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Script Genres > English Adult > Narration > Animation

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear character1's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    good voice/delivery but way too much background noise to be appreciated

    Keep up the great practice you got what it takes

    Thanks , Evan

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    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear character1's recording

    I am new to this an want to know if there is anything I can improve on.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I feel like the beginning of the script was hard to hear some of the words you were saying and maybe you read it a little too fast. But I like that you tried to make Z's part sound conversational - not like you were just reading the words off the page. And I like that you made a distinction between Z's voice and the Counsellor's voice.

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    107 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kgorgonia's recording

    Hi Linda! The due date is set just to have some more practice and work done before meeting on Friday. I did some minor editing taking out some breaks and pauses to keep to the time frame. I usually practice sitting in a tiny, cramped, audio treated closet, but I decided to tryout standing in a less treated room with more space to move around and perform. Should I care for the audio quality more and remain sitting and stationary for now, or keep it out in the open with space and gradually treat the room more? Pacing, diction and enunciation have been my main tips since I started, and I look to you for more training, guidance, and ultimately the go on whether I'm ready for a demo or not. I've been working with Chris Smith and Jay Snyder as my personal coaches for about 6 months and both approved for me to go ahead and make my demo prior to the holidays, but Chris suggested I look into more enunciation, and diction practice as a guarantee before recording. I look forward to our session on Friday! See you then! -Tk

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    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - the copy was read a little too fast. You hit some words in the copy that seemed strange to me.

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    Batman Versus

    Script:

    BANE

    You will watch your great city burn, Batman; then, I will give you permission to die.

    BATMAN

    Not on my watch, Bane.

    JOKER

    We're just trying to put a little smile on your face.
    Haha.

    109 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear John Wang's recording

    Chose this one because I wanted to be Batman...who doesn't! =] Any feedback on my performance would be much appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91316/script-recording-72175.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Much more of the type of thing in your wheelhouse. Where a lot of people might be tentative in "going for it", you don't seem to have that problem. A big plus.

    Things to watch out for. Even though you're creating a character (evil or good or whatever) with only your voice, you still have to be understood - it has to be intelligible. The first line was so garbled ( and I'm not talking about the processing, but the delivery), that if I weren't reading along, I would not have known what was said - or even that it was English. (It sounded to me like you cupped you hands in front of your mouth?) If anything, it has to be cleaner and even more over-articulated than you might think. Rule of thumb - if it feels like it's too articulated, it's probably not enough or maybe just right.

    Another thing you might think about is not trying to do each voice, one after the other in one shot. That's the miracle of editing, you can splice all of that together in post. Establish one character at a time, get the lines and interpretation down (listen to it a few times) and go on to the next one and give it its own life. Rinse and repeat. (If you watch videos of Seth MacFarlane or others doing animation voices or video game voices on YouTube, they repeat the same line over and over and over again until they and/or the director are satisfied before moving on to the next one or next character.)

    What I'm getting at is that I heard a little bit of Bane bleed into Batman, and a little bit of Batman bleed into the Joker.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for providing me with such a long feed back again James. I really appreciate it!

    I had my hand covering my mouth to try to imitate Bane's mask but hind site is 20/20. I had recorded Bane and Batman together but joker was done separately. I probably put the three characters too close to one another and it made the conversation feel unnatural. I will have to pay closer attention to that in future recordings.

    Cheers,
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    Music too overpowering and needs to be "ducked"... I liked how animated your voice was though the first character's voice and lines were garbled and hard to make out... Anyway, keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback Jay.

    Yeah, overdid the mask muffle.

    Peer Feedback:

    Keep building characters, your doing well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice diversity between the voices. A lot of people (including myself) can sometimes struggle with that. Keep it up!

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    Batman Versus

    Script:

    BANE

    You will watch your great city burn, Batman; then, I will give you permission to die.

    BATMAN

    Not on my watch, Bane.

    JOKER

    We're just trying to put a little smile on your face.
    Haha.

    94 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rogergerardcole's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120470/script-recording-93279.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hahahah, I love characters, but I've never had an opportunity to really get into character V.O. These lines are straight out of the Nolan series, if I'm correct? Good job steering away from the voices from the film.

    I like that you aimed for 3 distinct voices and I think you pulled of a decent range.

    I think Bane is Brazilian, as opposed to British. Also his mass and size play a large part of his vocal expression. You sound super sophisticated, and refined. This is a man who kills people with his bare hands. I don't think I could reach that kind of range and I can go pretty deep when i practice. But the British accent was kind of cool.

    Batman. Jeez man, this character is iconic. I hear a lot of Christian Bale in there, but it sounds good that way. Have fun playing around with it and make it your own. It's just practice anyways. :)

    Joker was my favorite of the three. Pretty creepy and jovial. Remember he's a psychopath serial killer. put some menace in that laugh.

    It's only 3 lines here's my interpretation. I picture Batman hanging upside down with chains around his arms and legs after Bane beats the crud out of him. Joker is holding a knife and picking dirt out of his nails.

    Bane delivers his line with a punch to Batman's solar plexus (the line could go with the punch. DIE!)

    Batman, grossly injured with internal bleeding, delivers his line weak but determined.

    Joker slides the knife against the stubble on Batman's chin, threatens his life in his usual joking manner. Then laughs as he nicks the corner of his lip with the blade.

    Again no need to slate.

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    Batman Versus

    Script:

    BANE
    You will watch your great city burn, Batman; then, I will give you permission to die.
    BATMAN
    Not on my watch, Bane.
    JOKER
    We're just trying to put a little smile on your face.
    Haha.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vanhickman's recording

    There are 3 characters in this script. All are done with my voice, no recording add-ins. My main concern is the performance of the 3 characters. Did I capture them? Second is the issue of recording quality. I think I eliminated the background noise of the extremely loud fan on my new laptop.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129235/script-recording-98655.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the range of the characters you have so far. On a technical level, I feel Bane has too much gruff to his voice, it makes it difficult to understand him. Bane in the comics is... basically a pump-up/drugged-up luchador. He's intimidating, but it sounds like you're straining your voice in trying to make him sound so evil. My advice for him is to let go more, don't try so hard with him. He's not superhuman persay, so it's ok to not sound so gruff and evil. If you can add a Spanish accent, that would be a plus.
    For Batman, if any character out of these 3 should have the gruff voice it's him. He's in disguise, so he's trying to hide his regular voice. No need to make it SUPER deep, but take what you did and "try to hide it" a little more. If that makes sense. Remember, he's not a superhero, he's a vigilante making his own justice.
    And for the Joker: find the joke. His whole character is that he can always find the joke, even if it's something gruesome. He's crazy, so don't be afraid to let go and go crazy! Here you sound more like Jared Leto's Joker, which is fine if that's the choice you are making. But coming for a fan of the comics and character, The Joker is so much fun to play because of how crazy and cunning he is, so feel free to let go more instead of sounding so intimidating.
    Overall I think you did a great job with your voices, I can see you doing Animation. I hope my explanation of the characters make sense and help you develop them more!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesdoit1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104406/script-recording-83193.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read seems to be nice, but you should probably consider upgrading your recording device. It is quite a challenge to listen to this recording with all the background noise.

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    Beauty and the Beast

    Script:

    Once upon a time in a far away land a young prince lived in a shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish and unkind. But then one winter’s night an old beggar woman came to the castle and offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift and turned the old woman away but she warned him not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within. And when he dismissed her again, the old woman’s ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince tried to apologize but it was too late for she had seen that there was no love in his heart. And as punishment she transformed him into a hideous beast and placed a powerful spell on the castle and all who lived there.
    Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose which would bloom until his 21st year. If he could learn to love another and earn her love in return, by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would be broken. If not he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair and lost all hope. For who could ever learn to love a beast!

    78 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Peter's recording

    I wanted to try and give a more intense psychological feel. Success?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry to say, I did not get the feeling of "a psychological feel" to the read. It was an ok read,, but if your trying to push the felling of it,, I think there is a good bit of limb you can still climb out on. Lets start with one of the first signs of emotion in the voice, volume.. there was little to no manipulation of volume. Same with tone.. very little variances. A few words were said a bit dramatic,, but other wise it sounded to me, like a guy with a accent reading, Now its true, if it were not for the accent, I may think it more dramatic, but to some (me included) the foreign accent always sounds a bit dramatic, so for it to stand out, it needs to be even more pronounced. Now by " psychological feel" you may have been going for more like a" Hanniball Lecter " kind of feel , with the father beans speech.. If so, then you still need to go further out on the limb with dramatic manipulation, of not only the items above, but dramatic phrasing as well. As as a for instance the phrase "it was too late for she had seen that there was no love in his heart." I hear no emotion, no drama, no feeling. I might suggest, finding a sample of a read ( hear or anywhere), that sounds the way your accomplish, then mimic it, record it,, and compare it. Have you ever tried to bend a metal coat hanger to 90 degrees? If you only bend it to 90 degrees, it bounces back and stops somewhere in the middle. If you want it to be 90 degrees, you have to bend it well past, and then it bounces back to 90. Similarly, when we try things out of our comfort zone, we often have to bend our selves far past where we think we need to bend , to end up where we want. Try going to far,,then pull in later if you need. Think of it as your "psychological feel" budget.. if you have to much budget, its easier to rain it in, then if you don't have enough, and you try to make it fill the void.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your advice. You guys have the accent not me ;-) 'You can rope 'em in but you can't rope 'em out'. (btw the word is 'rein' not 'rain'). Point taken and there are obvious ways to break down the interpretation. Hannibal Lecter menace was not what I was trying to achieve.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with knm on this one, I'm afraid. It's just flat and sounds read. There's no real storytelling - no ups and downs, quickening or slowing, increases or decreases in volume - just even-paced and monotonous. Go for a "sympathetic feel" rather than "psychological". The Beast is a tragic, but sympathetic character in the end.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there,
    Found that this had no real feeling in this, all words sounded the same virtually, yet you have a wonderful voice, love to listen to some more work you have done.

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    Beauty and the Beast

    Script:

    Once upon a time in a far away land a young prince lived in a shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish and unkind. But then one winter’s night an old beggar woman came to the castle and offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift and turned the old woman away but she warned him not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within. And when he dismissed her again, the old woman’s ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince tried to apologize but it was too late for she had seen that there was no love in his heart. And as punishment she transformed him into a hideous beast and placed a powerful spell on the castle and all who lived there.
    Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose which would bloom until his 21st year. If he could learn to love another and earn her love in return, by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would be broken. If not he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair and lost all hope. For who could ever learn to love a beast!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rogergerardcole's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello rogergerardcole

    I love this movie, and it's extremely notable in terms of copy. It's great practice material. Lets take a look at it.

    Interpretation is a bit off for me to be honest. Is this a children's story? Adult contemporary? Teenage Audience that Hollywood always wants? Try to imagine your audience. For children, go for wonder and fantasy. Adult, Dark and mysterious. Teenagers... well actually I have no idea how that should sound but your voice sounds young enough to hit the audience.

    Vocal performance is a bit lackluster for my tastes. Personally I always wanted to do a great fantasy narration in voice over, but my tones are mostly commercial or explainer/ medical/ education videos. I think you would do well to listen to the famous narrators. David Attenbourough, Patrick Stewart, Donald Sutherland, Tom Stechschulte. Listen to their performances and you'll see what I mean. Just youtube them and you'll note a massive difference between descriptive words, emotional content, inflection and subtext. Act it out and feel the script with your wording.

    Some notable gaps and hesitations within sentences. Note your punctuation, and read as best you can, but practice reading each sentence with a full diaphragm of air and in one breath. Then sip your air throughout your read in the most natural spots. Sipping requires some practice but Bill Dewees on youtube talks about it sometimes, but it helps me with my medical narrations.

    Recording quality has a some noticeable background noise, paper flutters perhaps near the beginning. Maybe an Aircon in the background or something?

    Also, there's also no reason to "SLATE" your practice recordings, you won't be submitting these for work demos, so no need for it. :)

    Keep it up and practice practice practice!

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    Chuck Wagon Tales- Cookie the Cook.

    Script:

    Hey everybody, my name is Cookie, and welcome to Chuck Wagon Tales. Today, we's gonna make frijoles, and for those of you don't know- frijoles means BEANS, lots and lots of beans! Heh!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear coreybarba's recording

    I know I'm a little close to the mic on this little exercise, but I'm still ironing out my technique. The character is my old cowboy cook voice, the sort who provided comic relief in Western movies. Is this a convincing performance you can imagine hearing in an animation?

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    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds convincing to me, Corey. Maybe just a little fast, but I like your character. Careful not to drop the last word in the title, Chuck Wagon Tales.

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed the character.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys! Good looking out on my getting droppy with the word "Tales", Bill.

    Peer Feedback:

    Corey, great character. Cartoonish, fun, and very believable. Congrats on winning last week's recording contest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job, excellent character.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with everyone, the character was pretty excellent and be sure to not drop the word "Tales," as it is possibly one of the most important lines in the read. Don't punch it, just don't lose it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I found this really enjoyable and convincing to listen to, brilliant job,

    Peer Feedback:

    Very light and happy, maybe a bit too sped up, but besides that, it was great and very entertaining.

    Peer Feedback:

    I could definitely imagine hearing it in an animation - really nice job! It was great to listen to!

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    Cinderella Audition

    Script:

    (worried, stern) Why didn't you tell us this is where you were? Do you realise how scared we all were? Jim was looking for you everywhere! And Anya and I didn't know what to do... What if something terrible happened?

    (surprised) Adopted? Why didn't you tell us sooner?

    (excited) Leave? Tonight?

    (reel of crying/laughing)

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Swivel Swirl's recording

    Just want some feedback on how I well I do the impression as well as my recording quality. If anyone's wondering, I'm using a Blue Snowball Mic with a pop filter and Audacity to record.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-115327/script-recording-90085.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    As with your other recordings, I think the quality of recording is good. I also like the quality of voice - seems appropriate. Again I would work on enunciation, not blending your words together. The laughing and crying are great.

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    Coyote in New York

    Script:

    This is a true story. See, that's a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don't worry, I wasn't dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream - to go where no coyote had gone before...New York City!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DAn Rivera's recording

    Newbie...

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    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this...I liked it a lot actually. Recording quality needs some work but I would say you've got a great character happening here! I loved the way you said, "I had a dream." The ending, "new york city," was a little awkward for me but hey, you went for it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks,
    As far as recording quality goes- is it a technicality issue?
    I have very good equipment but a less than ideal (terrible) environment.
    With "NYC", I guess there's a number of ways it can be said.
    I'll work on variety.
    Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    Pause between "see" and "that's a photograph" is really long.
    Awesome characterization!
    I would have emphasized " asleep at the Bronx Zoo" as one whole idea, instead of "asleep" ...."at the bronx Zoo.
    It was fearless and that I loved! Was fun to hear.

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    Dan,

    I LOVED your read!! Still smiling after hearing it. Great character, I saw that Coyote and wanted to hear the rest of the story.

    In terms of recording quality, I could hear a bit of hissing in the background.

    Great job.

    Deidre

    Peer Feedback:

    Regarding quality, I just heard some pops and cracks, nothing major. Didn't really mention much on it cause I think a few retakes and adjusting your distance with the mic would fix it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dan,

    I'm glad I dropped by today and heard your recordings. Loved this performance and the Ghost one as well. Get in touch with me I have a Client that would be interested in your work. I can send you a couple of scripts. It's paid work and steady.

    Dan

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved this. I you made the character come to life. Don't really have any criticism on the recording or your voice.

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    Coyote in New York

    Script:

    This is a true story. See, that's a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don't worry, I wasn't dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream - to go where no coyote had gone before...New York City!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear voiceovermitch's recording

    Submitting my "homework" from my last session with my coach. My ultimate goal is to get into animation, however it was recommend first to focus on commercial and narration to master the basics before tackling the animation genre. I plan on doing that.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-25639/script-recording-49867.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    What if you give it a Robert Downey Jr. snide feel? Fast-talking and a little sarcastic. Or, since he's narrating in first person, a film noir read. Cool and casual.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the read, however I thought that you might want to pick up the pacing a bit. I would look at video of coyotes and their behavior, and try to fit the voice to that behavior. Also, I would look at the geography. The character was caught in New York City?? What would a coyote (not really a native of NY) from Central Park sound like??

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    Dangerously Ever After

    Script:

    Princess Amanita loved things that were dangerous. She loved her pet scorpion and her brake-less bicycle, and her collection of daggers and broken glass.She loved leaning out of the topmost turret in the castle, and walking blindfolded at the edge of the moat.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    Narration for a children's book.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-83841.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    There is a little room echo in the recording. Can't tell if it's actually your recording space or something in your processing chain.

    Also, for audiobooks, there's nothing wrong (or right) about leaving in breath sounds - it kinda makes you sound more "human". If I were to guess, I would think that you either edited them out or used a noise gate/de-breather. There is one space that sounds totally dead (no sound) which would be a little disturbing to a listener in a long form format like an audiobook, even if the listener doesn't quite know why. (I usually leave most of mine in, but knock them down about -18dB.) It also sounds like you were running out of breath beginning with the last sentence. I'm not one for strictly observing punctuation, but with good writing it might not be a bad idea.

    The general, the feeling of the piece is very nice and would be relate-able to a child, without sounding like condescending baby talk. (Did you consider an age range of your audience?) If anything, slow it down just a touch. And be just a titch (technical word) more deliberate about some words. For instance: in the second sentence, you fully formed the word "loved", but in the other two instances, not so much. Since the word appears three times in three successive sentences (which goes back to the "good writing" comment - which implies that it is an important concept to the author), the word deserves its due. However, not with the exact same stresses or inflections all three times - switch it up. For instance, you might draw it out in the first sentence as a setup for the following two ("Princess Amanita looooved things that were daaaangerous."), but again without sounding like baby talk. Then she "loved this" and she "loved that" - which is probably leading to a statement of something she doesn't love so much. It's a setup for something coming down the line.

    This (genre) is something for you to explore.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great advice James, as usual. :)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mohsameh's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-112040/script-recording-95556.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey bud.

    I can't really help with copy interpretation, but if you want to include the copy/script in future posts, I'd be happy to help.

    I would say separate each script and focus on one performance at a time. If you're doing a BUNCH of different voices like that in a row. Like I heard the age exercise, Smaug from the Hobbit, and Shaggy. Maybe focus on one at a time? :)

    Pacing is a bit off, like you are reading the lines. I have that problem too when I'm not prepared for a script. you might want to read each script 10 - 20 times until you feel you remember the lines and put them into your performance. Then put the lines into the characters voice after you've practiced and see how it sounds maybe?

    Watch out for your pronunciation of certain words:
    "... don't you see they are comink..."
    "... i walk wid a cane..."
    "... i have to be fitten nimble..."
    "... the power contain in these orbs can turn you into a living got..."
    "... come now done be shy...."
    "... it's just nut fair...."
    "... it's gonna be (a) really coolrip for all of us..."

    I'm afraid of characterization to be honest, because it requires the most amount of preparation and performance, IMHO. I like your voice though, where are you from? Would you be willing to post a single script narration in just your regular tone of voice?

    Regards

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Kevin a hundred-fold. I too, tend to shy away from doing characters for a number of reasons; it's just not a comfort zone for me (yet). In that regard, I think the effort alone is worthy of applause. It's hard, though, for my ear to separate each character's nuances. I think your voice is above-average and the recording quality was quite good. Perhaps the pronunciation "discrepancies" are intentional and character related but as Kevin pointed out, it's hard to tell without a script/copy. Good try, lad. Please keep posting. .....bob

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you guys for the detailed feedback. I will try posting a single script with regular tone of voice soon. I am from Egypt :) what did my accent made you feel I am from? :)

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    Dr Now (animation) second take

    Script:

    Woken up ill?

    

Dr Now is an amazing new app that let’s you and your family have live video consultations with qualified GPs, at your convenience.

    

We even have our own pharmacies, to deliver your medicines in as little as 2 hours.



    Better than being one of the millions waiting up to 2 weeks for an NHS appointment.



    We’re the world’s first app to diagnose and deliver your medicines, and as we’re benefit-in-kind free, we’re great for you, and your employer.

    

Download the free app today, and see a doctor now.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jackieweiner1's recording

    Second take as I worked with previous feedback today, thanks. Would love to hear any thoughts. Has to be within a 30 second time frame which I finally got.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-80408/script-recording-84330.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Heya, the quality is good. I would try and keep the pacing a little bit consistent. Right where you said "Dr Now" at the beginning, you gave a little pause then read the next part of the sentence a bit too quickly up until the next comma. Other than that, everything else sounds really nice! You have a unique voice too :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. Like how you hit Dr. Now. Thought the middle was particularly nice with the changes in tone and how you kept it clear but quick. Also, nice not letting yourself get snagged up on the commas. Would be interested in hearing it equalized with a little less in the sibilant zone, but nit picking.

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    Dr Now (animation)

    Script:

    Woken up ill?

    

Dr Now is an amazing new app that let’s you and your family have live video consultations with qualified GPs, at your convenience.
    

We even have our own pharmacies, to deliver your medicines in as little as 2 hours.


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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jackieweiner1's recording

    Hi All I would like feedback on sound, I am a newbie and have just moved into a new "treated" closet space. Also, performance. The script should run 30 seconds, I know I am 2 seconds over right now. It requires, neutral British Accent or slight London twang for TVC in London area. Thank you so much for any input. I would like to work on this to submit by tomorrow. Here's the clients example. www.youtube.com/watch?v=XoqXiWY8XIQ

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    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, really ask the question. It's the setup for the rest of the copy (the answer). You kind of plowed into it from the getgo and smasned it all together. Even a few more mili-seconds of space would set it off.

    Billboard "Dr. Now" a bit. It's the only iteration of the app's name. (Except for the play on words at the end.)

    That said, you're probably thinking that it will make the thing longer. I would suggest tightening up the pace of the rest by going friendlier, happier and more urgent with the information and the message.

    And the line "Better than being one of the millions waiting up to 2 weeks for an NHS appointment.

" is kind of a wrinkle your nose put down.

    And don't miss the play on words at the end. It's basically the app name, but you can have some fun with it - like you're in on the joke. Maybe insert a comma. "...and see a doctor, now." as apposed to "later" by waiting for an NHS appointment. (It was delivered that way in the video.)

    Smile and have fun with it.

    Recording quality wise, there is a little popping of plosives here and there and the some S's are a bit sibilant. The editing out of the breaths is a little abrupt, kind of slamming one sentence into another. I also hear some ambient noise/fuzz in between the words in some of the longer sentences, which might not be a problem with a little NR applied.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James
    I have worked on the script again using your suggestions, I hope they are noticeable and will upload soon. 30 seconds is very quick but I have it within the time frame now as well.

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    Edge Studio Anime Practice Script

    Script:

    You don't understand! Why do you not believe me,
    when the signs of evil are all about you! Look at me... LOOK AT ME!! I am the only one
    who can save you... the only one who...who KNOWS how these creatures think...who KNOWS
    their weakness....

    Why do you laugh as if I were a madman? Wait a second...WAIT, WAIT ... where are you
    taking me?... WHERE ARE YOU TAKING ME? Don't you see they are coming? Just answer me..
    DO YOU NOT SEE THE SIGNS?

    When the last of the day's light has disappeared from the horizon...you will see...Yes..yes,
    you WILL SEE! ... And by then.. it will be too late.. No.. NO... NOOOOOO!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jrobertsva89's recording

    Looking for critique on delivery and emotion moreso. I am also trying something new for the audio quality

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-87655/script-recording-71407.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to say I liked it. You committed yourself to the script and a difficult one at that. There are no half measures to this script. You are either all in or all out. There's no middle ground. Bravo for going all in. There are spots that you could improve on but all in all this was definitely a thumbs up read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I have not have had the opportunity to audition for or record animation or game play as of yet, so I'm only guessing, based on the seminars I have taken and conversations I have had with those people who do do them.

    This sounds really good. Good energy and emotion. This kind of stuff is meant to be a bit over the top.

    Looking at the script, the only thing I might suggest is that the ellipses are meant for actual "breaks" for editing purposes, as opposed to fragments of longer sentences. Think of the many twists and turns that video games take - go through one door you find treasure, go through the other door you die. So the games are constructed to have multiple courses of action - and the VO is recorded in a non-linear fashion. So I would guess that nearly each one of these sentences and/or sentence fragments are is a separate entity.

    What strung them together here was all of the heavy breathing. Yes, there is a lot of heavy breathing and grunting and other big, wordless sounds, but (from what I understand) each one of those is its own entity as well - that's why they usually save those things for the end of a session, because it rips the s--t out of your voice. It's left to the director/programmer/engineer to cut that all together. So what they require are "clean" samples of dialogue and FX sounds to play with. Separate pieces.

    Here are some links to a series of YouTube videos about a video game recording session. They may prove interesting:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dWL8YtsWGwc

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P0DUuXzJQyw

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zuPJV4L_P9w

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the commitment, for sure. Monologues like this are hard to do AND hard to really judge. But I think you did well.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good marketable sound for this genre. You started off well but it became laboured by your focus on words rather than story. "The only one, who, who knows..." and others didn't sound natural. Try to take your eyes off the page and visualise it's really happening. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    @Richurd Thank you!! I appreciate the feedback! I only recently started working with Anime and I quite enjoy it

    @jamesromick Thanks I appreciate it! Now that you mention it, I didn't think about that! I will keep it mind for next time :) I watched those videos and found them insightful, thanks!

    @TxTom Thanks! The practice makes perfect :)

    @ArlenChitty I'm glad to hear you think I fit the genre. Thanks for the suggestion! I will try to apply it

    Thanks everyone for the feedback! Great advice!

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Jroberts!

    Very nice job-- I think you have a really nice voice for anime-- you fulfill the archetype of the earnest young hero, a character seen frequently.

    Performance wise-- I really like how you used different volumes to communicate levels of emotion. And yet you did it all in a very controlled way (without blowing the listener's ears off!) With a script that calls for a lot of shouting, the challenge is to not scream so much that it becomes hard to listen to, and you managed to balance it all out nicely.

    Since this is such a long monologue I do think you can pick up the overall pace and get through it quicker-- but as you do that, don't let yourself lose the nice specificity you have from line to line.

    I do agree with ArlenChitty that there is more room to make the words flow naturally-- I think her suggestion of taking your eyes off the page and really think about the story is a good suggestion. I would add to that, to take some liberties with the punctuation so that those pauses at the ellipses sound more natural and less forced.

    However, overall-- very nice job!

    Best,
    Noelle Romano

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach June 9, 2014 at 2:03AM

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Noelle! Sorry for the delayed response! Thanks it means a lot to hear! I would love to get into that genre. Ok thanks for the feedback! I will try and work on those tips and submit another check up at some point :)

    Best,
    James

    Peer Feedback:

    i enjoyed listening to this recording and i agree that you have the voice for a young male character in anime. I even got goose bumps near the end.

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    Ghost In The Shell soliquoy

    Script:

    A copy is just an identical image. There is a possiblity that a virus could destroy an entire set of systems, and copies due not give rise to variety and originality. Life perpetuates itself through diversity, and this includes the ability to sacrifice itself if necessary. Cells repeat the process of regeneration and degeneration until one day they die, obliterating an entire set of memory and information. Only genes remain. Why continually repeat this process? Simply to avoid the weaknesses of an unchanging system.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VideoJames's recording

    I'm trying to work on more dramatic reading. Opinions?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-90975/script-recording-91200.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi VideoJames,

    You have succeeded in conveying a detached and ominous sense of foreboding, if that was what your intention. For example "ability to sacrifice itself" is delivered dead pan, rather than with an emphasis on 'sacrifice'.
    Every word is clearly enunciated.
    It will be difficult not to take this narration seriously.

    Good read!

    All the best!

    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    I would love it if you tightened up most of the pauses. Some seem unintuitive and make the read feel choppy (e.g. "....entire set of systems -- and copies due [sic] not...."

    regard the voice - I like it. Kind of a Rod Serling, but not a cheesy one.

    recording quality - seems sort of flat with a touch of muddiness probably from the recording space. Try adding in a pinch of higher end EQ to bring the voice right to the front.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought this was really well done! The pauses maybe could be tightened up, but I can feel what you were trying to do there and it was effective. Sounded great in my headphones.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Drake2774's recording

    This is from an animation. Please give feedback on how this performance sounds.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117410/script-recording-91473.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! Great distinctive character voice. Fun, enthusiastic. You'll be doing Disney work for sure. Thanks for sharing!

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    Hi, University Mom!

    Script:

    Hi, University Mom!
    (Witty) Hi, Mom, How were the undergraduate students today? Were they useful for once, or do you wonder why you went into work today at all?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Beverly Ann's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Hi, University Mom! for feedback forum.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good Mom voice - liked the tonal changes.

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds like you're really having a conversation rather than just reciting lines - nice job. I think you're voice fits well for the character.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jourdan ortiz's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-103277/script-recording-81075.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Jordan
    Nice read! You have a smooth and engaging voice. I did notice something that you should address-I noticed it because I am dealing with the same issue: you tend to drop your Rs.
    Soar sounds like "saw"
    your sounds like "ya"
    yourself sounds like "yaself"
    more sounds like "maw"
    matter sounds like "matta"
    No worries. This can easily be corrected. Take the words I listed and practice them focusing on better articulation of the "r" sound. Before you know it you will see an improvement and be able to correct yourself.
    You may want to add articuation exercises to your practice regime. I do them every day and I find them very helpful. You can find these exercises on youtube.
    Good Luck. You have a great sound.

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    Kayley Audition

    Script:

    (friendly) Hey Cindy, how's it going?

    The big adoption party! It's the night most of us get adopted! Any of this sound familiar?

    (amazed) They must be completely insane!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Swivel Swirl's recording

    Just want some feedback on how I well I do the impression as well as my recording quality. If anyone's wondering, I'm using a Blue Snowball Mic with a pop filter and Audacity to record.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-115327/script-recording-90087.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm rather new to VO, so to me the recording quality sounds good. I think you definitely captured friendly. I would suggest some articulation in terms of making sure you get all of the consonants of the words in there. Specifically "get adopted" seemed to miss the "t" on get. So the tone and quality are quite nice, however I would work on not blending the words together (perhaps it is rushing?).

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Brunner's recording

    Hi guys! I'm creating some new character voices. Here's one of my new ones. His name is Mason Lee. He's half American and Chinese in a martial arts school. He is one of the top students but very cocky. Please let me know what you think. All suggestions for performance and quality are welcome. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8457/script-recording-83236.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I love it! Especially how you said "butt". Very nice. not over the top, but sounds like a young kid who is kind hearted by confident!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you redfrohock!

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    Practice character demo

    Script:

    SOUTHERN HERMIT: Hi animal control? I'm looking out here in my pasture at what appears to be a medium-to-large-sized griffon. Yeah he's half lion, half eagle and a hundred percent not welcome on my property.

    AVANTE GARDE VILLAIN: And I, Jurgen Bauhaus von Zeitgeist, will soon unleash my abstract conceptual performance art on the whole world!

    CONQUISTADOR: Do not think of me as your "conquistador," think of me as a friend. ... A friend who is conquering you.

    LEPRECHAUN: Well of course you can't have my gold -- that's kind of the point of being a leprechaun. But maybe you think you can just come and take it like you took our lands, our rosaries and our very freedom. {Menacing} Well I got news for you, mate, I'll die before I let you get your limey hands on a single bloody farthing of it.

    SPANISH CLASS
    INSTRUCTOR: Leccion uno. La guerra civil fue el evento mas importante en la historia espanola del ciglo 20.
    STUDENT: Umm, yo tengo un gato y ... bueno?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear barjengo34's recording

    This is just a medley of crudely-recorded character clips, for EVENTUAL use on a demo. Since I'm a noob with Audacity and can't splice clips, I had to do it all in one take with a random door-closing sound at the end, and the quality leaves a lot to be desired. The copy is just random stuff I wrote. Thanks everybody!!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120193/script-recording-96667.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello!

    Your levels are not good. Some low, some higher but they need more consistency - perhaps try using a compressor but make sure your input levels are ok at the start (if you decide to re-record)

    The performance is quite nice but it's hard to tell because of the sound quality. It also sounds like you need to treat your recording space, as I can hear sound-reflection.

    Best wishes,

    Paul.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesdoit1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104406/script-recording-83192.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I find it interesting that so many people listened but did not comment. I am no professor especially at narration but I can say you have a nice and easy voice to listen to. I liked your second recording more than your first, it seemed there was more personality. From where I am sitting I believe narration must be one of the hardest genre's. Good luck with your VO career

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for taking the time to comment:) I was starting to think maybe the read was so bad that Noone wanted to comment. I'm really working on sounding more conversational. Once again thank you

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    Sailor Moon Stars - Queen Nehelenia Audition

    Script:

    Line #1 - "Such peaceful happiness, nothing can break this peace."

    Line #2 - "Who are you? And how dare you disturb my peace!"

    Line #3 - "I will kill everything the White Moon Princess loves!"

    Line #4 - (Evil laugh)

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear S.Sims's recording

    I'm really drawn to female villains in animation. I feel that my voice suites that particular niche and I happen to really love portraying these types of characters!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8166/script-recording-35428.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep, your voice really suits this genre very well. The music could be toned down a little so we can appreciate your exquisite mysterious voice...

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there! I love your voice, I definitely think it suits this genre and you can tell you revel in being the villainess! I do feel that maybe some variation is needed as all three sentences seem to be on the same level with a similar tone and pace. Perhaps it's just that the sentences call for a similar read (or perhaps it is my hearing!) or maybe the music is masking more subtle nuances? Have you got a paragraph that you could do? I would love to hear more! I hope that helps? Niki

    Peer Feedback:

    love the dark tone.
    Could you try it without the background music and vocal fx?

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    Script submitted by bonemaster2

    Script:

    Todd, let me tell you something. You might think all these awards mean something to somebody, but to me they're no more important than this cup of coffee. Let me explain something. You won't like it, but still.

    If I stript away all the meanings behind your awards and this coffee, they are just things. If they are ever to receive a value again, it won't be because they were once somebody's possesion or accolade. Their value will be determined by the one value everyone understands; and that's cash.

    Also, you need to realize we take too much pride in too many things just to feel happy. Since these awards are not preparing you for the struggles ahead, I suggest you brush them aside, and focus on reality.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bonemaster2's recording

    This is a repeat of the script I used for my last check-up. I made some changes based on suggestions provided. Hence why the instructor who critiqued it last time should be the same who did this the first time. I'm still not sure what hand signs are supposed to do. I 'd like some feedback on this.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5831/script-recording-26505.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Again, it's pronounced AK-O-LAID not OAK-U-LAUD. http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/accolade

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - you left out words and added words in the first paragraph. You mis-pronounced a word. If you go to Dictionary.com you can type in the word and listen to how it should be pronounced. Did you mean to sound that tired and frustrated, if so, that was too much for me. Perhaps I didn't understand why you chose to read it this way.
    Hand signs helps your voice show emotion, they help your voice deliver the appropriate sound for the read. Ok good effort.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Greg,

    I really admire your determination and consistency with your practice.

    By "hand signs" she means gestures-- the natural movement of our hands that we use in everyday conversation, or when having an argument or giving a speech. I agree that using this "body language" will help the copy sound more natural.

    Right now most of the sentences sound the same. There isn't a lot of variety happening. This is a very challenging advanced piece of copy. I think it is too much to attempt for right now. You should be practicing with shorter pieces of copy, and really try to imagine the person in front of you that you are speaking to. Remember: the goal is to sound natural.

    Great effort! Good luck!

    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 24, 2012 at 6:16PM

    Peer Feedback:

    I just love Chris's comment. All I can think of is the priest in The Princess Bride. Nuff said

    Peer Feedback:

    I guess I should've be more specific with the emotions I was trying to get across.

    This script was meant to be told by someone who is just been put off by, or tired with, another person's gloating. Most people who are just fed up either put their hand to their face in that bored sort sort of way, or they point out the awards, and pick them up, and say what they think of them. Not wanting my speech to sound slurred, I went for the latter, meaning I picked up the awards while I was doing the speech.

    Even though most of you can not see what I am doing, I am absolutely trying my hardest to get the point across to the character I am speaking too, that he should focus on the future and not spend so much time with his head in the clouds. This script is actually taken from a excerpt from the anime Black Lagoon, but a few words were changed to reflect my experiences in life., since society often judges individuals more for their awards then their skills.

    I hope I've cleared some things up, and I'll continue sending in check-ups and taking audition ringers. This is the only style of learning that I take pride in anymore.

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    Script submitted by Mellonee

    Script:

    Coyote In New York
    This is a true story. See, that's a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don't worry, I wasn't dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream - to go where no coyote had gone before...New York City!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mellonee's recording

    Hi Everyone! On the suggestion of pro feedback, thought I would try another character/animation voice. Dry voice this time. Love to hear your thoughts and thanks so much for your time.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Coyote In NY.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Me again....this script was chosen from the script library. Just wanted to be clear about that. Mellonee

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Mellonee. I liked the voice in the beginning, and then with some of the tempo changes the voice itself seemed to change, too, so I think there might be a consistency problem. I liked the level of emotion in the read, too. Also, I can see why someone might tell you to do character stuff because your voice has a lot of personality in it already.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Tonia. Thanks so much for the comments. Maybe I can take some more character classes at some point. Sometimes, I feel the tempo change is dictated by emotional interpretation, but the change in voice (pitch) seems to follow as well. Tricky stuff, but definitely fun stuff!

    Peer Feedback:

    Mellonee, I agree with Tonia. At the beginning your voice had a nice rasp to it...deep in the throat. But when you said "Hey" the rasp was gone and that was enough to make it sound like a totally different voice. You are right that the tempo changes do make it better. Here is a suggestion since you are having trouble maintaining your character voice with the tempo changes. Practice it first without the changes and ensure you can maintain the voice through out. Then start changing the tempo bit by bit listening to make sure you can maintain the voice. If you find that even making the small changes as you work to the amount of change you want makes you lose the voice, then find a different voice that you can do without it happening.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Daniel. Thanks so much for your practice tip. I will definitely try your suggestion.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Rhett's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-89658/script-recording-80868.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Rhett,

    As I said in a different comment concerning your work , you certainly have a talent for character voices, and your production work is very good! I guess either it's a coincidence that your characters sound the same on this demo? Try to make the characters as different as possible, being distinctive on each one. I really give you credit for your enthusiasm! Keep going!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marysboy -

    Thanks for listening! This was a bit of a fun mash-up for me, and I am learning new things in practice and also the feedback I get from people like you. :-) The next round of characters I do, I'll really punch them out more, with some more experimentation and tweaks. These voices were one offs I made in my car in parking lots and stoplights to and from work. I think my next step is to do some writing and several iterations and takes before I lay down some final tracks!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought that you did a great job with the performance - It felt like the characters were engaging and actually speaking with each other. Maybe you could also experiment with different age ranges or have the characters in different settings, that way the demo can also show a variety of emotions. But great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Brian, thanks for the input! Yes, this was a fun experiment - I just had a lot of voices and tried experimenting. I also learned how to use multi-tracks and sounds effects the week before, and was having a wild old time!

    I was trying to convey the feel of a person was walking through a saloon, like he was overhearing snippets of conversation as he walked about and then they would fade out of earshot.

    I'm hoping in a few months to post some more work - Oddly enough, I have been contracted for 2 audio books, with around 40 different characters each (different ages, genders, economic statuses, and supernatural creatures as well!), si I haven't had time to update! It's been a HUGE learning experience, and I hope in future posts that I can (hopefully) show a growth in my skills.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear biggjoej2003's recording

    the final, edited, by me, version

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123947/script-recording-94584.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    One thing to avoid is bombing the site with too many recordings in a row. The unwritten rule of thumb is no more than 2 in a 24 hour period. This is a lot of fun, but it pushes others down in the queue who may not get heard and offered comment.

    There is also a glitch (one of many) in the software that Edge uses for the Forum. Even if you see that some one has posted a recording since your last one, if you post too soon, yours get lined up one after the other anyway.

    Another suggestion is to submit the both takes on one mp3 in a single posting and state that in your written introduction - like, "Here are 2 takes, one raw and one with processing FX."

    Peer Feedback:

    James! again.....you're here....your comment is duly noted. I'd prefer critique on my work, not frequency....but it is an open forum. With that said ...please feel free to pass over my postings and comment on others....as I have done with yours.

    Good tip on the Mp3 however!

    Cheers (Oh Keeper of the Edge) ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Good stuff, biggjoe, but I wouldn't ignore what James has said about frequency. You get a pass, because you're new, but the unwritten rule still stands.
    Look forward to hearing more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the pass/comments Nick!

    Peer Feedback:

    Way way too dramatic for my taste. And it sounds electronically slowed down to lower the vocal frequency. Keep practicing, you could get down to 10 words or less per minute, but ask yourself the question...would the words be too garbled to understand? If this is your "final version" I think you're selling yourself short.

    Peer Feedback:

    if this were a reading for a commercial Sentry40335, I'd be inclined to agree! However, this was a reading for Narration/Animation...a dramatic reading...perhaps you haven't heard Smaug's voice from Lord of the Rings...so that reading was intentional...but thank you for taking the time to respond!

    Peer Feedback:

    You're welcome. Be well.
    bob

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    The Thanksgiving Story (Stan Freberg)

    Script:

    Narrator: Needless to say, the luncheon there under the trees

    was a great success. And a good time was had by Puritans and

    Indian alike. Everything came off beautifully with the

    exception of one minor catastrophe.

    Caterer: Whaddya mean you cooked the turkey, Charlie?

    Charlie: Well I cooked the turkey, that's all.

    Caterer: You put our national bird in the oven? Is that

    correct?

    Charlie: Yeah, well I uh...

    Caterer: And all of us had our mouths set for roast eagle

    with all the trimmings...

    Charlie: Yeah, well I uh...

    Caterer: You did a thing like that?

    Charlie: Well the two birds were lying there, side by side...

    Caterer: The turkey was for the centerpiece, Charlie! I

    mean...

    Charlie: Well they looked so much alike that... uh...

    Caterer: Well, we blew it now! They're all sitting down at

    the table out there...

    Charlie: Yeah, yeah...

    Caterer: ...starting on their little nut cups already. We

    just have to switch the birds, that's all.

    Charlie: Yeah, well...

    Caterer: Serve 'em turkey instead of eagle. But it's kind of

    scrawny looking, isn't it?

    Charlie: Yeah, well I thought I'd stuff some old bread in it

    and make it look a little fatter.

    Caterer: You do that, OK?

    Charlie: OK.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    My interpretation of an old classic. Happy T-day :-)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Thanksgiving.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice, voices stood out from one antoher well, very conversational. If I were to point out one issue it would be the music,, it kind of set it up for a much "bigger" production. It was kind of a let down when the voices started,, I was expecting with the build up,,, lots of background, sound effects and so on.. then it was only voices,,,, So it took a good preformance, and set it up, as not enough. Had it had a more appropriate musical set up,, I think it would have had a much better impact.

    Peer Feedback:

    One of my favorite comedy albums of all time. Played the vinyl until curlicues started coming off on the needle. Classic voices of the 50's and 60's.

    Not a too shabby an interpretation, Sundance.

    Found this on YouTube. The bit starts at 3:30.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6EgjwYR4bYU

    knm_voice@yahoo.com should give it a listen.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, I did listen to the You tube ,, and I think he did a great job of honoring the original performance, the into music just does not work for me. The You tube, does not have as grand of into music and i think it works well. If you lifted the music, and placed it in, on this take,, it would work just as well. And in the end we're not here for the music. This is just my opinion, and anyone that knows me will tell you I often have odd opinions, Two of which are I don’t think there is a right way to do any of this, just varying degrees of acceptance depending on who is hearing it when, and why... And what seemed right today , may not tomorrow....

    Peer Feedback:

    As far as the music goes, I will add my standard disclaimer: I have a limited amount of production music at this point, and not going to buy more until I can justify it as a deductible expense.

    Also, did I mention that I threw this whole thing together in like 20 minutes? (a bit more if you include the time to transcribe the script). So I didn't spend a whole lot of time trying to select the "best" musical tracks, but I wanted to have something there because I was trying to make it like the original (maybe I should have called it my imitation of the piece rather than my interpretation...) I even neglected to normalize it and to delete the carriage return characters when cutting and pasting the script while uploading...

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    The Truth About Fairies

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    Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you're in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sparkling wings, and glowing smiles - it's all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil, we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much, much darker than we.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Retrying this script with a more casual style. Any feedback would be much appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91316/script-recording-72206.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Personally I preferred your first read to this. Everyone has their opinion of what "they hear" in their mind, and critique based on that. The evidence is they all sound the same, maybe a change in tone or timber, perhaps a couple different words emphasized. Don't drink the kool aid! Build your own characters and styles around what you see in your mind and let them come out to play, and if you get negative feedback because of it, keep perfecting that character! If you are comfortable doing it you will be successful once the right person hears you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Daniel!

    I do enjoy performing as a character as it lets me become someone I am not! Thank you for your support, It was a great confidence booster! =].

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job John. I can tell you enjoyed what you were doing.Continue to practice and the voices will come naturally.

    Peer Feedback:

    I kind of liked that it had a more casual style to it, as I thought you were going to take a darker interpretation to it - so I'm glad it was unexpected. I agree with shalobaby that it seemed like you enjoyed the performance. I also thought that you knew which words to give inflection to.

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    War of the Worlds Motion Picture Epilogue

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    Epilogue
    From the moment the invaders arrived, breathed our air, ate and drank, they were doomed.
    They were undone, destroyed, after all of man's weapons and devices had failed,
    by the tiniest creatures that God in his wisdom put upon this earth
    By the toll of a billion deaths, man had earned his immunity,
    his right to survive among this planet's infinite organisms.
    And that right is ours against all challenges.
    For neither do men live nor die in vain.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Sorry. Here is the Epilogue recording that I couldn't include in my earlier posting.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/War of the Worlds Epilogue Final_01.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Okay. I get that you do a pretty decent imitation of the man who did the read in the first place, but seriously, why? The real deal is out there. They'll get him. How would you deliver this? I do like the imitation, I sure can't imitate Morgan.

    If you were called by Seth McFarlane to do Morgan for Family Guy or something like THAT...you would be in the ballpark!

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL, Tom I thought the exact same thing ...

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    ABC hair tonic

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    This is just a fun commercial I wrote to practice.

    ABC Hair Tonic leave me hair soft, shiny n' purdy.

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    Aku's Lament

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    Bowser: Yeah, so this one time Mario threw me into a pit of frickin lava! Lots of times! (Notices Aku) What's your stor?

    Aku: Let me tell you my story. I used to rule over the Earth with an Iron Fist, and then a Samurai, a Samurai from the past, came to the future because I sent him there, and then he spent 50 years doinig absolutley nothing. A period in which I could have killed him 3 to 200 times over, and I sat and did nothing. And what did he do? He found a portal, and then he drove a sword directly through my head.

    Bowser: Oh that's pretty rough man.

    Aku: Yes... pretty... rough...

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    Anime Script

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    You don't understand! Why do you not believe me,
    when the signs of evil are all about you! Look at me... LOOK AT ME!! I am the only one
    who can save you... the only one who...who KNOWS how these creatures think...who KNOWS
    their weakness....

    Why do you laugh as if I were a madman? Wait a second...WAIT, WAIT ... where are you
    taking me?... WHERE ARE YOU TAKING ME? Don't you see they are coming? Just answer me..
    DO YOU NOT SEE THE SIGNS?

    When the last of the day's light has disappeared from the horizon...you will see...Yes..yes,
    you WILL SEE! ... And by then.. it will be too late.. No.. NO... NOOOOOO!

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    Antz

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    Z: I think that everything must go back to the fact that I had a very anxious childhood. You know, my mother never had any time for me. You know when you're the middle child of a family of five million, you don't get any attention. I mean. How's it possible? I've always had these abandonment issues which plagued me. My father was basically a drone like I said. The guy flew away when I was just a larva and my job..don't get me started on..because it really annoys me. I was not cut out to be a worker, I'll tell you right now. But I don't have any other options. The whole system just makes me feel insignificant.
    Counsellor: Excellent. You've made a real break through!
    Z:: I have
    Consellor: Yes Z. You are insignificant!!
    Z: I am.
    Counsellor: Yes!! You know, people ask me "Doctor, why are you always happy?" And I tell them it's mind over matter. I don't mind that I don't matter! Do you get it? Do you get it?

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    Anya Audition

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    (sarcastic, exasperated) Wrinkle Lady sure says a lot of things, doesn't she?

    (angry, disbelieving) HA!

    (accusational) Hey, Jimmy. I wanna ask you something. What is going on between you and Melody? (J: Nothing) Yeah, right. There is something!

    (reel of crying/laughing)

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    Batman Versus

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    BANE

    You will watch your great city burn, Batman; then, I will give you permission to die.

    BATMAN

    Not on my watch, Bane.

    JOKER

    We're just trying to put a little smile on your face.
    Haha.

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    Beauty and the Beast

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    Once upon a time in a far away land a young prince lived in a shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish and unkind. But then one winter’s night an old beggar woman came to the castle and offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift and turned the old woman away but she warned him not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within. And when he dismissed her again, the old woman’s ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince tried to apologize but it was too late for she had seen that there was no love in his heart. And as punishment she transformed him into a hideous beast and placed a powerful spell on the castle and all who lived there.
    Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose which would bloom until his 21st year. If he could learn to love another and earn her love in return, by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would be broken. If not he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair and lost all hope. For who could ever learn to love a beast!

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    Berserk (1997) Griffith monologue

    Script:

    For some men these are the most precious, but I believe beneath them there is something even more precious than these. They are driven to pursue it, and they pursue is solely for their own sake, not other. One man's dream can hold dominion over the entire world, for one who dedicates his life to the forging of a single sword. While many can pursue their dreams in solitude, other dreams are like great storms blowing hundreds even thousands of dreams apart in their wake. Dreams breathe life into men, and can cage them in suffering. Men life and die by their dreams, but long after they've been abandoned, they still smolder deep in men's hearts. Some see nothing more than life and death. They are dead. For they have no dreams.

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    Departure

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    Boy runs to the train station after reading a letter of goodbye left by a girl. A small climatic scene:

    *Running…Trip…gets up…Continues to run*

    The train arrives, doors open, girl is about to walk in.

    B: Wait!!
    Wait Amy. You bloomed my lotus flower too. You taught me to smile too. You showed me that there were actually good things in life, and I appreciate everything you’ve done for me, deeply.

    You were…you were my light too. Don’t leave. Please! I’ll become strong. I’ll become strong so that you would never have to do anything like this every again! I’ll never run away anymore! So please…

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    Ghost In The Shell soliquoy

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    A copy is just an identical image. There is a possiblity that a virus could destroy an entire set of systems, and copies due not give rise to variety and originality. Life perpetuates itself through diversity, and this includes the ability to sacrifice itself if necessary. Cells repeat the process of regeneration and degeneration until one day they die, obliterating an entire set of memory and information. Only genes remain. Why continually repeat this process? Simply to avoid the weaknesses of an unchanging system.

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    Heros of the Imperium

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    In the grim darkness of the 41st millennium, there is only war and mankind teeters on the brink of extinction.

    There are many enemies of the Imperium.

    The Alien… The Heretic… and The Demon.

    Power and Corruption has turned Battle Brother against Battle Brother.
    .
    Who can save Mankind from annihilation?

    The Space Marines… With Bolter and Chainsaw we’ll cleanse the galaxy, sector by sector.
    Burn … Kill … Purge ...
    LET NONE SURVIVE!
    The battle lines have been drawn, and the time to make a stand is now. What side will you be on?

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    It looked a lot like you.

    Script:

    It still looked a lot like you.

    Well to me at least, it seemed like a twin that could act like I could, but not like I could. And yet, it could still remember what I'd forgotten, and can perform and look a way I used to. It's hard to describe.

    It seems like you're having a crisis with yourself. You know yourself best.

    No, it's more like a paradox of real and fake, and natural and artificial, and so much thought it doesn't make sense.

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    Optimus Prime Voice Type

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    I am Optimus Prime, and I send this message to any surviving Autobots taking refuge among the stars: We are here... we are waiting.

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    Popsi & Lucy: Fluent Frog

    Script:

    Popsi (Narrator): Once upon a time there was a little kid walking down the street.
    Lucy: My name is Lucy.
    Popsi (Narrator): She came upon a frog in the middle of the sidewalk.
    Frog: Ribbit.
    Lucy: Hello little frog!
    Frog: Ribbit ribbit.
    Lucy: (gasp) You are?
    Frog: Ribbit (croak croak ) ribbit (croak).
    Lucy: (chuckling) Oh, that’s interesting!
    Frog: (continuing) Ribbit ribbit ribbit ribbit!
    Lucy: (pondering) Hmm… I guess it’s all in how you look at it…
    Frog: (croak) Ribbit, ribbit!
    Popsi (Narrator): This little kid had a very special talent: she could speak fluent frog.
    Lucy: Well, it was very nice talking with you, little frog! I hope everything works out okay for you today. You have a good one, okay?
    Frog: (croak)
    Popsi (Narrator): What the two of them were talking about – I guess we’ll never know…

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    Ratatouille (2007)

    Script:

    In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little yet enjoy a position over those who offer up their work and their selves to our judgment. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is probably more meaningful than our criticism designating it so. But there are times when a critic truly risks something, and that is in the discovery and defense of the new. The world is often unkind to new talent, new creations. The new needs friends.

    Last night, I experienced something new, an extra-ordinary meal from a singularly unexpected source. To say that both the meal and its maker have challenged my preconceptions about fine cooking is a gross understatement. They have rocked me to my core. In the past, I have made no secret of my disdain for Chef Gusteau's famous motto: 'Anyone can cook.' But I realize, only now do I truly understand what he meant. Not everyone can become a great artist, but a great artist can come from anywhere. It is difficult to imagine more humble origins than those of the genius now cooking at Gusteau's, who is, in this critic's opinion, nothing less than the finest chef in France. I will be returning to Gusteau's soon, hungry for more.

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    Reborn - Bad Teacher

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    This is just hypothetically speaking, but, let’s just say there’s a sole student that scores in the twenty point range and painfully lowers the class average…According to me, who’s gone through an elite course, that kind of person will just be baggage and a burden on the education-conscious society. Now, is there a reason for that kind of trash to live?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Alicia Condrey's recording

    Alright, so I tweaked my Character Demo a bit. I added a brief intro and rearranged some of the tracks to give it a nicer feel. Let me you know what you think- good or bad! :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107539/script-recording-84804.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Alicia :) I've heard that many agents want to hear a character close to your natural voice in the very beginning -so if that first one is closest great, but if not you might want to lead off with something closer to your voice. And I've never heard of anyone stating the year in their slate, just fyi.

    I thought there were a couple of similar sounding ones in there that could still be weeded out, even if they're with accents - character comes through in other excerpts, and this is about showcasing your vocal placements. "...get lucky" fades out just a little too early.

    It's a nice homemade demo, but still needs just a few tweaks.

    Peer Feedback:

    Also, I really liked the sad teenager from your first one. I'd use that spot over the two different teeny valley girl type reads in this one, frankly. It had a great daughter from The Incredibles feel to it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bonemaster2's recording

    On this recording, I noticed the word "suggest" is slurred. How do I best fix that? Also, do you have a recommendation on how to sound more confident? Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5831/script-recording-26252.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I would put yourself more into the character & listen to the words you're saying. Try to do a recording where your character is more pissed off. It sounds like your sad telling the other person about this.

    Also I'm not sure you need to literally sip the coffee both times. It's slows the pace which is already slow enough. The coffee is just a device, you don't have to really take a sip. Maybe if you do take a very quick sip. It sounds like you're savoring the coffee more than trying to use it to make a point.

    Also, accolade is pronounced AK-O-LAID.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Greg,

    I very impressed with your commitment to practice and work hard at this!

    So, to answer your questions-- I actually hear that the word "brush" in the is more slurred than the word "suggest" in the sentence "I suggest you brush them aside..." Currently we lose the "r" in brush so it almost sounds like bwush. Part of this is that you need to really use your lips and make sure you are articulating. Here's an exercise that can teach you to really use your lips more. Place a pencil between your teeth and try to talk as clearly as possible while your jaws are clenched. This will force you to use your lips more.

    As for confidence-- you really need to believe in what you are saying and use a lot of hand gestures to support your intentions. Hand gestures help to make you emphasize certain key words in a very natural way. However, before you use hand gestures to emphasize certain words or ideas, you need to be very clear in what and why you are saying something as the character. Look at the text and try to understand why someone would feel compelled to say these particular words to someone. Really try to put yourself in the persons shoes. Empathize with their desires and see if you can allow your voice to reflect emotions more.

    Good luck!
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 16, 2012 at 10:08PM
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    Demo Recording:

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    I am just getting a start up with professional VO work and wanted some variation so I threw this on my demo for a character voice. Feedback please...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114624/script-recording-90351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    a Woody Allen (maybe a hint of Charlie Day) ant - I can hear it.
    nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great character voice. Good to include.

    However, the recording quality is a little sub par for demo production. Some room echo and extraneous ticks and noises, either from mouth noise and/or hard edits.

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    Dave and James. Thanks for the feedback. That's encouraging for the character notes.
    And kind of in line with what I thought on the recording quality. I'm in the process of researching new equipment. So this objective take is very helpful on what your hearing. I have a couple of others to submit that I think will receive the same sort of notes on the recording quality. Thanks.

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    A lot of people have this idea that, "If I get better equipment, it'll sound better." But the bestest mic, interface, DAW, FX plugins and computer will only sound as good as the recording environment will allow. If your room is live and untreated (not sound deadened), even top of the line equipment still ain't gonna sound good. A crummy, cheap USB mic sounds great in a properly sound deadened environment. Put your investment into treating your space.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. Do you recommend any specific sources for this sound deadening? It seems there are many sources out there claiming they have the best materials; get their consultation, etc. I am actually going to be finishing my basement and will have a spare bedroom down there that will double as my recording area. I planned on framing the walls to have sound insulation in it (so many material options there) and then possibly have some portable room dividers made of acoustical panels or such to set up for recording record. Still noodling the design and materials. I've seen simple recommendations as moving blankets, but would like to make a little more aesthetically pleasing.

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    Paid Job Recording:

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    This for a children's website, part of an audio book or poem.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-80966.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It states that this is a demo recording above the blue highlighted area but it's actually a paid job recording. -psj

    Peer Feedback:

    I have no clue what you said before "noises"... maybe Pearl Creek? I had to listen a couple of times before I got even that.

    It's very sing songy, everything holds the same beat, over and over again. Now, that may be what the specs called for, or what they want, but I wanted to point it out.

    I think it could go a little slower for children.

    But you're enthusiastic and that's important :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Are you using a noise gate? It's clipping off the ends of some of your words.

    (BTW - Yesterday, I attended a day-long ACX audiobook production seminar at Audible Studios in Newark, NJ. Every sound engineer and editor, to a man and woman, said that they never use and no one should ever to use a noise gate for VO production. And especially not for audiobooks.)

    IMHO, you're too close to the mic. It doesn't allow you to give the full dynamic range (volume or intensity) to your delivery (of course, some of the dynamic volume may be squashed in processing). It sounds like you're holding back as you listen to yourself in real time to your delivery. You might think about experimenting with the one-earphone-on-one-earphone-off headphone technique just to see (hear) if it makes subtle differences.

    Quite a few clicks and mouth noises - some in the clear - that could have been edited out. For my taste (if I were a kid), the frequency range is a little bottom heavy (bass-y), a bit un-crisp, which would make just a touch difficult to decipher some words. (Probably one of the reasons bean420 had a problem with the word "noises" as stated above.)

    Peer Feedback:

    This was recorded 6 months ago and the website accepted it as is. Perhaps they did some editing and added music. But I agree with the fact the sound quality needed much improvement (mouth noises etc). But I have improved quite a bit since this recording. James, I have changed my positioning with the mic, and I record at a better distance now. Most of my recordings lately, as least sound wise are noticeably better. The recordings I have posted on here prior to this have not elicited to much negative feedback regarding sound quality. I try to keep my processing to a minimum now and am far more careful with editing out any mouth noises, etc. But my bugaboo is dropping the last consonant in words (my bad), but I see that is an issue with many people. I can't always blame my editing skills. Like any other profession it is a constant learning process. I greatly appreciate the detailed suggestions. Bean, they actually wanted a deep, senior storyteller type voice, but I agree that some words sounded garbled.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a helpful thread. Thank you for posting. I agree with the feedback, and would stress that slowing down and really picking out those names at the beginning would be important. Nice tidbits re: mic position, earphones, processing...

    Wish I were closer to go to the audiobook stuff with you, James...

    Peer Feedback:

    For anyone who is interested. They did a live stream of some of the ACX sessions at Audible Studios. The videos have been saved and can be viewed on this facebook page:

    https://www.facebook.com/goacx/app_142371818162

    You may even hear me occasionally spout some pearls of wisdom from the audience.

    There were classroom sessions throughout the day that were not streamed.

    It was an interesting event and I learned a number of useful things for producing audiobooks from my home studio.

    Peer Feedback:

    Appreciate the link, James!

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    Hey, congrats on 3rd place this week, psjones!

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia, actually It was ps underwood. But thanks anyway! Someday I'll get there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone, but I would work on the rumbling in your voice. It almost sounds Gurgled. Try smoothing it out a bit. Other than that you have a great voice.

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    Character

    Script:

    "Oh my, someone's eager. Aren't you supposed to wait three days before calling a girl?"

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    Apologies for the low sound quality--I'm using a broken headset. This is my very first try at reading a script (and first upload to the feedback forum). Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105550/script-recording-84131.mp3

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    As a 3-in-a-row, the first two were virtually the same in pacing, inflection and attitude. The third was markedly different in the playfulness, but still had the same pacing and some of the same inflections. You might think of one take as an emasculating put-down. (Do you want to give this jerk a second chance? Is he pursuing you too aggressively?). Another coy (which is what I think you went for with all three). Another possibly uber-sexy and a bit slower. (Maybe he's shy and doesn't know how to play by your rules.) But with such a short piece, it's kind of important to show three distinctly different reads (attitudes).

    Who's the guy you've pictured? Do you like/dislike him? Is he moving too fast/slow? What happened before? Where did the three day rule come from? Do you really mean it or is it a joke?

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the 3rd read the best. I like the young female voice. That is something you should pursue. Try doing some reads for young women's fashions. "Right now Target's got the coolest shoes on the planet!" ect....

    Definitely work on getting yourself a better mic. Ditch the headset and find yourself a decent USB mic it"ll make all the difference in the world. You can find them cheap on E bay. Keep at it!

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    Something i never tried before let me know what you think regards balazs

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6709/script-recording-45409.mp3

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    Pretty good boss!

    Peer Feedback:

    This is pretty good. My concerns are that it sounds a bit too "read". I don't get the feeling that it's characters having a conversation. Instead they are all YOU reading with a different voice. As a character guy, I have found that impersonations are only one part of doing voices, the other part is to enunciate and pace as the character would. The lines that begin with: Oracle.... and But victory.... are the closest thing to what they should be. Move more... make your body also become that character and follow different pacing and inflection to bring those different characters to life. The sound and technicals are great... no comments there. Also... the word "without" has an accent on it that doesn't fit the rest of the line read. Just trying to help. ;-)

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    Mark
    Thanks for listening and your comment!
    I didn't work much on characters yet but it is an area wich intrest me.
    After listening again I see what your saying.
    Thanks again for your time
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Should precursor that my plosives, though reading to the side of the mic, still come through hot. Apologies. Welcome to comment and critique on whatever comes to mind. Hopefully it can entertain. Thank you for listening. Will return all your critiques. Thank you, Daniel Pierce *Noelle, will be great to hear from you again. Thanks again for your time in the studio. Next time I'll bring my fedora. Hope you're well.

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    Overall the voice characterization is very convincing. And I like the choice of music and sonic background. You have added and subtracted some things from the script, which I would question.

    I like the treatment of your voice for each character, the booming reverb for the knight's voice as well as the different settings for the other characters. The plosives are an issue but not something that I found to be too distracting.

    The recording sound good. My only reservation is that you changed the script.

    Overall, I think it is well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Daniel, this was very entertaining to listen to. I think you are really talented in that you can do all those voices and accents. The acting is pretty believable too, and I could easily imagine you doing this for video games and other forms of animation work. Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Really cool, Daniel. I enjoyed it very much and am really impressed by your performances. The sounds and music really round this so well. Only small change I'd suggest is to make the oracle sound a bit more distant or ethereal with a plugin or effect.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Daniel!

    Very nice work! Great commitment to these characters. I love that you take you time to allow each one to unfold.

    My only criticism is that when I listened to it the first time without looking at the script, I thought the Oracle and Vix were the same character. I realize on listening to it again, that you went lower in your register into more of a growl on Vix and tried to stay very high and light for the Oracle, but they still sound close. In the real world situation, we would just cast two different actors, but since this in a great exercise in stretching your range, I would challenge you to try to further differentiate them. Maybe the Oracle is breathier? I think the parts of your delivery that get very breathy are creepy and effective. Maybe she has an English accent? See what works!

    However, very nice work!

    Best,
    Noelle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach August 15, 2012 at 5:53PM
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    Peer Feedback:

    Good job putting a lot of emotion into this as it is definitely an emotional piece. I thought you did a good job at not rushing through this and really feeling the words. I did notice that on the word "who" the "h" sound was dropped so it sounded more like "oo" instead of "hoo" which would be an easy thing to fix. Great job feeling and expressing the intensity of the words.

    Peer Feedback:

    thank you for the positive feedback, i am really trying.

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    I'm new to this field and would like some honest feedback on my performance and how I could improve.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Drake -
    kindly don't submit more than 2 or 3 recordings in a row. it pushes everyone else's stuff way down the page. just Forum etiquette...

    regarding this spot:
    the script doesn't match the recording.
    this sounds like a radio promo of some sort. you've got a lot of room noise in the recording. You can improve by creating a dedicated recording booth that is acoustically treated to keep the sound going into the mic nice and clean. Also, I think you need a better mic. this one sounded like your laptop mic. Be prepared to spend at least $250 for an adequate one.

    regarding the radio imaging performance itself, it didn't sound competitive to me, but I can't really weigh in on what to fix. Probably spend some time finding a good trainer, and listen to 100s of actual radio spots and promos.

    hope that helps,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your suggestions and I will watch recording too many in a row. Thank you.

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    Practice Recording:

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    This is my second script reading, thank you ahead for listening and leaving comments!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Again. Sloooow dooooown.

    Secondly. There are major pronunciation and elocution problems here. And, IMOH, it has to do with your ethnicity and/or regional dialect. (Although I could be totally wrong and off base. I often am.) Not that that can't be a positive. Rosie Parez is a very successful actress. But her "thing" is that she's a saucy Latina with a distinctive urban-Brooklyn/Queens- dialect and speech pattern. (If you check her WikipediA page, it also says that she developed a speech impediment.) It is part of who she is. And it kind of limits the roles that are offered to her. Fair or not, the entertainment business (and VO) are chock full of biases - ethnic, stereotypical, racial, regional, nationality, sexual/sexual preference, age related, etc. It's pretty much the only business where not being PC and personal preferences and/or prejudices are allowed. As a middle-aged to senior-ish, gray haired, white male, I would never be cast for, say, a remake of "Shaft". It's just too far of a stretch, no matter how good of an actor I may be. I might make an attempt to sound "urban" for a VO project, but it would probably sound pretty rediculous, if not stereotypical and offensive to the ears of someone who is of that culture.

    So, that said. The most glaring examples:
    "think" comes out "thing"
    "must go" - "muz-go"
    "to the fact" -"t'duh fahhhh(k)"--------
    "mother" - "mudder"
    "abandonment" -"abanuhmen"
    "father" - "fadduh"
    "don't" - "dohn"
    "insignificant" -"insignivikin" (although the Concellor comes closer to being correct)

    The separate characters aren't all that distinctive - they (vocally) sound very similar.

    My experience is that if the words mentioned above were meant to pronounced that way, the copy writer would either make an attempt to spell them that way phonetically, or make some notation as to the character's persona. And those acting and speech pattern choices are perfectly valid, if this is a "character" choice that you've made.

    Kudos to you for attacking this copy though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the very detailed feedback, I really do try to work on my pronunciation and elocution, but I just need to practice more. Also, english is not my mother tongue, so as you said, that has definetly a lot to do with it.
    Again, thank you so much for the details

    Peer Feedback:

    Edge has coaches who specialize in accent reduction. They might be able to help. Otherwise you might consult a speech therapist. Practicing on your own may only reinforce bad habits and further complicate your progress because your ears aren't hearing what other people hear. You may not be objective enough to train yourself.

    Also: Without presuming to know what your native language is, being bi-lingual is a definite plus. Here's why:

    There is a casting service that I am familiar with that casts VO globally. In fact, one of their biggest campaigns was for a major global corporation. They needed to cast voices for 17 different languages and dialects with the same copy translated for each of them - American, German, Spanish, French, different Chinese dialects, and even for Dubai. The trouble is, this casting person only spoke English, so he had to rely on (and pay) translators to let him know if the copy was correct for those other languages. That includes giving direction to and getting feedback from the voice artist. So if your native language is, say, Swedish and you also understand and speak English well enough to take direction from this guy and he needs a Swede, you've got a good shot at landing the job.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wanted to take the Edge training program, I just dont't have enough to cover the cost, but hopefully I will soon.
    The casting job that you mentioned sounds great, especially with a case like mine. But I am really more interested in voice overs, so I'm just gonna try and work in that direction, even if I can't afford to take any courses yet.
    I appreciate so much the advices you gave me, so please continue to do so if you feel up for it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Brunner's recording

    I had a tough time with this one. I tried it over and over but still not satisfied. I would appreciate some feedback to help me make this sound better.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This was very nice, with two distinct characters.

    The pacing is a little slow.

    Correct me if I am mistaken, but it sounds like you said one line after another, switching between the character voices - like you recorded it all on the same track.

    What I would suggest is to record each character's lines separately, on separate tracks. And if your setup allows, use one character's lines to cue you into the other - like a true dialogue. If your setup does not allow you to listen and punch in like that (due to latency or whatever), then just record one character's lines on one track (with gaps for editing) and the other character on another track and do some creative editing to achieve a more overlapping style of dialogue. That way it sounds like the characters are talking to one another, rather than the "your turn, then my turn" style. It will also allow you to tighten up the lines themselves (although one of these cats is a little lazier in attitude and speech pattern than the other one - but that doesn't necessarily mean that his dialogue has to be drastically slower, just dumb-sounding).

    BTW - I'm old enough to remember this cartoon when it originally aired on the Bugs Bunny Show in the 60's.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback! Next time I'll record different tracks and do creative editing to make it sound more like a dialogue.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your performance brought a smile to my face. Thanks!

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    Hi! Michael. Love it man! You have great talent for characterization. Best.

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    I did me a cartoon favorite, but I wish it was Speedy Gonzales.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great way to stay in character! I would say that the characters could have sounded a little more different from one another.

    Peer Feedback:

    That's what I was trying to do. I guess they sounded the same to you, Angelicarosen?

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    Trying out some accents and animation voices.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom, nice job at staying in character through the read. I'm new to VO so I don't have much concerning VO technique, however as far as the character acting, Cat 1 was very strong and seemed more engaged with the other character. For Cat 2, try relating to Cat 1 a bit like they are really having a conversation. I think that will put a bit more energy into him without changing your intention or Cat 2's personality too much.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ahhhh. These are two characters created by Mel Blanc (Bugs Bunny).

    Have you ever seen the original?

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wYi_hq2p1Ac

    Even without the music and FX, you still have to create the scene.

    Cat 1: A few things happening with him. Regret about not going the easy route, then warning his friend (Cat 2), then the "I (shoulda) tol you" punch line.

    Cat 2; The eagerness to get a meal at any cost and not paying attention to his companion's (Cat 1's) warning, then the capper to the punch line (tag) "Now he tols me!"

    Going straight through like this is admirable, but I'm fairly confident that Mel (as good as he was) may not have done it that way. He probably cut one of the voices (either thinking the other - or having someone else feed the lines - then doing it again in reverse). Having a "dialog" with yourself is not an easy thing to do, especially attempting such diversified characters in an action sequence. You might go with a multi-track approach, one character at a time on different tracks, so that they can be more well defined and eliminate the gaps in the dialog to push the scene along in a smoother flow.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The end of the script said submitted by Tx.Tom
    I'm waiting for his response to your read (MANY TRIED IT) , this is a tough one brother.
    I don't feel you captured it much. Please don't take it offensively but, authority power knowlede and dominance is needed for OPTIMUS PRIME.
    You sound like you flexing trough the read, just relax and bring out Yourself!!!!!
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your critique, I do appreciate it! I'll practice some other methods and give it another go some time.

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    Practice Recording:

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    my VERY first reading/recording...using audacity....new to the VO arena....just looking for feedback...thanks to any who care.....

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    Peer Feedback:

    Biggie,

    Love the pipes. Certainly a gift.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you!! Still trying to work out those nasty, strong "SSSSSSeS"....lol

    Peer Feedback:

    is this your natural voice? Or did you add some processing. I'm also guessing that you might be a singer? The reason being, that you complete/sustain words through their end and articulate the way a trained singer would. You also seem to have very good breath support - breathing from the diaphragm rather than high up in the shoulders.

    The sound quality is generally very good. I agree that the S's are really sibilant. You will need to isolate those frequencies and adjust (attenuate) then to soften the sound. The problem with Audacity is that you cannot adjust that in real time - you have to render the file before you hear the FX kick in. Which can be a frustrating trial and error process if you want to make subtle tweaks here and there. With most of the other more sophisticated DAW's, you can adjust the FX on the fly and listen to the results in real time.

    Something tells me that, even though you state that this is your first recording, you have some general experience recording and using the software. Basic skills seem to be there.

    And even though I am loathe to listen to this particular piece of copy, (curse you, TxTom), the interpretation is good.

    For kicks, give a listen to my spoof. I just couldn't take it seriously.
    http://www.edgestudio.com/script/46002#recording-86663

    Peer Feedback:

    I should have said "my VERY first reading/recording that I have let ANYONE hear besides my "unbiased" wife..(riiiiiight) Never a singer....sing great in the shower...but that's about it. was an actor in HS....supposed I gained so training there. I just decided to follow the, clearly, classic advice of friends, family, and strangers that "you've got a GREAT speaking voice. You should do something with it. Just found this forum yesterday and thought I'd give it a go! I'd been playing with Audacity for a few weeks...looking at youtube vids on how to work it...and thought I'd try it out us OPPRIME voice....my voice is quite low...but I did play with the pitch and tempo ....still trying to figure out the sibilant S issues....maybe back my face off the mic....thanks again for the review...VERY ENCOURAGING!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're up for a challenge, check out Reaper. I'm a big devotee. It's a multi-track music program, but it can be customized and optimized specifically for VO. And you can play with an uncrippled, fully functional version for 60 days without having to purchase a license - only $60. There are also many excellent tutorials on the website and on YouTube, many specifically for VO production.

    http://www.reaper.fm/

    Also download and install the SWS extensions. They add some extra power.

    http://www.sws-extension.org/

    Reaper comes with a lot of it's own plugins, which are quite good, AND you can tinker, tweak and listen to the FX in real time.

    There are plugins called de-essers that can soften those S's. They are basically a combination of an EQ and a compressor. You can achieve the same effect by using the those two FX plugins in sequence. Reaper has a rather crude looking de-esser plugin (no real cool GUI), but it is effective.

    No singing background, huh? But you do have some acting chops. Gives you a leg up right away. It ain't called "voice acting" for nothin'. Having a great speaking voice is one thing, but knowing how to use it effectively is quite another. There are people out there with wonderful tone to their voice, but they don't have a clue about how to read and interpret copy. The opposite is also true. People with not so great voices that know how to bring life to the words on the page.

    Looking forward to hearing more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome feedback JamesR! Thanks for the "reaper" leads I will certainly check it out!

    SSSSSSSSSSSincerly,

    biggjoe....;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    good job!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BlackAdam's recording

    Been sometime since I have been on,but saw this and thought I'd give it a try, please let me know what you guys think Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like this. It's not exactly "Prime"... your voice makes me think more of GOliath from DIsney's Gargoyles.

    Your voice alone is awesomely rich... but I feel the inflections are just a touch flat. A little more "kick" seems to be needed.

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    Thank you for your insight Robert, working on my intensity while maintaining my tone, and thanks for the great complement, that actor's name is Keith David, the fact that you hear a similarity is very flattering.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi There,

    You have a very rich, deep voice, it has a nice tone! I do agree with Robert about the inflections being flat. It sounded a little mechanical, but I enjoyed listening to your voice. Keep on Truckin!

    Blessings,

    Carol

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    Thank you Carol,I kind of went with the fact that he is a robot, sentient , yes but still a robot.
    I appreciate your words of encouragement and I will indeed keep on truckin (smile).

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, Keith David... Forgot his name there...:D

    And trust me, I hear you about maintaining that "Prime" stoicism while giving the read some energy, as you can hear from my own attempt

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    Though he's a robotic creature, there is intensity in Prime's voice. Adding that will bring you closer to what's been done on the movie. Impressive voice.

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    I think this lacks the authoritative sound, other than that, this sound very good man

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    Giving this one a shot. Maybe need a little more menacing but menacing and compassionate together is tough! Feedback welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    If menacing is the spec, then yes, you are erring on the side of wistfulness. I do think you have a spot-on quality in your voice for menacing so give it a bit more edge and I think you can still retain the empathy. Your pace was good. You sound a little underwater at times,especially "to call home" and "watching over" and "more to them". Nice, though!

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    A curse upon you, TxTom! I simply cannot take this copy seriously. Here's my spin. DISCLAIMER: This is not intended in any way to disparage any group or orientation, mechanical or otherwise. It is submitted in the spirit of good fun.

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    Sounds like you were channeling your inner Paul Lynde...very funny.

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    oh no you di'int!

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    Oh my James, you've gone off the grid. And I love it!!! Very entertaining. Sometimes we all get a little too serious, it's good to have some fun. Isn't that why we do this in the first place?

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    psjones: you should have heard this 18 months ago!

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    Y'a know how Disney releases their older movies every 7 years or so to capture the next generation of their audience?

    So, I figured,"Why deprive this next year's generation of aspiring VO artists who haven't heard this, and of the fun I had doing it?"

    Any requests on alternative takes on Edge scripts that have been beaten to death like a dead horse? (Like "This Is My Voice") I'm open to suggestion, no matter how bizarre.

    I throw down the gauntlet!

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    Optimus Prime is sounding just faaabulous here!:)

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    HEYYY......sombody ssssounded FABULOUS!!!!

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    DISCLAIMER: This is not intended to disparage, degrade or mock (except maybe the genre of the Transformers, itself), but is simply presented in the vein of a base low-brow style that is Comedy Central. I, personally, dislike this copy. That’s my prerogative. (A pax upon you for even submitting it, TxTom!) So, I wanted to turn it on its head and away from an over-processed, overly-macho delivery. I also wondered what other group has had to hide (in plain sight) from the intolerant to keep from being persecuted for who they are. Oh, and I took some liberties with the script.

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    Freaking hilarious and well done. Love it.

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    Love it. Fun delivery and enjoyable to listen to and laugh along.

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    Hahahaha James! Superb character well held 'til the very end :D
    The music bed was something .... I'm speechless! Loved it!! Thank you ;)

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    I guess this would sound funny in a child's voice too! Or a helium voice!!

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    It brought so many images of disco dancing queer robots lol

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    Peer Feedback:

    Deep voice...but being utilized in simply reading the lines in a rather mechanical fashion. While the the transformers are mechanical organisms, they have emotional tension and this delivery doesn't present that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well this is my very first time ever doing this and I was told to try it so any good criticism is welcome.

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    Given the quality and my kind of voice, what kind of interpretation should I go for?

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    WOW! crazy low voice...you should be singing Barry White songs not reading Optimus Prime scripts...LOL..seriously...work on your speed, and emotion while reading. Listen to a few readings from Peter Cullen on Youtube...you'll get it!

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    I was working on monster type voices for a project, and designed a plugin chain that sound a bit like Optimus. Just having a bit of fun.

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    Peer Feedback:

    TMM,

    l Love the production work and effects! Only trouble is what does your voice really sound like?

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree....lovely spec job... but...the was a bit within the voice that sort of...lost the flow...maybe look at your breathing?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey guys thanks for the feedback! I did this script a long time ago and I was working on a project today that needed a BIG character voice for gaming. I designed this plugin chain to create that voice. I can't post the project since it is still under NDA but thought i'd record this ol script since it sounded similar to the character. I am not playing the character, just processing the voice on the project. I did this in 2 takes and took the best one and applied the effects.

    Marysboy1, in post prod the voice is changed and manipulated to what the director wants and needs to fill the character role be it a game or a movie. It's not so much the voice, but the performance that makes the difference in getting the job done. I work with various quality recordings and performances on my side, and most times I can make edits or change the timing with the tools I have. It seems that most people really are too concerned with, "How do I sound?" or "Is this studio quality?" when that doesn't make a stitch of difference for the most part.There are music beds and effects that cover most of what can't be treated. It's up to the mixer to fix that. So when you ask how my voice really sound. My answer would be, "however the director wants". What wins and loses auditions is performance. Period.

    Ian, I don't perform alot any more on the VO side, I'm mostly post prod now, doing ppl's demos and working projects. I just picked up 2 shows for a network starting in June which should launch sometime in the fall, early winter for both. I like to check in here once and a while, since this was where I got my start back a few years ago. I like to help folks out getting started, unfortunately I haven't been able to spend a lot of time here.

    Good luck to you both.
    Danny

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    Fooling around, really. Voice has been healing from some strain about a month ago. But I heard a read of this a couple days ago and knew it was incomplete. The script used was only half of the monologue. So...really just for trying to figure out the settings to DO OpPrime, I read the script a couple of times and did some compression and some vocal thickening (Audition 6) and don't come CLOSE to the real deal! I left a little raw vocal at the end just for reference of the unprocessed vocal.

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    Hey Tom,

    Loved the beginning as the music started followed by the delivery and you voice sounds good and a little deeper than normal. However with the ending at "I am Optimus Prime", it would have sound better if you could have added some sound effects to alter your voice a little to give it more of a sci-fi essence. Otherwise good job.

    All the best,
    Lenny

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    I was using the music used in the movie, Lenny. I wasn't trying to stray from that delivery....other than the fact that my read lacked the breathy and deep timbre of the original. Hard thing to dial in!

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not familiar with "Transformers" movies (not a Sci-fi or Horror movies fan), but I think the delivery was good and I like that you're doing reads of different genres.

    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    You are good mister TxTom!!!!!
    But if you would give a bit more suspence a tiny bit more, it would be perfect. Just a bit more exiting.
    Great work anyway!!!!
    Bravo

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Tom, very creative. Nice delivery too.

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    Thanks Javi and Balaz. Balaz, I don't know if you're familiar with the character of Optimus Prime....he's a living robot essentially. Not a lot of emotion there...The original has got a breathy deep texture that adds to the character, but he really doesn't emote much. With this one, it's a fine line in my opinion before you start sounding human and not a living robot...if that even makes sense.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job Tom, I've always been a Transformer junky just due to the fact of the awesome voice over talent. How many of us would like to push a button and sound like Peter Cullen? (My hand is raised high!). I thought it was an excellent read, clean clear beautiful acoustics pounding out of my Klipsch and M-Audio monitors. Rock On!
    Here's a cool clip from youtube check it out! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aJKGAZO4beI&feature=related

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    Very Good! All the best and God bless!

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    Tom,

    Really liked this read. I've got a deep voice but I know I'll need a lot of practice before I can get close to this. Very impressive. "There's more than meets the ear"...har har har.

    John

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Optimus Prime Voice. The music sold me on it as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks all for the listens and critiques. All helpful.

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    Mr Tom
    You are right i listened again to your and the original recording, As you say his voice(peter cullen) ads the effect i was missing from your recording.
    And again great performance, as i mentioned before i liked it a lot.
    regards
    Balazs

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    Man, that bed sits just perfect in the mix....
    how in the "h-e double hockey sticks" did you do that??? Crispy!

    Overall, very nice read, except I did notice a possible editing stutter, perhaps:
    " I am Optimus Prime, and I send-d"

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Slaucoin! Nodo has also mentioned my bed mixes. Asked me if I had a formula or something to mixing...wish I could say that I did and could share. It's just critical listening and balancing as best I can. As for that "send-d" you thought you heard...it's a hard "d" before going on the "th" sound in the next word. I made a point of hitting that "d" because that's how OpPrime is voiced...very deliberate and slow speaking...btw...I read this too fast.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the compression. I wanna get me some of that.
    Audition 6, eh? very nice.
    As usual, very nice read, and great production.
    Cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow...two weeks out and I'm thinking..."what was I thinking?" LOL

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    Script submitted by bonemaster2

    Script:

    Todd, you might think all these awards mean something to somebody, but to me they are no more important then this cup of coffee I'm sipping from. [sip]

    Let me tell you something, not that you're going to like it. If I strip away all the meaning behind your coffee and these awards, they are just things. If they are ever to receive a value again, it won't be because there were once someone's possesion or accolade. Their value will be determined by the one value everyone understands, and that's cash.

    [Sip]

    Also, you need to understand we too much pride in too many things just to feel happy. Since this awards are not preparing you for the struggles ahead.

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    Silent Dragon

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    We have been watching you, Renjiro. Always you try to convince yourself that you act for the greater good. To free your beloved nation from its usurpers. Yet deep in your soul, you know you serve a monster. One you helped create.
    That time is now ending. The Yakuza clans will soon be no more. But you, Renjiro – you could be invaluable to us. Imagine how many lives could be saved, how much bloodshed spared, by the knowledge you wield!
    Join us, and we will offer you safe haven.
    Serve Hideaki…….and fall

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    Slowpoke Rodriguez

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    Slowpoke Rodriguez
    Cat 1: Maybe Jose, instead we try to catch the Speedy Gonzalez, we should’m catch Slowpoke Rodriguez, the slowest mouse in all Mexico.

    Cat 2: Slowpoke Rodriguez, he’s for me!

    Cat 1: Wait Jose! Jose, I got to tol you something!

    Cat 2: Aha! Senor Slowpoke, you will be good with the chili pepers!

    Cat 1: Ey Jose, it’s something I forgot to tol ... That’s what I wanted to tol you.. Slowpoke Rodriguez, he pack a gon.

    Cat 2: Now he tols me!

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    Smaug Script

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    Well, thief! I smell you, I hear your breath, I feel your air. Where are you?

    Where are you?

    Come now, don't be shy... step into the light.

    There is something about you. Something you carry, something made of gold... but far more PRECIOUS...

    There you are, Thief in the Shadows!

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    Star Trek

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    Space, the final frontier. These are the voyages of the starship, Enterprise. It’s five year mission: to explore strange new worlds, to seek out new life and new civilizations, to boldly go where no one has gone before!

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    The Beauty and the Beast

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    Once upon a time in a far away land a young prince lived in a shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish and unkind. But then one winter’s night an old beggar woman came to the castle and offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift and turned the old woman away but she warned him not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within. And when he dismissed her again, the old woman’s ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince tried to apologize but it was too late for she had seen that there was no love in his heart. And as punishment she transformed him into a hideous beast and placed a powerful spell on the castle and all who lived there.
    As a shield of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose which would bloom until his 21st year. If he could learn to love another and earn her love in return, by the time the last petal fell then the spell would be broken. If not he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time. As the years passed he fell into despair and lost all hope. For who could ever learn to love a beast.

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    The Darkness Comes - Prequel

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    Notes: "The Darkness Comes" is one of my favorite scripts in the library. But I started thinking... what had just happened before the protagonist in the story was thrown into the dungeon, or hole, or wherever he has been left? Without writing a lengthy introduction, I thought I'd hint at that, with a prequel that is written to perfectly merge with the ORIGINAL "The Darkness Comes" script - Enjoy!

    - Muddyshoes

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    You don't understand! Why do you not believe me, when the signs of evil are all about you! Look at me... LOOK AT ME!! I am the only one who can save you... the only one who...who KNOWS how these creatures think...who KNOWS their weakness....

    Why do you laugh as if I were a madman? Wait a second...WAIT, WAIT ... where are you taking me?... WHERE ARE YOU TAKING ME? Don't you see they are coming? Just answer me.. DO YOU NOT SEE THE SIGNS?

    When the last of the day's light has disappeared from the horizon...you will see...Yes..yes, you WILL SEE! ... And by then.. it will be too late.. No.. NO... NOOOOOO!

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    The Little Match Girl

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    THE LITTLE MATCH-GIRL

    Once upon a time… a little girl tried to make a living by selling matches in the street.
    It was New Year's Eve and the snowy streets were deserted. From brightly lit windows came the sound of laughter and singing. People were getting ready to bring in the New Year. But the poor little match-seller, in her ragged dress and worn shawl sat beside a fountain shivering from the cold. She hadn't sold one box of matches all day. The little girl's fingers were stiff. If only she could light a match! Her hands shaking, she took out a match and lit it. What a nice warm flame! The little match-seller cupped her hand over it, and as she did so, she magically saw in its light a brightly burning stove.
    She held out her hands to the heat, but just then the match went out and the vision faded. The night seemed blacker than before and it was getting colder.
    She struck another match on the wall, and this time, the glimmer turned the wall into a great sheet of crystal. Beyond that stood a fine table laden with food. The little match-girl held out her arms towards the plates, but then the match went out and the magic faded. Poor thing! In just a few seconds she had caught a glimpse of everything that life had denied her: warmth and good things to eat. Her eyes filled with tears.
    She lit a third match and an even more wonderful thing happened. There stood a Christmas tree hung with hundreds of candles, glittering with tinsel and colored balls. "Oh, how lovely!" exclaimed the little match-girl, holding up the match. Then, the match burned her finger and flickered out. The beautiful Christmas tree faded into darkness.
    Scarcely aware of what she was doing, the little match-girl lit yet another match. This time, she saw her grandmother.
    "Granny, stay with me!" she pleaded, as she lit one match after the other, so that her grandmother could not disappear like all the other visions. Granny did not vanish, but gazed smilingly at her. Then she opened her arms and the little girl hugged her crying: "Granny, take me away with you!"
    A cold day dawned and a pale sun shone on the fountain and the icy road. Close by lay the lifeless body of a little girl surrounded by burnt-out matches.
    But the smile on her face was a sign that the little match-girl was far away, in a place where there is neither cold, hunger, nor pain.

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    The Lover's chance

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    And even though my heart has been subscribed to another as if a cheap magazine of a New Yorker's stand, I stand by you. My stance, firmly laid upon the thick grass near you. A heart of silver, you have- we shan't afford gold. Caramel candies look upon your eyes for inspiration to a being. Although odds seems to be against us, I know a way out. Death. Death, our frozen landscape to escape the treachery, the hardship, the benevolent forces that have miraculously accumulated before us as a foe. Allow my breath of ice to drag you down to the depths of hell and back... with me.. for eternity.

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    The Truth About Fairies

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    Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you're in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sprinkling wings, and glowing smiles - it's all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil, we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much more darker than we.

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    Transformers-Optimus Prime

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    With the Allspark gone,we cannot return life to our planet.And fate has yielded it’s reward,a new world to call home.We live among its people now,hiding in plain site but watching over them in secret... waiting...protecting.

    I have witnessed their capacity for courage,and though we are worlds apart,like us there’s more to them than meets the eye.I am Optimus Prime,and I send this message to any surviving autobots taking refuge among the stars:We are here.We are waiting.

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    War of the Worlds Motion Picture Prologue and Epilogue

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    Prologue
    No one would have believed in the early years of the 21st century.
    that our world was being watched by intelligences greater than our own;
    that as men busied themselves about their various concerns,
    *they* observed and studied
    the way a man with a microscope might scrutinize the creatures that swarm and multiply. in a drop of water.
    With infinite complacency,men went to and fro about the globe,
    confident of our empire over this world.
    Yet across the gulf of space,
    intellects vast and cool and unsympathetic
    regarded our planet with envious eyes
    and slowly, and surely, drew their plans against us.

    Epilogue
    From the moment the invaders arrived, breathed our air, ate and drank, they were doomed.
    They were undone, destroyed, after all of man's weapons and devices had failed,
    by the tiniest creatures that God in his wisdom put upon this earth
    By the toll of a billion deaths, man had earned his immunity,
    his right to survive among this planet's infinite organisms.
    And that right is ours against all challenges.
    For neither do men live nor die in vain.

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    X-Men Animated Series - "The Final Decision"

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    Senator Kelly: Why did you bring me here? What do you want?

    Magneto: Your life. You see, Senator Kelly, like you I believe that mutants and normal humans cannot live together in peace. The war for survival must begin now, while we mutants are strong, and you are still divided. Your assassination would have ignited that war. I flew to Washington to witness the beginning of a new age. But, the X-Men saved you. It is up to me to finish what others have started.

    (sound of throbbing energy)

    Kelly: No, please! I've got a family! Children!

    Magneto: Be quiet! When I was a boy, I saw men executed. Women and children, each night I swore to myself, never again. But, we must prevail. Goodbye, Senator. Mutant liberation begins.

    (crashing sound)

    Kelly: Sentinels!

    Magneto: Fools! Do you think robots can resist the master of magnetism?

    (energy sounds)

    Sentinel (robot voice): This series of sentinels is made of plastics, not metals. Your magnetic powers are useless against us.

    (large energy blast, Magneto hits wall and grunts)

    Magneto: This entire ship is my weapon!
    (energy sounds, metal bending and crunching, followed by an explosion)

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    Young Children's Animated Character

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    I already told you Christopher, there’s no such thing as a problem - everything is a solutions waiting to be invented.

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