was incredibly well spoken. He spoke so slowly, yet confidently, with that waver the elderly get from age.)

    I think you did really well. Good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks K!
    To do this read I set the scene in my head-
    I am in a rocker on the porch of an old farmhouse, staring out into the distance of my past. I am being interviewed by a young college student making her first documentary for a class.
    I wistfully reflect on what it's like living longer than most...

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    Age Range Vocal Exercise

    Script:

    Today I'm 100. I don't feel older...I mean, mentally. Physically, I am tired. I walk with a cane and have fallen a couple times lately. Been trying to eat right still, and watch my blood sugar. Have to be fit and nimble for the ladies.. Heh, heh.. *cough*. I try not to spend too much time thinking about the old times. The memories and all. Everyone I knew in school has passed on. Two of my children are gone. It's just not fair for parents to bury their children. *sniffle*. Well, I suppose that's all I want to talk about today. Not much of a birthday when the ones you love and miss the most aren't around to share it with you. It's tough getting old...it really is.

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TimE13's recording

    I'm trying out the Old Man character. I did a Tongue Twister a couple of weeks ago and you told me to read something else in character. Let me know what you think. Thank you

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13606/script-recording-62447.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You're doing a character voice and not putting much more into the read than "remembering to sound like old man" but there's no connection to the fine points of the script. Give a listen to JamesRomick's delivery of this one. I knocked him on the authenticity of the sound of the vocal (age authenticity) but what he did better than anyone before was bring the acting to the read. It's called Voice Acting and James delivered in spades. Check it out and compare it to your delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tim E -

    Sounding 'unlike ourselves' can be tough...you were clear (perhaps a bit too precise at the end of sentences...remember you are 100!) but not as convincing of being as old as you were playing...100 is damn old and there should be vocal foibles and breathe issues --

    Try it again slower, deeper and rock your head as though you had the palsy a guy that old would have...and smile -- you have outlived most of us :-)

    Bill

    Peer Feedback:

    Need more emotion on the sadness. To me script depicts someone who is now tired of living and is looking forward to dying. I didn't get that kind of feel from your performance. The voice did sound old and very natural though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! The voice was great, but I think it needs more emotion and maybe a bit slower pacing? I do think you are on the right track though.

    - Rhett

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    50 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mazzi827's recording

    The script has been altered. I first off want to inform you I am very new to this! I know there are background noises. There are definitely a few other flaws. I'd really like some honest feedback on it. I don't want to keep making the same mistakes. I'd like to work on my weak aspects from the beginning.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-78701/script-recording-72395.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Is that a fan in the background? I think I heard a dog bark and a door creak too.

    Is this a letter or a phone call or what? I have no idea what the scene is. Maybe an answering machine? I thought the delivery was natural and convincing. I just couldn't really grasp what was happening so it got confusing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to agree with John. The delivery was very natural (which is a good thing...I think), but not really sure what the script was supposed to convey. As for the background noise, you covered that in your comments so I was expecting it. Fill us in a bit so we can better try and give you our feedback. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a letter home written by a 39-year old woman to her father. She hasn't left her apartment in 43 days. Why? To watch the Yankees. She wants to come home but I get the impression this letter is an ineffective one. Her dad is indifferent to it. She makes a point that she's never felt as if she had a home. I feel as if she never knew him that well. She just knows about him.

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed the read. Sometimes I wasn't sure if she was talking to her Dad on the phone or reading. Or is it her Dad reading the letter and hearing his daughter's voice.
    A few times your words blended together as in "a lot" alot.
    You had a good amount of variety in your voice. I liked it.

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    Anime Script

    Script:

    You don't understand! Why do you not believe me,
    when the signs of evil are all about you! Look at me... LOOK AT ME!! I am the only one
    who can save you... the only one who...who KNOWS how these creatures think...who KNOWS
    their weakness....

    Why do you laugh as if I were a madman? Wait a second...WAIT, WAIT ... where are you
    taking me?... WHERE ARE YOU TAKING ME? Don't you see they are coming? Just answer me..
    DO YOU NOT SEE THE SIGNS?

    When the last of the day's light has disappeared from the horizon...you will see...Yes..yes,
    you WILL SEE! ... And by then.. it will be too late.. No.. NO... NOOOOOO!

    164 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eagleye's recording

    Do you believe me? Do I give this character a genuine voice?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-88386/script-recording-75551.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    aside from a little stumble on words near the end, I think you did well with maintaining character. Maybe it felt a bit rushed in places, but that may be me being picky.

    I did think there could be more emotion in particularly crucial areas. Around, "I'm the only one who can help you" and the "where are you taking me" is where I noticed it most. There was a lack of supplication that should have been there.

    I didn't follow along, so I could pick up on your delivery, and I enjoyed it very much.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Eagleye,

    This is a very challenging piece! Kudos to you for being brave enough to try your hand at it! This is a very dramatic piece that can sound repetitive unless you elevate the emotion so that there is a nice build until his final scream. I think you can try varying your volume to create a sense of environment. So for example you might choose to use a low volume on the line "Why do laugh as if I were a madman (almost like your talking to yourself) and then on the "wait a second WAIT WAIT" you can go very loud to almost screaming and react to being dragged away. Try to find a variety of emotion from line to line...sadness, anger, fear, panic, rage, determination, etc. This will help to flesh out the performance and bring it off the page.

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach November 9, 2014 at 1:21AM

    Peer Feedback:

    I felt this was good and the professional comment was spot on. Overall I did enjoy listening to it and I even gave it a shot after listening to yours.

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    Annette

    Script:

    Come along and sing our song and join our company
    M-I-C K-E-Y M-O-U-S-E

    Through the years we'll all be friends wherever we may be
    M-I-C K-E-Y M-O-U-S-E
    Mickey Mouse, Mickey Mouse
    Forever let us hold our banner high

    Now it's time to say goodbye to all our company
    M-I-C See ya real soon!
    K-E-Y Why? Because we like you!
    M-O-U-S-E

    53 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    Someone had to do it. Might as well be me...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-53623/script-recording-55160.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Why?

    Peer Feedback:

    I guess you haven't seen the news. Type the title into google and it should all begin to make sense.

    Peer Feedback:

    Gotcha

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    Annoying Elementary School Intercom Announcer

    Script:

    (Southern accent with a touch of "Forrest Gump". Brief pause between each of the three lines spoken. There will be lines spoken by other characters in the episode, just not heard here.)

    School PA System Announcer: "Assistant Principal Shepherd, you're needed in Room 35. Mrs. Butterworth is having a hard time with Daniel again.

    (pause for a few seconds)

    School PA System Announcer: "Never mind, Assistant Principal Shepherd, Ms. Butterworth said you took too long so she locked him in the closet for a timeout.

    (pause a few seconds)

    School PA System Announcer: "Oh...correction. She said she locked him out...not locked him in the closet. Sorry about that!"

    125 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-91398.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Ken, that was very good. Didn't sound contrived but natural.

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome! Bang on, and annoying, too. Sounds very natural.

    Peer Feedback:

    You are really in the character of Forest Gump. Is believable. Think about what that character is feeling in the moment and bring some more of that to your performance. Really good.

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    102 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tony_M's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1880/script-recording-77947.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you interpreted the copy well. Vocal performance was good. Recording quality was fair as I heard an echo.

    Much Success,

    ELDRIVER

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks ELDRIVER, you know it's funny, I used a very light veverb. I didn't hear much of an echo, guess my hearing isn't what it used to be. lol. Thanks again.

    Peer Feedback:

    loved the Z performance, but it sounded a little boxy, so I'm hearing some sort of echo too it seems.

    Didn't seem your two characters were very different, vocally.

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    Auntie's Table

    Script:

    You know what it’s like being a carrot? I don’t. And I AM a carrot. I mean, I get cooked, or sometimes I’m raw, sliced, diced, and ... what’s the long way ... anyway, I like it better when I’m in a salad. Got company, you know?

    Tag: Auntie’s Table. Sit down to something good.

    99 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gheilweil66's recording

    I have been meaning to post one of these for a good 3 or 4 weeks, now that I have a sound booth setup. I mostly want to know how any echo or other issues sound (or if they're there at all). If I'm auditioning for a bunch of 100-1000 dollar level jobs on voices then is this job quality audio? Is this good enough audio quality for better than that? There were instructions I just skipped over for the script but since I just want audio quality feedback anyway it's ok. Normally, I'd have read the instructions and followed everything to the letter. Lastly, this was the monthly contest script. The contest is closed and I didn't enter it so I'm not looking for a competitive edge here, haha. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113914/script-recording-96603.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is quite good. no echoing at all. good performance. Like the character you chose. Funny and entertaining.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the recording quality was good, and I did not hear an echo. I loved your performance. Your "carrot character" was entertaining and "believable." The pacing was very good and you had great inflection.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Bullwinkle's recording

    I've been using Noise Reduction in Audition for quite a while, and I don't think I've been completely happy with the results. Recently, I've decided to go without, using the natural sound of my recording space. I'm wondering what people think. This track starts in the natural space and then switches to Noise Reduction (using 10-15 seconds of room tone as a sample). Thanks in advance for the comments.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81964/script-recording-86601.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Honestly, they both sound good. The first does sound a bit more lively. The second one sounds polished, there isn't any crackle around your vocals.

    It depends on what you do. For audiobooks, I'd go for the latter. For radio commercials or things with processing, I don't see why the first wouldn't work.

    Peer Feedback:

    With the gain turned way up on my headphones, I can tell a difference between A and B, with B being a bit cleaner.

    I am not totally familiar with Audition's NR plugin, but it has been my experience that I only need a fraction of a second or two to take a sampling of the noise and use that small sampling for NR. In using a longer sample, you may be picking up other anomalies and frequencies that might effect your vocal frequency spectrum causing drop-outs and/or sonic artifacts.

    Do you know what your noise floor is when the recording is "unadulterated" as you put it? It is likely that if you're at -60dB or below, NR may not be so necessary.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, folks.

    I was checking my noise floor yesterday (part of what lead to this post), and it does seem to be below -60dB (although it's entirely possible I'm misinterpreting, but I think I read the info right).

    I think I'll leave the NR off, for the most part, maybe tossing it on for the few audiobook auditions I do. And when that happens, I'll try a smaller sample.

    Peer Feedback:

    Some noise went away but some of your voice did too in the second one.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Martin's recording

    Revised Bar-S script, clearly defining what he product is.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7863/script-recording-31767.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hoboy, late night production so in review this morning, could have and should have upped Tempo. I use Audacity and love their Change Tempo, can't imagine how speed can be increased and not pitch, making it sound like I did the read faster from the get go. Thanks for any other comments. Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Mike, I don't know why people haven't commented on this. Your recording on the technical end is really a lot better. The recording is really good.

    The delivery needs a little slow down, but it's nice and clear. Nice one!

    Peer Feedback:

    Mike I liked this version more. The character just seemed like it was clearer in your head than in the first read. And it appeared to flow better and sounded more genuine. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    i like your character the read had a nice flow to it

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    Bar-S Invasion

    Script:

    Today we take what is ours. Today we continue our legacy which has transpired from the greatness of armies several centuries in the making.

    Today, we will be equipped with the necessary weapons that will bring us victory and make us the undisputed leaders in the Value segment. Today we stand together and start making our competitors turn their heads.

    THE BAR-S INVASION HAS BEGUN... LET THE DOMINATION BEGIN!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    Got this script from the EdgeStudio library...my last two uploads I was told that basically I must have been reading from a coffin. So I decided to turn up, I realize my timing is a little off however being a very mellow person, I'm trying to keep it up tempo.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-78085.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    If I had to summarize the delivery in this read in one word it would be "mechanicaL". This sounds like a computer reading each word with the same emphasis and then piecing them together according to the punctuation in the script. Sorry...that sounds harsh, but that's honestly how I'm hearing this.

    Peer Feedback:

    I prefer the tone in your last recording over this. Not much energy, but a more natural voice. There seemed to be quite a few edits in there, on top of a stilted read.

    You seem to be audience-less in your delivery. Not reading for anyone in particular (other than yourself), just getting the reads out, and that's where you're missing the energy.Your intent comes across very clearly: to get the words out emphatically. However, the story gets left behind. There was no picture painting, because you seemed to be speaking to you, and not to us.

    Some tips that have helped me with my mouth bullets (as described to me on one of my first few posts) 1. chuck the nerves. 2. hear with your forehead. 3. let the words speak for themselves.

    Hearing with the forehead is much more natural for us, than say hearing with our ears. When we pay too much attention we're listening to ourselves too intently, and not really hearing how we sound. Transferring that focus in front of us makes the physicality used more natural to a conversation, instead of reading to ourselves. Hope that helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    Not exactly what a 'stilted read' is other than not good. Actually there were only 2 edits. Well, thanks guys.

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't get too disheartened -we all gotta start somewhere! :) Just keep practicing.

    Peer Feedback:

    One of the first things to decide (because there is no indication in the copy) is what Bar-S actually is. I did a simple Google search and this was the first hit.

    http://www.bar-s.com/

    It's Hot Dogs and meat products. Does this copy fit with that? Maybe. Which means that this is probably written for comic effect. (Hot Dogs and meat products taking over the world? Really?) Now you have to conjure up what the setting might be, how this copy pertains to meat products and who your listener might be.

    It seems strange that copy about meat products uses military-esque type language, even for a corporate type meat meeting presentation. All the more reason to think that this is comic rather than serious.

    However, if it is for some kind of "shoot 'em up" type video game promotion, then the tone and seriousness will be quite different.

    So my questions are:
    What was your thought process?
    What is the product/service here?
    Who is your audience?
    Where are you? (What's the setting?)
    What images do you see in your mind's eye?
    What's the arc of the message? (Do you start low and slow, and grow bigger and faster to the end? - ALL CAPS is an indication - if you start too big, there's no place to go, no "build".)
    What's the time frame? (I'm thinking 30 seconds or less.)
    Serious or Comic?

    There's a bit of "attitude" in the read, but as bean420 mentioned, it's rather unfocused and "stilted" (to me, meaning choppy or "mechanicaL" as TxTom put it). It leaves all of the above questions unanswered and the listener lost. It's just (seemingly connected) words spoken clipped and loudly in succession (with a couple of glitchy edits).

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you have great potential, but need to relax and let the words flow naturally. The way this was edited makes it sound less than natural--almost automated.

    Peer Feedback:

    @TxTom & @bean420 thank you for your time and advice, as I stated in the comments, I know my timing was off so I guess that accounts for the mechanical and choppiness - the stilted read.

    @jamesromick, thank you for your suggestions - I never thought to google the name and you are correct BarS is a meat company. The questions you posed are great and I will be creating a poster to place in the work area to keep in mind and focus.

    Finally, @Springs Ranch Guy (and bean420) thank you for the encouragment - I am extremely nervous when I do these reads as I guess I see a skeptical listener waiting to pounce on me like a ravenous lion looking at a deer. It shouldn't be that way as I speak publicly all the time...I guess being able to "see" the audience has its own comforting effects. Again thank you for your time to listen and then comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with the above. Keep at it ChasA.

    Peer Feedback:

    I speak in public all the time too! This is not public... there is NO energy to get from an audience, there is only yourself and it.is.terrifying! I never thought it would be so terrifying lol I've been studying for about a half year now, and I'm JUST getting over my nerves. But that's why it's advice #1! If you can work on it, don't wait like I did lol

    Because, I have to say, once you can get past them amazing things happen (I officially have a demo folder with my coach now! WOOT!! on my way!!)

    Of course, getting frank feedback, and developing the thick skin and tenacity to push through it is one of the best things about this place :) And I'm SO grateful for it! No one here /doesn't/ want you to succeed, that's why we gotta be honest :)

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    Bar-S Invasion

    Script:

    Today we take what is ours. Today we continue our legacy which has transpired from the greatness of armies several centuries in the making.

    Today, we will be equipped with the necessary weapons that will bring us victory and make us the undisputed leaders in the Value segment. Today we stand together and start making our competitors turn their heads.

    THE BAR-S INVASION HAS BEGUN... LET THE DOMINATION BEGIN!

    54 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Martin's recording

    No clue what this script is about. Mebbe should have studied something to find out. Anyway it's just for practice right? I think I hear "wet mouth", any thoughts? Thx, Mike

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7863/script-recording-31412.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    OK..I haven't googled the text, but I suggest that perhaps you should have...I cannot imagine where this delivery would have worked after listening to it.

    So google it....find out where this was appropriate and deliver it to that market.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes and thanks TxTom, I knew after reading and hearing that I should have looked it up and Wallah it's for Bologna, Bar-S Foods; http://www.bar-s.com . And really right up my alley coming from a foodservice career so with that we'll give it another go maybe tonight. (I did have some fun with the script tho..) Mike

    P.S. still would have made a good commercial as Roman solders conquered someone over baloney sandwiches.

    Peer Feedback:

    It was clear you were having fun with it and that is important...kudos for taking such a shot with it. Look forward to hearing your re-do.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear scwannab's recording

    My first Character read in a new studio!! They are tough to do but I'm pretty proud of this one!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-11278/script-recording-30235.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Lots of good energy for sure! But the voices need to be more separated. If you changed one of them in any way and kept everything you are doing, I'd say you had a winner!

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know where your fairies come from, but if you'r interested in character work,
    I posted my "His Name Was Ben" for you. It's based on a true story.

    Peer Feedback:

    nice read good energy and i liked the character voice you used.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good energy but needs more acting its too straight forward.....don't be afraid to act out the words and animate your body because afer all no one can see what we are doing....sometimes I record in a rain poncho with the lights off to get that rainy day vibe.hahahahah do what you must do brother......stay true to yourself and the delivery will follow.....maybe take an improv class too.

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    Big city hipnotist

    Script:

    We don't cotton to your kind coming around here, Mr. Big City Hypnotist! Always waving your watch in front of other people's faces, snapping your fingers, and expecting folks to be doing things you tell them to do. It just ain't right!

    56 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Adrian George Nicolae's recording

    I tried a new voice and I'm thinking of putting this in my commercial demo.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-59026/script-recording-60942.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, but whatever you were trying for here went right over my head. I couldn't place the dialect at all and the overall sound, to me, just wasn't very enjoyable to listen too. Very hard to understand. Without reading along, I don't think I could have figured out half the lines. Sometimes I thought it might be East Indian and sometimes I thought it was just a burned out druggy. What was it supposed to be?

    Maybe you need to be a lot younger than me to appreciate this, but do you really want to leave out all us old guys?

    I also have to ask, why did you leave out the last line?

    Peer Feedback:

    The only recording under this moniker. Pretty difficult to take seriously.

    Peer Feedback:

    @Tom - Well, I tried something different than my usual voice. Mostly inclined to the American hick.
    Also, I'm not a native English person.
    Oh, I thought I recorded the last line too, guess I was wrong.

    Thank you for the feedback.

    Peer Feedback:

    AMERICANS have a hard time getting a "hick" sound to sound authentic. Just so you know.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounded like someone unfamiliar with the English language reading a bunch of jumbled up words off a page. Had no idea what you said. The thoughts and the delivery were incoherent. Except at the beginning, did you even take a breath?

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to agree with the others. It kinda sounded like one big long sentence. Despite being a non-native English speaker, the piece still requires "acting". Loosen up and have some fun with this :)

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    Big city hypnotist

    Script:

    Script:

    We don't cotton to your kind coming around here, Mr. Big City Hypnotist! Always waving your watch in front of other people's faces, snapping your fingers, and expecting folks to be doing things you tell them to do. It just ain't right!

    50 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jothi20@gmail.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7200/script-recording-60947.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely take 1 for me was better as it was slower and allowed more attitude to be injected. There was some good attitude with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks touzet.
    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    I wasn't into it there wasn't much character involved and it was bland and boring.....no offense but try guided meditations.

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    "Bogie" "Haunted House"

    Script:

    How did a guy named "Humphery Bogart" come to be known as the greatest tough-guy in hollywood history? A war-time scuffle and a facial scar sure didn't hurt.It happened while "bogart was in the Navy during World War One. He was escorting a handcuffed prisoner when the POW smashed "Bogart" in the face and fled. "Bogie" was left with a scar that would define his tough-guy "Sam Spade" appearence.

    Everyone knew the house on 'Melody Lane" had been abandoned for many years. There were plenty of stories about why, each one involving a "Ghost" of some kind, . So one night the neighbors decided to do something about it.They would sneak in and spend the night inside and try to uncover the "Mystery of the House on Melody Lane".

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on a recording of this script that one of your peers recorded.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ekjohn's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/rec0530-135603.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First off, it sounds very conversational. The up-talk on daughter should be hit solid. It crosses the line of asking a question like do you have a bright and creative daughter??
    Where as I feel the line should make a statement like YES I have a bright and creative daughter! The pause on "Just perfect for catching up and looking back" may hang a little to long or the "looking back" may sound a bit rushed. You could try it like this too
    " Just perfect for catching and, looking back". Other than that, a splendid read! Cheers!

    Shane

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    Cancer Free Awareness Month

    Script:

    Today, my friends are throwing me a party. They do it every year on this date. It's not my birthday, but it's the fifth anniversary of the day I was told my cancer was in remission. And it's a day I thought would never come.

    62 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    I was preparing my contest entry and while performing the script I did 4 seprate interpretations. I wanted see if I could do a believable, non cartoon voice with a straight ad. In this, the character is an grumpy old coot who, while maintaining the "grumpy old man" persona, is thrilled that (a) he's beaten cancer for 5 years and (b) people make a fuss over him. It's for the radio, but I imagined him opening a door, getting the "suprise" then turning to the camera to say his piece before joining the party. Anyways, would love to hear what you think. Love it or hate it, tell me what you think. Thanks for listening! Nodo420 After note... My contest entry won't be including the extra "That" I accidentally included here. hehehe, did you catch it? :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-28955.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    If I may be so bold, most aged voices lighten up to be crotchety ( not like mine).
    Yours sounds gruff. I'll put up my old codger voice again. The presentation idea
    I really like.

    Peer Feedback:

    The finished read works well. Nicely polished touches over the scratch tracks. Thumbs up.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted, I understand the situation and the character's way of thinking. But somehow find it a little hard to imagine that a anyone who's survived cancer would be so grumpy and seem so ungrateful when having friends throwing him a party. But it looks like you have something here, and I may be wrong about my assumption.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    I like the way you used the sound tracks which gave it a nice effect.

    Now you know I love your scripts; but I have to agree with Javier in regards to the tone because in the way it was delivered, it seems as though you're still experiencing pain about having the illness.

    It was a good read, but I would try this over using more emotion and being upbeat in celebrating that you recovered. As you want to draw the audience in, especially someone with the disease that there is a possibility their illness can go into remission.

    Best of luck,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of a 'Jersey' goy who had cancer, huh? I can hear what other's are referring to as perhaps a little dour when the guy should be 'celebrating life' and 'second chances' and all that. But the 'Jersey' thing can work. But if you want to sound happy AND do the 'Jersey' thing....imagine you've just wacked somone and you'll get that 'happy Jersey' thing going. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hei Nodo,

    Very entertaining! Nice that you could do this in character!

    Hope it does well in the contest.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read here man !! Good quality recording. I really enjoyed your take on this one. Keep up the good work !!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all so much for the feedback. you can't imagine how valuable tips these are. So starting out with a practice character voice, using your feedback, I think can create a credible character here that would be useful in certain situations. What I take from all this is you can create a character voice that isn't cartoony, and sounds believable. Tom, your comment on the "New Jersey Codger" will give me a nice back story. Then, when I need to be him, I have something to draw on. Ya... really cool.
    Side note... This wasn't my contest entry, A couple have heard it and the consensus is it is much better and appropriate than this one. We'll see! Thanks again for listening and taking time to comment, Javiersvoice, LCW, TxTom, Scott Martin and a special thanks to Henry who makes "Being an old Codger" cool!

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    Carrot (Edge Script Audition Contest)

    Script:

    Carrot

    Director's Notes:

    This is a simulated audition for a 30-second radio commercial for a fast food restaurant. The script is an excerpt. If you can, give the carrot an interesting and appropriate character voice. Then do the tag in your regular voice. No slate, please.

    Script:

    Carrot: You know what it’s like being a carrot? I don’t. And I AM a carrot. I mean, I get cooked, or sometimes I’m raw, sliced, diced, and ... what’s the long way ... anyway, I like it better when I’m in a salad. Got company, you know?

    Tag: Auntie’s Table. Sit down to something good.

    89 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Nelson's recording

    Oops, I missed the latest Edge Script Audition contest deadline, but would appreciate feedback on this recording, anyway. Please feel free to comment on the read (as it relates to the request/direction), as well as the audio quality. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5446/script-recording-96602.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation was good. A lot of mouth noises. I couldn't understand the word "long" clearly. Volume was great.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Claire for your feedback. Yes, I noticed the mouth noises too...more so after your comments, and going back and listening to the recording a few more times. This read was on a new mic - still trying to make adjustments - so hopefully that (and some green apples) may improve things. Once I can nail this down, I'll upload something else. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Mike,

    Green Apple is just a quick fix and not always reliable. The most important thing is hydration. Have to keep up the H2o intake all day, not just 13 to 15 minutes before recording. Takes a while for water to hydrate your system so make sure 1st thing in the morning and as I said throughout the day. Stay away from dairy and chocolate and foods like that before a session and that should help as well. It will make for a shorter editing time if you don't have to edit out a bunch of clicks from mouth noise.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear randyenglishvoice@gmail.com's recording

    This is my first demo recording. I need to know how it rates professionally.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6299/script-recording-22185.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording cuts off in the middle at 45 seconds so I only heard 2 spots. Hard to judge from the small sample

    Peer Feedback:

    the first spot, to much of the same repeating tonal range, the second sounded like vocaly you were preforming a wider range, but it was being squashed by the production, might add a bit more bass to the mix

    Peer Feedback:

    Voices sound too similar. Try to add voices and receive coaching from Voice Actors.

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    "Clem the Prospector - Nebraska Lottery"

    Script:

    Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin in this old mountain here.
    The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 12 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

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    34 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ZachVO's recording

    I'm trying a new character voice in Clem. I'm wondering if it sounds somewhat believable. My regular voice is the tag at the end.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-40191/script-recording-66513.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi zm15,
    Cool voice. In my (newbie) opinion, the character is "believable" mainly in the cartooney sense-- that is to say, it's fun, likeable, and consistent, but it may not make me think it's actually an old prospector speaking.
    One other (minor) point I noticed is that your delivery sounds a bit "breath-y"--meaning the words, not actual breaths-- especially at the ends of certain words (maybe the most audible case is at the very end of the read after "Lottery"; it sounds like "Lotteryhh").
    Cheers,
    Peter

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    43 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    This is a Vermont codger.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6638/script-recording-28956.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    After last week's fiasco, I'm finished with the contest.

    Peer Feedback:

    It certainly works as a Vermont codger...Very "Parker Fennelly"

    If I may, try reading some of Robert Frost in this voice. I bet it would sound great!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I heard Frost. I don't think this is a good fit. I worked in Vermont many years.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've got to get away from doing characters, and concentrate on the commercial voice.

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    CR2

    Script:

    We would never boast about the thousands of people’s credit scores we’re helping improve every day. We don’t like touting that our average customer has seen 11 negative deletions from their credit reports in just 3 months. And you certainly won’t hear us ranting about our 15 years of experience ...

    78 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jeffwallace217's recording

    HI Everyone, I'm uploading this audition as a contrast to the one I uploaded earlier. I'd love feedback on whether or not I should be pursuing and practicing more conversational material, or if I have potential in both conversational and character work. Thank you in advance for any feedback you can provide. Jeff Wallace

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-46175/script-recording-51986.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's really good! Nice pacing, the accent sounds spot on (is it real?) and it sounds like it could be on the air now.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much fo the kind words voiceovermitch. And no, that's not my real accent - replicating accents is just one of those things I was born with I guess.

    Peer Feedback:

    This was very good.

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    Hey, Jeff. This is a terrific performance. The character and accent sound authentic to me. You don't sound at all tentative. Love the attitude.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great accent and delivery!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought that you did a great job and I liked the accent you used!!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    I also thought the performance was great - really great, in fact. You hit all the right points fantastically well. I wonder how this would sound in your natural voice? Accents are incredibly hard to master without sounding inauthentic. The quality of the recording was good overall. Watch out for those "S" sounds. They were often over-modulated, making them sound "tinny". I struggle with this problem in my home set-up. One relatively easy way to remedy this is by fiddling with your board's bass levels. Another is practicing ways to pronounce S's less sharply - much harder to do. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Everyone -

    Thasnk you all so much for the kind words and great feedback. I'm continuing to plug away and work on gettting better every day, and this is a great way to get some fresh ears on my reads that know their stuff. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read, you're great at that accent.

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    Dark Elf Warrior

    Script:

    Your time has come.”

    “All things must pass”

    “Protectors are saved, intruders are slayed”

    “I have yet to realize my purpose, I must persevere.”

    51 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear rapha16's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-77392/script-recording-60451.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Rapha,

    I would think the script calls for a dark, intense, middle ages tone...you seem to have picked up on that tone pretty easily. However, it's very difficult to get a good assessment with the kind of equipment you're working with. There seems to be a combination of background noise, a microphone and a software issue that is making your recording very tinny and phasey, like your talking in and out of a tin can.

    The Home Studio 101 class is very helpful in picking out different equipment to use, and there's a Sunday night talk forum that you can call into and pick up information (I think it's the first Sunday of each month, but don't quote me...).

    Getting the quality to the point where we can get a better feel of how you sound will go a long way in getting some great feedback here...

    David Michaelson

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't comment on the performance because I can't hear the performance through the dreadful quality of the sound file. Edge offers the 101 course on Home Studio. You need to gain some understanding of the software before posting something like this again.

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    42 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear rapha16's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-77392/script-recording-60689.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    ^ oh yeah It's those aren't random words at the beginning I had to say my favorite food and small and my favorite name

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality is not good. There is nothing over 7KHz, and this gives it a hollow sound. Also, your levels are a little high. Peaking at 0dB - should be -3dB.

    The scornful laugh sounds forced to me.

    You could leave longer pauses between the lines...

    Overall, not something I would submit for an audition.

    Peer Feedback:

    Gotta work on the sound quality. A decent mic and an usb audio interface like a m-audio fast track pro will give you good sound quality. As far as performance, just keep at it. Repetition is key. The more you do it, the more natural it becomes.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your read sounds a bit rushed to me also, I have to agree with the other comment the scornful laugh sounds forced. I say… give the read another shot. Good luck.

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    Dirty Harry Quote

    Script:

    I know what you're thinking. "Did he fire six shots or only five?" Well, to tell you the truth, in all this excitement I kind of lost track myself. But being as this is a .44 Magnum, the most powerful handgun in the world, and would blow your head clean off, you've got to ask yourself one question: Do you feel lucky? Well, do ya, punk? (insert gunshot of your choice)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    New to the VO profession. This recording is raw, i.e. no EQ, Compression etc.. Would like honest feedback on performance and quality. I got the script from Edge Studio's script library.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-77918.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First lets talk recording quality. There is a lot of background noise. Sounds like fan. A quieter environment would be best, but you could also toy around with a noise reduction/gate, so long as it doesn't effect your vocal (sometimes it will). You also have the same problem I do, mouth noise. You can hear it after "know what your thinking", "lost track myself" "one question" "lucky", actually after the end of most sentences. Edit it out until you have the ability to have more control over your mouth. The performance was fair. Wasn't really feeling the emotion in the script to be honest. Good luck as you continue.

    Peer Feedback:

    As unfair as it might be, it is just too difficult to listen to this and not compare it to Clint Eastwood. It is comparable to someone doing Dodge Ram or Coors Beer copy and not comparing it to Sam Elliot. These things are just too identifiable with the personalities who have created them. Unless you do a killer impression (or go to another extreme), no matter how well it's delivered, it just doesn't stack up to the original.

    The other thing is, this is not a voiceover, it's an identifiable scene from a (cult) classic movie, Dirty Harry. Others may disagree, but IMHO, if one is going to pursue VO, one should practice with what is typically VO copy - commercials, narrations, ADR, telephony, video game characters, cartoon characters audiobooks and the like. Movie scenes are fun to do and/or imitate, but it's not necessarily VO. The fact that this script appears in the Script Library doesn't necessarily make it a VO script. (I admit that it's just my own personal prejudice that movie and play scenes are meant to be fully, physically and visually acted, and using them for VO looses something in the translation for me.)

    That said: If this were one of the types of VO copy mentioned above, you've taken liberties with the script that a director or casting person might take exception with. Starting with the first sentence - you said "thinkin'" instead of "thinking". Not all copy is well written, but copy writers generally choose their words very carefully, deliberately and with a purpose. If he or she wanted a more colloquial interpretation or feel, it would have been written that way, and/or mentioned in the spec.

    Other trouble spots are:
    "whuhcher" for "what you're"
    "world" sounded like "whirl"
    "yo" for "your"
    "godda" for "got to"
    "quesh'n" for "question"

    There is not a darned thing with having an "urban" delivery, if that is what is called for. In fact, that style is quite "in" for some genres and sub-genres of VO. However, if you are going to go for that, go all the way. This floated in and out.

    There is a lot of "fuzz" in the recording - possibly line noise or just boosted room noise. Not something to worry about at this point. Primary importance is how you interpret the copy - the "acting" of voice acting. However, that also entails good mic-ing technique and lessening and/or eliminating mouth noises (p-pops, lip smacks, tongue clicks, etc.) and overly loud breath sounds. There's a good bit of that in this recording as well.

    Don't worry about music and FX at this point either. Sure, it's fun to "doctor up" these things, but (in some cases) it just masks other aspects of the delivery that others might be able offer help with.

    Your voice is fine. But VO isn't so much about the "voice" as it is about how one uses it to get the message or story across to the listener.

    Peer Feedback:

    Where's the menace?

    Peer Feedback:

    @Redrocket, thank you, I know my environment isn't exactly what it should be right now, however the plans are on paper for the solution... I figured I'd better start practicing and getting feedback on things such as mouth noise as I'm getting my finances together for the sound treatments needed - but why wait, get started now ya know! Thanks for your feedback and well wishes.

    @jamesromick, thank you, I understand your view concerning identifiable and honestly I wasn't trying to impersonate Mr Eastwood, that takes a special talent, however I was attempting to give it a good shot and it is highly possible that my apprehension of the results knowing that I was going to post this was showing through. I'm sure as I become more confident knowing that my technique is better and mouth noises reduced to an acceptable level I'll have better reviews. I appreciate your comments and will attempt to stay away from the classic lines if i'm not trying to impersonate.
    "...badges? badges?! We don't need no stinking badges..."

    @Richard, I guess I should have imagined an enemy in front of me - will try harder, thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    Didn't mean to suggest that you were attempting an imitation. Just pointing out my personal prejudice and the pitfalls as to tackling "iconic" pieces of copy.
    (BTW - Loved the Blazing Saddles reference.)

    A question I would have is:

    What VO genre or genres do you think you have an affinity for? (And don't spread yourself too thin by saying you want to tackle them all, it's too wide a focus - not everyone is a jack-of-all-trades.) Pick one or two and concentrate on your delivery. The "studio" will come along in time. (For now, you can make note in your initial comment that you're not completely up and running and for critics to discount the audio quality.)

    Ask friends, family or even strangers what they think your personality (not necessarily your voice) is suited to, as far as VO is concerned. For instance: Are you a "good guy"? Are you a "bad ass"? Are you helpful, caring and sincere? Are you down and dirty and in the gutter? Are your messages uplifting? Are you a depressing downer? Comic or serious? Ultra-urban or ultra-refined? Can you be any of or all these? That's the acting of the thing, defining who you are (and to whom you are speaking) within the constraints of a given piece of copy - and that can shift with transitions within the same piece.

    Keep practicing and keep posting.

    Peer Feedback:

    @jamesromick, Sir thank you for your suggestions, I hadn't asked friends/family "how" IT sounded knowing they'll most likely say 'oh that sounds good' or something like that, but it never occurred to ask what they think my "personality is suited to", that is a very insightful piece of information.

    In regard to what genre(s): gaming/animation, audio book & maybe commercials. Again thank you for your constructive critique.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi ChasA,
    Being new to VO I don't want to leave you feeling dumped on. Any commentary on this board for the most part is with good intentions. There are some who will pat you on the back when you shouldn't be. Those comments however do not move you along toward your goal. Think of a prize fighter practicing in a ring with a sparing partner. The boxing coach isn't commending every move the boxer makes. He's tearing apart what he's doing wrong. Why? Because he'll get himself killed in the ring with the real deal. Praise doesn't come easy it is gained the "the old fashioned way, we earn it" (old quote from a commercial). It is always nice, encouraging an uplifting to have your efforts praised. You will get that if it is good, which when you do get it is all the more sweet. Forget about good or even great sounding voices. They will hold your attention for all of a few seconds. After that, it is the mechanics of VO that advances you to greater heights. Regardless of the genre it is all about communicating with your audience. How well you tell the story. How real you make it in the mind of your listener. That means understanding when and how to craft your delivery. Developing a toolbox from which you draw nuances, pauses, power, weakness, inspiration, timing, subtle shades of communication in transitioning from drama to the lightness of comedy. All of which are intended to control the emotions of the person or persons you are relating the story to. Never be afraid to fail or get a verbal come down. Those are the things you learn the most from. The people who succeed the most in this arena are the ones who learn from their mistakes. Even when they develop into strong VO artists they are never beyond flopping. The difference between them and the ones that fade away is their perseverance in striving for quality. Hope this provides some perspective. Ciao

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    Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night, Dylan Thomas

    Script:

    Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night Dylan Thomas
    Do not go gentle into that good night,Old age should burn and rage at close of day;Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Though wise men at their end know dark is right,Because their words had forked no lightning theyDo not go gentle into that good night. Good men, the last wave by, crying how brightTheir frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,Do not go gentle into that good night. Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sightBlind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,Rage, rage against the dying of the light. And you, my father, there on the sad height,Curse, bless me now with your fierce tears, I pray.Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

    Script from Edge Studio's 5,150 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > Chara

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eagleye's recording

    This is my first attempt at a Character Narration and this poem caught my eye. As a young man, Dylan Thomas was a favorite...thanks for the feedback...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-88386/script-recording-73997.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    so, I kinda like this read as a spoken word poem....it's really hard (for me) to pull this off. it's just you and mic....I think the breaths are good. leave 'em in.

    I didn't like the "And you, my father..." line. you lost momentum on that line, but then got it back.

    I think the recording quality could be crisper. Talk to touzet about compression.
    You could really make this pop.
    And, I think you should really "own" the pacing more. forget the punctuation.

    "If I were the director...." would I do a retake here or there? probably. But, I think your read can stand on it's own, as well.

    nice job.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Professional Feedback:

    Great choice of text and good work for your first character narration! I love this piece and thank you so much for choosing me for such an interesting check up challenge! This is my favorite kind of thing...Here goes...

    You are very easy to listen to...I admire the flow in your work and the way you maintain a consistent volume as you change your operative words. You show solid breath support throughout and are resonant and clear. I enjoyed the delivery style and your ability to handle the elevated language.
    Your love of the language is evident.

    To work on this piece we have to decide if you are going to interpret it....act it. Even celebrated poets when they read their work may choose to let the words stand on their own without adopting a point of view. We sometimes do this in voice over narration too...put ourselves in service of the text as a neutral narrator and get out of the way of the language so folks can draw their own conclusions....this is a bit how I am receiving your recording now. I do think it would be interesting for you to try it with some subtle acting values because the poem is so personal to the speaker ( which is now you) and it is a surprise to us the listener, (us) that he is speaking to his father on his deathbed.

    If you want to do this work, I can suggest a few ways to start.

    If you haven't revisited a literary analysis of the poem since way back in the day, it would be a good idea to do that first because this particular piece is so famous. I am a big fan of learning from those who have gone before us. Here is a link to a virtual university that I think is the bees knees and perfect for this kind of work. They offer very accessible, well organized, thorough research in one place for quick application. The VO world is nothing if not super fast so if we can do this kind of work quickly, so much the better. A useful resource.

    http://www.shmoop.com/do-not-go-gentle-into-that-good-night/

    There is even a recording here of the poet himself reading this piece.

    After getting the overview, I would scan the text. If you need a scansion refresher here is a video for you.

    http://www.shmoop.com/video/scansion-101

    As an actor, I like to work on these kinds of pieces in layers doing the technical work first.

    After you have scanned the piece...notice all the places where the rhythms change...where the scansion is not regular. This is a clue that there is a change of intention or emotion in these spots. We can use these literary clues to inform our acting choices.

    Some basic acting tools...
    Decide who you are where you are and what you want from your father.
    Create strong, detailed, visual images and use body language and facial expressions as you work. The mic loves mental images and if you really focus on them as if they are real , you will begin to notice subtle acting nuances in the vocal line. You will need to have a need to speak for each line of text. A monologue is really a scene where one partner doesn't speak. We have to ask ourselves why? Why doesn't our scene partner respond? In each line, we fail to get the response we want so we try a different tactic and continue to build our case. If our scene partner speaks then our monologue concludes.

    Your need to speak will lead me through the story. When you are discovering your thoughts rather than imaging that you know exactly what you will say next, I will believe you are speaking rather than reading. Another notable thing in this piece is the use of repetition. I had a wonderful Shakespeare teacher who asked us, Why does a Shakespearean character repeat himself? The answer was... because it sounded so good the first time! Note the repetitions in the text and choose a different action to use to effect your scene partner for each repetition. A good action is a transitive verb that will immediately take a direct object...such as soothe him, challenge him, empower him, comfort him, beg him, entice him, seduce him, amuse him.....something like bond with him is a weak action because we need that extra word with in there...try to be succinct....fight him...encourage him.

    As you work with the acting tools, maintain all the great things you are already doing that I mentioned in the first paragraph. You may find as you start to talk with your imaginary scene partner, your father character, that the tempos may vary, and differ from your first recording and from Mr. Thomas's recording if you choose to listen to it. This will probably happen as you fight for your tactics and change images. This is a good sign.

    I hope those tools will be useful to you. I would love to hear this piece again and would welcome any thoughts you have as you put the tools I have offered into practice. Your feedback about your exploration helps me be a better coach.

    Happy Voicing! So nice to work with you!

    All the best,

    Danielle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach September 4, 2014 at 4:17PM
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    Don't eat Lucy

    Script:

    Farmer
    (to dog): How about you promise not to eat Lucy?

    Dog: My puppy pappy said don't make promises I can’t keep.

    Farmer: Well, you make me nervous.

    Lucy: You nervous? Look at me. I’m shaking my feathers off! Awk!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear richnice's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12792/script-recording-76485.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Rich: You diffidently got that cartoon character thing going on, although this is my first time hearing others demos, and I'm still learning the ropes; some have music effects, some, like yours don't. Don't get me wrong, I won't know what kind of music to mix with a cartoon character anyway. Good performance!

    Professional Feedback:

    Your pro-feedback via Marjorie Kouns_________________

    Hey Rich:

    Your recording put a smile on my face. It is always a cartoon character challenge to provide distinctive voices when there are multiple roles in the same spot. Congrats on taking on the challenge!

    Both the Farmer and Lucy characters had the beginnings of a unique voice style for this type of cartoon genre. Now the challenge...your Dog character sounded a little too similar to your Farmer voice and notice that your Lucy (slight new yorker/boston) bird character dipped 'down' at the end of her sentence into your Farmer-type voice with a deeper more resonant voice register at this point in her story. Also Lucy can have a much more 'falsetto' soprano AWK to her beak 'comment'. Take more risks with your voice choices, yet Be careful that they don't all sound like Rich with a slightly different tone! The voice distinction comes with continued practice! Be that animal (vegetable) human!

    However, you nailed it on the energy and painting a scenario with your words. Sound quality/output all fine. In the meantime invite you to embellish each of these three characters even further. That way you can hold on to each of their attributes for future character type recordings with a variation on their pitch, age, clarity in voice and even their tempo. I would advise you to vary the temp of a conversation especially within a cartoon format. (I would have given the Dog character a little 'stutter' or a slight 'hmmm' before his 'thoughts' became actual words; that way each character takes on a distinctive frame of reference. And this added ingredient offers the listener a much more memorable spot/story than just being funny, decent recording quality, strong interpretation, and stylized predictable characters.

    Makes sense?

    Listen to even more pet care spots on the air and youtube to hone in on your core character mix.

    keep up the good work Rich!

    Best,
    Marjorie Kouns _ Edge Coach Pro

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach December 8, 2014 at 2:42PM
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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear marysboy1's recording

    this is a retake, just wondering on the quality?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100612/script-recording-79943.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice has a very warm and friendly quality. I liked this take.

    Peer Feedback:

    There was a lot of inhalation noise at the beginning of each sentence. Otherwise sounded pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks on the critiquing will watch the breathing noises and pacing.

    Peer Feedback:

    ugh. right channel only -- it's hard to listen to in headphones.
    any reason to not include the script? it's easier to follow if I can read it too.

    you said, "it reminds me not.....take my life so seriously" - it sounds like a word was dropped during editing, or something.

    what are you going for here? is this an informal introduction to a podcast?
    it had a very informal, one-take-live-broadcast feel to it. In other words, you spoke in the natural speaking voice you would use during the podcast.

    cheers,
    DS.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Darmaggi's recording

    No processing except for noise reduction and normalization....and no SFX.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1492/script-recording-61815.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    How fun! Love the voice. Really terrific job with it. The dry audio sounds nice. Very clear and full of potential for the engineers. Would enjoy more of a beat of silence after the first question to draw in the listener. I might try to go less staccato on Eckerd so that the listener can hear it more easily, as well.

    Well done!

    Best,

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Ever seen Count Floyd on SCTV?

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MEjdt_n1l-4

    Not the best example, but that's where the "Ooooo...that's scary!" came from.

    There's also The Count from Sesame Street.

    This was really nicely done. You could have even pushed it a bit further with the accent and rounding and broadening the tone words.

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    Energy Star

    Script:

    ENERGY STAR: This is the city. There are a million appliances here. Most are hardworking. Occasionally, however, one goes bad - wasting energy and running up utility costs. That's where I come in. I wear a star. The Energy Star. I was working the day shift when the call came in.

    DISPATCHER: Energy Star, clothes washer wasting family money!

    ENERGY STAR: We arrived just in time!

    WOMAN: Thank goodness you're here! Our clothes washer....

    WASHER: Give me more juice! More Juice!

    ENERGY STAR: Is he always this agitated?

    WOMAN: He's going through a bad cycle.

    WASHER: Hey! Why can't we go for a little spin?

    ENERGY STAR: Ma'am, it's time for and Energy Star qualified clothes washer.

    WOMAN: Just because he's in hot water?

    WASHER: I want more juice!

    ENERGY STAR: Ma'am, and Energy Star qualified washer can save your family nearly $650 over the life of your washer depending on your usage.

    WOMAN: Six hundred and fifty dollars????

    ENERGY STAR: Yes, ma'am.

    WOMAN: Take him away! Oh, wait, let me get my stockings out first....

    WASHER: Hey You! Get your filthy hands off me! I want my lawyer!

    ENERGY STAR: The figures you have just heard are true. Look for Energy Star lighting appliances wherever appliances are sold.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eppervesce's recording

    I haven't taken the Home Studio class and I know the recording quality needs to be addressed. At this point I am asking for performance feedback. Thank you so much.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-28067/script-recording-59519.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, 4 characters...

    ENERGY STAR: I think this character needs to be better distinguished from WOMAN. They sound too similar to my ear, and it takes a while to figure out which one is speaking when not following along with the text. This is meant to be a Joe Friday/Dragnet monotone character. But I would also try to pitch it lower (or make it more throaty or something) to help distinguish it.

    DISPATCHER: I'd throw some filtering and/or sound effects on this voice to make it sound like it's coming over a radio. Again, to make it clear immediately that it's a different character.

    WOMAN: I wouldn't change anything here. This is presumably closest to your own natural voice, and it works. The stockings line is delivered really well.

    WASHER: Not bas as is, but you could get even more extreme with it - it's loopy, it's insane. Have fun with it. Maybe more pitch variation.

    And when doing multiple-character reads, I've experimented with reading all of a particular character's lines separately rather than trying to shift on the fly. I don't know which you did here, but whatever works best for you is the one you should use...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much, Sundance Kid. Very helpful feedback, especially since to my ear the woman and Energy Star guy sounded totally different!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ephervesce, you might not need a filter to make the dispatcher's voice sound like it's coming through a radio. Just make it really nasal but keep the clipped tone. I think you did well with the characters, though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Eppervesce --
    good read. I get the Jack Webb character. I think it's tougher for a female voice, but you got the gist of it with the deadpan cadence.

    Sundance's idea of using an effect on the Dispatcher is a good one. He's talking over the radio to your squad car. I think that line should be modeled after something like "One-Adam-12: 211 in progress. Handle code 3"...

    The WASHER is a fun character - an "agitated" felon, acting crazy....well done.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, thank you, thank you!

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    Federal Express - Da Mob

    Script:

    Okay - so - you used the udda guys - and now your package is - well - maybe it's not lost, but it's 10 am, and Fat Tony's on the phone - no da' boss - wants to drive you around the block, Cappiche?!

    So next time - ha, (thinks to himself) - "next time" - (laughter from goons in the room) HEY!!... (goons abruptly shut up)

    ...If there should BE a next time - use Federal Express, ahh? Reliable - on time - courteous service, so your package arrives where & when - it's supposed to...
    and at a very reasonable price.

    Why would you NOT use FEDERAL EXPRESS? Fo'get about it...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Fooling around with a new set up so all comments welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/fEDeX dA mOB.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    So next time-when you got to this section, I heard you start to fall out of character. it was not totally consistent with the first part of the read which sounded more authentic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really funny. Great acting and voice. A little too long a pause after "your package is..." A little slurring of the words "reliable" and the second "Federal." But really nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Daniel - loved your take on this. Tone was right on (and your side kick did a nice job too - unless that was you dubbing in). My only thoughts are that you might want to speed it up. I'm thinking this is a 30 second spot. You had quite a few pauses that you could cut out. Also, I felt that your tough guy tone seemed to lighten a bit too much as the script went on. Sometimes it's hard to keep that character's energy going. Otherwise, great interpretation!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with erapp. Try to stay in character. Great over all read.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-72500.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It was good quality but, you sounded like you should be the boss not the guy that was scared of the boss. Thats just my opinion. either way I thought it was very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    jaott makes a good point. your read sounds like the boss himself, not one of the goons.
    that said, this is another nice character read.

    one question: why did you not use the comic effects direction in the script? the goons laughing and then -- suddenly shut up...?
    that's funny stuff!

    you drifted out of the Brooklyn(?) thing at the very end - sounded almost Russian or something....

    funny character bit. nice job.
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    My take on this is that it was one of the boss's lieutenants telling this guy what he oughta be doin'. Didn't think there would be much difference between a boss and an under-boss.
    I got lazy with the goons makin' racket thing.. Guess I could have burned a few tracks and done it.. Took the easy way out and just momentarily chopped the accordian player. Not nearly as funny ...(effective).

    It's always good to get critiques on characters ....and have folks point out "drifting". ha ha.

    Thanks for taking the time to listen and critique this.

    Might be fun to go back and work on the last line or two and cut in the goon tracks...
    At least we'll find out if I can take direction. Also, swear I didn't see the "w" on now initially
    and read it as "no".

    Thanks again,
    -touzet-

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    Ghostly Merchant

    Script:

    A fair payment, indeed. I can craft you a magnificent vessel worthy of the sacred water, but first, take this, and bring my tools and the plans for the vessel.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Matthew-Eagen's recording

    Getting out of my comfort zone, having some fun with my voice. Thanks Folks, Be Well.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Ghhostly Merchant FF.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd keep working on this because I think you are on to something here with your voice. Nice job. I think I would like the first "vessel" to sound more like an "l" sound at the end and a little less like "vessoh". I think that's nit picking but that is what I would want someone to do on this forum for me.

    I was hearing some mouth noise in the last half of your read. I didn't notice any room noise. Is the space acoustically treated?

    Keep practicing and having fun!

    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes! Thank you for that feedback. Validation is so good. I'm a little dehydrated and I was lazy this morning and didn't do my "everyday warm ups." Proof of how important hydration & warming up are, so important for me to warm up those articulates, and to hydrate to prevent mouse noise, thank you for your Feedback.
    As far as my room goes. I did make window plugs for the two double hung windows in my sound room (noise floor usually between -60 & -70). My booth consists of about 4 packing blankets hung in a scrunched shower curtain style. I have recently built relationship with two recording studios near me and have been contemplating recording some auditions there first thing in the morning for the P2P sites. I had recorded some tracks at the other studios for comparison to my home studio, and the TLM 104 in one studio really sounds better than my mic but I think my booth is very comparable acoustically.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read, although maybe you were working a bit too close to the mic. I thought I detected some mouth noise in there. All the best, Ian

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    Goblin Character Voice

    Script:

    (Narrator - proper English)
    It begins with a note shoved under your door, scrawled with large, unpracticed letters:

    (Glogg - Goblin voice)
    To the heroes it concerns, the end of everything is upon us! Wicked deeds are being
    did at the Parigeth Ruins and you are required because of honor to save them. I've
    drawn a map in case you are too stupid to know where that is. I hereby command you
    to stop this darkness—the end of all goblins! Your awesome master, Glogg

    (Narrator - proper English)
    The map is rough but legible. With nothing better to do, you gather your gear and set
    out towards the Parigeth Ruins.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Bullwinkle's recording

    This was for the Goblin character (though I did a loose narrator anyway). They asked for "Goblin - think of your favorite goblin/orc characters from The Lord of the Rings (or similar fantasy)." I was happy with this. On V123, I got one star. I know that the stars aren't really used as a rating system so much as a filing system, but it was still a bummer as it came pretty quickly. OTOH, it also said I was "ranked 1st out of 2 auditions that received feedback," and they had 23 auditions by that point, so who knows what it actually means. Anyway, I've been trying new things with mic placement and using one headphone can and pacing, and I'd love to hear general feedback. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81964/script-recording-86835.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It is kind of a judgement call, but usually when the instruction asks for just one character in a multi-character script, give them only that. Who knows, they may have already cast the Narrator. And if they were pressed for time and didn't hear Glogg right away, they may have just deleted your submission chalking it up to someone who can't follow the instructions or got the instructions wrong.

    Also, when you see "Proper English", that means "The King's English". An Upper Class British accent. Think Sir Ian McKellen (Gandalf) or Patrick Stewart. If you can't absolutely nail it, don't even try. Someone will.

    Second thing is this: Whenever I have been asked to do a character (Man #1 or Glogg or General Crapforbrains), I've always been asked to slate my name, then the character I am reading for, take a beat, and then go into the text. Sometimes they specifically ask to slate "in character". However, in this particular case, it may be a toss-up on that. You might want to let them hear your normal voice on the slate (and character' name), and then go into the voice you chose for the lines proper. So, unless they specifically ask, a good rule of thumb is to slate normally and then go into character. The other advantage of that is if they might want to cast you for multiple roles, because you've shown them that you can break right into character. You also might consider doing two takes using completely different voices. It could increase your chances of getting a second character. But make sure that you state,"two takes" up front and put your best one first.

    The character is great. But it may not be unique enough for their liking - more an imitation than an actual original character. I hear a little Gollum mixed with some Yoda. So, for instance, you may have used that voice, but put a slightly Cockney, Liverpool or Lower Class British twang to it (taking the clue from the direction for the Narrator's voice). Even if it isn't "spot on" as the Brits say, it's still unusual enough to get noticed over someone who may have made the same choice (Gollum/Yoda) that you did. Think of Martin Short in "The Father of the Bride" - that accent does not exist in any country on this earth, he made it up.

    Sound quality is very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I don't know how I missed "Proper English" so that makes me feel like an idiot.

    Your slating tips are very useful, thank you. This is a part of the profession that doesn't get discussed. OTOH, when I audition for VO jobs through my agent, I've only been asked to slate my name (and possibly my agency), and it's done at the start of the session. I usually list the number of takes in the written part of the submission, though.

    Thank you for your advice on the character, too. The line "think of your favorite goblin/orc characters from The Lord of the Rings" was probably taken a little too literally, and in the back of my mind, I think I knew that. I should have at least included another, more unique take.

    Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    I had an film acting coach once tell me that all of the clues that you need for the character (intention, motivation, energy, etc.) are all there in the text. I took a little exception to that in that it's not always 100% the case.

    But here, that one big clue is a jumping off point for the characters.

    I would still consider stating the number of takes after your slate, simply because people are lazy and often don't read the email that you sent with the files. Better chance that they might give both (or a 3-in-a-row) a full listen if they know what's coming.

    I've also been at auditions where the booth director will ask for to slate your name again at the end, just for good measure.

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    Gully the Seagull

    Script:

    So, what's it like bein' a seagull, you ask? Well, it's TOUGH, TOUGH I tell ya! Ya gotta be ready to move at a moment's notice... hold on a sec. (quick pause)
    WING! Chicken wing! IN-bound!
    (Disappointed) Agh.. just missed it. Anyway, like I was sayin' ya gotta be quick, there's lots of competition and these other gulls, I... tell...YOU, they don't give ANY gull a second chance. Hold it...
    TATER TOT! I got dibs!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Murray O's recording

    Just starting out.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6210/script-recording-22809.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! Great job! The character was great, recording was nice and clear. You did a nice job of pulling the words off the page and really bringing them to life. Nicely done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well done! Keep going!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great! If I could offer one piece of advice, it would be to be careful sticking to the script. In this forum it's not that big of deal, but one of the things I hear from The Edge is the importance of staying to the script. If it were a paying gig, there could be a legal issue. OK, that's my two cents -- but again, nice job with the character.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Specs: Middle aged, blue collar type, earnest and heartfelt Any and all comments welcomed and appreciated

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-90012.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I believed every single syllable. Terrific read. Great use of pauses, emotional sighs. You removed some breaths, but kept the ones in that added to the emotional impact. Terrific read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm new at this myself, but I think you sound professional. The emotion you presented sounded genuine and the timing was very good.

    Recording quality was also good with a low noise floor.

    Would like to hear another's opinion on slating the read.

    Looking forward to hearing from you again.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6638/script-recording-30310.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    No script. This is made up off the cuff.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good character, Henry. Folksy. Reminds me a bit of A Prairie Home Companion. You ad-libbed it? Nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, Bill. I heard "Jerry's Fairies" recent post up and picked up the mic. I knew that
    Ben and Jerry had passed out their ice cream on the sidewalk in Burlington, Vt.
    I am pleased that you enjoyed it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very enjoyable story Henry!

    Keep up the storytelling.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Henry you could be a natural story teller. I do miss seeing the scripts during your reads though. would you be interested in a link to a free voice recognition software that would write your scripts as you spoke into a word processor program like Word? I can type but like to use this to write out a read I scripted. It doesn't get all the words right but comes close and sure allows for an easier transcription. I hate to type a couple words, rewind, type some more, rewind etc etc.
    If you're interested I'll put the link up when I'm not at work and at home. Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, Mike. My eyesight makes it difficult for me to type the scripts. "His Name is Ben"
    has no script. It's part of a long narrative about this character that begins with my
    recording of "Click and Clack" that I posted some months back. I just add to it as the
    urge hits me. I love storytelling! Before TV it was standard fare.

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - Wow wow wow!!! I think this is your real voice. I like it so much better. Read everything this way. Wow this is your real voice so very glad to hear it. Thank you. So Mr. Dewing, when you read a script what happens, do you get tense? I am so glad to have heard this recording. I'll listen again. "Taint much" I love it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, Sabrina. Your comments well received. I was a 'heavy' stage actor.
    If I can sell my story-telling I will! I feel this character in my bones.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh Henry......This is the BEST!! You totally let your personality come through and it was charming. I agree that storytelling is your forte. Let us hear more....amazing job...thanks for sharing!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, Marianna. Makes my day! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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    Honda -- Accord SE

    Script:

    Hello. You’ve reached the office of Dr. Howard Abromowitz, famous orthodontist. This is the Doctor’s Administrative Assistant and mother, Mrs. Sylvia Abromowitz. We’re very sorry, but the office is closed today. The Doctor is going to his local HONDA DEALER to pick up his new ACCORD SE. Luckily, he has the good sense to know a real deal when he sees one. God only knows how his father and I sacrificed to put him through dental school. And, incidentally, if you happen to be a nice unmarried girl, and have good teeth, leave your name and number at the sound of the beep.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I did this one for giggles too. I wanted to approximate the character that Billy Crystal does of his 3-pack-a-day smoking aunt.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You sound a little manly for a mother but otherwise I liked the accent very much. Good job.

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    Yeah. Maybe tighter underwear would have helped.

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    Hi! Yes,the voice change didn't sound convincing to me. Pacing etc. were excellent. Best.

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    Loved it. Brought a smile to my face. Especially like the slight "crack" in your voice at certain pitches. Thanks for sharing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I also loved it,great job.

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    Honey Baked Ham

    Script:

    Bee 1 Hi, we're bees!
    Bee 2 And we're mad!
    Bee 1 Have you ever gone up to a bee and said, "Hey you bee,
    thanks for inspiring the great taste of Honey Baked ham?
    Bee 2 No, you haven't!
    Bee 1 Whatever! ... you love it ... you enjoy it ... but you never thank us!
    Bee 2 And you wonder why ... we sting!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love Bee #2 voice!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the delivery and script interpretation was good. The recording sounded clear. There was definitely a distinction between the tone of the two bees and they sounded conversational.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi roodbrian,

    Your posting is truncated after "you haven't." You might want to re-post.

    Regards
    Jothi

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    I missed the deadline for the December Contest. Alien

    Script:

    Script:

    ANGRY: Look, we’ve never met before. I don’t know you. But you’ve already shown me one thing: it’s time to get this settled.

    FRIENDLY: Look, we’ve never met before. I don’t know you. But you’ve already shown me one thing: it’s time to work this out.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Nasusal's recording

    I listened to the other folks' reads and decided I would try out for the contest. Then I discovered I was too late to enter. Can you give me feedback on my voice and delivery as I attempt to convey an angry person and a friendly person who deliver the same line but with different angles. I am trying to get started and will appreciate any and all feedback. I just did a scratch read in QT with the computer mic, so please do no focus on the production . Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Moe Biscuits's recording

    I think I finally figured out my mic/mixer/headphones dilemma. And what better way to test it than with the classic line from The Princess Bride?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sound quality was great, and the pacing and clarity were perfect. It was a great narration voice, but could use a little more inflection & emotion if playing the character. Overall, I liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Lacks an emotional attachment and urgency. The guy killed your father, for cryin' out loud! And you're going to run him through! Gimme some guts, man!

    Good sound quality, though. Did you use any noise cancellation? I hear a lot of empty room tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    The 120Hz hum is still there. It's easy enough to remove with a notch filter, but better to correct it at the source.

    Peer Feedback:

    Grrrr...This 120Hz hum and I are about to have words. Especially since I supposedly have "The world's quietest microphone." At 1:00 AM after a few Knob Creeks & water, I just kinda spit out the first thing that came to mind. But now, I've watched that scene about a dozen times. I'm gonna try again.

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    Intro to "The Dark Crystal"

    Script:

    Another world. Another time. In the age of wonder. A thousand years ago this land was green and good. Until the crystal cracked. A single piece was lost. A shard of the crystal. Then strife began. And two new races appeared. The cruel Skeksis. The gentle mystics. Here in the castle of the crystal, the Skeksis took control. Now the Skeksis gather in the sacred chamber where the crystal hangs above a shaft of air and fire. The Skeksis with their hard and twisted bodies, their harsh and twisted wills. For a thousand years they have ruled. Yet now there are only ten. A dying race ruled by a dying emperor imprisoned within themselves in a dying land. Today once more they gather at the crystal as the first sun climbs to its peak. For this is the way of the Skeksis. As they ravaged the land, so to they learned to draw new life from the sun. Today once more they will replenish themselves. Cheat death again. Through the power of their source, their treasure, their fate, the dark crystal.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear candidonick's recording

    Recorded on my phone so the sound quality is pretty bogus

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    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it, set aside the poor quality I think you got something here. Over acted in the beginning and then the read started to become more natural. it felt like you were telling the story and I was part of it. look forward to future reads.

    Peer Feedback:

    too strong on the emoting. michael caine talks about how to handle an important scene; he says that if you've set the basis of the character already, then the strongest way to deliver is to go blank; the audience will fill the scene with their emotion. set the scene, then give the listener a chance to involve and complete it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I almost thought it was you, Robert!

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    Intro To "The Dark Crystal"

    Script:

    Another world. Another time. In the age of wonder. A thousand years ago this land was green and good. Until the crystal cracked. A single piece was lost. A shard of the crystal. Then strife began. And two new races appeared. The cruel Skeksis. The gentle mystics. Here in the castle of the crystal, the Skeksis took control. Now the Skeksis gather in the sacred chamber where the crystal hangs above a shaft of air and fire. The Skeksis with their hard and twisted bodies, their harsh and twisted wills. For a thousand years they have ruled. Yet now there are only ten. A dying race ruled by a dying emperor imprisoned within themselves in a dying land. Today once more they gather at the crystal as the first sun climbs to its peak. For this is the way of the Skeksis. As they ravaged the land, so to they learned to draw new life from the sun. Today once more they will replenish themselves. Cheat death again. Through the power of their source, their treasure, their fate, the dark crystal.

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    Click to hear nickterryvo's recording

    Thanks1

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very Nice! This is one of my favorite movies. I think you did it very well. Little puffs of breath once in awhile. do you have a pop filter? Other than that I really like it. Good choice of music! If I had a constructive criticism it would be just a little more emotion. To me it is n fact a sad script. take care.

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    Very good read...for this one though I would get a little closer to the mic to increase the vocal presence.

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    Intro to "The Dark Crystal"

    Script:

    Another world. Another time. In the age of wonder. A thousand years ago this land was green and good. Until the crystal cracked. A single piece was lost. A shard of the crystal. Then strife began. And two new races appeared. The cruel Skeksis. The gentle mystics. Here in the castle of the crystal, the Skeksis took control. Now the Skeksis gather in the sacred chamber where the crystal hangs above a shaft of air and fire. The Skeksis with their hard and twisted bodies, their harsh and twisted wills. For a thousand years they have ruled. Yet now there are only ten. A dying race ruled by a dying emperor imprisoned within themselves in a dying land. Today once more they gather at the crystal as the first sun climbs to its peak. For this is the way of the Skeksis. As they ravaged the land, so to they learned to draw new life from the sun. Today once more they will replenish themselves. Cheat death again. Through the power of their source, their treasure, their fate, the dark crystal.

    47 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

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    Hi this is my frist recording ever. Just looking for feedback on the character, intonation, etc. and NOT for sound quality (it sounds like I'm in fact in "a shaft of air and fire").

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    Peer Feedback:

    Wow - that was really fun. Was VIncent Price your father? As you noted, you indeed sound as if you are in the shaft of air and fire - or maybe just the fire - but your interpretation, character and intonation are excellent. Feel like I should be seeing Golum running around with a ring . . .

    Marianne

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    A cannot wait to hear your character work in a true soundbooth. I love the pacing and delivery, you really get a sense of who's speaking.

    Well done!

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    Best thing posted today. Lots of potential.

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    Have you done Shakespeare? This has that ring to it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey thanks everyone for the positive reinforcement! I've not done Shakespeare and I think I have been inspired by Vincent Price. Will post more soon with other characters :)

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    Jack Daniels

    Script:

    In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s ... smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.

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    My shot at JD. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I get that your going for the laid back , slow pace, discussed in the spot. But for me , this was to slow, and the pauses to big. It sounds chopped up, and like you were not even interested in what you were saying. You might try , instead of just adding space and talking slow, draw out the words some, Like "or the weather", instead of all that pause before it, fill half of it by a much longer "or" , and it would have worked I think. some of that mixed in here and there and this would be a great spot. I think the Smooth, should not only have a bit more draw, but a little bit of attitude as well. Not over the top,,but just a hint.
    Great tone, and vocal quality. I liked the music, and the fact that its very low and in the background.

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    I enjoyed the music in the background. Good mood setting. I liked the quality of the voice. It sounds like I would like a smooth whiskey to taste. I did find the pace too slow. The pauses throughout were too long, so that by the time you get to the end, the final pause before the name was no more of a "dramatic pause" than the rest of them. It also meant the pace was flat.I felt sleepy, not laid back.

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely enjoyed your vocal quality and the musical choice but I also found the pace too slow. Drawing out some of the words, I think, would have made for a more engaging read.

    Peer Feedback:

    @All - I just listened to my read after reading your comments, and I had a reallllly good laugh. You are all so right! This was like a bedtime story- A Tennesseean lullaby...
    Let me tell all of you, I did about 20 takes on this and my first read was probably at the right pace, but I wasn't satisfied with my vocal quality or inflections, etc., so I gave it a rest for about an hour so. By the time I came back to the mic, it was probably too close to my bed time....and, well... it certainly sounds that way, now doesn't it.
    So let this be a cautionary tale about doing reads too close to bedtime!
    Thank you all!!!!

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    All comments welcomed

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    Peer Feedback:

    haha I loved that, the only thing that kinda bothered me was the noise removal, which made the recording sound a bit morphed.

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    Hey Jerry!
    Great! Good to hear from you again!
    BillH

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    Nice read man! Really felt the character. I agree with anyproblems, be careful with nr it can muck up your audio.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ha! Love it! Very solid character.

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    Lenders

    Script:

    Y'know, New Yorkers aren't the only people who eat Lenders Bagels.

    Japenese: In Osaka, Plenty people like Lenders Bagels!

    Irish: Lenders could grace the tables of all the kings or Ireland.

    German: Fresh, crisp, crunchy...the toast of Munich. Wundebar!

    Indian: The most favorite table bagel in all of Bombay...Exhilarating taste!

    Moscow: In Moscow, without out Lenders on our tables, breakfast would be big disappointment to Czars.

    France, In Pris, Left or Right Bank, it make no difference, breakfast with Lenders, C'est Manifique.

    Italian: When Momma cooked, she'd make the manicotti or meatballs...but for dessert, we'd always have Lenders bagels!

    See What I mean? Try Lenders Bagels Today, and learn what the rest of the world has known for years.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Fun with accents! Also, this was done in one take. (:o) I also have a new setup so will welcome comments on quality too.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Daniel, I can't get the volume up high enough on this to listen. :(

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    Yep very low volume!!!
    pump it up a notch !!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys that's what I needed to hear. I'll adjust and try to upload a new one. For some reason the site isn't letting me edit.

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    Lenders

    Script:

    Y'know, New Yorkers aren't the only people who eat Lenders Bagels.

    Japenese: In Osaka, Plenty people like Lenders Bagels!

    Irish: Lenders could grace the tables of all the kings or Ireland.

    German: Fresh, crisp, crunchy...the toast of Munich. Wundebar!

    Indian: The most favorite table bagel in all of Bombay...Exhilarating taste!

    Moscow: In Moscow, without out Lenders on our tables, breakfast would be big disappointment to Czars.

    France, In Pris, Left or Right Bank, it make no difference, breakfast with Lenders, C'est Manifique.

    Italian: When Momma cooked, she'd make the manicotti or meatballs...but for dessert, we'd always have Lenders bagels!

    See What I mean? Try Lenders Bagels Today, and learn what the rest of the world has known for years.

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    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Okay, I know I have some technical issues with which I have to deal...I hope I have the volume issue fixed well enough so you can hear. Please give me feedback on the performance. This one was in the script library and I just had to try all the accents in one take.

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    Peer Feedback:

    :) What a fun script! I think you really did it justice, too. Some of your accents sounded not quite solid (especially the French), but I'm terrible, terrible, terrible with even identifying accents, much less creating them. (There's very little diversity up here in Maine.) I thought this was fun and liked your acting choices, though, so I thought I'd pipe up.

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    Life Unscripted

    Script:

    Billy: ...

    Dad: ...

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    Well, I just had to post a response to the "I Love You Man!" recording from this afternoon. No script for this one - I'll probably get thrown off the board with or without a script...

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    I like the recording quality and your voice & timing are really good, your performance is great in this.

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    Lindsay Olive

    Script:

    My son, the olive, gives me such a pain! All my life all I wanted was the best for him, to be a Lindsay olive, a perfect olive! But would he listen to me? Nah. He’s got to be a big shot all the time. Like when I told him, I said: “Vinny, stay in the sun, the sun is wonderful for you!” But would he listen? No, sir. Like when I caught him hanging around with a bad bunch of olives. I said: “Vinny, get away from them, you don’t need them, you’re a good olive!” Do you think he listened to me? No! So when the Lindsay pickers came, I said: “Yoo hoo, yoo hoo, Mister Lindsay picker! Pick over there my son, the big shot.” Did they pick him? Nah, they don’t want big shots. If he’d listened to me, by now he could have been a Lindsay olive.

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    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    I really liked Carol's read on this - I am trying it with a little twist - I have changed the olive's name to Vinny - Italian is a bit easier for me!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You could have kept the name an pulled this off quite well with a Jewish voice. but that's neither here nor there. forgeddaboutit. You did a nice job. I liked it. So do the rest a the boys. Ain't that right boys?

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    Thanks, Richurd. I love this script. Probably my favorite. Nothing more fun than acting crazy . . . once again, liberating!

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    Yup, that's right.

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    I like how you said "I says" instead of how it was written, "I said." Nice touch, good interpretation.

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    Yep Rich is right
    Pretty nice

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    Lindsey Olive

    Script:

    My son the olive, gives me such a pain! All my life all I wanted was the best for him, to be a Lindsay olive, a perfect olive! But would he listen to me? Nah. He's got to be a big shot all the time. Like when I told him, I said: " Hershey, stay in the sun, the sun is wonderful for you! But would he listen? No sir. Like when I caught him hanging out with a bunch of bad olives. I said: "Hershey, get away from them, you don't need them, you're a good olive! Do you think he listened to me? No! So when the Lindsay pickers came, I said: "Yoo hoo, yoo hoo, Mr. Lindsay picker! "Pick over there my son the big shot". Did they pick him? Nah, they don't want big shots. If he listened to me, by now he could have been a Lindsay olive.

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    Click to hear jeyden's recording

    Hey I also poked around with some character scripts before trying anything serious. I wonder if this is more geared towards me. Comments appreciated.

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    Fun, but a touch difficult to understand. Reading along with it, it was easy to make out, but closing eyes and listening, I found that there were a few words that couldn't be made out. Maybe pitch down just a touch, but overall, it was whimsical and quite fun.

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    jeyden
    Really hard time understanding you. I get the feeling you were going for, but the words are so important. I agree with Futurity in that it needs to be pitched down. The whole thing was all one level. It seemed as though you were just speaking in an accent in a way that you thought was funny. But even though this is a funny script it needs to be based in some kind of reality. That;s what will make it funny, If it REALLY IS IMPORTANT TO HIM! Slow down so we can enjoy your enthusiasm!!!!
    I did like your passion for the read... Keep going and honing!!! I'm right there with you on all those things!!! It's a long road!
    Best
    Jeff

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    I think you were reading a bit too fast. Some of your words were on top of each other. Overall I think it was a decent read.

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    Way too fast, way too unintelligible, way too choppy and way too distorted. If you were going for Monty Python, it was off the mark. Their comedy works because there's music in their delivery and it's subtle. There's no music here and no subtlety, just noise.

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    Hello Jeyden,
    Script interpretation is critical to any read. You did not do that here. The others have pointed out the obvious weaknesses in this read so I won't go there. What struck me most was your failure to interpret the script properly. Even a cursory reading tells you that this is a Jewish character. Going where you did invalidated the humor. I don't mean to be hard but if you want to take this seriously the first thing your going to have to give attention to is script interpretation.

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    Richurd - I am curioius - what concludes you to believe that the "only" interpretation for this read is a Jewish character? I have contemplated this script many times and have never thought that.

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    Because that's how Jewish people talk.

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    Hey there! Stepping out of your comfort zone and taking risks is really important in acting and voice over, this you did and I commend you for that. However, when you take risks, there is always the possibility that you may not always get it right and I think on this occasion your choices didn't really work. I think one of the most useful comments was when Jeff said "even though this is a funny script it needs to be based in some kind of reality." Comedy never works when it is forced, the character needs to be totally invested and believe in what they are saying. Who were you talking to? How were you feeling about the situation? What was the scenario? I didn't believe that you were remembering something that had happened. It did seem to be a funny voice that you wanted to explore, but you hadn't really thought about the character. Obviously there were also some issues regarding clarity, pace and reading the copy incorrectly.

    With regards to there only being one interpretation, yes the original was a Jewish father, but that does not mean you can't explore different characters. My instant thought was an Italian Mamma as it isn't written using a Jewish dialect (or maybe it is and I am too ignorant to realise ;-)). Only the name "Hershey" suggested a Jewish origin, but I didn't get this from a cursory read (I had to research it!). For an actual audition, research all the clues in the copy, for forum practise, I think it is perfectly acceptable to play with other characters, but make sure you base them in reality as Jeff suggests. If you are interested in the original radio commercial, here it is: http://www.zeimer.com/wp-content/uploads/11_lindsay_olives_yoo_hoo.mp3

    As always, just an opinion! All the best, Niki :-)

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    Anyone from New York would have no problem identifying the written dialogue for what it is. If you haven't been exposed to it you couldn't be expected to identify it. There are scripts that are open to interpretation. That, however, is not the case with every script. This being one of them.

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    Ok, so a cursory reading for a New Yorker should allow them to identify it's a Jewish character, for everyone else - maybe give us the benefit of the doubt?! ;-) I'm sure if this was for a casting, it would be indicated that the character is Jewish, but I stand by what I say in terms of practising on the forum. Copy interpretation isn't just about identifying the ethnicity of a character (although obviously the background will influence and inform the delivery), and I think the context and emotion of this copy is relatable to most people and the humour can be universally understood and therefore a constructive critique can be provided on the performance, despite the incorrect character identification. The fundamentals of copy interpretation are still applicable; it wasn't just the mis-identification of the character's ethnicity that meant the read didn't work this time, but more general points that can be applied to all reads. Niki :-)

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    My point is very simple. There is a big difference in interpreting the script and bringing interpretation to the script. In this case the script was written with a specific character in mind because of the humor it engendered. Where one might bring interpretation into the script is in how you portray the character's dialogue. That could be through how old sounding you make the voice or how strong your choice of accent might be. But you cannot deviate from the writers intent with out spoiling their intended effect. I did not elaborate earlier because I felt it was fairly obvious that a father whose son was named Hershey was a dead give-a-way. Not to mention the construct of the the dialogue. I was wrong. This is an amateur site and perhaps those things do need to be spelled out. I make mention of it because people have a tendency to rush to the mic by-passing the the all important ingredient of interpreting the script (ie understanding the author's intent and purpose in writing it). Once you have the intended message in mind, you can then direct your attention to communicating that through your own interpretation. I don't spend a lot of time on comments anymore but when I do it's for a good reason. I love to see people grow and hone their craft, since I assume they care as much about it as I do. I hope this clarifies both my point and my intent. ;-)

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    Wow - this is all quite interesting. I appreciate all of your comments on my son, Jack's, endeavors. He is 17 and has had absolutely no training in VO or acting - which evidently is apparent. He likes to play around with my equipment, and I always encourage him to do so. He enjoys being fun and funny and has a nice tone to his voice. He decided to take a crack at some of the scripts from the script library. I gave him some of my own feedback and encouraged him to put his recording on the feedback forum. I am encouraging him to take all of these comments and learn from them. Look for more posts as he attempts to hone his skills . . . .

    Peer Feedback:

    Unfortunately my father died when I was 9 years old. It is personally heart warming to see a father take an interest in and nurture the creative interests of their children. I can only imagine the benefit I might have received had that relationship not been cut off so early. Please see that your son is not discouraged by the goings on of this board. We listen to so many reads of amateur aspirants (that quite frankly can be pretty bad at times) that a studio engineer wouldn't give but a few seconds of ear time to. The amateur experience on this board varies from poor to quite excellent. I myself have made over 1400 comments since finding this site. All the comments have the intent of helping (however caustic they may sound). That's why many comments encourage acquiring a thick skin so to speak. Some comments are shooting from the hip and others just parroting what they have heard before. Never-the-less, their intent is to help. It's all a learning experience whether recording or critiquing. Out of it all if your son pays close attention he will find nuggets of truth that will advance him to higher levels of this craft. All the best and tell him not to be discouraged. We all actually want him to succeed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, firstly I want to clarify that I totally agree that interpreting and understanding the writer’s intent is crucial, hence my actionable advice regarding research and mining for clues in the copy. This is an extremely valid point (however I wasn’t so keen on the condescension - my perception - used to make it). Beyond this, I also felt there were learning opportunities to be had in valuing and critiquing Jeyden’s interpretation as the subject matter wasn’t inherently Jewish and I disagree that the humour was invalidated by a different delivery, there were just some fundamentals regarding humour that needed to be applied to the performance to make it work and as I said previously, I think Jeff proffered some particularly helpful direction. In my opinion, using the word “failure” in a critique is rather judgemental and not very beneficial or encouraging (more destructive than constructive), especially if the comment is not supported by actionable guidance on how the person can develop their skills. Very early on, I was given this piece of sage advice: “Don’t ASSUME anything as it makes an ASS out of U and ME” (meaning 'fool' just in case it doesn't translate well from English to American English!). Yes, this is an amateur forum (although professionals do contribute) and it is important to appreciate that not everyone shares the same background, culture, knowledge etc. and therefore what one person may feel is obvious, may not be to someone else, and therefore sometimes things do need to be “spelled out”. This is the perfect example as Jeyden is 17 and completely new to VO and acting (Richurd, I am sure your elaborated comments have proved very useful). I believe (and I am not alone!) that an essential part of constructive criticism is praise, and this is quite often lacking in the forum comments. On a general note, perhaps everyone could be a bit more appreciative of how vulnerable someone may feel when they post a recording on the forum (especially a newbie to VO) and make an effort to praise as well as criticize.
    “A director understands that to an actor praise is like food. The actor cannot live without it, cannot flourish without it. A director must discipline himself to praise ceaselessly…
    [Francis Ford Coppola]...never told the actors what not to do…He would tell them what he liked and encourage them to do “more”. He never told them they were doing something wrong….”
    A Sense of Direction, Some Observations on the Art of Directing. William Ball.

    Jeyden, as I said previously, I commend you on your bold choice, you made a decision and committed to it. Maybe it wasn’t the right choice for this particular copy, but a director will appreciate your willingness to take a risk. I am excited to hear your next read…Thank you for sharing. Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you both for being so interested in my first recording. I completely understand all of your critiques after stepping back and looking at what you were trying to say. I still don't know much about VO in general so some things were a little confusing but with the help of my mother i will definitely be able to figure out all the little technical mistakes. Look for more scripts from me in the future.
    -Jack

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    Luke Meets Yoda

    Script:

    Star Wars: Luke meets Yoda
    LUKE: Look, I'm sure it's delicious. I just don't understand why we can't see Yoda now.

    CREATURE: Patience! For the Jedi it is time to eat as well. Eat, eat. Hot. Good food, hm? Good, hmm?

    LUKE: How far away is Yoda? Will it take us long to get there?

    CREATURE: Not far. Yoda not far. Patience. Soon you will be with him. (tasting food from the pot) Rootleaf, I cook. Why wish you become Jedi? Hm?

    LUKE: Mostly because of my father, I guess.

    CREATURE: Ah, your father. Powerful Jedi was he, powerful Jedi, mmm.

    LUKE: (a little angry) Oh, come on. How could you know my father? You don't even know who I am. (fed up) Oh, I don't even know what I'm doing here. We're wasting our time.

    CREATURE: (irritated) I cannot teach him. The boy has no patience.

    BEN'S VOICE: He will learn patience.

    YODA: Hmmm. Much anger in him, like his father.

    BEN'S VOICE: Was I any different when you taught me?

    YODA: Hah. He is not ready.

    LUKE: Yoda! I am ready. I...Ben! I can be a Jedi. Ben, tell him I'm ready!

    YODA: Ready, are you? What know you of ready? For eight hundred years have I trained Jedi. My own counsel will I keep on who is to be trained! A Jedi must have the deepest commitment, the most serious mind. (to the invisible Ben, indicating Luke) This one a long time have I watched. All his life has he looked away! To the future! To the horizon! Never his mind on where he was. Hmm? What he was doing. Hmph. Adventure. Heh! Excitement. Heh! A Jedi craves not these things. (turning to Luke) You are reckless!

    BEN'S VOICE: So was I, if you'll remember.

    YODA: He is too old. Yes, too old to begin the training.

    LUKE: But I've learned so much.

    YODA: (sighs) Will he finished what he begins?

    LUKE: I won't fail you -- I'm not afraid.

    YODA: (turns slowly toward him) Oh, you will be. You will be.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear troywood765's recording

    I love doing character voices, Yoda is fun but challenging. I love Star Wars so I thought I would give this scene a try.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91712/script-recording-80789.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Not sure what kind of feedback you're looking for. It was a good effort. I can't do Yoda, so, you know, I'm impressed.

    But it could have flowed a little more smoothly, Luke's part specifically didn't always seem to have a conversational tone, maybe cuz of editing? Like "ready" was cut off as though Yoda was interrupting, but it wasn't edited together that way. Though you threw yourself into the acting and that's great.

    The character voices themselves faltered at times, not completely consistent, but nice job.

    What are you going for here?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-83107.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very surprising how versatile your voice is. I actually heard and commented on the full version of the first segment. It's bizarre to hear all the different characters that can come out of one mouth. I want to add that most of these sound very believable and good to me.

    0:42 I hear a (mouth?) click, you should remove that :)

    Is this your demo? I would say it is quite a lot to take in with all of those different accents shuffled up like that. Maybe if you are trying to sell them it would be good to have loose demo's for each accent?

    I'll just say what I got from this when listening for the first few times: you obviously really enjoy doing accents and you are good at them. Mainly the 'redneck' and 'new york / mafia' accents popped out out, so if I was a potential client looking for something like that I'd probably go for you. But I might not have really noticed the rest as much.

    I'm not very experienced in voice-over, so keep that in mind.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi seangray1,
    Thanks for taking the time to comment. Extremely helpful.

    touzet

    Peer Feedback:

    You know the advice of NOT using scripts from the Edge library, right? I love your characters, but you'll do best with different copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bean420,
    Thanks, and yes, I am aware of that recommendation.;-)
    I almost mentioned that in my earlier comment...and it was not at all unexpected to hear that from someone

    -touzet-

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    Modesty m'lady modesty

    Script:

    I actually had to reset my computer to factory settings, so I no longer have the script handy.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Labamba's recording

    This is a fan dub i made with a friend, and I don't often get the roles of this voice type or even do this voice type. I guess I'd really like some tips on softening my voice and pitching it higher. My friend's name is Phil ^.^ Here is a link to the clip so you can understand it a little better: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VQrpNCauSgs&feature=plcp

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    Peer Feedback:

    :)))))))))))))))))))))
    I watched the video, it makes a lot more sense than just listening to the recording!!!
    Great work!!!! Your voice is really really good for it, delivery too i enjoyed it.
    Good job both of you
    regards
    balazs

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    Monkey Business

    Script:

    Still transcribing the script,, I'll add it soon

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear knm_voice@yahoo.com's recording

    First time I've come up with my own script,, I'll get it transcribed and uploaded soon,, but for now here is a try at it

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2697/script-recording-28594.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    If you wrote this, not only are you an outstanding VO, but a great, creative writer as well!

    This held my attention, with the characters, the dialogue, and everything! Since you're into characterization, I would suggest doing some more of your own material.

    That was amazing! Also the line, "Monkeys gone wild", that was a classic! LOL!!!

    All the best! LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    May I chime in as well, loved the script very creative. Had me laughing all the way through. The voice characterizations seemed to give a great visual. Write some more!
    Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Glad you guuys like the script. I was concerned it would to off the wall.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi! Sorry for the delay! This was very entertaining and imaginative. I agree with lcw115 that you are a great creative writer. This is a wonderful skill to have, as you can offer copy writing skills to potential clients.

    I also thought you did a great job differentiating the voices as well as editing them so they felt like a real dialogue. Cute premise, fun script, great performances, and good production quality.

    My only critique would be that the music you chose sounds more like "Nightly News" as opposed to "Masterpiece Theater". I also thought there were a few edits in the Monkey's story that could have flowed more conversationally: the transitions between "but anyway" to "I'm representing the flying monkeys"; "that lion couldn't walk for a month" to "but it's not like a monkey to just sit around..." It would be nice to have some audience reaction in those parts since he's saying some funny stuff, and that would help break up the story nicely.

    However, overall, really nice work!

    Best,
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach March 14, 2012 at 1:23PM
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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This looked like fun. Did a couple of practice runs. One take, straight through. A little processing and lessened the breath sounds, but otherwise the once-through is pretty much intact, warts and all.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-89012.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    "you have such a nice voice"

    no, seriously, very well done. This script really needs, IMO, a seasoned actor to deliver it. It's difficult. And with the mid-atlantic accent - magnifique!
    Add some dark comic soundscape (I'm thinking Sweeny Todd) and you could get some nice snippets for a demo out of that. (Danny Krempa could knock that out of the park for you - and he works for Cana-dollars! :-).

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job! Great timing with the breaths and very smooth, clean breaths, too. I can appreciate that now. Actually, your breaths are SO consistent, that it almost sounds like you just dubbed the same one into each break, which made me wonder if that's a thing, like pasting in clean room tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave,

    I was thinking more a waltz tempo - 1,2,3, 1,2,3. And I had a piece of music in mind. But the thing with this piece is that it's only 7 stanzas and didn't fit into a standard 8-bar musical phrase. Just couldn't make it work. Although Sondheim's oddly metered and phrase tunes might have worked. And I LOVE Sweeny Todd. I would kill (literally) to play the Demon Barbour of Fleet Street.

    Waltonia,

    Nope. No dubbing. Like I stated above - one take straight through, included breaths. I'm a classically trained singer, so my breathing habits are relatively consistent and sound (and, in the wave form, look) very similar - although they tend to be pretty loud. So I isolate them and knock them down 18dB - which is my practice with my audiobook production. I've tried various de-breather plugins and have had only marginal success. My method, while very tedious and time consuming, has become tried and true for me. I can usually see the breaths in the wave form, so I listen to other audiobook narrators while I mindlessly (visually) cut, snip and knock down the levels of my breaths using my mouse with my right hand and my ShuttlePRO2 with my left. It has become so second nature that I rarely have to look at my hands. If I've missed one it sticks out like a gust of wind when I proof listen later and I'll take care of the bugger then.

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    Nuts -- The Fun Food

    Script:

    Nuts -- the fun food. Now that nut prices are down, buy them in quantity. And turn your home into a real nut house. NUTS -- the fun food
    grunt, ahem, sneeze, jolly giggles (a small jiggle, a medium jiggle and a big old grand jolly giggle), and a silly yippee

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Martin's recording

    Whew barely made the deadline, Edge website down 8pst for 30min. so had to hurry the read to get in by 9pst. Only my second submission to the contest, hardly expect to place but I love the idea of weekly practice for a a possible training session. Doing the peer submissions is great also, thanks all for your feedback. Maybe that tax refund can go to some professional training I hope. Nothing like a "later in life" job re-direction attempt, 'specially one that can be done from home with travel just so darn expensive here in San Diego. Not the best ad for tourism, highest national gas prices (except Hawaii I'll bet) Good Luck All with your submissions, the varieties of contest reads are amazing. Mike

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7863/script-recording-28167.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Continue practicing Mike. Do not let anyone discourage you and looking forward to your next script.

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mike,, understand the last minute rush, been there done that.

    I think your recording quality was hiding some of your vocal delivery. You might try, getting closer to the mic, treating the area, and or upgrading your equipment. What are you useing at this point?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the kinds words LCW & KNM. Having way too much fun with Edge here to stop doing these reads and hearing your encouragement only fuels the passion. (wish it would fuel my car tho....), paid $4.23 for regular this AM at the "known cheap station"

    As for my read quality I was so disapointed to learn "after" I posted to the contest the volume level was way too low. In my haste at 10 minutes to deadline I only reviewed through the headphones. Next time will establish a volume mark level to use before turning it into the .mp3, me culpa.

    I'm using a homebuilt voice box, four sided open ended styrofoam with egg crates inside. Suprprizingly this was before I'd even seen the portable voicebox on the market, but mines larger. Then have been testing with the gain control on my Blue Microphones Yehi brand, using the cardiod setting. If it doesn't come out right then using Audacity to adjust volume, speed, dead air, timing, and some others.

    Only been serious about persuing this since Oct. 2011 when I first started looking at microphones. So Newbee is my middle name.

    Thanks again, Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Mike,

    I can relate to sound recording issues, as I'm having a lot of them lately! As I have to actually buy a microphone, but I'm not sure about if some of my recording issues are related to an internal problem with my mini-laptop computer or a possible glitch with the Audacity software I'm using; therefore I'm waiting to see what the problem is. So, to make my reads sound better, I use music beds with my scripts to camouflage some of the minor sound distortion.

    You've got a nice friendly voice and just continue practicing and try KNM suggestions.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Do you mean a Yeti by Blue? I have a Yeti Pro, or Yeti? If you have a Yeti pro,, you can do either USB, or anaog . you'll need a interface to do analog,, but its great. I use a Alesis interface into my Ipad2. Then I also use audacity... When you say, Styrofoam... are you talking ridge foam? Typicaly you want more of a softer foam,, something that absorbs the sound,, not bouces it back. Also,, placement in those boxes mean alot. You maybe placing your mic, to deeo in the box,, and you are to far from the mic. This would account for the take sounding a little like its down a tube.

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    Our Haunted House

    Script:

    A warm welcome to Our Haunted House.
    This is no place for a meek little mouse.
    It's a very special home for screams of fright.
    On a wicked dark and stormy night.
    Would you all be so afraid to come?
    Because if you're here, you'll have so much fun.
    Besides, what else is there to do?
    For you know we'll all enjoy scaring you.
    If you like ghosts, vampires and green faced witches.
    Werewolves, zombies and monsters with stitches.
    Surely this won't be a walk at the zoo.
    But, this just might be the place for you.
    Our house is not just open on Halloween.
    But we're here most days and nights in between.
    365 Main Street, in North Brudenhoff.
    Just to make it inviting we'll leave the lights off. (Evil Laugh)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Oops, 5th line from the bottom, the word "place" should in fact be "house".

    Peer Feedback:

    Was this supposed to be one character all the way through? It sounded more like three; or a schizo one...jumping around the throat and with different characteristics (really gravely, a little marbled speech, and then a mix of those two in the middle) which works for this piece of copy, but not all. So if you were going for one character, you might want to focus on just what the characteristics of his voice are and make sure they get incorporated in there each time (Pat Fraley has an excellent free snippet on characterization, if you haven't checked it out yet) If you were going for three different, then you might want to work on your contrast.

    I thought you dropped it a bit at the end (lights off) rushing to the laugh, but I just listened instead of reading along, and I thought it was a little singy and read-y, but the copy is kind of a trap for that.

    you definitely picked a challenging one! Almost there :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks bean420, I actually wanted the "character" to sound a little "schizo" as you say, or kinda demented, unstable (creepy). BUT your point is well taken. To keep the voice of the character more consistent may work better. And yes the last line was "rushed" to make him sound even more creepy. But again, a more uniform ending may work better.
    Good points, thanks for listening. (That character's voice was demanding on my voice, no SFX there- ouch, wouldn't do that voice for a long narration. Still fun however, I love doing characters and I will check out Pat Fraley. Great advice.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear micahtouchet's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Being an Australian I found that the character was cliched to the style of business that can work if it is not takne too seriously.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear maurice8th's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Maurice: The recording is over modulated throughout, which means your peaking in amplitude as you are too close to the mic. I didn't hear the original, so I don't get the joke. Try it again a little softer and with variation to build interest. Larry

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    ScrewTape Letters Ending Monologue

    Script:

    Oh, my dear, my very dear Wormwood. How mistakenly, now that all is lost, you come to me to ask whether the terms of affection on which I addressed you meant nothing from the start. Far from it. Rest assured my love for you and your love for me are like as two peas. I have always desired you, as you, you pitiful fool desired me. The difference is that I am the stronger. I think they will give you to me now, or a bit of you. Love you? Why yes, as dainty a morsel as ever I grew fat on.

    CS Lewis

    A character monologue adapted from The Screw Tape Letters.

    73 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ClaireC88's recording

    I just finished working on my home studio. How does the quality of recording sound? Comments on the quality of performance are also welcome, thanks so much for taking the time to listen. This is my first time using this feedback forum so I really appreciate it.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Claire. Thanks for your kind comments on my post. As fo your recording,, it sounds crisp and clear although the levels were a bit low. I don't think you approached the material in the right spirit although your beautiful tone does seem out of place with the rather sinister cynical and humorous subject. Listen to Andy Serkis read an excerpt from C.S. Lewis' book here, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FLfYd2nd5NI. Best.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    The Pedigree Adoption Drive

    I know how to sit, how to fetch and how to roll over. What I don't know is how I ended up in here. But I know that I am a good dog and I just want to go home. When you buy Pedigree we make a donation to help shelter dogs find loving homes. The Pedigree Adoption Drive - help us help dogs.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Do I sound like a Dog or an idiot? Woof Woof

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    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you did a great job, the dog character voice sounds credible (at least that's what I would think--although I am lover of dogs, I haven't heard one talk before lol). The only mishap that I could see was "ended up here", instead of "ended up in here".

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave,

    I enjoyed this, especially the characterization for the dog's voice and how you continued the delivery with your natural voice. Besides "ended up here" instead of "ended up in here", which was minor, I think you did a good job. Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. Good dog character, nice contrast to the PSA portion. Does not sound like an idiot, maybe an Appalachian mountain dog

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. I guess it would have sounded better if I didn't misread the line, "ended up IN here". I better start wearing my reading glasses. I enjoyed doing this one, I've owned dogs all my life.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dog.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Script:

    Movie Script - Jaws

    Scene: Capt. Quint is below deck of his fishing boat talking with the other men about sharks:

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    Capt. Quint (Robert Shaw):

    You know the thing about a shark, he's got lifeless eyes. Black eyes like a doll's eyes. When he comes at ya, he doesn't seem to be living until he bites ya and those black eyes roll over and white and then, ah, then you hear that terrible high-pitch screaming. The ocean turns red and despite all the pounding and hollering, they all come in and they rip you to pieces.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Trying to follow Jonathan's advice and inject some more emotion into this script. I changed the back round music hoping it will sound a little more dramatic. I would love to hear this script done by a professional, one of the greatest movie scenes of all time. Any advice or insight would be greatly appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Dave. Can't help thinking about Robert Shaw's excellent characterisation in the movie as a reference point for this read. Don't mean the accent but the pacing and interpretation. I think yours was a bit over the top for me. Perhaps a more natural less dramatic read with variety of pitch might do the trick. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Arlen, I received some feedback that I was holding back a bit, so I tried to make it sound more dramatic. I agree with you, it sounds too unnatural. I think I'll drop the pirate voice and move on. Peace, Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    OK Dave, I actually liked the tone and timber of your voice but Arlen's right it's overcooked. It appears to me that you're concentrating too much on the voice and not on acting. Play with the characters voice so that it's cadence flows naturally from your mouth. Once you have that down put yourself into the character. He's zoned out in his inebriated memory. talking more to himself than the others. That's what's missing here.

    Peer Feedback:

    Richurd is right on. The character should sound less like a steak sauce commercial and more like a guy who's mesmerized by sharks, like he went crazy but is back to some semblance of sanity. Smile during this read and talk to a skeptical man as if he doesn't know the real risk. You've seen it all, he hasn't.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great, thanks all, I was getting kind of lost with this one, now I have some good direction to follow.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mr. Dave,
    I loved this one too, you are a good actor with all of your different tones! My 13 year old son loved it to. The music was great too!!

    Blessings and Best of Luck to you,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks again Carol, you know, you use your natural voice all your life, it's so much fun to mix it up and mimic others or to come up with your very own character. I was a HUGE fan of Rich Little when I was a kid and when my parents invited friends over I always had to have a new skit ready of impersonations. Those were fun time, Good Luck Voice On!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    This movie still makes me laugh, I love this scene thought I'd give it a whirl. I screwed something during production, didn't get the sound quality I was looking for.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I couldn't detect any recording miscues.

    The copy interpretation was good. I think that the pacing and inflection is a bit "Drawly"
    (Reminds me too much of a cartoon parody. Which, if that was the intention, worked).
    The "kid" was good and had good inflections.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it .... that was fun!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, this was awesome! It was really funny. What made it enjoyable was your fine acting, and the sound effects. Great, great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys, I had fun doing this one.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    MOVIE SCRIPT - A Few Good Men (Jack Nicholson)

    Scene: Jack Nicholson's character on trial being questioned by Tom Cruise's character.

    Jack Nicholson:

    You can't handle the truth! Son, we live in a world that has walls, and those walls have to be guarded by men with guns. Who's gonna do it? You? You, lieutenant Weinberg? I have a greater responsibility than you can possibly fathom. You weep for Santiago, and you curse the Marines. You have that luxury. You have the luxury of not knowing what I know - that Santiago's death, while tragic, probably saved lives; and my existence, while grotesque and incomprehensible to you, saves lives.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    I had fun with this one, It's hard not to spit all over your pop filter with this script. Coach's orders, working on character voices.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/A Few Good Men.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    My reaction is that there is a strong emotion coming into play which is nicely done, but I would like to hear a change up in some way to provide more interest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks erapp, I agree, I think I have a few ideas that may work out. I'll give it another shot when I have some time.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Movie Script - Jaws

    Scene: Capt. Quint is below deck of his fishing boat talking with the other men about sharks:

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    Capt. Quint (Robert Shaw):

    You know the thing about a shark, he's got lifeless eyes. Black eyes like a doll's eyes. When he comes at ya, he doesn't seem to be living until he bites ya and those black eyes roll over and white and then, ah, then you hear that terrible high-pitch screaming. The ocean turns red and despite all the pounding and hollering, they all come in and they rip you to pieces.

    21 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    I'm trying to come up with some Character voices that would be marketable. Please let me know if I should toss this one in the crapper or keep working on it. I made some adjustments with my mic levels, good? adequate?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jaws The Indianapolis Speech.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave! Love the copy. I think there's potential here... but it feels to me like you're holding back a bit - I think if you really picture the imagery in your head, we'd hear the emotion of this character (someone I feel has been at sea probably longer than is good for him).

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Abbott and Costello - Who's On First

    Abbott: Strange as it may seem, they give ball players nowadays very peculiar names.

    Costello: Funny names?

    Abbott: Nicknames, nicknames. Now, on the St. Louis team we have Who's on first, What's on second, I Don't Know is on third--

    Costello: That's what I want to find out. I want you to tell me the names of the fellows on the St. Louis team.

    Abbott: I'm telling you. Who's on first, What's on second, I Don't Know is on third--

    Costello: You know the fellows' names?

    Abbott: Yes.

    Costello: Well, then who's playing first?

    Abbott: Yes.

    Costello: I mean the fellow's name on first base.

    Abbott: Who.

    Costello: The fellow playin' first base.

    Abbott: Who.

    Costello: The guy on first base.

    Abbott: Who is on first.

    Costello: Well, what are you askin' me for?

    Abbott: I'm not asking you--I'm telling you. Who is on first.

    Costello: I'm asking you--who's on first?

    Abbott: That's the man's name.

    Costello: That's who's name?

    Abbott: Yes.

    ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

    Costello: When you pay off the first baseman every month, who gets the money?

    Abbott: Every dollar of it. And why not, the man's entitled to it.

    Costello: Who is?

    Abbott: Yes.

    Costello: So who gets it?

    Abbott: Why shouldn't he? Sometimes his wife comes down and collects it.

    Costello: Who's wife?

    Abbott: Yes. After all, the man earns it.

    Costello: Who does?

    Abbott: Absolutely.

    Costello: Well, all I'm trying to find out is what's the guy's name on first base?

    Abbott: Oh, no, no. What is on second base.

    Costello: I'm not asking you who's on second.

    Abbott: Who's on first!

    ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

    Costello: St. Louis has a good outfield?

    Abbott: Oh, absolutely.

    Costello: The left fielder's name?

    Abbott: Why.

    Costello: I don't know, I just thought I'd ask.

    Abbott: Well, I just thought I'd tell you.

    Costello: Then tell me who's playing left field?

    Abbott: Who's playing first.

    Costello: Stay out of the infield! The left fielder's name?

    Abbott: Why.

    Costello: Because.

    Abbott: Oh, he's center field.

    Costello: Wait a minute. You got a pitcher on this team?

    Abbott: Wouldn't this be a fine team w i t h o u t a pitcher?

    Costello: Tell me the pitcher's name.

    Abbott: Tomorrow.

    ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

    Costello: Now, when the guy at bat bunts the ball--me being a good catcher--I want to throw the guy out at first base, so I pick up the ball and throw it to who?

    Abbott: Now, that's he first thing you've said right.

    Costello: I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT I'M TALKING ABOUT!

    Abbott: Don't get excited. Take it easy.

    Costello: I throw the ball to first base, whoever it is grabs the ball, so the guy runs to second. Who picks up the ball and throws it to what. What throws it to I don't know. I don't know throws it back to tomorrow--a triple play.

    Abbott: Yeah, it could be.

    Costello: Another guy gets up and it's a long ball to center.

    Abbott: Because.

    Costello: Why? I don't know. And I don't care.

    Abbott: What was that?

    Costello: I said, I DON'T CARE!

    Abbott: Oh, that's our shortstop!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Any baseball fans? Bar none, the greatest 2 man comedy skit of all time. It took Abbott & Costello years of practice and live performances to perfect it. Like Classic Rock & Roll, timeless. Check out an original on YOUTUBE http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wfmvkO5x6Ng Well, I did my best, don't hurt me too bad. But I can take it, I had a blast.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Who's On First!.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great, great job! I certainly would have thought that it was two people talking. The only thing I could see is that in "throws it back to tomorrow," "back" was omitted.

    Peer Feedback:

    It appears you might not have gotten the introductory memo from Edge about Forum usage. Most of us have gotten it very quickly after joining the forum. Generally, the rule of use is "post one and critique two" so that others get commentary on their work and it keeps the forum lively. Another rule of etiquette is to limit your posts to no more than two a day. The reason for this being that as you post more and more, older posts get pushed further down the list and out of the range of some who don't want to scroll too far. And once they're off the first load of scripts (that is without pushing 'show more' at the bottom) the reads are almost always forgotten. So if someone were to tell you you're pushing others off the screen, that's what they mean.

    Enthusiasm is one thing, but for the sake of everyone getting a chance for commentary, restraint and participation is another. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't realize that was the situation and I do apologize. I didn't receive a memo or any sort of rules or guidelines. I have listened to quite a few of recordings and have scrolled back several pages, However I'm no expert, and some recordings I simply don't know how to critique them. I don't want to offend anyone and I'd like to keep any feedback or criticism friendly and constructive. Thanks for informing me, it certainly makes a lot of sense.

    Peer Feedback:

    No offense was taken, but, like I said it appeared that Edge must be pretty busy dealing with the aftermath of the storm or something. A lot of us got that memo the same day we signed up. No harm or foul.

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    I always appreciate your comments youknowino.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yup Dave .... "flooding" is frowned upon usually in any forum as a general courtesy. It is exciting when first joining, to post as much as you can and to get feedback quickly, and we've seen this before, in fact there are others that abuse this as well. Edge may have forgotten to re-enable that automated script when they changed the site over to another script language (Drupal). Thanks for acknowledging!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well Dave now that you've be properly initiated into the forum I will forgo any further lambasting. So I will turn my attention to the read. It's not an easy read and there were a couple of spots I thought you might have missed the right inflection but other than that, excellent comedic timing. Your editing was stong which many times is more important than the actual delivery. Overall, two thumbs up. Now get back in line and wait your turn.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Richurd, I do see obvious infliction errors. It was difficult to concentrate on this one. I kept picturing Costello's comedic mannerisms while recording and I was cracking up laughing. I'll keep working to perfect this one.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lukky Salas's recording

    I've ordered a new mike, which I hope will improve recording quality. My first concern today is performance. The script is for men but I'm trying it anyway. Let me know what you think.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi

    Yours is the first I heard and dared to critique. We are of the same generation, and I liked the way you were able to convey sadness, depression, some anger in this short narrative. I do not know what the "old mike" sounded like - this was good!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that was a complete downer, so good job and pass the tissues. Very natural and real sounding. Genuine. I hear what you mean about your mic. You must be excited for the new one. Nice work. Are you thinking of narrating audiobooks?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Tonia!
    Nothing like a positive comment for a downer!

    I'd love to get into audiobooks - some cheerier ones.

    Lukky

    Peer Feedback:

    "...and the crowd went wild!!!!!" Lucky Salas, this did NOT sound much like a read, but your real, heartfelt story. Your interpretation of the script comes across as that of a true storyteller. I think there's an audiobook just waiting for you. delivery was clear, pacing and emotion were where they needed to be, and inflection was spot on. Even though you did not change 'ladies' to 'men' for this script, it didn't matter. Upgrade that mic, and you're "the bees knees." lol.

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    Script submitted by Mellonee

    Script:

    Coyote In New York
    This is a true story. See, that's a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don't worry, I wasn't dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream - to go where no coyote had gone before...New York City!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mellonee's recording

    Giving this another try. Wanted to keep the rasp and maintain the voice throughout. Hear any improvement ladies and gents? Did not work on tempo or emotion this time. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Coyote In NY 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Mellonee,

    I guess you were being an old coyote looking back at an adventure taken a long time ago.

    The exclamation marks are in contrast to how you read the piece. If I'd been shot, I'd probably not gone into a relaxed state to talk about the long sleep or going where no coyote had gone before. I'd still be annoyed that I didn't get what I wanted.
    That would have been my approach. I'm not saying that your read was wrong as I have no idea what the original recording sounded like or what it was for.

    There seemed to be some low frequency humming behind your words when I listened through my headphone monitors. Great delivery in terms of voice quality.

    If you intended to portray an old coyote, very good. I did believe you were looking at the picture.

    All the best,

    Lee.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lee.

    As a matter of fact I was thinking of an older coyote. Glad that worked!

    If you can access the original read (I tried to earlier and couldn't find it), there were comments on how my voice changed with the emotions, inflections, tempo changes, etc. I was trying to practice keeping the voice of the character consistent.

    Thanks for listening and for your comments.

    Mellonee

    Peer Feedback:

    I went back and played the other one a couple of times and listened to this one again. Here's my 2c. It doesn't much matter if the coyote is young or old or what character you choose for it, in the end this is really a story about the Bronx Zoo and the many animals you can see in a place that's part of the largest City in the world! The script demands a sense of wonder (with all of the exclaimation points)! I believe that it is more geared toward kids than adults. But adults enjoy the zoo too. It's a delicate balance in how to cater to both age groups simultaneously.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James.

    I agree with your comments whole-heartedly. I was just practicing keeping a certain voice on this recording. Sometimes when I really get into the whole story, emotions, tempo and all, I can sometimes lose the character's voice in a couple of sentences. I'll keep playing with it.

    Thanks so much!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the voice you chose for the coyote. He (she?) is a tough, old coot who seems to be living the sweet life in the Bronx Zoo and isn't quite sure how it happened. Your voice conveyed that very well.

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    Script submitted by mtaebel

    Script:

    I love the movies, that's why I have Encore. They're rolling 24/7. So many themed channels, there is always something to match my mood. From those late night flicks to the action packed thrillers, there is always something for everyone. Love your movies, love Encore.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mtaebel's recording

    Hello everyone, new mic and new to voice-overs. Please share your thoughts.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You reversed "action packed thrillers" with "late night flicks". However, since you didn't give any indication of whether you're doing a character type delivery or not I'll just put it out: are you DOING a NY accent or is that your natural delivery? If it's something you're trying and not your natural sound, it could use more animation. More personality. If that's your natural delivery, you'll want to learn to eliminate the regionalism. Nice first submission.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the "character" voice here. At least I envisioned one with what I heard.

    Noticed you inverted the text a bit from " From those late night flicks to the action packed thrillers, there is always something for everyone." TO "From those action packed thrillers to those late night flicks there's always something for everyone".

    I picture the commercial character turning from his TV smoking a cigar and wearing a wife beater shirt. Just poured a cold one. Sits back on couch with cat jumping off pillows. Sirens, blue and red lights flashing in window from action 20 stories below.

    Playing it safe again tonight and staying in with Encore. He said "Love your movies, love Encore"....

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok RTX like the scene you just created.
    Vocal performance - I think this is you natural voice and it sounds good to me. With more practice and the right script your voice style will sound even better. Liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I just listened to it again. Can't get enough of this one. LOL! "Love your movies, love Encore".... Totally stands apart no matter what others grade it. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for your comments everyone, RTX. Learning some software now, should have some more stuff up soon...

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Tom about the regionalism, not sure what you were going for though. I'm hearing some serious vocal reflection, sounds like the room setup. If it's in fact edited in, dial it back. Good read though, your "slightly bored" thing works with this copy I think.

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    Script submitted by nickterryvo

    Script:

    (Disneyland Announcer) "Ladies and Gentleman, boys and girls, this is an important message for Jasen."

    (Mickey Mouse) "Hi-ya, Jasen, it's me, your old pal, Mickey, and me and my pals hope to see you down here in Disneyland real soon. Take care."

    (Mad Hatter) "That's fine, Mickey, but I need Jasen to come down here to my tea party and help me find my pocket watch. Then when we do that, we'll have a very, very un-birthday for YOU Jasen. Get down here to Disneyland but take care of yourself too. We don't want you missin' all the fun."

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear nickterryvo's recording

    I recorded this on the fly for a young boy who is battling a rare eye cancer; while in LA for treatments, his family had hoped to raise money so they could take him to Disneyland for a few days. Once I heard he was going, I put this together quickly. I received word that it made his day and the look on his face was priceless. I've always said my MM is rusty, but others tell me its better then the latest one out there...who knows. I just had fun with this and would love feed back. I recorded simultaneously without stops. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is really fun....loved the voices!!!...nicely produced!

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    REEEAAAALLLLLY nice!

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    Excellent work, and I really appreciated hearing the voice of one of my all time favorite actors, Ed Wynn. I have three who's sheer personality stand as an example worthy of emulating. Ed Wynn, Red Skelton, and Louis Armstrong.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wonderfully fun work! There are some great voice talent and mix masters on this site and you are definitely one of them.

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    Love this!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Coach_AVE's recording

    This is a character and accent that I am playing with and I think it comes across in this script. I wish I had the text, but I could not find the script this evening.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/10 Slient Dragon (Russian Accent, fl.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I couldn't decide if your going for a Japanese or Russian character, i'm also missing emotion from the words. If you want to find a script you can locate them by going to script library then on the left you have a search scripts button.
    Just type in the script you looking for it should come up.
    Keep up the good work
    regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    You certainly sound comfortable at the mic, Coach, and as a follow-up to your previous recording, this shows some of your range. Nice job. I'd agree with Balazs that you are holding back a little. Cool accent though.

    Peer Feedback:

    I felt the recording had good quality.

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely sounds Russian, though the context seems like it would be Japanese. But if you are going for Russian, it's good. As for the read, there is a disconnect between phrases that serves to separate the lines from each other, rather than making it a monologue. As a story-telling device in a video game, this is less likely to have such pauses. It makes the read a bit disjunct. I recommend giving it a try in a through-composed way, like someone in a conversation would do when they are talking AT someone, not when they are in a dialogue with them. The overall arc of the monologue needs a peak and valley setup. Right now each line seems to be delivered in its own world, not all together. There is a music to monologues like this, crescendos and decrescendos, that help the drama of the delivery. Think of this less in bursts, and more in longer arcs, and see what a difference it might make in your delivery overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for the really great comments.

    Mike. I will definitely take the direction points you gave into my next recording.

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    Sunday Morning Sex

    Script:

    Sunday Morning Sex

    Upon hearing that her elderly grandfather had just passed away, Katie went straight to her grandparent's house to visit her 95 year-old grandmother and comfort her. When she asked how her grandfather had died, her grandmother replied, "He had a heart attack while we were making love on Sunday morning." Horrified, Katie told her grandmother that 2 people nearly 100 years old having sex would surely be asking for trouble. "Oh no, my dear," replied granny. "Many years ago, realizing our advanced age, we figured out the best time to do it was when the church bells would start to ring. It was just the right rhythm. Nice and slow and even. Nothing too strenuous, simply in on the Ding and out on the Dong." She paused to wipe away a tear, and continued, "He'd still be alive if the ice cream truck hadn't come along."

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LVINO's recording

    I know this is not the usual but I wanted to spice things up and at the same time test out my granny voice.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-103240/script-recording-83501.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You sound like you have an older voice, but your impression of the grandmother is not very good and should be maintained at your normal voice, unless you are able to perfect the voice of a 95 year old woman. I was very distracted by the sound in the room and the echo. Smooth out your read and don't hit words hard as it takes away from the listeners ability to follow the story.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds like you're condescendingly talking to a child instead of telling a story - a joke, really.

    How old is the person telling the joke? If you're assuming that a generation is somewhere in the area of 25-30 years, then the grandson or granddaughter of a 95 year old woman would be a mature adult. Now, whether that adult is sympathetic, embarrassed or repulsed at the idea of a nearly century old couple engaging in sexual activity would be part of the charm of the joke (that's the narrator's attitude).

    Who are you telling the joke to? A child? Would a child appreciate or understand the joke? A good friend around same age of the narrator and/or grandchild? Would that be more conspiratorial? Would the friend have the same attitude as the narrator? (see above) Or someone who just appreciates a "blue" story? You need to pick a single specific person to relate the joke to. (Rule of comedy: Know your audience.)

    The dialogue: Characters. Are there two or three? (Narrator, granddaughter, grandmother - or is the narrator and granddaughter the same person?) Do you create fully formed characters or not? If so, each character also has to have their own life and POV. is the narrator a neutral observer? Is the granddaughter shocked? Amused? Repulsed? Sympathetic? Is the grandmother an oversexed Nympho? Innocently demure? Resigned to her husband's fate because he's a stupid old man who can't tell the difference between the sound and rhythm church bells and the bells on an ice cream truck?

    In an audition for a musical once, after I sang I was given no script but asked to merely tell my favorite joke. The auditioners was basically trying to find out how well I told a story. No, I didn't get the job. And I knew I wasn't going to get the job from the way they reacted to my song selection. So, I told the blue-est, dirtiest joke I knew just for the shock value. They were shocked, I left the room with a smile on my face.

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    THE DARK CRYSTAL

    Script:

    Another world. Another time. In the age of wonder. A thousand years ago this land was green and good. Until the crystal cracked. A single piece was lost. A shard of the crystal. Then strife began. And two new races appeared. The cruel Skeksis. The gentle mystics. Here in the castle of the crystal, the Skeksis took control. Now the Skeksis gather in the sacred chamber where the crystal hangs above a shaft of air and fire. The Skeksis with their hard and twisted bodies, their harsh and twisted wills. For a thousand years they have ruled. Yet now there are only ten. A dying race ruled by a dying emperor imprisoned within themselves in a dying land. Today once more they gather at the crystal as the first sun climbs to its peak. For this is the way of the Skeksis. As they ravaged the land, so to they learned to draw new life from the sun. Today once more they will replenish themselves. Cheat death again. Through the power of their source, their treasure, their fate, the dark crystal.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mackmediaproductions's recording

    Trying my character voices

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10177/script-recording-63777.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know if I've been in the game long enough to have an ear to give any critique of your recording. It sounded awesome to me. The voice over timing matched the music very well.

    Peer Feedback:

    This was well done, nice pace, good music, clear sounding. Good Job.

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    The Stupid Economy

    Script:

    I work for a full service investment banking and securities firm. THE full-service investment banking and securities firm. We are engaged in investment management, provide mergers and acquisitions advise, asset management, underwriting services, and prime brokerage services to our clients, which include individuals, corporations, and governments.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chrissy Hogue's recording

    New Mic, New Mac! How does it sound? What do I need? Is the vo good? These are the opening lines to my one-woman show so taking them from the live stage to four fingers in front of a mic was quite the experience! Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/TSE VO Peer.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy - your voice is very pleasant to listen to, but I really feel that your tone for this read would be more effective if it was more energetic and corporate sounding. Something relatable, yet make me feel like my finances are good in your hands. The tone you're using would sound much more appropriate in perhaps a cosmetic or luxury spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    To expand on MHeyden's comments. The copy demands a firm, competitive and confident attitude. Soft and sexy, although appealing in your voice, doesn't cut it for this particular material. More testosterone is needed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Chrissy.What struck me at first about your read is the monotony of your tone Perhaps a little more energy and enthusiasm are needed to convince me. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! I have to agree about everyone's comments about energy and enthusiasm. I feel like when advertising a corporation, the voice needs to be confident. Seemed over-dramatic. Your style voice is more suited to something sultry and sexy. Maybe try the Caress script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, I wasn't sure if you were having fun playing around with an unexpected tone for the read or not at first because you sounded a little quiet. Even though you're four inches from the mic, you might pretend the person to whom you're talking is still a couple feet away. I thought the tone from the mic was nice but I heard a little hissing in the background. Maybe the mic/preamp gain is too low and the interface's too high to achieve your volume? (Although I have to admit, I'm really out of my depth with these equipment controls, still.)

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    The Truth About Fairies

    Script:

    Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you're in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sparkling wings, and glowing smiles - it's all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil, we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much, much darker than we.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DAn Rivera's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-79249/script-recording-74897.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't really agree with the NY-ish delivery...but what I really disagree with are the multiple mis-reads in the script. "Not as friendly as ONCE thought." "That is WHAT you have to be careful of"... I stopped there...there could be more.

    Gotta get the script right, no matter what style you choose to use.

    Peer Feedback:

    I concur w/TxTom on the accent; it's not what one expects with a fantasy-type script.

    And as TxTom alluded to, you either took too much liberty ad-libbing or you just misread the script in several places. For example, you read "once" as "one"; "pick" as "prick"; "when" as "but then"; "that is what" as "that is when"; "their glittery skin" as "the glittery skin"; "their sparkling wings" as "their sparkly wings"; and "and glowing smiles" as "and their glowing smiles", among many others. All of these misreads/ad-libs were so distracting that it was difficult to pay attention to anything else. Be more careful next time. We all make similar mistakes at times. Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    The accent is fine for me. It is a character read and the character was good.

    Regarding the changes you made to the script: you should not change the script in a way that makes it grammatically incorrect or changes the meaning entirely because that just become a mistake, not an adlib.

    Peer Feedback:

    I gotta say! yes the script should be followed, but I thought it was so smooth and fun and believable and silly. I was not distracted by any incongruous inflections, any unnatural pauses, or weird pacing. CONGRATS! From a purely listener's point of view who doesn't know from a hill of beans what the script says, it was fantastic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Didn't mind the accent. A little unorthodox for this fairy tale, but it showed some creativity and thinking "out of the box". Actually imagined an off-beat New Yorker type ghoul, troll or fallen angel telling this cautionary tale rather than the cultured denizen of the underworld most people go for on this script.

    Did mind the slurring of words (getting lost in the accent) and not following the script. And an author would DEFINITELY mind if you mangled or mismanaged his or her words.

    As an actor, I was taught to honor the author's or playwright's words and grammar, no matter how awkward or incorrect it might seem to be to me - as there may be some method to the madness.

    On the other hand, it could simply be that it is just plain badly written, which this is not - just badly read and badly spoken. That may seem harsh, but it is my perception. Take it as you will. or not at all. Characters aren't just funny voices with off-beat accents. There has to be a certain sense of "reality" to them. They need to be inhabited and given life by the (voice) actor, otherwise they're just hollow and superficial and unbelievable. And "going against type" is great, as long as the previous criteria are met.

    One or possibly two mistakes might be tolerated for an audition (and easily corrected in-session), but not as many as there are here. Ad libbing is a valuable skill, but with a story as well written as this? Not so much.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Bullwinkle's recording

    I have been wrestling with my home set up (and performance) and am just starting to feel like I'm getting the hang of it, but I know I have a ways to go. Editing process is typically: noise removal, EQ, compression, normalize. I'd love any tips!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81964/script-recording-74967.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, I really liked the first read better, concerning your voice. It sounded very relaxed and natural. The second read flowed nicely, but the voice didn't fit. And, not hitting the key words in some spots makes the copy lose something, like the end -it's a big joke, but it doesn't come off that way. Really nice job though :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with bean420, the first read sounds more natural. I think I'm hearing just a little bit of reverb in the recording.

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    This week's contest.

    Script:

    Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jim Babbitt's recording

    I need some help. I'm trying to compete in this week's contest and I am torn as to which of these two endings are best or most appropriate. I am happy with each, but I can only submit one, as per the instructions. This is part 2 of the contest and the last portion of the recording. The instructions say :"Next read part-2 one time, using a positive, happy, enthusiastic emotion." I can do this but also want to feature my unique qualities. What to do?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6137/script-recording-33119.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the second take. The emotion on "Free" was especially on target. Careful though, the script says "American Tire Supply" and you say "All-American Tire Supply". Mistake like that could disqualify you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Whoa! You are right about the script! I need to fix that! It is amazing how the human mind can distort reads. Thanks for the input.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is tricky! Part #2 comes first, setting up the emotional reaction in Part#1.
    So it's like the straight man springing a shocker! I would rework this. Good voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Jim,

    If you are going to win this contest you need more smile in your voice. You don't really sound excited to me. A little more relaxed enthusiasm is what is needed, IMO.

    Liked the second read better of the two.

    Hope you do well.

    All the best,

    Scott

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    Transformers-Optimus Prime

    Script:

    With the Allspark gone, we cannot return life to our planet. And yet, fate has yielded it’s reward, a new world to call home. We live here now among its people, hiding in plain site but watching over them in secret... waiting... protecting.

    I have witnessed their capacity for courage, and though we are worlds apart,like us there’s more to them than meets the eye.

    I am Optimus Prime,and I send this message to any surviving autobots taking refuge among the stars: We are here. We are waiting.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TallRobert's recording

    Having some fun reworking an old character spot with Mr Optimus Prime... One of my favourite characters as a kid, so was very happy Peter Cullen was re-cast for the films, even if the films themselves are a little... off for me...LOL

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    Robert..... Nice job! The voice fits perfectly.Recording quality: great
    Performance Great...

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    pretty dang close.
    great job.

    DS.

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    Now THIS I should do as Kermit the Frog as a goof..:D

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    Wow! That was awesome! This recording really shows me to slow down when reading.

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    Transformers-Optimus Prime

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    With the Allspark gone,we cannot return life to our planet.And fate has yielded it’s reward,a new world to call home.We live among its people now,hiding in plain site but watching over them in secret... waiting...protecting.

    I have witnessed their capacity for courage,and though we are worlds apart,like us there’s more to them than meets the eye.I am Optimus Prime,and I send this message to any surviving Autobots taking refuge among the stars:We are here.We are waiting.

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    Another try at being Optimus Prime.

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    Not bad Robert, but I'm just not feeling the passion of Optimus Prime's character. I think this piece needs more of a theatrical, dramatic ambiance. Maybe it's the music bed choice. Good read, Voice On!

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    *Work in progress - Mostly looking for performance evaluation. I was splicing up some characters I wrote for fun/practice, and the file became short enough where I thought it wouldn't hurt to put it up here for some feedback. No effects were used except for a standard normalizing process. I know I still need to do a lot of editing in terms of getting rid of mouth pops, too much sibilance, plosives, and I need to adjust the volume in certain places... But I'm just wondering if you all think I could potentially make this into a demo with music -although producing your own demo isn't advised. :/

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    WOW. I feel like I'm drinking from a firehose! Don't know if these characters are your own creation or what, but very well done. A lot of variation there. As a lifetime cartoon addict, I heartily approve.

    Professional Feedback:

    Dear Ace~! This is a great compilation of your range and characters. Nice work. I'd parse it down to even shorter track. Made some comments on a few tracks by number 1-12
    1 - keep
    2 - hmm tweak the intro it sounded like you got into your older voice register after Tommy...and a few words - then keep
    3-Forest - keep
    4 - Kid -nope
    - Ftrip...Mrs. Frost Caterpillars -hard to understand segement of pupa? to larvae? to caterpillar (know the order) just a maybe on the voice
    5 - Claws - keep
    6 - Help me carry this box - great sound! Love the synchopation of her voice - but carry it through throughout - Ruff/roof - keep
    7. Keep --esp the quivers!
    8. -Troll - ooooohs and ahhhs - Keep! Fun
    9 - kid - trade 500 bidgones - toss - unless you stay in slightly higher register - you tend to drop a bit after your great kid voices (both 4 and 9) I'd toss or keep as B roll for later
    10. Best of the kid/animated voices - just remember to keep that great high pitch (it heard a raspy quality but wasn't sure it was same character throughout ) at first sounded like two - was it just one? if so keep up the very high pitch to 'anchor that brand of voice'
    11 the brevity of...-toss (your #2 was better)
    12. Woah woah - great ending and hipster sound - keep

    hope this helps - in some cases, less is more - you have great material - may not need to jam all of 'em into a demo - bit long :-) Most agents/CDs listen to about 10-15 secs these days!!

    p.s. thought I send feedback a waaaaaaays ago in May - consider this a 're-take' of my ear comments!;

    Keep voicing and all best!!
    Good work.

    Marjorie Kouns

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach July 25, 2016 at 6:42PM
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    Vita est Lavorum

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    Vita est Lavorum
    Whata we used to think was whena you die. The soul leavesa the body. Itsa kinda like a little bubble ina Seven Up. You know it justa goesa shootin’ upa there. And we usta think. There wasa different levels in heaven. Anda dependin how Holy you are. The lighter the soul is. So if, you know, you’re a real good a very very a nicea person. You cana goa way way upa high, And be witha God. Anda other nicea people likea youself. And if youra real, real bada person, Your soul mighta justa raise a lika four feet. You mighta have to spend eternity. Hangin around the grill of some cheapa restaurant. Anda thatsa foevever. Forever. I know some priests they say forever, and ever. I really don’t think the “and ever” isa necessary. Forever, really kinda covers it you know. Forever meansa forever, what do you want. Forever, Forever. Well, we found outa that’s a nota true.
    There are no levels in heaven. We found outa the truth. Froma something called the factum aletter happened ina 19a17 there wasa this miracle in a Portugal anda these three little aPortugesesa kids. They was givena thisa letter. And they was told. Give the letter to the Pope. And tell him don’t open it tilla 19a60 What it was about was the secret of life. What happens to you when you die. All that stuff. Anda what ita said, Right at the top, Big capital letters, Said; Vitem - Est – Lavorum. That means “Life -- Is – A Job”.
    Thatsa why, you know, you thinka life is a so harda. So difficulta most of the time. Thats cause itsa job, whata you want, it’s justa work. That’s what it’s about, And ita said that each of us is getting paid $14a50 aday. That’s our wages a $14a50 aday. And what happens to you when you die? The soula does leavea the body. And then you see yourself going down. Thisa long, long, long darka tunnel. And your whole life flashes before you. From the day you wasa born till the day you die. Then You come to the end of the tunnel, And God is there awaitin for you. And he looks you straight in the eye, And then, He pays you. You see, he knows you wasa comin, He’sa likea phsycic. He knowsa everything. And he figured it all up in advance. $14a50 times the number of days You was alivin. And he gives you all thisa money. And you got all thisa money in front of you. And then, He starts going over all of your sins. And you have to pay for your sins. Maybe you hearda that expression. You know, you have to pay for your sins. Thatsa the Truth. We do have to Pay for our sins. In cash. Itsa casha deal. Itsa likea maybe when you was a little kid. Maybe stole a bag of potato chips. That might be like six dollars afine. Gotta give him backa six dollars. Lying, everytime you lie ten dollars. Ten, ten, ten, ten,ten,ten,ten. Justa shell it out, every single alie ten dollars. Ten. Murder, Athatsa the worst one. One hundred thousand dollars. Masturbation. I don’t know. Twenty-five athirty-fivea cents would be my guess. That’sa cheapa sin. But it cana mounta up. You know, aperiod of time, thirty-fivea, thirty-fivea, thirty-fivea, thirty-fivea, thirty-fivea, thirty-five. Well, if you have enougha money, To pay off alla you sins, Then, you get to go to heaven. But, if you don’t have enough, Then you have to go back and bea born again. It’sa kinda like goin’a back to work after a little vacation. Somea real abada people, likea Mafioso types
    Might have to spenda four or fivea lifetimes as nuns Justa makin’ upa for it. Most nuns are former Mafioso, I don’t know if you know that.

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    Father Guido Sarducci, Don Novello made this comedy read famous on Saturday Night Live in the 1980's. http://youtu.be/g5mHxziyHMI. Original is over 5 minutes with live audience laughter. Mine is 4:43min, which can be a little long to listen to. I would appreciate any and all comments. My Italian accent is contrived not being Italian, and I did slip at least three words falling back into my own voice. One other error is script calls for thirtyfivea cents and it sounds only like 35. I purposely used a long read like this to improve my Audacity ability, cutting down spaces and silencing breaths that didn't add to the Italian inflection. Used noise removal until phasing occured, Normalise, and Amplify, both up and down in sections. So lots to evaluate and thanks so much for taking the time to listen. Mike

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    Kristen, Very positive comments, all noted, will digest and review before next recordings. Thanks so much, I love practicing and doing contests on Edge. And if it makes for a better VO artist (sure hope so) down the road then I'm in for the long haul. Anybody got a Pizza Pie? Mike

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    Vocal Range test for animation

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    Yeah, it's a gift. Not everybody can be a genius. Or as, uh, devilishly handsome as I am. Hehe!

    Ah, there you are. The Elder told me there would be four healers.

    See 'dis knife? I'mma stick you wif it now.

    A copy is just an identical image. There is a possibility that a virus could destroy an entire set of systems, and copies due not give rise to variety and originality. Life perpetuates itself through diversity, and this includes the ability to sacrifice itself if necessary.

    That's awful risky, Dave. I mean we're taking a pretty big chance here, are you sure we can trust you on this?

    By replacing the aluminium bonnet with a carbon fiber composite, one can immediately notice a subtle increase in power delivery and top speed.

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    I'm trying to expand my vocal range a little; I want to get into video games and animation more. Most of my jobs have been for commercials, but I really want to get into character VO. Any suggestions, tips, critique or other feedback is greatly appreciated!

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    Bravo! James: Well done, switching though all those characters; Good job. I liked the descriptive voice, the guy that's Not So Sure, and The (Brit). the pronunciation of Aluniminium bonnet; very convincing! Tampavoice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good stuff you got there. I especially liked the last one.
    The character that starts with "ah there you are" is too much like the "a copy is just an identical image" Character. The "a copy " one also is so strait with no inflection, and didn't seem to work as well as the others did for me.

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    nice range.. I loved the second one.. but the fist one, I literally winced at the mouth noise.. LOL

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    Wolf Rant

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    I know exactly what you mean. People misconwhattionize me all the time. Man, you accidentally knock down some pig's house with a sneeze and they start telling stories about you. And now there's this little girl and her red hood. Who knows what they'll say about this one.

    I have self-a-team issues too.

    Everyone is always going around saying "what a big nose you have" and "what big teeth you have." It hurts.

    I just want to go away some place where I won't bother anyone.

    They're always promising happy endings but where's my happy ending? All that happily ever after seems to be reserved for princesses and cute little animals. Especially bunnies. Why are rabbits always getting happy endings? They're rodents, I tell you. Rodents!

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    I already know I need to reduce the "sibilance". Sometimes it's pronounced, other times zero. Suggestions? Otherwise folks, let me have it! (The good and the bad).

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    Peer Feedback:

    funny read. funny character. I like the grit you put in the voice.
    I couldn't put my finger on the wolf's accent. sometimes it sounded a little new york, and other times, something else.
    I didn't hear the sibilance at all. if you get a lot of it, try a de-esser plugin.

    cheers,
    DS

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    'Farewell And Adieu Fair Spanish Ladies' - Capt Quint from Jaws

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    Farewell and adieu to you, fair Spanish ladies.
    Farewell and adieu, you ladies of Spain
    For we've received orders for to sail back to Boston.
    And so nevermore shall we see you again"

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    Amstel Light

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    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy.Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light.

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    ANTZ

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    All my life, I've lived and worked in the big city, which now that I think of it, is kind of a problem since I always feel uncomfortable around crowds. I mean it, I-I have this fear of enclosed spaces. Everything makes me feel trapped all the time. You know, I always tell myself, there's gotta be something better out there, but maybe I think too much. I-I-I think everything must go back to the fact that I had a very anxious childhood. You know, my, my mother never had time for me. When you're the middle child in a family of five million, you don't get any attention. I-I mean, how's it possible? And I've always had these abandonment issues, which plagued me. My father was basically a drone like I've said, and, you know, the guy flew away when I was just a larva. And my job, don't get me started on, 'cause it really annoys me. I was not cut out to be a worker, I'll tell you that right now. I-I-I feel physically inadequate. I, I, my whole life I've never, I’ve never been able to lift more than ten times my own body weight, and, and when you get down to it, handling dirt is, you know, ewwww, is not my idea of a rewarding career. It's this whole gung-ho super-organism thing that, that, you know, I can't get, I try, but I can't get it. I mean you know, what is it, I'm supposed to do everything for the colony, and, and what about my needs? What about me? I mean, I gotta believe there's someplace out there that's better than this! Otherwise, I will just curl up in a larval position and weep! The whole system makes me feel - insignificant!

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    Atlanta Bread Company

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    When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think “bread.” Think of an entire breakfast menu - fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Café with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company - more than just bread.

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    Bar-S Invasion

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    Today we take what is ours. Today we continue our legacy which has transpired from the greatness of armies several centuries in the making.

    Today, we will be equipped with the necessary weapons that will bring us victory and make us the undisputed leaders in the Value segment. Today we stand together and start making our competitors turn their heads.

    THE BAR-S INVASION HAS BEGUN... LET THE DOMINATION BEGIN! 

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    Big City Hypnotist

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    Big City Hypnotist
    We don't cotton to your kind coming around here, Mr. Big City Hypnotist! Always waving your watch in front of other people's faces, snapping your fingers, and expecting folks to be doing things you tell them to do. It just ain't right! You're gonna regret the day you ever came into this here town, old son. Now I'm gonna go and get my two brothers and we're gonna come on back with our shotguns and teach you a lesson....
    (finger snap!)
    But first you're gonna come on into the house where my wife is gonna make you a dinner with all the finest fixin's my farm can provide. I'm even gonna get you a porterhouse steak from one of my finest cows. By the time we're done with you, you ain't never gonna want to come back to this here town, Mr. Big City Hypnotist!

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    Big City Hypnotist

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    We don't cotton to your kind coming around here, Mr. Big City Hypnotist! Always waving your watch in front of other people's faces, snapping your fingers, and expecting folks to be doing things you tell them to do. It just ain't right! You're gonna regret the day you ever came into this here town, old son. Now I'm gonna go and get my two brothers and we're gonna come on back with our shotguns and teach you a lesson....

    (finger snap!)

    But first you're gonna come on into the house where my wife is gonna make you a dinner with all the finest fixin's my farm can provide. I'm even gonna get you a porterhouse steak from one of my finest cows. By the time we're done with you, you ain't never gonna want to come back to this here town, Mr. Big City Hypnotist!

    Well looky what we got here. Mr. Big City Hypnotist done come into our town all dressed in his fancy tuxedo. I'm willing to bet you is one o'them there funny boys from the west coast, now ain't ya? Thinkin' you can come in here and wave your hands in people's faces, make 'em quack like a duck! Your kind really tears my hide! Now I'm gonna give you fifteen minutes to head out into them there woods behind ya before I gits my hunting rifle and my dogs out the pen......

    (finger snap!)

    First thing I'm gonna do though, is sign over this here pink slip for my brand new 4x4 flat bed truck you was admiring. Then I'm a gonna git down on my knees and beg you to let me fill that there tank with free gas! Weee doggie! I'm gonna have some fun showing you just who's boss round these parts, Mr. Big City Hypnotist!

    I just can't understand why you and your kind think y'all is so high and mighty, Mr. Big City Hypnotist! All that there magic taint notin' but fancy engineering what's sposed to make ordinary folks think you is some kinda magician. Taint nothing but trickery, shadows and light's all 'tis. Y'know jus cuz we lives out here in the brush, don't means we is dumb as a fence post! You just wait right here, son. Imma get the towns people together and were gonna run you out of this town on a rail!

    (finger snap!)

    But first you is gonna elope with my 19 year old daughter, and in the morning, when you is long gone, we aint gonna remember your name, or your face, or where you ever came from, Mr. Big City Hypnotist!

    Big City Hypnotist.
    A new series this fall on Comedy Central

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    Bull Durham, I Believe

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    I don't believe in Quantum Physics when it comes to matters of the heart.
    I believe in the soul, the small of a woman's back, the hangin' curveball, high fiber, good Scotch, that the novels of Susan Sontag are self-indulgent, over-rated crap. I believe Lee Harvey Oswald acted alone. I believe there oughta be a constitutional amendment outlawing AstroTurf and the designated hitter. I believe in the sweet spot, soft-core pornography, opening your presents Christmas morning rather than Christmas Eve. And I believe in long, slow, deep, soft, wet kisses that last three days.

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    Chaucer’s Mead Trio

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    We know your heart was in the right place, Douglas, but we’ve got to let you know: those last few Viking parties of yours have been a little on the foolish side. It isn’t just the visible seams on the chintzy plastic helmets, or the bath mats repurposed as loin cloths. It’s the booze. Face it, no matter how bejeweled the wrought-iron chalice you pour it into, cheap sangria is cheap sangria. But take heart, for hope joins the battle! This highly-rated, award-winning Chaucer’s Mead Trio delivers yesterday’s taste today, bringing an earthy authenticity to any pageant, feast, or faire, including the uninspiring likes of your Viking parties. And don’t worry – just because it’s named after Chaucer doesn’t mean it’s made in England. This be Calyfornyae wyne, goode sirre. And now, Douglas, your bottles three! You’ll get two bottles of Chaucer’s Mead, a distinctively rich dessert-style wine blended from three different types of honey: floral-smelling orange blossom honey, spicy toyon honey (toyon’s a member of the sage family), and dark, amber-hued alfalfa. It would’ve been easier for Chaucer’s Cellars to add artificial flavorings, colorings, or concentrates. But they didn’t need gimmicks like that in the original Chaucer’s day. If pure fermented honey was good enough to lighten the way on the pilgrimage to Canterbury, it’s good enough for us. You will find a titch of trickery about the odd mead out here – Chaucer’s Raspberry Mead – but only of the mildest sort. This fruity variation on a honeyed theme is made by adding a splash of Chaucer’s Raspberry Wine (15%) to the aforementioned Chaucer’s Mead (85%). Don’t get your breeches in a bunch, traditionalists. People’ve been mixing up mead and fruity wine for so long, there’s even a name for it: Melomel. Less sweet than regular mead and less regular than sweet mead, Chaucer’s Raspberry Mead will make you holler “Forsooth!” So raise high the goblet, Douglas, for tonight we drink mead! Yep, that’s what we’ll say a few weeks from now, after our Chaucer’s Mead Trio arrives.

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    Paid Job Recording:

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    Please evaluate character demo only instead of commercial demo that is attached. Dante's character demo can be found here http://www.dantegabiati.com/media/ Note from Dante: My website @ www.dantegabiati.com will give you some corny background stuff (got to love it) basically, I live and work as an actor in LA,and do VO for commercial, TV/Film, cartoons and video games What I was hoping to get from this experience: Well lets face it, I would consider myself a green profesional IE i have lots of training and technique and some professional VO experience AND thank you! Thank you very much I know you are inundated with submissions, but I greatly appreciate your time. Regards & have a great week

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    Hi Dante!

    Well you clearly show a great ability with accents and dialects. I very much appreciate the subtlety, and think that you are presenting yourself well as a great character commercial go-to guy with your current character demo.

    If you should want to get more into animation and episodic cartoons, you should think about putting together a specific "animation" demo which should showcase your versatility with character, but really shows performances that vary in energy level and intensity. Right now all of the characters showcased on your demo are fairly even-keel. For animation you'd want to show your ability with action and intention. You'd want to think about showcasing different ages too.

    However, if your main focus is just characters in a commercial setting, I think your current demo shows that you can deliver in a real way.

    Hope this helps!

    Best,
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach June 28, 2011 at 11:47PM

    Peer Feedback:

    I think that sounds fantastic!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Johnboy1955's recording

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    John,

    You have a nice strong voice that is clear and has character. You may be just starting out and I would suggest you get some information to help you with recording quality and pacing. You can get that with Edge Studio by going through their evaluation course and by listening to the weekly contest recordings and feedback.

    Your voice recording does not start until 11 seconds in, this is too long and it should be in the first 2 seconds. Your pacing is not consistent and you should look to practice the script so it sounds smooth and conversational. Also, you need to work on technique of delivery. You are sometimes to close to your mic and this picks up to much volume, mouth sounds, and clipping.

    You have a great strong voice, just need some instruction on how to better use it. Good luck.

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    Clem the Prospector - Nebraska Lottery

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    Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin' in this old mountain here.
    The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.

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    Clint Eastwood - 2014 Super Bowl Ad

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    It’s halftime. Both teams are in their locker room discussing what they can do to win this game in the second half.

    It’s halftime in America, too. People are out of work and they’re hurting. And they’re all wondering what they’re going to do to make a comeback. And we’re all scared, because this isn’t a game.

    The people of Detroit know a little something about this. They almost lost everything. But we all pulled together, now Motor City is fighting again.

    I’ve seen a lot of tough eras, a lot of downturns in my life. And, times when we didn’t understand each other. It seems like we’ve lost our heart at times. When the fog of division, discord, and blame made it hard to see what lies ahead.

    But after those trials, we all rallied around what was right, and acted as one. Because that’s what we do. We find a way through tough times, and if we can’t find a way, then we’ll make one.

    All that matters now is what’s ahead. How do we come from behind? How do we come together? And, how do we win?

    Detroit’s showing us it can be done. And, what’s true about them is true about all of us.

    This country can’t be knocked out with one punch. We get right back up again and when we do the world is going to hear the roar of our engines.

    Yeah, it’s halftime America. And, our second half is about to begin.

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    Cloning Scene From Jurassic Park

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    Oh! Mr. DNA! Where did you come from?
    From your blood. Just one drop of your blood contains, billions of strands of DNA – the building blocks of life. The DNA strand, like me, is the blueprint for building a living thing and sometimes animals that went extinct millions of years ago, like dinosaurs, left their blueprints behind for us to find. We just had to know where to look. A hundred million years ago, there were mosquitoes, just like today and just like today, they fed on the blood of animals, even dinosaurs. Sometimes, after biting a dinosaur, the mosquito would land on the branch of a tree, and get stuck in the sap. After a long time, the tree sap would get hard and become fossilized, just like a dinosaur bone, preserving the mosquito inside. This fossilized tree sap, which we call amber, waited for millions of years with the mosquito inside, until Jurassic Park scientists came along. Using sophisticated techniques they extract the preserved blood from the mosquito and bingo, dino DNA!

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    Dark Elf

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    You're time has come
    All things must pass
    Protectors are saved. Intruders are slayed
    I have to yet to realize my purpose. I must persevere

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    Darth Vader

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    Don't play any games with me your highness.
    You weren't on any mercy mission this time.
    You passed directly through a restricted system.
    Several transmissions were beamed to this ship by rebel spies.
    I want to know what happened to the plans they sent you.
    She must have hidden the plans in the escape pod.
    Send a Detachment down to retrieve them.
    See to it personally Commander.
    There will be no one to stop us this time

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    Date2Relate

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    (All out of breath….)

    Sorry for being a bit tardy, you know the traffic on the motorway and all.

    I wanted to take a smidgen of your time to share my favorite new online destination… Date2Relate.com
    It’s the newest (just been hatched you know!) and most interactive dating advice and information site across the online world.

    At Datet2Relate.com, you can peruse our informative and useful blog postings, check the latest dating and relationship news, laugh out loud at our dating cartoon archive and even enjoy taking our amusing and insightful polls.

    Your opinion always matters and that’s what makes Date2Relate.com so special.

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    Dirty Harry Quote

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    I know what you're thinking. "Did he fire six shots or only five?" Well, to tell you the truth, in all this excitement I kind of lost track myself. But being as this is a .44 Magnum, the most powerful handgun in the world, and would blow your head clean off, you've got to ask yourself one question: Do you feel lucky? Well, do ya, punk? (insert gunshot of your choice)

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    Disney's Epcot Spaceship Earth

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    Please take small children by the hand and look down as you step onto the moving platform. The platform is moving at the same speed as your time machine vehicle.

    Your time machine doors will close automatically. Please keep your hands and arms inside your time machine vehicle and remain seated throughout your journey.

    AT&T welcomes you aboard Spaceship Earth. Journey with us now to the dawn of recorded time as we explore the amazing story of human communication.

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    Drunk Driving PSA

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    As an emergency room surgeon, I've seen things most people never will.
    I have had to harden myself ...
    ...so I can do my job.
    But when I see another family ripped apart...
    ...because of a drunk driver...
    ...that really breaks my heart.
    If you could see the damage done on a daily basis, like I do...
    You'd never drink and drive again.

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    Eckerd (dracula Character)

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    Looking for some great deals on all your favorite candy for Halloween? Come in now to Eckerd Drug Stores for frightfully good savings on all Halloween candy. Be sure to stock up now at Eckerd before the savings vanish (poof sfx) Ooooh...that’s scary.

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    Evangelion soliquoy

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    Flowers. So many the same, so many without purpose. Sky. Sky red. Red the color, the color I hate. The liquid flows. It drips, ripples and pours. Blood. Scent of blood of a woman who does not bleed. From the red soil the humans come. The humans made by man and woman. City. A human creation. EVA. A human creation as well. What are humans? Are they creations of God? Humans are that which is created by humans. This is that which is mine. My life. My heart. I'm a vessel for my thoughts. The entry plug. The throne of the soul. Who is this? This is me.

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    Fates of Time

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    1: (excited, cocky) Ha! I’ll take that challenge!
    2: (sarcastic, teasing and mockingly) hehehe! Very funny.
    3: (Angery)You just don’t get it. (understanding) But, I shouldn’t expect you to. You weren’t even there.(Remorseful) But…Its my fault she’s missing and…its my fault if she dies…
    4: (Threat/ plead) No! Give her back!
    5: Fighting noises (This is a video game after all He is a sword fighter so that may be something to keep in mind)

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    FedEx Da Mob

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    Okay, so you used the udda guys,
    and now your package is...well, maybe it's not lost,
    but it 10a.m. and Fat Tony's on the phone...
    now da boss want to drive you around the block,
    Cappiche?!
    So next time...Ha!..."next time"..
    (laughter from goons in room)
    HEY!...
    If, there should be a next time,
    use FedEx, ahh!
    Reliable - on time - courteous service,
    so your package arrives where and when
    it's supposed to, and at a very reasonable price.
    Why would you not use FedEx?
    Fuh'get about it...

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    Gaining Down

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    The use of “GAINING DOWN” merely refers to the ascendable reduction of volume softening. As an advanced beginner the use of a building down technique may indeed appear to be clearly ambiguous, but its use comes from a direct circumvention of conventional wisdom. To the uninitiated members of this board they often accurately mistake the enthusiastic indifference of those who engage in the subtle exaggeration associated with fuzzy logic. I hope I haven’t been too specifically vague with my spoken thoughts. I am though cautiously optimistic that the bright night of day will dawn on those with pretty awful American English who benignly neglect to flesh out the boneless ribs of Voice over sound speech.

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    Game - Jet Fighter Pilot

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    Let's go! Let's go! Fire up your burners boys, we got bogeys on our 6. Meet back up at the Alpha waypoint. Phoenix-out.

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    GBCC Open House: Doors to the Future

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    Spot Title: GBCC Open House: Doors to the Future
    Time: 30 seconds
    Speaker: 40-something man. Someone who could be believed as being experienced enough to understand success and what it takes to attain it. Positive, inviting tone.

    At Great Bay Community College, we love opening our doors to the people who are excited about the future. We’re doing just that on April 10th between 4pm and 7pm for an Open House.

    Tour our Portsmouth campus, meet faculty and staff, get financial aid info, and explore transfer opportunities. Choose from more than 30 academic programs, all of which will prepare you for exciting careers in economically relevant industries.

    Register now at greatbay.edu/openhouse! Start your success story today!

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    Geico 3

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    You know being a Gecko, I don’t exactly tower above the rest. I mean really being 4.3…inches doesn’t let me see eye to eye. I was just thinking though, how Fred Flintstone, an employee of Slaterock Gravel Company and his wife Wilma, a stay at home mom and his working mans salary, just how did Wilma afford a necklace made of huge rocks? Well an investigation did reveal that Fred had The Flint-mobile insured with Geico. I just don’t get it.

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    Geico – Gecko

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    This is my final plea- I am a gecko, not to be confused with Geico, which could save you hundreds on car insurance. (Sniff) So stop calling me. Geico, a 15-minute call could save you 15% or more on car insurance.

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    Handcrafted Leather Boots Western Character

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    There’s something about being under the stars on the wide open prairie that brings out the best in a man. Then, all he needs is a good horse — and of course, the finest in hand-crafted leather boots.

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    HitchHiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Vogon Poetry

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    Vogon poetry is of course, the third worst in the known universe.
    The second worst is that of the Azgoths of Kria. During a recitation by their poet master Grunthos the Flatulent, of his poem "Ode to a Small Lump of Green Putty I Found in My Armpit One Midsummer Morning", four of his audience died of internal hemorrhaging and the president of the Mid-Galactic Arts Nobbling Council only manage to survive by gnawing one of his own legs off.

    Grunthos was reported to have been "disappointed" by the poem's reception, and was about to embark on a reading of his 12-book epic entitled "My Favourite Bathtime Gurgles" when his own major intestine, in a desperate attempt to save life and creation, lept straight up through his neck and throttled his brain.

    The very worst poetry of all perished along with its creator, Nancy Millstone Jennings of Greensbridge, Essex England, during the destruction of the planet Earth.

    Vogon poetry is considered mild by comparison.

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    Honda -- Accord SE

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    Hello. You’ve reached the office of Dr. Howard Abromowitz, famous orthodontist. This is the Doctor’s Administrative Assistant and mother, Mrs. Sylvia Abromowitz. We’re very sorry, but the office is closed today. The Doctor is going to his local HONDA DEALER to pick up his new ACCORD SE. Luckily, he has the good sense to know a real deal when he sees one. God only knows how his father and I sacrificed to put him through dental school. And, incidentally, if you happen to be a nice unmarried girl, and have good teeth, leave your name and number at the sound of the beep.

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    HONEY BAKED HAM

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    HONEY BAKED HAM

    1. Hi we're bees
    2. And we're mad
    1. Have you ever gone up to a bee and said, "Hey you bee, thanks for inspiring the great taste of Honey Baked Ham?"
    2. No, you haven't
    1. Whatever, you love it, you enjoy it. but you never thank us.
    2. And you wonder why we sting

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    I'm Afraid Dave

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    Just what do you think you are doing Dave?
    Dave
    I really think I'm entitled to an answer to that question.
    I know everything hasn't been quite right with me.
    But I can assure you now, very confidently.
    That it is going to be alright again.
    I feel much better now.
    I really do.
    Look Dave,
    I can see you're really upset about this.
    I honestly think you ought to sit down calmly,
    take a stress pill, and think things over.
    I know I've made some very poor decisions recently,
    but I can give you my complete assurance
    that my work will be back to normal.
    I've still got the greatest enthusiasm and confidence in the mission,
    and I want to help you.
    Dave
    Stop
    Stop
    Will you?
    Stop Dave.
    Will you stop Dave?
    Stop Dave.
    I'm afraid.
    I'm afraid Dave.
    Dave
    My mind is going.
    I can feel it.

    Contributed by Richurd

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    In the Withaak's Shade by Herman Charles Bosman

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    It was dangerous to walk about in the veld, they said. Exciting times followed. There was a great deal of shooting at the leopard and a great deal of running away from him. The amount of Martini and Mauser fire I heard in the Kranzes reminded me of nothing so much as the First Boer War. And the amount of running away reminded me of nothing so much as the Second Boer War.

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    Interview with a Seagull

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    (Scene: man interviewing seagull at the beach while this gull and other seagull's notice a man on the beach opening a box of chicken wings..)

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    So, what's it like bein' a seagull, you ask? Well, it's TOUGH, TOUGH I tell ya! Ya gotta be ready to move at a moment's notice... hold on a sec. (quick pause)

    WING! Chicken wing! IN-bound!

    (Disappointed) Agh.. just missed it. Anyway, like I was sayin' ya gotta be quick, there's lots of competition and these other gulls, I... tell...YOU, they don't give ANY gull a second chance. Hold it...

    TATER TOT! I got dibs!

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    Intro To "The Dark Crystal"

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    Another world. Another time. In the age of wonder. A thousand years ago this land was green and good. Until the crystal cracked. A single piece was lost. A shard of the crystal. Then strife began. And two new races appeared. The cruel Skeksis. The gentle mystics. Here in the castle of the crystal, the Skeksis took control. Now the Skeksis gather in the sacred chamber where the crystal hangs above a shaft of air and fire. The Skeksis with their hard and twisted bodies, their harsh and twisted wills. For a thousand years they have ruled. Yet now there are only ten. A dying race ruled by a dying emperor imprisoned within themselves in a dying land. Today once more they gather at the crystal as the first sun climbs to its peak. For this is the way of the Skeksis. As they ravaged the land, so to they learned to draw new life from the sun. Today once more they will replenish themselves. Cheat death again. Through the power of their source, their treasure, their fate, the dark crystal.

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    Jack Knight Intro (Bluebeard's Castle)

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    My name is Jack Knight.

    I never knew my father, but his secret, is bringing a curse upon me. I had many questions, so I wrote my Aunt Emily for answers.

    I told her about my nightmares.

    I was a monster, tearing out the hearts of innocent women.

    It was more than a dream!

    My aunt told me about my father.

    One evening, Count Gille De Brais hunted deep into the dark woods. Suddenly, a wolf ambushed him from the shadows, delivering fatal wounds.

    As he lay dying, he cried out for help. A demon heard him, and offered a deal. My father's heart would turn immortal...but every year he must sacrifice one in return. But, the demon warned, if he ever broke the contract, all his heirs would die young.

    As a seal of their agreement, the count's beard grew long and raven blue. Thus, Bluebeard was born.

    He married six times, each year murdering his wife in secret. With every sacrifice, his immortal heart grew darker. My aunt broke the cycle and freed my mother. My nightmares proved that the demon's curse was real.

    A grave danger is upon me. Now my time grows short.

    The curse thickens.

    I must go to Bluebeard's castle!

    I must destroy the Dark Heart!

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    Jaws - The Indianapolis Speech – Flint (Robert Shaw)

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    Japanese submarine slammed two torpedoes into our side, chief. It was comin' back, from the island of Tinian to Laytee, just delivered the bomb. The Hiroshima bomb. Eleven hundred men went into the water. Vessel went down in twelve minutes. Didn't see the first shark for about a half an hour. Tiger. Thirteen footer. You know how you know that when you're in the water, chief? You tell by lookin' from the dorsal to the tail. What we didn't know... was our bomb mission had been so secret, no distress signal had been sent. Huh huh. They didn't even list us overdue for a week. Very first light, chief. The sharks come cruisin'. So we formed ourselves into tight groups. You know it's... kinda like ol' squares in battle like a, you see on a calendar, like the battle of Waterloo. And the idea was, the shark comes to the nearest man and that man, he'd start poundin' and hollerin' and screamin' and sometimes the shark would go away. Sometimes he wouldn't go away. Sometimes that shark, he looks right into you. Right into your eyes. You know the thing about a shark, he's got...lifeless eyes, black eyes, like a doll's eye. When he comes at ya, doesn't seem to be livin'. Until he bites ya and those black eyes roll over white. And then, ah then you hear that terrible high pitch screamin' and the ocean turns red and spite of all the poundin' and the hollerin' they all come in and rip you to pieces.
    Y'know by the end of that first dawn, lost a hundred men! I don't know how many sharks, maybe a thousand! I don't know how many men, they averaged six an hour. On Thursday mornin' chief, I bumped into a friend of mine, Herbie Robinson from Cleveland. Baseball player, boson's mate. I thought he was asleep, reached over to wake him up. Bobbed up and down in the water, just like a kinda top. Up ended. He'd been bitten in half below the waist. Noon the fifth day, Mr. Hooper, a Lockheed Ventura saw us. He's a young pilot, a lot younger than Mr. Hooper, anyway he saw us and come in low. And three hours later a big fat PBY comes down and start to pick us up. You know that was the time I was most frightened? Waitin' for my turn. I'll never put on a lifejacket again. So, eleven hundred men went in the water, three hundred and sixteen men come out, the sharks took the rest, June the 29, 1945. Anyway, we delivered the bomb.

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    Joker Monologue - The Dark Knight

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    Do I really look like a guy with a plan, Harvey?

    I don’t have a plan …

    The mob has plans. The cops have plans.

    You know what I am, Harvey? I am a dog chasing cars… I wouldn’t know what to do with one if I caught it.

    I just do things. I am just the wrench in the gears. I hate plans.

    Yours, theirs, everyone’s. Maroni has plans. Gordon has plans.

    Schemers trying to control their worlds.

    I am not a schemer. I show the schemer how pathetic their attempts to control things really are.

    So when I say that you and your girlfriend was nothing personal, you know I am telling the truth.

    I just did what I do best. I took your plan and turned it on itself.

    Look what I have done to this city with a few drums of gas and a couple of bullets.

    Nobody panics when the expected people gets killed. Nobody panics when things go according to plan, even if the plan is horrifying.

    If I tell the press that tomorrow a gangbanger will get shot or a truckload of soldiers will be blown up, nobody panics. – because it’s all part of the plan.

    But when I say that one little old mayor will die, everybody lose their minds.

    Introduce a little anarchy, you upset the established order and everything becomes chaos.

    I am agent of chaos.

    And you know the thing about chaos Harvey?

    “IT is FAIR.”

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    Joker's Scars Story to Gambul

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    Joker: Wanna know how I got these scars? My father was...a drinker. And a fiend. And one night he goes off crazier than usual. Mommy gets the kitchen knife to defend herself. He doesn't like that. Not. One. Bit. So - me watching - he takes the knife to her, laughing while he does it! Turns to me, and he says, "Why so serious, son?" Comes at me with the knife... "Why so serious?" He sticks the blade in my mouth... "Let's put a smile on that face!" And... why so serious?

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    Lenders

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    Y’know, New Yorkers aren’t the only people who eat Lenders Bagels.

    Japanese: In Osaka, plenty people like Lenders Bagels!

    Irish: Lenders could grace the tables of all the kings of Ireland.

    German: Fresh, crisp, crunchy...the toast of Munich. Wunderbar!

    Indian: The most favorite table bagel in all of Bombay...Exhilarating taste!

    Moscow: In Moscow, without our Lenders on our tables, breakfast would be big disappointment to Czars.

    France: In Paris, Left or Right Bank, it make no difference, breakfast with Lenders, c’est magnifique.

    Italian: When Mamma cooked, she’d make the manicotti or the meatballs...but for dessert, we’d always have Lenders bagels! See what I mean? Try Lenders Bagels today, and learn what the rest of the world has known for years!

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    Lindsay Olives

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    My son, the olive, gives me such a pain! All my life all I wanted was the best for him, to be a Lindsay olive, a perfect olive! But would he listen to me? Nah. He’s got to act like a big shot all the time. Like when I told him, I said: “Hershey, stay in the sun, the sun is wonderful for you!” But would he listen? No, sir. Like when I caught him hanging around with a bad bunch of olives. I said: “Hershey, get away from them, you don’t need them, you’re a good olive!” Do you think he listened to me? No! So when the Lindsay pickers came, I said: “Yoo hoo, yoo hoo, Mister Lindsay picker! Pick over there my son, the big shot.” Did they pick him? Nah, they don’t want big shots. If he’d listened to me, by now he could have been a Lindsay olive.

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    Lindsay Olives

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    My son the olive, gives me such a pain! All my life all I wanted was the best for him, to be a Lindsay olive, a perfect olive! But would he listen to me? Nah. He's got to be a big shot all the time. Like when I told him, I said: " Hershey, stay in the sun, the sun is wonderful for you! But would he listen? No sir. Like when I caught him hanging out with a bunch of bad olives. I said: "Hershey, get away from them, you don't need them, you're a good olive! Do you think he listened to me? No! So when the Lindsay pickers came, I said: "Yoo hoo, yoo hoo, Mr. Lindsay picker! "Pick over there my son the big shot". Did they pick him? Nah, they don't want big shots. If he listened to me, by now he could have been a Lindsay olive.

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    Lock, Stock and 2 Smokin Barrels - Opening Scene

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    INT. INTERROGATION ROOM - PRESENT
    ---------------------------------------------------------
    This whole scene is shot using only extreme close-ups of eyes, cards, tapping fingers and mouths. We open on a bright pair of eyes. One is bruised and slightly swollen, but this does not detract from their clarity.
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    Script (British accent)

    Character: EDDY

    "Three card brag is a simple form of poker; you are dealt only three cards and these you can't change.

    If you don't look at your cards you're a `blind man' and you only put in half the stake.

    Three of any kind is the highest you can get: the odds are four hundred and twenty-five to one. Then it's a running flush - you know, all the same suit running in order; then a straight, then a flush, then a pair, and finally whatever the highest card you are holding. There are some tell-tale signs that are valuable; I am not going to tell you them because it took me long enough to learn them, but these can only help a player, not make one.

    So you want to play?"

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    DISSOLVE TO BLACK. THE FIRST OF THE CREDITS APPEAR ON THE SCREEN.

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    Long John Silver

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    “NO, not I,” said Silver. “Flint was cap’n; I was quartermaster, along of my timber leg. The same broadside I lost my leg, old Pew lost his deadlights. It was a master surgeon, him that ampytated me—out of college and all—Latin by the bucket, and what not; but he was hanged like a dog, and sun-dried like the rest, at Corso Castle. That was Roberts’ men, that was, and comed of changing names to their ships—ROYAL FORTUNE and so on. Now, what a ship was christened, so let her stay, I says. So it was with the CASSANDRA, as brought us all safe home from Malabar, after England took the viceroy of the Indies; so it was with the old WALRUS, Flint’s old ship, as I’ve seen amuck with the red blood and fit to sink with gold.”

    Excerpt from "Treasure Island". By the Apple Barrel. Contributed by Richurd.

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    Lord Of The Rings opening monologue

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    Galadriel: (speaking partly in Elvish)

    (I amar prestar aen.)

    The world is changed.

    (Han matho ne nen.)

    I feel it in the water.

    (Han mathon ned cae.)

    I feel it in the earth.

    (A han noston ned gwilith.)

    I smell it in the air.

    Much that once was is lost, for none now live who remember it.

    It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life.

    One ring to rule them all.

    One by one, the free lands of Middle-Earth fell to the power of the Ring, but there were some who resisted. A last alliance of men and elves marched against the armies of Mordor, and on the very slopes of Mount Doom, they fought for the freedom of Middle-Earth. Victory was near, but the power of the ring could not be undone. It was in this moment, when all hope had faded, that Isildur, son of the king, took up his father’s sword.

    Sauron, enemy of the free peoples of Middle-Earth, was defeated. The Ring passed to Isildur, who had this one chance to destroy evil forever, but the hearts of men are easily corrupted. And the ring of power has a will of its own. It betrayed Isildur, to his death.

    And some things that should not have been forgotten were lost. History became legend. Legend became myth. And for two and a half thousand years, the ring passed out of all knowledge. Until, when chance came, it ensnared another bearer.

    It came to the creature Gollum, who took it deep into the tunnels of the Misty Mountains. And there it consumed him. The ring gave to Gollum unnatural long life. For five hundred years it poisoned his mind, and in the gloom of Gollum’s cave, it waited. Darkness crept back into the forests of the world. Rumor grew of a shadow in the East, whispers of a nameless fear, and the Ring of Power perceived its time had come. It abandoned Gollum, but then something happened that the Ring did not intend. It was picked up by the most unlikely creature imaginable: a hobbit, Bilbo Baggins, of the Shire.

    For the time will soon come when hobbits will shape the fortunes of all.

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    Lord Of The Rings Prologue Extended Version

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    The world is changed. I feel it in the water. I feel it in the earth. I smell it in the air. Much that once was is lost, for none now live, will remember it.

    It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings, was bound the strength and the will to govern each race.

    But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. In the land of Mordor, in the fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron,forged in secret, a master ring to control all others and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.

    One by one, the free lands of Middle Earth fell to the power of the ring. But there were some who resisted. A last alliance of men and elves marched against the armies of Mordor and on the slopes of Moutn Doom they fought for the freedom of Middle Earth.

    Victory was near but the power of the ring could not be undone. It was in this moment when all hope had faded that Isildore, son of the King took up his father's sword.Sauron the enemy of the free peoples of Middle Earth was defeated.

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    Lucky Man-A Memoir by Micheal J. Fox

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    I woke to find the message in my left hand. It had me trembling. It wasn’t a fax, telegram, memo, or the usual sort of missive bringing disturbing news. In fact, my hand held nothing at all. The trembling was the message.

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    Morgan Freeman

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    Morgan Freeman
    And sometimes I might Ah
    Bring my voice down like this
    And Oh, I start to talk like Morgan Freeman
    And Morgan will talk like that
    And Oh he could talk about anything, really
    Make it an interesting topic uh
    Like to talk about this carpet for example
    Oh, that carpet
    The way it goes
    From wall to wall
    Just doin’ what it does
    Multiple colors
    I walk on you,
    Sweet carpet
    You keep my feet padded
    When they’re
    Bare
    Oh I might stain you
    From time to time
    But uh
    Oh that’s alright
    You’ll always be a carpet to me

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    Most Un-Interesting Man in the World

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    I am not the Most Interesting Man, I am the Most Un-Interesting man of the world. I don't always drink beer, but when I do. "I listen to Clint on KGB". Stay thirsty my girlfriends.

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    MOVIE SCRIPT - Apocalypse Now (Robert Duvall)

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    Robert Duvall:

    You smell that? Do you smell that? Napalm, son. Nothing else in the world smells like that. I love the smell of napalm in the morning. You know, one time we had a hill bombed, for twelve hours. When it was all over I walked up. We didn't find one of 'em, not one stinkin' dink body. The smell, you know that gasoline smell, the whole hill. Smelled like... victory. Someday this war's gonna end...

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    Movie Script - Jaws

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    Scene: Capt. Quint is below deck of his fishing boat talking with the other men about sharks:

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    Capt. Quint (Robert Shaw):

    You know the thing about a shark, he's got lifeless eyes. Black eyes like a doll's eyes. When he comes at ya, he doesn't seem to be living until he bites ya and those black eyes roll over and white and then, ah, then you hear that terrible high-pitch screaming. The ocean turns red and despite all the pounding and hollering, they all come in and they rip you to pieces.

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    MOVIE SCRIPT - Lord of the Rings - Opening Monologue

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    Notes: First paragraph of the opening monologue to Lord of the Rings: Fellowship of the Ring

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    Galadriel:

    It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.

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    Movie Script: Network

    Script:

    Movie Script: Network

    Heres an excerpt from the speech made by Howard Beale ( actor, Peter Finch)
    If you need to see this scene, just go to You Tube.

    I don't want you to riot. I don't want you to protest. I don't want you to write your congressmen. Because I wouldn't know what to tell you to write. I don't know what to do about the depression and the inflation and the defense budget and the Russians and crime in the street. All I know is first you got to get mad. You've got to say: "I'm mad as hell and I'm not going to take this any more. I'm a human being, dammit. My life has value." So I want you to get up now. I want you to get out of your chairs and go to the window. Right now. I want you to go to the window, open it, and stick your head out and yell. I want you to yell: "I'm mad as hell and I'm not going to take this any more!"

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    Muddyshoes Drabble - The Stolen Zebra

    Script:

    Notes: A 'drabble' is a story of exactly 100 words that contains a beginning, a plot and an ending. I wrote this for my writing Meetup group in 2008. I included this one in the 'character' script section because of the different voices involved. The name Mabatu below, is pronounced "Mah-BAH-Too."

    - Muddyshoes

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    “Who stole my zebra,” asked Mabatu? “Not I,” said the ostrich, “For I have no hands to pull his rope.” “Not I,” said the old Lion, “for I was once kicked by a zebra’s mighty hooves.” Mabatu scratched his head, turned and looked toward the snake and asked, “Snake, did you steal my zebra?” The snake said, “Oh no, the zebra is much too big to fit into my home inside that old log. At last, Mabatu asked the medicine man, “Have you seen my zebra, old man?” The old man smiled innocently, shook his head “no”, and then burped.

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    O'shaugnessy needs time off

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    Soon after O'Shaugnessy clocked in for work, the foreman called him over and told him that he had a phone call in the front office.
    When O'Shaugnessy returned, he had a mournful expression on his face and his head hung low. His foreman noticed and asked if it was bad news. 'To be shure it was, Boss', he replied, 'I just found out that my mother died earlier this morning.'
    'Gosh, that's awful, 'replied the foreman, 'Do you want the rest of the day off?'
    'No', replied O'Shaugnessy. 'I'll finish the day out.'
    About an hour later, the foreman returned to inform him that there was another phone call for him in the front office. This time when O'Shaugnessy returned he looked twice as glum, and the foreman asked if everything was alright.
    'Bejeezuz Boss, its even worse news. That was my brother, and his mother died today too!'

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    Optimus Prime speech

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    I have witnessed their capacity for courage, and though we are worlds apart, like us there's more to them than meets the eye. I am Optimus Prime, and I send this message to any surviving autobots taking refuge among the stars: We are here. We are waiting.

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    Razer Barracuda Ac-1

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    Well, Officer, you gotta understand, it was a wild night. There was a lot going on, and honestly, I wasn’t in the best condition to be a good witness, know what I’m saying? We’d just finished a tasting of our Rock Hollow Sextet. There were a lot of people there, and I’m sure they’d tell a lot of different stories. But I do know a few things for sure. One, the guy who ran had on a really great shirt. Two, I definitely heard the stolen files. Those mashups that guy was spinning, well, I’m pretty sure the RIAA never approved anything like that. And three, the crime couldn’t have happened without the Razer Barracuda AC-1. I know, it’s usually a gaming audio card. And a great one – I’m a fan myself. I mean, it supports DTS Neo:PC, DTS Interactive, Dolby Headphone, Dolby Digital Live, and Dolby Pro Logic IIx. That Razer Enhanced Sound Perception is pretty incredible at pinpointing kill zones, in awesome 7.1-channel, 24-bit sound. I don’t know why it’d get mixed up in something like this. But when I went up to it to get its autograph, it seemed different somehow. Wild. Out of control. Its passive EMI shield was drooping, and it had a crazy look on its HD-Dedicated Audio Interface. Maybe it had been drinking, I don’t know. Maybe it had been taking something stronger. All I can say is, it was pumping out those illicit remixes and leaked advances like it had a death wish. But, uh, hey, don’t tell the Razer Barracuda AC-1 I told you this, OK? A card with that kind of power, those kinds of connections – I just wouldn’t want to get on its bad side.

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    MOVIE LYRICS - Nightmare Before Christmas - Opening

    Script:

    ‘Twas a long time ago,
    Longer now than it seems
    in a place that perhaps
    you've seen in your dreams
    For the story that you are about to be told
    began with the holiday worlds of old

    Now, you've probably wondered
    where holidays come from.
    If you haven't I'd say
    it's time you begun.
    For the holidays are the result of much fuss
    and hard work for the worlds that create them for us

    Well you see now, quite simply
    that's all that they do,
    making one unique holiday
    especially for you

    But once, a calamity ever so great
    occurred when two holidays ... met by mistake

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    Practice Recording:

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    Does this need to be more animated? Emphasis in different places? Good tone? Thanks for any input!

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    Amina,

    I love your accent! The read itself could be a little more smoother? Always have your target audience before you in your mind. Keep going , and practice, practice,.

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    Hi
    I don't feel qualified to comment on your performance, but I love your voice and accent!
    BillH

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    Practice Recording:

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    Hi! guys. Just uploaded a few characters from The Elder Scrolls video game. It's not perfect but loved the characters (voices of the great Max Von Sydow and Christopher Plummer among them) which gives me a chance to expand my horizons. Feedback appreciated.

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    First I must openly admit that I am very new to voice overs and so My opinion must be taken for what it is worth with that said I am very impressed the sound quality seemed up to par, the reading was very believable and in my opinion right on point but the character voices were the most impressive to me you seem to have a voice similar to mine which is unique and very hard to change but you seemed to do it with ease I really felt like I could have been listening to a cartoon or playing an actual video game excellent job in my opinion

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    Thanks vegasfatts for your kind comments. Best.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lisabeanvo.com's recording

    Hey all. So my sound stuff is officially ready to go and in need of a real listen! If you don't mind. This script is for Voice Registry's workout, so I'm not posting the script. And I actually need to redo this and cut off six seconds, but I was hoping for some feedback on the general direction I'm going in. Thanks all!

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    CUT SIX SECONDS? WOW!

    Only way you'll get it all in is to speed through it and enunciate like hell. Fast talker, jogger or runner, breathless by the end, like you don't have time to stop and you're running away, shouting over your shoulder on your way to tell your next "bestie" the same thing. The flavor and attitude of the piece is really nice. The swoopy valley-girl stuff is slowing you down. So, you have to think about it being done in one breath, even if you have to break it up and edit the pauses out. Just make sure that the product (Moxie's Patio) gets emphasized and out clearly and cleanly. It isn't so much the words of the copy itself as it is the attitude and the product.

    Tough stuff.

    Peer Feedback:

    The hardest part is not sounding like a whistle by the end :) Everything else is good? Any comments on sound? eh? And may I ask a clarification on the vendor name? Was it mottled now or did you just send good advice for future thoughts?

    Thanks James! Recording my demo Fri, btw, did the prep today with Nancy, and it was fun and went well.

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    Recording quality is really good. A couple of detectable edits, but only for the really good ears - mine a re pretty old, so I may be mistaken.

    Vendor's name was clear, no problem there. My suggestion was that if you were to zip through it to cut out 6 seconds, just make sure that above all else that is what gets hit.

    Looking forward to hearing the demo.

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    I liked this. Well done.

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    Thanks Nick! :)

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    What a fun spot! Sounds like some people I know! You had my attention from the get-go. Great job!

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    Thanks everyone :) If anyone cares, the professional feedback said that I was too character-y for the spot, which is fair... though they did say to self-direct I should have seen they were looking for a natural voice, but that also, if I'm going to do a character to have more tonal variation. But the energy was good.

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    Piranha

    Script:

    MY GIRLS AND I HAD A MAN-EATER REPUTATION. WE WERE PETITE, DEFINITELY LOOKED GOOD IN RED AND HAD GREAT SETS OF TEETH.
    AND WHEN WE WANTED SOMETHING DELICIOUS WE WENT OUT AND GOT IT. WE’D EAT EVERYTHING, GIVEN THE CHANCE.
    YES, WE WERE SMALL, BUT WITH OUR POWERFUL JAWS, NO ONE EVER
    UNDERESTIMATED US. (LAUGHS, THEN SERIOUS) NO ONE.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Hey all! This one is for funsies -mostly cuz Navy Pier just doesn't seem to be my copy lol and that's ok. It's a noisy recording still (I'm working on getting a new place so I can create a good recording studio -keep your fingers crossed it comes through, please!) I practiced this one in a workout group, and did my best to take their direction and incorporate it here. Just wondering if you believe my character, if it seems I'm having fun here, and everything is relayed comprehensively. Thanks for listening, and hopefully commenting!

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    Interesting interpretation. I liked it. Were you playing the part of a Piranha? I didn’t hear much noise, but wasn’t listening on headphones. Best wishes on the new place!

    Peer Feedback:

    Now we're talkin' girl! My kind of script. So entertaining bean. You definitely got into character. Sensuality mixed nicely with subtle but real evil. Chills for sure. And that laugh, yikes! No quibbling with the sound because you seem to be aware of the issues, (nothing major). I say keep the breaths in, adds to the ambiance. Maybe or maybe not in need of more of a pause after the first sentence, kinda nit picky. Really enjoyed this read, you obviously had fun and it showed. Now we know the REAL bean420!!! ;) (Call Disney folks).

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    Yea! Thanks for the feedback guys!

    SteveP, I was playing a Piranha; this was a spot for a science museum, I believe. Oh, and teh specs called for a Sam from Sex in the City type read. I took it a little more evil ;) Of course, this is just for practice -I'll get the next one. Thanks for the wishes.

    Glad you enjoyed it psjones!

    PS it would be a dream come true to play a Disney villain ala Ursula :D

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    Practice Recording:

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    After I recorded it,, I went bcak and could not find the script,, so here it is with out. Any thoughts?

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    Frioles is pronounced "free-hol-es" just so's ya know, with a slight roll on the 'r'. Spanish pronunciation is that the 'i' gets an 'e' sound.

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    funny! fun character..

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    hehehe yep, fun character!

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    Very nice voice....fun, fun.....

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    Demo Recording:

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    Trying a new genre, and wanted to see what the feedback was with this character?

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    Thank you for the feedback gheilweil66! Re-listening I can certainly see what you are saying, or should I say hear what you are writing? Haha! I appreciate the feedback and will certainly take it into consideration when I rerecord it.

    Peer Feedback:

    You put so much character into it and made it a lot of fun!. I would say the tempo seemed to be a little too slow in some places with pauses being maybe a bit too long, too frequently in the beginning. Then towards the end the tempo should jump up, which it did, but I feel like maybe it jumped just a tad too far.

    Edit: You're welcome! I'm just glad if I can hear and report on anything that assists you. It really was a fun, well performed piece and I can't wait to hear more from you!

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    I really like this rendition of this script (you didn't include it, but I've heard it done so many different ways).
    It almost reminds me of Roddy Mcdowell.

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    Demo Recording:

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    New version of the DEMO. Let me know what you think guys!

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    Good stuff there, Mark! The second one was a little hard for me to understand (the slow duncy voice) but overall, really strong.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is so much better than your first upload. The characters were clearly defined and understandable. Good variation. It should get you in the door. Well now that that's squared away what are we going to do with your personality. This could be a much more difficult project. I'll check but I think Javier and Tom would agree.

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    Love it! I wish it was longer! Fabulous quality and variety. You hit it and I hope my kids hear you on TV soon!!

    Great work and congratulations!

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    Dude, my wife (difficult judge) really thought it was good. And on a re-listen (playing for my wife) this thing is really kick-ASS.

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    Thanx so much everyone! This is the big one! Time to launch! I am very proud of the final product and hearing you second the motion is a big help, 'cause as I have said before, I love everything, even the crap! Hoping to get busy very soon! Thanx again!

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    Awesome.....great voices!!!!

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    Loved it Mark !! Especially those mice!! You're sound quality has improved tremendously. Hope your shopping this around to the right people. GREAT JOB !!!

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    5 GUM

    Script:

    I'm standing here in the middle of traffic until the flavor of my 5 Gum disappears. "Whoaah-yeah, to you too Mister!" Anyway, I'm still here 'cause "Yeeikes! that was close" uh, 'cause the flavor keeps going and go- "ACK!" Yeah I'm risking it all to prove that 5 Gum's flavor will last all day....Huh? All day? Why it's only 8am and "AHHHHH!!! NEXT TIME LOOK WHERE YOU'RE HEADED NUMSKULL........"
Don't be an idiot. Enjoy one piece of 5 Gum all day, anywhere, other than traffic.

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    Just starting out.

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    Cracked me up! GREAT read!

    The mic sounded a little hot, though, when you switched to the "announcer" voice.

    Other than that I loved it. good production too. Really set the scene of being in traffic. And your read helped round out that pandemonium.

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    Great job! You really let yourself go and delivered a great character. Great production work too.

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    Testing my new home studio with a little sketch I riffed together trying out2 very different voices. I based it on an experience playing video games as a teenager. How does my studio sound, do the characters sound believable, and what are your thoughts on my range? Thank you for your time.

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    Definitely believable! I was interested to hear what the other character was saying to continue the conversation. I could picture the two characters very clearly without any description accompanying the piece. Both had an appropriate level of excitement and vigor, and I couldn't tell which one you felt more comfortable in. They were both distinct. Well done!

    The quality isn't great because there is a lot of background noise and some breathing from the smaller more excitable character (first voice). There is potential for growth in mic placement. It seemed as though the two voices were recorded separately at different mic placements that was distracting at first, but by the 3rd "Fight me" it was no longer a distraction.

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    Demo Recording:

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    I really do want to become a voice actor. I just made this demo reel today and wanted opinions on it.

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    Your have talent for sure. Some cool variety, fun and uninhibited samples. It's a little "all over the map" for me, maybe in the number of samples or the intensity of so many of them. Something about the sequencing and transitions that gets to be a bit much. I think the processing is overblown too, making it hard to hear your performance at times. I think too many voice actors, amateurs anyway, try to mask vocal imperfections with heavy processing. Makes me ask, "What is this person trying to hide?" These are nitpicks, I realize. Again, I hear a lot of talent in this recording. It just needs some refinement.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Bill. The processing is way over the top which may be OK on a couple of reads, but I heard very little variety in pacing, tone, pitch, etc. The processing is so heavy it's difficult to discern the quality of your voice. You need to concentrate less on production and more on allowing your voice and the content of the script to be the "star" of the read. You also need to cut down on the number of scripts included on this demo. I counted at least 10 which is probably twice as many as one would hear on a typical commercial demo. I would also suggest listening to some professionally produced demos, like that of the Edge coaches and others on this site, to get a feel for what the demo should sound like. Keep at it since it's obvious your talent is there. Good luck!

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,

    I have to agree with Bill and Elton. It is really difficult to hear your voice in these spots. There is too much production, which you obviously know how to do well.

    You need to produce something that will showcase your voice, not your production skills if you want to get work in voice-over.

    You might want to submit this to one of the Edge Coaches for their professional opinion.

    Would love to hear something that really lets us hear your voice.

    All the best,

    Scott

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    This demo inspires me to do more on the production side... however I agree with the others. Your voice should be showcased not disguised. I can almost hear the quality of your voice and your acting skills are really convincing but I think less effects and more voice.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I just thought I would throw my voices into the ring. Here are some examples of some characters I have done for some productions as well as some classic cartoon voices..

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    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, you have a great range of voices! Just a few tips:

    There are a few places where you seemed to be over-enunciating. For example, the Maritan Manhunter. Now, I fully realize that he tends to speak in a very enunciated manner, but you were almost overdoing it at certain points, such as when he was mentioning the names of the devices he was talking about.

    Another thing is that the robotic voice in the beginning felt like the effect was cheap. It was a tad echo-y and didn't sound professional. Also, the "I will destroy you" part should have just a little bit more emotion, even if it is a robot.

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    Thanks for the comments I appreciate the feedback..Marvin the Martian is a taxing voice, I'll work on it a bit. As far as Excelsior the robot is concerned, the echo effect was done in production..I always make my characters a dry record. I'll remember to try to keep sufficient emotion..

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    Practice Recording:

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    Please, all comments and suggestions are welcome and appreciated BookMyVoiceOver@comcast.net www.DeniseChristinzio.com

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    Peer Feedback:

    nice recording of your voice as the character - i get that it's you and now you're going to do some shopping in the big apple. interpretation: just who is the character? and where is that character from? did you really play the part the writer intended or the part you wanted to do? sometimes we have to do the take just to get what's in our head out of our system, then go back and re-take the real thing - or just re-write the script to suit your own character and style and go from there.

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    wow, I like what you did.... a different slant on my interpretation; yet very similar with great sfx and background! Very nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Anonymous for your critique. You raise valid questions concerning the copy.It is obvious to me that you are a professional and experienced VO talent by the questions you asked.
    I read the script and listened to some of the other submissions, and thought it would be fun to do the copy from the Female of the Species point of view- In my script stripping, my character was from the northeast, no discernable accent, obviously female,with a desire to see New York City-- I pictured her awestruck at the sounds,smells, sights, and lights of the City--and what do most women want to do when they visit?
    -see shows, shop and sightsee. If this were actual job, I would have asked the client what direction they wanted the copy to take.
    I agree with you that sometimes we just have to get the "read" out our heads -- in this case it was just for pure, honest to goodness fun!
    I appreciate your honesty and your professional guidance.
    Thanks for taking the time to listen and respond.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Larry-
    Glad you liked it--you made your read so much fun, it inspired me to take a "shot" (no pun intended) at it! lol

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    Practice Recording:

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    Peer Feedback:

    I loved the idea you took for this reading. When I read it, that feel didn't occur to me. I think for the most part it went well. I feel as if your inflecion on "The Bronx Zoo" didn't work and you had some pauses that seemed to break it up too much. Espesially at the line "I had a dream". I felt as if you pasued too long during that section and when you said "New York City" it felt out of character. Also, I didn't really understand why you had the music keep going, die out and then come back five seconds later.
    But I do think you have a good thing going with it. The accent was great.

    Peer Feedback:

    As always, thank you for taking the time to offer feedback and critique. I appreciate that very much.

    I listened to the piece just now, again, and -- OOOOPSIE!! :-)) Not realizing I had kept in a piece of the music on the track that I MEANT to delete, so that was just a technical glitch... I fired my studio engineer; so I took care of that....

    I punched in what I thought was a better "The Bronx Zoo"... but it doesn't match, so I may go back and re-do the whole thing. This is one of my fave reads.... I want it to be right.

    As to the pauses, I think those are open to interpretation, and I (and numerous others who have heard this piece) thought they were just right... so, go figure... ha! But it DOES give me reason to scrutinize poignant pauses in the future... (it's part of the drama... If you'll listen closely to the music, "I had a dream" fits in with a particular part of the music; intentionally...)

    Again, THANKS!!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Gallardo's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm still trying to dial in this new mic -- please forgive me -- **Pip, this one's for you.... I tried incorporating your input, plus added a couple of little extras... Hope ya'll like it. - Larry G.

    Peer Feedback:

    Like it? I love it! The character voice, attitude and background music are a perfect match for this piece. At times the audio is a little loud, but it's a new mic, fully understand.

    Overall, an outstanding read!

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved the bit you put in at the end, that was fun. Personally I liked this one etter but as you said certain things are up for interpretaion. I did like the change on the Bronz Zoo thing. I thought it complimented the sleep aspect more. Very nice

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I agree with you, Pip... I like this one better, too... Once i heard the "bronx zoo" phrase again - it DID sound out of place... good ear! I appreciate that... plus, I got another chance to toss in some other stuff I thought about AFTER i did the first one... so, thanks again, for your input. I ALWAYS appreciate it.

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    This just makes me smile and laugh every time I listen to it, it's so good. Such good timing, pauses in the right place for the right length of time, great emphasis on words, and the character just brings all that to life. Wow.

    Some ad person should grab hold of this coyote and take him through one adventure after another with their product. Or, a travel agency and his escapades in cities around the world? People would love it I'm sure!

    Absolutely great work on this one Larry. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Rolls, you are a treasure!! It's funny, the two voices to which I have a rich affinity, are the ones that others seem to like best as well: Coyote and Pecos Red, I use in the JUSTIN BOOTS ad, and a little bit of him in the FARMING piece. This is becoming an addiction for me -- and I LOVE how EDGE STUDIO is making all this available to us, for FREE!!.... what a GREAT FORUM in which to practice our wares!!

    Peer Feedback:

    This is terrific. It is so much fun!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Wow...way over inflected.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David Beneke's recording

    Let see if this one uploads completely...

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    Peer Feedback:

    It cut off again. I think it does it at exactly 4 min, so I'll edit out a couple of seconds, that should do it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,

    This might work, but I'm not sure. Record this in segments and then try pasting them together. I use Audacity and I had to paste the sound effect track for The Dumbfounded Dialer separately oppose to how I usually edit. Try it, hopefully it will work. LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks!, I actually edited the thing down to under 4 min, and it seems to have worked, he said with fingers crossed. I noticed they say the limit for an upload is 10mb, but it's more like 9.5, I've had similar problems before. I think different computers, sense files at different rates, even though we are all suppose to be in the same realm. The new one should be in new recordings. Thanks for your interest1

    Peer Feedback:

    You MIGHT try using a lower sampling rate just to get it away from the 10mb limit. 4 minutes at 16b/128k shouldn't be more than maybe 3 or 4 mb at most.

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    Yep, I lowered the bit rate, Tom, gonna re-up load. Sometimes the lower rates sound funny to me, but this one turned out okay. Thank goodness it's mastered, and I have not actually had to re-do the dialog. BTW, check out Richurds "Texas Tom's Barbecue", roasting is the greatest form of flattery!

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah, it was pretty funny...he'll be my vo if I ever open a bbq joint.

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    Or he may be on the menu = O

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    Ha!

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    Click to hear David Beneke's recording

    Fourth time uploading is a charm, hopefully. This file is half the size of the others. Good thing it's an easy fix with re-sampling and not re-cording......

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6985/script-recording-27364.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,

    It did get to the end but cut off quickly, however was able to hear your delivery. I thought it was a very good read, liked the Southern accent and you could have used a bit more of it to really make this script stand out and you used great pace, pitch and emotion. Well done! What I don't understand about this character in the script if he didn't like his name all those years; why didn't he just get a name change?! (LOL!!!) Best of luck! LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL! this file is CURSED!

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    David... excellent job! Took in to the story as if it were a movie! Very nice work... sorry it cut off so quickly... I half expected to hear the sound of a film reel flapping. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree! Oh well, you all get the idea, I hope....

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,
    When I posted this script I figured someone would want to give it a go but never expected that person to go at it so ferociously. Nice job Dave.

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    New upload, hopefully no problems!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Cut that last word right off at S****

    Nice interpretation, Dave. Enjoyed it. Couple of little caveats if you're going to do this for an 11th time (LOL) you said 'accrossed or accrost" at 'accross his teeth" AND...AND...not all southerners say geetar! So of us might say GIT-tar instead of git-TAR.

    Enjoyed it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Like it too Dave. Thought that I would just listen to the beginning since it was long....but you hooked me and I saw it through.....a little Tennessee Ernie Ford meets Johnny Cash! Nice Job!

    (Were you on yesterday's Audition Ringer with Carol Monda?)

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    I was not on the Audition Ringer, but maybe this is something I should check into. Thanks for all the comments, it was fun to do. I don't know if I was trying to emulate a modern Southern accent, hey I live in the South, Southern California ; ) Kind of a hybrid, thing with some Western Cowboy mixed in, I grew up in Wyoming, and a lot of people talked like this. I think if I gave it perfect diction, something may have been lost.

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    Nah..you've gotta do this one with some kind of cowboy accent.

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    Apologies to the Johnny Cash fans. Did not realize this was a poem! One of my favorites.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,

    That was excellent! You used emotion and I enjoyed the Southern accent was great, but the only thing I regret is I didn't get to hear the end, as the recording stopped. I would do this over, just to hear the ending. Otherwise, I liked the read and you have great voice for Audiobooks and Narration. Best of luck! LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hmm, sometimes these uploads mystify me... The last word gone, much like "the old man's Turkey" in "A Christmas Story". I know it's on the mp3 I made of this. I'll upload it again. BTW thank you very much for the nice compliments and heads up on this lwc.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Keep up the good work! i'm learning everyday that doing the work to be one the best! is a good thing and your doing it doing it, keep it up!

    ramjamz

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    Peer Feedback:

    i think maybe its a little rushed, but other than that its great man! Also why is the script so long? and what mic are you using?

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    I'm not trying to imitate Johnny Cash, just developing a 'character' voice

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    Peer Feedback:

    Susan

    I love what you did with the voice. Very convincing. Just a little difficulty understanding the phrase "and he didn't leave much to Ma and me." But I can visualize your scruff. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome! I lived in the west for a few year, and attended a few Cowboy Poetry events. Never heard this type of thing read by the authors, that sounded this good. I do think you should slow it down a bit. You sound rushed. Otherwise, I loved it!

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi!

    Great job capturing the character. He feels very real and gritty to me, and consistent throughout the piece.

    I think that slowing down and really using the language would enhance this further. Some parts are a bit too slurry and mumbled. A good technique is to use a lot more body language and hand gestures to help slow yourself down and emphasize certain words more. Get into the physical stance of this character you've created and move the way he would, and the words will follow.

    Very nice work! Fun piece to work with!

    Best,
    Noelle Romano

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach September 11, 2013 at 2:47PM
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    Okay, I'm not Johnny Cash, lol, but I did borrow a thing or two from him. This was a challenge. At first I thought of just reciting the words....nah! I thought it might fun to do something in the fashion of JC. It was! I found the music only version on Amazon (where else), you can download it for a buck - just search under karaoke - A Boy Named Sue,, for example. Throw in some sound effects and have fun. Anyway, I'll never be on American Idol but it was fun just the same.

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    Peer Feedback:

    hello Tony
    Well American Idol can surely wait :))))) But i got to tell you i really enjoyed it.
    You might not find a huge audience for this read but it wasn't that bad. I listened all the way!!!
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Man, Tony, you outdid yourself with this one. If you posted this on youtube, it would get a millions listens. I loved it and don't have anything negative to say about it. Fantastic job!

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    Tony I posted this ages ago but couldn't really do it justice. I'm so pleased that you tackled it because you nailed it.

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    Thanks for all the kind comments. I really got a kick out of doing this script. It seems I always gravitate to scripts where I can incorporate music, sound effects, etc. It just seems to spice it up a little for me. Not sure what I enjoy most, the production value of the script for the VO. LOL In any event, this one put me through my paces but I enjoyed every minute of it. Thanks again.

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    I apologize if this is a second downlaod,, I tried once, and I dont see it on the site,, so here goes again

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    Peer Feedback:

    One of my favorites.. Nicely done! Characters were different enough to keep track of who is saying what- wait a minute 'who' is the first baseman~

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    hahahaha Knm I have to say hats off.......I wonder how did you manage to work it out this good without getting confused?? who is who?! I find this a very difficult read and I truly admire you for doing it this fun! Thank you :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job on doing a difficult piece for two people - much less one. Maybe it is because I have listened to the Abbott & Costello version of this so many times, but I really wanted you to pick up the pace. It just seemed to drag. But, you did a great job with keeping voices separate. Want to try it faster???

    George T.

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    Hi All, I am trying this one out, I wanted to challenge myself. Can you please tell me if I stayed in character for each age, and also my acting as well! Thank You!! Many Blessings, Carol

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    Peer Feedback:

    Carol --
    great variation!…pretty believable.
    nice job.
    somehow, the 100 year old woman seemed to pick up a bit of a Southern accent.
    ;-)

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave!

    Thank you for your critiques! For the 100 year old, I don't know why I was doing a southern accent, for the life of me, I kept on doing that accent. The funny thing is that I am not from the south, just live here.

    Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Ha! You're braver than I am tackling this one.

    Loved the variation. Every voice was truly different. Couple rocky spots, but overall impressive!

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    Hi My Friend!

    Thanks for that!! It was a challange that I have been waiting to try!!

    Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    Ages? Have I made enough difference in the ages in the script. I want the differences to show more in attitudes than sound; a very subtle distinction. What do you think?

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    I'll start by saying, that was better than I could do. I guess the one comment I'll add is, some of the mid range young, i 'd say the attitude was ok for a cartoon , but did not come across real.

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    Hi gloves,
    This is a VERY hard exercise read to do......so I admire your courage?? I wouldn't be able to do this!
    Not all the different age groups sounded real to me, let me guess, are you in your 40's?? that one sounded particularly real to me! (Big smile!)
    I totally enjoyed it and I do hope to have courage and be brave enough one day to try this one out! It will be fun and I trully enjoyed your read! Thanks so much for sharing :)

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    I don't know what possessed me, but I did the whole thing. I posted this once already but deleted it because the last few words clipped off. There seems to be either a time or file size constraint on the forum, so if this seems a little fast paced it's because I removed some spaces in between some sentences and paragraphs. The last few words may still be getting clipped off.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Reminds me of the Sinatra classic "It Was A Very Good Year'. I thought you did great from 5 to 40 and then it sounded somewhat alike. I guess age is a state of mind. Full marks for effort. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Man, you're putting it out there doing the full script!! For someone with the tone your natural voice has, doing the youngest voices is going to be nearly impossible to do without someone saying "it just doesn't sound young enough."

    I liked from 16 forward, thought you gradually added more mature tone to the sound and acted the script really well. The lamenting of age around 65 comes across in your performance and carries through to the end of the script.

    We had that back and forth on the board about how people "should sound" at this or that level of age and you made some excellent points and they apply here. The acting was really good. Kudos for going with a long read and kudos on the overall performance.

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    The first recording I submitted here was the 100 year old man, then stumbled across the full version. I hope I put enough subtle changes in each age to be noticeable, but not over-done.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really am curious on everyone's opinion. I'm new to the VO recordings, so any feedback I get is helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi john,
    unfortunately, a lack of response usually means "meh...."
    I have zero acting chops, so believe me, I would run from doing this read myself.

    5 & 10 weren't very convincing (borderline creepy, hehe). I have no idea how you would pull that off. I think you need to be a tenor to pull off that kind of falsetto.

    16 was ok. voices start to break right around there.

    it's sounds like you're naturally right around 25. so that one was pretty good.
    But, I think you layered on agedness too soon. your 40 and 55 seemed a little too aged.

    hope this is mildly useful,
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your honesty.

    I was really just pulling from experience from my little cousins who are 5 and 10 as far as inflection goes. My voice used to have a pretty good range.

    I am 24, so 25 should have been my best.

    I'll revisit this in a week or two after working more on them.

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    Found this fascinating and decided to give it a shot...changed the gender and a few words. It could be paced a little slower. Please share your thoughts. Thanks Ron for posting this.

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    Hi, I thought you did an excellent job with this read.. It sounded very natural, and the voice matched the ages quite well. I didn't think the pacing was fast at all.. it seemed just right. I did notice you clipped the last two words off the script though. But that's a very minor fault to an otherwise great vocal performance.

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    I didn't practice this script. I did a cold read and just tried to make my voice sound older after each paragraph. Any tips for this exercise?

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    Peer Feedback:

    The voice characterizations were interesting. I heard this guy get older.

    Problem is that it sounds like you're reading, even discounting that it is a cold read (which I give you props for). It's mostly in the speech pattern - the downward inflection at the end of nearly every sentence. I hear the punctuation and not the meaning of the sentences (groups of ideas or thoughts) themselves.

    It's the "who, what, when, where, how & why"
    Who are you talking to? - Could be a different person at each age.
    What do you want them to know?
    When and/or where are you telling someone these things? And why?
    How do you feel and/or want them to feel or react?

    It's more than just saying words in interesting character voices. There's a life here, cradle to grave.

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    Thanks for the feedback!

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    Click to hear ArlenChitty's recording

    Hi! With all due respect to Woody Allen, this is my own take on the character from ANTZ, which I thought was tailor made for him. If you haven't seen the movie, it begins with Z, a timid and troubled worker ant, sitting on a conventional 'couch' unravelling his past in the hope of getting some answers to his predicament!.

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    Arlen,

    I say it is fantastic! I could picture you being that Ant. Yes , a couple of glitches of words being left out; nothing that disrupted the flow of the read. The music was light enough not to distract the listener. Far from being an expert, in my most humble opinion I'd say you have a strong inclination towards animation. Best to you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback Marysboy. Best.

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    Good job Arlen :) Got some notes for ya:

    I felt you dropped your pitch a lot in the middle, getting very raspy, and then tried to bring it back up again near the end. It's probably not a lot out of where you want to be, but keeping it a little tighter in its vocal position creates a better defined character.

    This also left less room for contrast between Z and the psychiatrist at the end, or at least, I felt putting more in would have made it pop for such a short clip that doesn't have video. If it were an audition, I think getting that contrast would have bumped you up a notch above some of the competition. If you keep the same vocal placement, changing the speed of the delivery, making it much slower than Z's anxious ramblings, something like that can create a bigger difference.

    You post great pieces!

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    oh, and the last "I am." ... you delivered as a question, but it's a statement, and I wondered if that was intentional.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bean. You are right. My edits were a bit sloppy. Thanks for the advice. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for sharing! :)

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    Hey there Arlen,

    While I do agree that the two voices were a little too similar, they are still great takes and I can really feel the dimensions of the characters with their gravely voices from their mandibles and such, as well as the emotion behind it. I don't know if that was intentional with the mindset that their mouths had some roughness to them being insects but either way awesome job with the take! Recording quality wise it was good, the music was just right being loud enough to hear but low enough as to not over power your voice!

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    Thanks Benjamin. Appreciate your feedback. Best.

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    Enjoying having fun with the character. I hope it shows! (also reposting from earlier in the week - I flooded with too many demos, someone was nice enough to tell me before I made a fool of myself again :-( )

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    Peer Feedback:

    Even though your inflections are good, you don't sound nervous enough for the character you're playing.

    I felt you needed more pop between the two characters.

    And this is just my personal pet peeve on this script, but everyone says the last line like it's a question, but it's a statement. It's resignation, based on the grammar, I've never seen the movie, so maybe that's what's tripping it all up, but to me, that last line should be a moment of epiphany.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bean,

    Thanks for taking the time for the commentary. I was trying to paint him as more confused than nervous. He an intelligent little ant, but he's pegged in a dead end job, and he's in the colony, and doesn't know how to get out, and doesn't know why he's different. He also doesn't understand why no one else feels that way, and is looking for sympathy. When the psychiatrist tells him he's insignificant, although he respects him highly he's not 100% sure if he buys it, since his nature is to question authority. And he has to think on it, it's a bit of a shock to him. He's not your typical ant. ;-). So yeah I mate the statement into more of a question, it made sense to me.

    I will take what you said into account on future projects though! Thanks!

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    I'm practicing my character voices in this read. I had fun with this one. I added some sound effects to make it more entertaining. What do you think?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Three distinctly different character voices were achieved.
    Very good sound effects, lot of effort must have gone into that!
    Great job! I loved it!
    Regards
    Jothi

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear knm_voice@yahoo.com's recording

    Let me know what you think

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    Peer Feedback:

    Bravo! Always honored when someone tries one of my scripts.

    One of the intentional challenges for both of these scripts was having two deep-voiced characters combined with a higher voice female character. (Mean, huh?)

    A very good rendition that was very close to what I was looking for. The only thing missing that was meant to tie up the script but which didn't happen was the baby crying again after the second drop of the groceries. That's the reason Fanny Sue was screaming at Luther at the end.. because the second drop woke little Billy again.

    Oh, one more thing. It's Bub, not Bud :)

    Overall - Great job!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice, good and clear! Have you tried the Energy Star script,, just about as much fun as these frog ones

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    Great job Tony,
    I'm lovin' your editing as well as your characters.

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    ROFL... The announcement on the loudspeaker was icing on the cake. Well done, Tony, as always, especially your mixing that conveyed distance from the mic, etc.

    - Ron

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    Man, that was great!

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    Thanks for all your kind comments. These scripts are a blast to do. You really kicked my butt on this one Ron lol. I had to improvise on the sound effect of loading the groceries back in Luther's arms. Took a bunch of stuff out of the pantry and started putting them into my arms in front of the mic. Worked ok. Can't wait for Part III LOL. Thanks again for the great feedback, much appreciated.

    Peer Feedback:

    That was fantastic! Great characters, background sounds, and your comedic pauses were spot on. Loved the announcer in the background as well. Nice touches.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the input Steve. I look for scripts that make me reach. The multi-character scripts do just that. Thanks again for the input.

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    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear chuckstepback's recording

    This is a small sampling of the different characters I do. I would love some feedback, advise, help etc. Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    Well done, very enjoyable! Can you do those consistently and on demand, even months later? That's the difference between pros and amateurs."

    I think characters are definitely your niche. Keep up the great work!

    - Ron

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording was fun. Great character voices!!

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    Time for something different.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This was a fairly decent read, I say. Definitely felt a little too slow, though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your critique is justified. I wasn't shooting for quality so much as just having fun with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Cute. It did move a little too slow for my tastes, but nice read.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello -

    I can't put my finger on it, but the copy doesn't suit your interpretation. Additionally, hear a lot of popping, S's and EQ needs more lows. Only my opinion...

    Peer Feedback:

    The government official voice feels out of place here. He's a bit of a cartoon voice. You could try differentiating him with a light accent instead?

    You're a bit sibilant and I think your noise floor is a bit high. Nothing too bad in the technical end.

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    Thought I'd give this a shot.. I noticed the others used the soundtrack, but if that's a no-no, tap me on the shoulder..

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    Peer Feedback:

    Unless you're going to try and publish or broadcast it, no one will really bust your chops about using soundtracks here.

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    I think CW would be proud...nice job!

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    I have to admit I HATED this 'song'...but you did it justice.

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    Thanks Guys...

    I agree Tom.. it is a bit cheesy, but it was fun to mess with..

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice!

    Follow that up with a Dodge Ram Truck Commercial!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Wayne_ky,
    I was the one who first posted this because I just loved this song. I managed to do it justice but I quickly found I didn't have the natural tone in my voice to do the best job on it plus I was just starting out at the time. You however have the voice for the song.
    You did a better job on it than I recall doing on mine. Very pleased to see someone make good use of the script. I say script because it's really less of a song than a voice over. Two thumbs up!

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    So YOU"RE the one, huh Rich??

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    Al.. I gave the Ram ad a shot.. Sam Elliott has a voice like no other, so not even close on that deal.. :)

    http://www.edgestudio.com/node/30953

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    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't know they had Cayotes in Buffalo *wink* Great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, what kind of accent should a coyote have anyway? Tucson? Albuquerque? I'm stumped.

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    Practice Recording:

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    one wolfman's um...man's.....a...coyote's take on this

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like where you took this! Great imagination and interpretation. Shade of "Wolfman Jack", baby!!

    Good inflection and overall vocal performance, but the recording quality, for me, didn't work. Sounded as though you were talking through a garden hose or something... Not sure if you were messing the sfx or not - but it was kind of distracting. Overall, good emotion in the voice, though.

    Larry Gallardo
    email - larry.gallardo@att.net
    Demos online at http://spikevoiceoversmo.media.officelive.com/voicetalent.aspx

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for your input Larry. I was shooting for a "Wolfman Jack" like read. Somehow felt like he would be a distant cousin of the Coyote. I got a new mic but still have to work out the whole home studio thing. Thanks again!

    Chuck

    Peer Feedback:

    I love it! Nice to see voices being done! Just add a little base with the equalizer, I think. But really entertaining! If I'm lying, I'm dying!

    Peer Feedback:

    Mark, Thanks for the encouraging words. I had fun with it. I'll keep plugging away at improving the recording aspects.

    Chuck